Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNETWHS6MHZ99JSKZJ4ZGAB

Run Details

Duration:
11.3s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the cobblestones of Soho with a relentless, metallic rhythm, turning the city’s neon veins into slick mirrors that reflected the frantic pulse of a night that refused to sleep. Detective Harlow Quinn moved through the down like a blade through water, her boots splashing in perfect, measured strides that betrayed a lifetime of military precision. The green neon sign above The Raven’s Nest flickered intermittently, a ghostly beacon that cut through the down, casting an eerie glow over the puddles that gathered at the curb. She pulled the worn leather watch from her left wrist, feeling the familiar weight of its cracked face against her skin. The watch had survived more raids, more gunfire, more sleepless nights than any other piece of equipment she owned. Its hands ticked in stubborn defiance of the storm, each second a reminder that time was both her ally and her enemy. The suspect—an unassuming figure in a dark coat, his face obscured by the brim of a soaked hat—had slipped through the doorway of the bar just moments before. Harlow had watched him vanish into the rain, his silhouette swallowed by the night. A tip from an informant at The Raven’s Nest had been vague—“He’s heading to the old tube, the one beneath Camden. He’s got a token.” She knew the token meant the Veil Market, a place whispered about in the back rooms of precincts and in the hushed prayers of those who had seen the supernatural and lived to tell the tale. The rain intensified, turning the streets into a river of reflections. Harlow’s coat clung to her frame, the salt‑and‑pepper hair plastered to her forehead. She could feel the cold seep into her bones, but the chill of the night was nothing compared to the cold that had settled in her chest ever since DS Morris had vanished three years ago. The case had been a blur of supernatural whispers and unexplained phenomena, a case that had left a scar deeper than any physical wound. She could still hear Morris’s voice, a faint echo in her mind, urging her forward, warning her of the darkness that lay beneath the city’s surface. She turned a corner onto a narrow alley, the rain turning the brick walls into a glossy black. The suspect’s footsteps were muffled by the water, but his pace was erratic, as if he were trying to lose a tail that was already too close. Harlow’s eyes narrowed; she could see the faint outline of a scar on his left forearm, a detail she’d noted from a previous encounter. He was no ordinary criminal; his movements suggested someone who had learned to navigate the shadows of the city, someone who knew the hidden arteries that pulsed beneath the urban sprawl. A sudden flash of neon—red, flickering—caught her eye. It was a sign she recognized from the informant’s description: the entrance to the abandoned tube station, concealed behind a rusted metal door half‑buried in graffiti. She quickened her stride, the rain pounding against her coat, each step a drumbeat that matched the thudding of her heart. The door was ajar, the hinges squeaking as she pushed it open. The air inside was colder, the smell of damp earth and old stone mingling with a faint metallic tang. The tunnel stretched ahead, its darkness swallowing the light from the street above. Harlow’s hand brushed the leather strap of her watch, feeling the familiar texture of the worn leather as she slipped her badge into her pocket. She could not afford to be seen; the Veil Market was a place where law enforcement was a myth, and the rules were written in blood and arcane symbols. She descended the stairs, each step echoing in the cavernous void. The rain’s roar faded, replaced by an uneasy silence broken only by the distant drip of water from the tunnel’s ceiling. The faint glow of phosphorescent fungi clung to the walls, casting an otherworldly pallor that made her eyes water. The tunnel opened into a vaulted chamber, its ceiling lost in darkness, its floor littered with discarded relics and broken glass. The Veil Market lay before her, a sprawling labyrinth of stalls and shadows. Lanterns made from hollowed-out skulls flickered, casting dancing shadows that seemed to move of their own accord. Vendors with gaunt faces and eyes that glowed with an unnatural light hawked their wares—bottles of liquid that shimmered like liquid moonlight, talismans etched with sigils that pulsed faintly, and bundles of dried herbs that emitted a faint, sweet perfume. Harlow’s gaze swept the crowd, searching for the suspect. He was a ghost among ghosts, slipping between stalls with a fluidity that suggested he knew the market’s layout intimately. She caught a glimpse of his coat disappearing behind a stall draped in black velvet, its sign reading “Alchemical Curiosities.” She moved forward, her boots making soft thuds on the packed