Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNETGZ4PHGEX0BFKPHPRQ94

Run Details

Duration:
1m 50s
Cost:
$0.258060

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The knock came at half past midnight, three sharp raps that cut through the rain drumming against Eva's windows. Rory set down her mug of lukewarm tea and padded to the door in her socks, navigating the maze of books stacked on the floor. Ptolemy meowed from his perch atop a precarious tower of grimoires, his yellow eyes tracking her movement. "Who is it?" She kept her voice low, conscious of the neighbors. "Open the door, Aurora." Her hand froze on the first deadbolt. That voice—cultured, precise, with just the faintest trace of Marseille threading through the consonants. She hadn't heard it in six months. "Go away, Lucien." "I'm afraid I cannot do that." A pause. "Please." The 'please' did it. Lucien Moreau didn't beg. She worked through the three deadbolts with fingers that trembled only slightly, then cracked the door open as far as the chain would allow. He stood in the dim hallway, rain darkening his platinum hair and beading on the shoulders of his charcoal suit. His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—found hers immediately. Water dripped from the ivory handle of his cane onto the worn carpet. "You look terrible," she said. "Charming as ever." His mouth quirked, but the usual sardonic edge was missing. "May I come in?" "That depends. Are you bleeding?" "Not at present." "Are you being followed?" "I took precautions." She studied him through the gap. His suit, while damp, was immaculate as always, but there was something off about his posture—a subtle favoring of his left side that most people would miss. Most people hadn't spent countless nights learning the language of his body. "Five minutes," she said, sliding the chain free. He stepped inside, careful not to brush against her in the narrow entryway. The scent of his cologne—sandalwood and something darker—filled the small space. Rory retreated to the kitchenette, putting the breakfast bar between them. "Tea?" The question came out sharper than intended. "If you're offering." He moved into the flat proper, his gaze sweeping over the organized chaos. "I see Eva's research habits are rubbing off on you." "They're not mine. I'm just staying here while she's in Prague." Rory filled the kettle, grateful for something to do with her hands. "Why are you here?" "I need to locate someone. Discreetly." "Hire a private investigator." "The person in question isn't entirely human." He settled onto one of Eva's bar stools, setting his cane against the counter. "Your particular talents would be useful." She turned to face him, leaning back against the sink. "My particular talents. You mean the ones you said were too dangerous? The ones that made me a liability?" "That's not what I said." "'This won't work, Aurora. You're in over your head.' Your exact words, if I recall correctly." "You recall selectively." His amber eye seemed to glow in the kitchen's fluorescent light. "I said becoming involved with me would put you in danger. There's a difference." "Semantics." She turned back to the kettle, watching it refuse to boil. "Besides, I'm not that person anymore. I make deliveries for Yu-Fei. I live above a bar. I'm normal now." "You were never normal." The words were soft, almost fond. "And we both know the Sight doesn't simply go away because you ignore it." Her hand tightened on the counter edge. He was right, of course. The Sight was always there, lurking at the edges of her vision, showing her glimpses of things that shouldn't exist. Things like the faint shimmer of otherworldly energy that clung to Lucien like expensive cologne. "Who are you looking for?" "A young woman named Margot Winters. She disappeared three days ago." "Human?" "Half-blood. Like me." He shifted on the stool, and she caught the slight wince he tried to hide. "Her mother is concerned." "Since when do you take missing persons cases?" "Since her mother offered me something I couldn't refuse." He paused. "Information about my father." The kettle whistled. Rory busied herself with mugs and tea bags, processing this revelation. Lucien never spoke about his demon father, not even during those nights when they'd shared everything else. "So find her yourself. You have contacts all over the city." "My contacts have proven unusually reticent. Someone doesn't want her found." He accepted the mug she slid across the bar, his fingers carefully avoiding hers. "I need someone who can see what others miss. Someone who understands both worlds." "Someone expendable, you mean." "Someone I trust." The words hung between them, weighted with history. Rory laughed, short and bitter. "You have a funny way of showing trust. Disappearing for six months, for instance." "You told me to leave." "After you said—" She cut herself off, shaking her head. "It doesn't matter. I can't help you." "Can't or won't?" "Both." She wrapped her hands around her mug, seeking warmth. "I'm finally starting to build something normal here. Safe. I won't jeopardize that." "Safety is an illusion, Aurora. You