earth. A voice called out, low and urgent. “Detective Quinn! Over here!” The voice belonged to a man with warm brown eyes, short curly dark hair, and a scar that ran along his left forearm. He wore a Saint Christopher medallion around his neck, its metal catching the lantern light. His olive skin was slick with rain, and his breath came out in short, visible puffs. Tomás Herrera—formerly a paramedic, now a shadowy figure in the market’s underbelly—stood behind a stall of medical supplies, his hands clasped around a battered wooden box. He glanced at Harlow, his expression a mix of concern and calculation. “Tommy,” she said, her voice barely above a whisper, “I need to know if he’s heading toward the secret room. The one behind the bookshelf at The Raven’s Nest. He’s got a token—” Tomás cut her off, his eyes flickering to the crowd as if listening for a hidden threat. “The secret room is a trap for anyone who doesn’t know the code. The token you’re talking about isn’t just a pass; it’s a key. He’s planning something. You’re stepping into a world where the law doesn’t apply.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. She could feel the weight of her worn leather watch, the ticking a reminder of the limited time she had. “I’m not here for the market’s curiosities, Tommy. I’m here for a man who’s been slipping through the cracks of this city for too long.” Tomás’s scarred forearm flexed, a faint tremor running through his hand. “You know what’s in that room? It’s not just a meeting place. It’s a conduit. The thing that took Morris… it’s tied to that room. You’re walking into a nightmare you can’t fight with a badge.” The rain outside had ceased, leaving a heavy, humid silence that pressed against the market’s walls. Harlow’s mind raced—her partner’s disappearance, the supernatural whispers that had haunted her investigations, the token that could unlock a portal to something beyond human comprehension. She could feel the pull of duty, the need to bring a suspect to justice, but also the dread of stepping into a realm where her training might be useless. She glanced at the suspect, now standing at the far end of the market, his back to her. He held a small, polished bone token in his gloved hand, its surface etched with runes that seemed to shift under the lantern light. He turned, his eyes meeting hers for a split second—cold, calculating, and unflinching. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his voice a low rasp, “you’re too late. The Veil is not a market. It’s a doorway. And you’re about to step through it.” Harlow’s breath caught. The token glowed faintly, the runes pulsing like a heartbeat. She could feel the air thicken, an electric charge that made the hairs on her arms stand up. The market’s patrons turned their heads, their eyes lingering on the exchange, as if sensing the shift in the atmosphere. She stepped forward, the rain‑slicked floor beneath her feet now a polished obsidian. The scent of ozone and old stone mingled with the faint perfume of the herbs, creating a heady mixture that seemed to cloud her thoughts. She could feel the weight of her badge, the leather strap of her watch, the cold metal of her gun hidden beneath her coat—though she hadn’t drawn it yet. The market’s rules were different; violence could attract attention she didn’t want. Tomás raised a hand, his medallion catching the light. “If you go in, you need to know the sigil. It’s the only thing that can protect you. I can give you a charm, but it won’t stop the thing that’s waiting.” Harlow’s eyes flicked to the medallion, the Saint Christopher—a protector of travelers, a symbol of safe passage. She felt a surge of something, a memory of a prayer whispered in the dark after Morris’s disappearance. She had never been a believer in the supernatural, but the evidence had become undeniable. The market’s shadows seemed to breathe, the walls whispering in a language she could not decipher. She made a decision, one that would echo in the corridors of her mind for years to come. She reached into her coat, feeling the smooth surface of the medallion. Tomás slipped a small, iron charm into her palm—a tiny amulet shaped like a crescent moon, etched with an ancient sigil that glowed faintly when pressed against her skin. “Take it,” he whispered, his voice barely audible over the murmurs of the market. “It will shield you, but it won’t stop the darkness. You have to decide now—whether you’re willing to walk into the unknown.” Harlow stared at the charm, the cool metal against her palm, the faint glow a promise and a warning. The suspect’s eyes never left hers, his grin widening as if he had been waiting for this moment. The market’s stalls seemed to close in, the lanterns flickering in a rhythm that matched the beating of her heart. She thought of DS Morris—his laughter, his steady hand, his disappearance that had left a void she could never fill. She thought of the countless nights spent chasing leads that turned out to be nothing more than shadows. She thought of the rain, the way it had washed away the city’s grime, and how it now seemed to wash away the line between reality and the unseen. She lifted her chin, the sharp jawline setting into a determined line. “I’m coming in,” she said, her voice steady, the rain’s echo still lingering in her ears. “And I’m taking this with me.” The suspect chuckled, a sound that seemed to reverberate off the stone walls. “Then let’s see if your badge can protect you in the Veil.” He turned and slipped through a narrow passage between two stalls, the bone token glinting as he moved. The passage was dim, the walls lined with ancient symbols that pulsed with a faint, violet light. Harlow followed, the iron charm warm against her skin, the medallion’s cross catching the lantern’s glow. The passage led to a heavy wooden door, its surface carved with intricate runes that seemed to shift and rearrange themselves as she approached. The door was slightly ajar, a sliver of darkness spilling out like a wound. Harlow placed her hand on the knob, feeling the chill of the stone beneath her fingertips. She could hear a low hum, a resonant vibration that seemed to come from the door itself, as if it were alive. She pushed the door open, and the room beyond was a stark contrast to the bustling market. The secret room at The Raven’s Nest was a small, dimly lit space, its walls lined with shelves of old maps and black‑and‑white photographs. In the center, a large, ancient bookshelf stood, its back hidden behind a false panel that now swung open, revealing a narrow stairwell that descended into darkness. The suspect stood at the foot of the stairs, the bone token clutched in his hand, its runes now glowing with an intense, otherworldly light. He turned to face her, his eyes reflecting the flickering lanterns of the market above. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his voice now a whisper that seemed to echo off the stone, “you’ve come all the way here. You think you can stop what’s coming?” Harlow’s breath caught. The air was thick, the scent of old paper and something metallic—blood?—lingering. She could feel the charm’s glow intensify, a protective barrier forming around her, though she could not see it. She could feel the weight of her watch, the ticking a reminder that every second mattered. She stepped forward, the wooden floor creaking under her weight. “I’m not here to stop anything,” she said, her voice low but firm. “I’m here to bring you to justice. And I’m bringing my partner’s memory with me.” The suspect laughed, a sound that seemed to crack the very air. “Justice? In a place where the rules have been rewritten? You’re out of your depth, Detective. You should have stayed on the street, where the rain could wash away your doubts.” She raised her hand, the iron charm now pulsing with a steady rhythm, the sigil on it glowing brighter. “I’m not afraid of the darkness,” she said, the words cutting through the silence like a blade. “I’m afraid of what happens when we let it swallow us.” The suspect’s eyes flickered, a flash of something—perhaps fear, perhaps something else—crossing his face. He dropped the bone token onto the floor, and it shattered, scattering shards of bone that dissolved into a mist that rose like a phantom. The room trembled, the shelves shaking, the photographs on the walls fluttering as if caught in a sudden wind. A low hum grew louder, resonating through the stone, a sound that seemed to vibrate the very core of the building. Harlow felt the charm’s glow intensify, a protective shield that seemed to push back against the encroaching darkness. She moved toward the suspect, her hand reaching for the gun hidden beneath her coat, but she stopped herself. The market’s rules were clear—violence would only invite the unseen forces that lingered in the shadows. She needed a different approach. “Tomás,” she called, her voice echoing through the stone chamber, “if you have any knowledge of this place, now’s the time.” Tomás, who had followed her into the secret room unseen, stepped forward, his eyes scanning the runes on the walls. He held a small vial of liquid that glowed faintly, its surface swirling with colors that seemed impossible. “This is a binding elixir,” he whispered, his voice barely audible. “It can seal the rift, but it requires a sacrifice—something of equal value.” Harlow’s mind raced. The sacrifice—what could be of equal value? Her badge? Her watch? Her partner’s memory? She thought of the stone watch, its worn leather strap, the ticking that had marked every moment of her life since the day she lost Morris. She thought of the medallion, the Saint Christopher that had guided travelers through perilous journeys. She looked at the suspect, his face now a mask of resignation. “What do you want?” she asked, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. He