know this better than most." "Don't." The warning in her voice made Ptolemy's ears flatten. "Don't come here and lecture me about safety. Not when you're the one who—" "Who what?" He leaned forward, and for a moment his careful control slipped. "Who tried to protect you? Who knew that my world would devour someone like you?" "Someone like me." She set her mug down harder than necessary. "You mean human. Weak. Mortal." "I mean good." His mismatched eyes held hers. "Untouched by the corruption that runs through my veins. Worth preserving." "I never asked to be preserved. I asked to be trusted. To be treated like an equal, not some fragile thing you needed to lock away." "And look what happened the one time I did." His hand moved unconsciously to his left side. "You nearly died because of my father's enemies. Because of what I am." "I nearly died because you didn't tell me about them. Because you kept secrets." Old anger flared, mixing with something more complicated. "If I'd known what to look for—" "You would have gone looking. We both know this." He stood, reaching for his cane. "Forgive the intrusion. I'll find another way." He was halfway to the door before she spoke. "Lucien." He stopped but didn't turn. "You're hurt." "It's nothing." "Let me see." "Aurora—" "Let me see, or I'll follow you out into the rain and make a scene. Mrs. Begum is already suspicious about my late-night visitors." His shoulders dropped slightly in defeat. He turned, unbuttoning his suit jacket with practiced efficiency. The white shirt beneath showed a spreading crimson stain along his ribs. "Nothing, he says." She moved toward him without thinking, clinical assessment overriding emotional turmoil. "Knife?" "Claw. A misunderstanding with a territorial werewolf." "Of course it was." She gestured to the sofa. "Sit. Eva keeps a first aid kit somewhere in this chaos." "I should go." "Sit, Lucien, or I swear I'll call Silas and tell him you're bleeding in East London. You know how he feels about you." The threat worked. Lucien sank onto the sofa with minimal grace, his usual fluid movement hampered by pain. Rory located the first aid kit beneath a stack of medieval manuscripts and knelt beside him. "Shirt off." He complied, revealing the lean muscle she remembered too well and three parallel gashes along his ribs. The wounds were already beginning to knit closed—demon blood had its advantages—but they were deep enough to need cleaning. "This will sting," she warned, tearing open an antiseptic wipe. "I've had worse." She worked in silence, falling into the familiar rhythm of tending wounds. How many times had they done this? Him arriving at odd hours, bleeding and too proud to ask for help directly. Her patching him up while pretending she didn't care as much as she did. "There." She smoothed the last bandage into place. "Try not to get clawed again for at least a week." "I'll make a note." His hand caught hers as she moved to stand, his thumb brushing over the crescent scar on her wrist. "I am sorry, you know. For how things ended." "Don't." But she didn't pull away. "I handled it badly. I know this. But watching you in that hospital bed, knowing it was my fault—" "It wasn't your fault. It was Marchetti's fault for sending those things after you." She met his eyes, amber and black in equal measure. "I made my choice. I knew the risks of being with you." "Did you?" His grip tightened slightly. "Did you truly understand what it meant? The enemies, the politics, the constant danger?" "Maybe not. But you never gave me the chance to really choose, did you? You decided for both of us." He released her hand. "Yes. I did." The admission hung between them, six months of hurt condensed into three words. Rory stood, wrapping her arms around herself. "The girl you're looking for. Margot. What makes you think she's in danger?" "Her mother received a message. 'Stop looking or she dies.'" "From whom?" "Unknown. But whoever has her knew enough to ward their communication against tracking." He pulled his shirt back on, movements careful. "She's being used as leverage, though for what, I cannot say." Rory moved to the window, watching the rain streak down the glass. Three stories down, late-night revelers hurried past, oblivious to the conversation happening above their heads. Normal people living normal lives. "If I help you—and I'm not saying I will—what then? We find the girl, save the day, and you disappear again?" "What would you prefer?" She turned to find him standing, jacket restored to perfection despite the bandages beneath. Always so controlled, so careful. Except for the way he looked at her now, something raw flickering in his mismatched eyes. "I'd prefer honesty. For once." "Then honestly? I have no idea. I tell myself I'm protecting you by staying away. That the son of a demon lord has no business in your life. But then..." He gestured vaguely at the space between them. "Here I am." "Here you are," she agreed. "Bleeding on Eva's sofa and asking for my help." "I could have found another way. There are others with the Sight." "So why didn't you?" He moved closer, stopping just outside arm's reach. "You