smiled, a thin, bitter smile. “I want the market to be free of the law’s interference. I want the Veil to be a place where the unseen can trade without fear of the police. I want the token to be a key to that freedom.” Harlow felt a surge of anger, mixed with a strange, almost compassionate understanding. The Veil Market was a refuge for those who existed beyond the ordinary, a place where the supernatural could survive. Yet it was also a place where danger lurked, where the line between buyer and predator blurred. She glanced at Tomás, who was still holding the elixir. “If we seal this, what happens to the market? To the people who rely on it?” Tomás’s eyes were solemn. “They’ll disappear, or they’ll be forced to the above ground. The Veil will close, and the secrets will be buried. But the city will be safer. The law will have a chance.” Harlow’s thoughts went to Morris, to the night he vanished, to the supernatural forces that had taken him. She could not let his death be in vain. She could not let the darkness swallow the city, but she also could not deny the existence of those who lived in shadows. She made a decision, one that would bind her fate to the very thing she had sworn to fight. She took a deep breath, feeling the rain’s remnants on her skin, the weight of her watch, the iron charm’s pulse against her palm. She turned to the suspect, her eyes locked onto his. “Then we’ll do this together,” she said, her voice a low promise. “We’ll seal the rift, but we’ll do it on our terms. No more blood, no more secrets. Just a chance for everyone to choose.” The suspect’s eyes widened, a flicker of hope breaking through his hardened exterior. He nodded slowly, the bone token’s remnants scattering into the ether. The hum in the room rose to a crescendo, the runes on the walls glowing brighter, as if reacting to the shift in intent. Tomás uncorked the vial, the liquid inside swirling like a storm caught in a bottle. He poured it onto the floor, the elixir spreading in a thin, luminous film that seeped into the cracks of the stone. The iron charm in Harlow’s hand pulsed in sync, a rhythm that matched the heartbeat of the room. The light intensified, a blinding flash that seemed to erase the darkness for a heartbeat. When the brilliance faded, the room was still, the hum gone, the runes dimmed to a soft amber glow. The bone token’s fragments had vanished, leaving no trace. Harlow stood, her coat dripping, the rain outside now a distant memory. She felt the weight of the charm against her skin, the medallion’s cross warm against her chest. The secret room was now just a room, its hidden passage sealed, the Veil Market’s doorway closed. She looked at Tomás, his scarred forearm still tingling from the elixir’s power. “What now?” she asked, the question hanging in the stale air. Tomás smiled, a genuine, relieved smile. “Now we go back to the surface. The market will be a rumor, a story told in whispers. And you… you’ll have a story to tell, Detective. One that might finally bring peace to your partner’s memory.” Harlow nodded, the rain’s echo still lingering in her ears. She stepped toward the exit, the iron charm’s glow fading as she left the secret room behind. The stone walls seemed to sigh, as if relieved to be free of the darkness that had threatened to consume them. She emerged back into the rain‑soaked streets of London, the neon green sign of The Raven’s Nest flickering above her. The city’s lights reflected in the puddles, each ripple a reminder of the night’s events. She pulled her coat tighter, the leather watch ticking steadily, a metronome for the life she still lived. She caught sight of a figure in the distance, a silhouette that could be a friend or a foe. She raised her hand, the iron charm now a faint ember against her palm, and whispered, “Morris, I’m coming home.” The rain began again, a soft patter that washed over the city, cleansing it of the night’s darkness. Harlow Quinn walked forward, her steps measured, her resolve unshakable, ready to face whatever shadows the city threw at her next.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3277
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count3
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"slightly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3277
totalAiIsms87
found
0
word"pulse"
count2
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"measured"
count2
3
word"flickered"
count3
4
word"beacon"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count2
6
word"weight"
count7
7
word"reminder"
count4
8
word"could feel"
count7
9
word"chill"
count2
10
word"echo"
count5
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"encounter"
count1
13
word"navigate"
count1
14
word"pulsed"
count4
15
word"quickened"
count1
16
word"pounding"
count1
17
word"echoing"
count2
18
word"silence"
count3
19
word"otherworldly"
count2
20
word"dancing"
count1
21
word"shimmered"
count1
22
word"etched"
count3
23
word"velvet"
count1
24
word"whisper"
count2
25
word"raced"
count2
26
word"calculating"
count1
27
word"electric"
count1
28
word"charm"
count12
29
word"flicked"
count1
30
word"determined"
count1
31
word"glinting"
count1
32
word"intricate"
count1
33
word"stark"
count1
34
word"shattered"
count1
35
word"trembled"
count1
36
word"scanning"
count1
37
word"predator"
count1
38
word"flicker"
count1
39
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"perfect"
2"measured"
3"flickered"
4"beacon"
5"familiar"
6"weight"
7"reminder"
8"could feel"
9"chill"
10"echo"
11"footsteps"
12"encounter"
13"navigate"
14"pulsed"
15"quickened"
16"pounding"
17"echoing"
18"silence"
19"otherworldly"
20"dancing"
21"shimmered"
22"etched"
23"velvet"
24"whisper"
25"raced"
26"calculating"
27"electric"
28"charm"
29"flicked"
30"determined"
31"glinting"
32"intricate"
33"stark"
34"shattered"
35"trembled"
36"scanning"
37"predator"
38"flicker"
39"resolve"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"a flicker of hope"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences161
matches
0"a surge of anger"
1"a flicker of hope"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount9
hedgeCount15
narrationSentences161
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences177
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3255
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions20
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount2712
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity0.85
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Harlow23
Quinn2
Raven4
Nest4
Camden1
Morris6
Veil4
Market4
Saint3
Christopher3
Herrera1
Tomás11
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Morris"
5"Market"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Herrera"
9"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences152
glossingSentenceCount14
matches
0"shadows that seemed to move of their own accord"
1"as if listening for a hidden threat"
2"runes that seemed to shift under the lantern light"
3"as if sensing the shift in the atmosphere"
4"mixture that seemed to cloud her thoughts"
5"sound that seemed to reverberate off the stone walls"
6"vibration that seemed to come from the door itself, as if it were alive"
7"whisper that seemed to echo off the stone"
8"sound that seemed to crack the very air"
9"sound that seemed to vibrate the very core of the building"
10"shield that seemed to push back against the encroaching darkness"
11"seemed impossible"
12"as if reacting to the shift in intent"
13"flash that seemed to erase the darkness for a heartbeat"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.307
wordCount3255
matches
0"not here to stop anything,” she said, her voice low but firm"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences177
matches(empty)
62.79% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean52.5
std19.41
cv0.37
sampleLengths
087
162
2103
3110
4100
555
698
772
870
961
1065
1138
1233
1355
1448
1547
1671
1755
1828
1951
2079
2141
2266
2359
2436
2557
2667
2734
2825
2951
3076
3168
3240
3329
3450
3538
3643
3747
3839
3958
4040
4121
4262
4358
4427
4546
4650
4726
4836
4950
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences161
matches
0"were muffled"
1"were written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs436
matches
0"were trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences20
totalSentences177
ratio0.113
matches
0"The suspect—an unassuming figure in a dark coat, his face obscured by the brim of a soaked hat—had slipped through the doorway of the bar just moments before."
1"A tip from an informant at The Raven’s Nest had been vague—“He’s heading to the old tube, the one beneath Camden. He’s got a token.” She knew the token meant the Veil Market, a place whispered about in the back rooms of precincts and in the hushed prayers of those who had seen the supernatural and lived to tell the tale."
2"Harlow’s eyes narrowed; she could see the faint outline of a scar on his left forearm, a detail she’d noted from a previous encounter."
3"He was no ordinary criminal; his movements suggested someone who had learned to navigate the shadows of the city, someone who knew the hidden arteries that pulsed beneath the urban sprawl."
4"A sudden flash of neon—red, flickering—caught her eye."
5"She could not afford to be seen; the Veil Market was a place where law enforcement was a myth, and the rules were written in blood and arcane symbols."
6"Vendors with gaunt faces and eyes that glowed with an unnatural light hawked their wares—bottles of liquid that shimmered like liquid moonlight, talismans etched with sigils that pulsed faintly, and bundles of dried herbs that emitted a faint, sweet perfume."
7"Tomás Herrera—formerly a paramedic, now a shadowy figure in the market’s underbelly—stood behind a stall of medical supplies, his hands clasped around a battered wooden box."