know why." She did. The same reason she'd opened the door. The same reason she was considering saying yes. Six months hadn't changed the pull between them, that magnetic force that defied logic and self-preservation. "One job," she said. "We find this girl, and then we're done. No more midnight visits, no more favors. Clear?" "Crystal." "I mean it, Lucien. I can't do this again. The wondering, the waiting. The not knowing if you're alive or dead." "I understand." "Do you?" She stepped closer, close enough to see the rain still clinging to his platinum hair. "Because last time—" "Last time I was a fool." His hand rose to cup her cheek, the touch ghost-light. "But some things don't change. Wouldn't, even if I could make them. That's my curse to bear, not yours." She leaned into his touch for just a moment before stepping back. "We start tomorrow. I need to see where she was taken from, talk to her mother. And Lucien? No more secrets. If we're doing this, I need to know everything." "Everything is a dangerous word, Aurora." "So is trust. But that's what you're asking for, isn't it?" He studied her for a long moment. "Yes. I suppose it is." "Then tomorrow. Full disclosure. Or find someone else." "There is no one else." The words carried more weight than the simple statement warranted. "There never has been." Before she could respond, he moved to the door, collecting his cane with practiced ease. "Until tomorrow then. Lock the door behind me." She followed him to the entrance, watching as he navigated the deadbolts with surprising familiarity. He paused in the doorway, silhouetted against the dingy hallway light. "For what it's worth," he said without turning, "these six months have been the longest of my extremely long life." Then he was gone, leaving only the scent of sandalwood and rain. Rory secured all three deadbolts and leaned her forehead against the door, heart hammering against her ribs. "You're an idiot," she told herself. But she was already running through what she'd need for tomorrow—her jacket with the hidden pockets, the iron pendant Eva had given her, the small knife that lived in her boot. Ptolemy meowed from somewhere in the chaos of books, a feline commentary on human foolishness. Rory couldn't argue with his assessment. She was about to dive back into a world that had nearly killed her, alongside a man who'd broken her heart for her own good. But Margot Winters was out there somewhere, frightened and alone. And despite everything—the danger, the history, the absolute certainty that this would end badly—Rory knew she'd already made her choice. She always had, when it came to Lucien Moreau.
total_cost0.25806

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags39
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"She turned back [back]"
1"His hand moved unconsciously [unconsciously]"
2"His grip tightened slightly [slightly]"
3"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
4"The words carried more [more]"
dialogueSentences129
tagDensity0.302
leniency0.605
rawRatio0.128
effectiveRatio0.078
86.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2180
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count3
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"carefully"
2"truly"
3"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.77% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2180
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"navigating"
count1
1
word"trembled"
count1
2
word"otherworldly"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"magnetic"
count1
7
word"crystal"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
9
word"practiced ease"
count1
10
word"navigated"
count1
highlights
0"navigating"
1"trembled"
2"otherworldly"
3"warmth"
4"silence"
5"familiar"
6"magnetic"
7"crystal"
8"weight"
9"practiced ease"
10"navigated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences111
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences198
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2161
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount1169
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.94
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva3
Marseille1
Lucien5
Moreau2
Rory11
Sight1
Ptolemy3
Old1
Margot1
Winters1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
3"Rory"
4"Ptolemy"
5"Margot"
6"Winters"
places
0"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences89
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2161
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences198
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs118
mean18.31
std13.08
cv0.714
sampleLengths
061
112
24
328
43
59
632
740
85
917
105
113
124
133
1445
158
1635
178
1826
1927
206
214
2227
2329
245
2516
2628
2731
2824
2947
305
3111
321
3322
348
3515
3631
3711
3839
394
4011
4119
425
4317
443
4523
4611
4724
4828
4916
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs211
matches
0"was considering"
41.85% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences198
ratio0.035
matches
0"That voice—cultured, precise, with just the faintest trace of Marseille threading through the consonants."
1"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—found hers immediately."
2"His suit, while damp, was immaculate as always, but there was something off about his posture—a subtle favoring of his left side that most people would miss."
3"The scent of his cologne—sandalwood and something darker—filled the small space."
4"The wounds were already beginning to knit closed—demon blood had its advantages—but they were deep enough to need cleaning."
5"But she was already running through what she'd need for tomorrow—her jacket with the hidden pockets, the iron pendant Eva had given her, the small knife that lived in her boot."
6"And despite everything—the danger, the history, the absolute certainty that this would end badly—Rory knew she'd already made her choice."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1186
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount45
adverbRatio0.03794266441821248
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.010961214165261383
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences198
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences198
mean10.91
std6.83
cv0.626
sampleLengths
019
125
217
312
44
57
614
77
83
98
101
114
124
1324
1420
157
1613
175
1813
194
205
213
224
233
246
2527
2612
278
2813
2911
3011
318
3216
3310
3423
354
366
374
3821
396
4010
4119
425
4316
4414
4514
4612
4719
4810
4914
66.84% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.43434343434343436
totalSentences198
uniqueOpeners86
64.10% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences104
matches
0"Always so controlled, so careful."
1"Then he was gone, leaving"
ratio0.019
0.77% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences104
matches
0"She kept her voice low,"
1"Her hand froze on the"
2"She hadn't heard it in"
3"She worked through the three"
4"He stood in the dim"
5"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—found"
6"His mouth quirked, but the"
7"She studied him through the"
8"His suit, while damp, was"
9"she said, sliding the chain"
10"He stepped inside, careful not"
11"He moved into the flat"
12"He settled onto one of"
13"She turned to face him,"
14"His amber eye seemed to"
15"She turned back to the"
16"Her hand tightened on the"
17"He was right, of course."
18"He shifted on the stool,"
19"He accepted the mug she"
ratio0.548
27.31% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences104
matches
0"The knock came at half"
1"Rory set down her mug"
2"Ptolemy meowed from his perch"
3"She kept her voice low,"
4"Her hand froze on the"
5"That voice—cultured, precise, with just"
6"She hadn't heard it in"
7"Lucien Moreau didn't beg."
8"She worked through the three"
9"He stood in the dim"
10"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—found"
11"Water dripped from the ivory"
12"His mouth quirked, but the"
13"She studied him through the"
14"His suit, while damp, was"
15"she said, sliding the chain"
16"He stepped inside, careful not"
17"The scent of his cologne—sandalwood"
18"Rory retreated to the kitchenette,"
19"The question came out sharper"
ratio0.865
48.08% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"Before she could respond, he"
ratio0.01
74.83% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The knock came at half past midnight, three sharp raps that cut through the rain drumming against Eva's windows."
1"The Sight was always there, lurking at the edges of her vision, showing her glimpses of things that shouldn't exist."
2"Things like the faint shimmer of otherworldly energy that clung to Lucien like expensive cologne."
3"Six months hadn't changed the pull between them, that magnetic force that defied logic and self-preservation."
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags39
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"He moved, his gaze sweeping over the organized chaos"
1"He accepted, his fingers carefully avoiding hers"
2"His hand caught, his thumb brushing over the crescent scar on her wrist"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she warned (warn)"
1"she agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences129
tagDensity0.054
leniency0.109
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.031
85.7105%