8"“The secret room is a trap for anyone who doesn’t know the code. The token you’re talking about isn’t just a pass; it’s a key. He’s planning something. You’re stepping into a world where the law doesn’t apply.”"
9"Harlow’s mind raced—her partner’s disappearance, the supernatural whispers that had haunted her investigations, the token that could unlock a portal to something beyond human comprehension."
10"He turned, his eyes meeting hers for a split second—cold, calculating, and unflinching."
11"She could feel the weight of her badge, the leather strap of her watch, the cold metal of her gun hidden beneath her coat—though she hadn’t drawn it yet."
12"The market’s rules were different; violence could attract attention she didn’t want."
13"Harlow’s eyes flicked to the medallion, the Saint Christopher—a protector of travelers, a symbol of safe passage."
14"Tomás slipped a small, iron charm into her palm—a tiny amulet shaped like a crescent moon, etched with an ancient sigil that glowed faintly when pressed against her skin."
15"She thought of DS Morris—his laughter, his steady hand, his disappearance that had left a void she could never fill."
16"The air was thick, the scent of old paper and something metallic—blood?—lingering."
17"The suspect’s eyes flickered, a flash of something—perhaps fear, perhaps something else—crossing his face."
18"The market’s rules were clear—violence would only invite the unseen forces that lingered in the shadows."
19"The sacrifice—what could be of equal value?"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2756
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.018867924528301886
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.007982583454281567
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences177
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences177
mean18.39
std8.43
cv0.459
sampleLengths
031
126
230
321
419
522
628
714
861
911
1013
1136
1224
1326
1418
1527
1624
1731
188
1926
2021
2112
2219
2313
2425
2529
2611
2721
2819
2921
3013
3117
3240
339
3420
3532
367
3727
3815
3916
4026
4112
4233
4317
4438
453
4620
4725
4811
4936
31.36% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats33
diversityRatio0.1694915254237288
totalSentences177
uniqueOpeners30
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
ratio0
31.32% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount75
totalSentences159
matches
0"She pulled the worn leather"
1"Its hands ticked in stubborn"
2"She could feel the cold"
3"She could still hear Morris’s"
4"She turned a corner onto"
5"He was no ordinary criminal;"
6"It was a sign she"
7"She quickened her stride, the"
8"She could not afford to"
9"She descended the stairs, each"
10"He was a ghost among"
11"She caught a glimpse of"
12"He wore a Saint Christopher"
13"His olive skin was slick"
14"He glanced at Harlow, his"
15"she said, her voice barely"
16"She could feel the weight"
17"She could feel the pull"
18"She glanced at the suspect,"
19"He held a small, polished"
ratio0.472
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount155
totalSentences159
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn moved through"
1"The green neon sign above"
2"She pulled the worn leather"
3"The watch had survived more"
4"Its hands ticked in stubborn"
5"The suspect—an unassuming figure in"
6"Harlow had watched him vanish"
7"A tip from an informant"
8"The rain intensified, turning the"
9"Harlow’s coat clung to her"
10"She could feel the cold"
11"The case had been a"
12"She could still hear Morris’s"
13"She turned a corner onto"
14"The suspect’s footsteps were muffled"
15"Harlow’s eyes narrowed; she could"
16"He was no ordinary criminal;"
17"A sudden flash of neon—red,"
18"It was a sign she"
19"She quickened her stride, the"
ratio0.975
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences159
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences128
technicalSentenceCount28
matches
0"Rain hammered the cobblestones of Soho with a relentless, metallic rhythm, turning the city’s neon veins into slick mirrors that reflected the frantic pulse of …"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn moved through the down like a blade through water, her boots splashing in perfect, measured strides that betrayed a lifetime of military …"
2"The green neon sign above The Raven’s Nest flickered intermittently, a ghostly beacon that cut through the down, casting an eerie glow over the puddles that gat…"
3"The case had been a blur of supernatural whispers and unexplained phenomena, a case that had left a scar deeper than any physical wound."
4"She could still hear Morris’s voice, a faint echo in her mind, urging her forward, warning her of the darkness that lay beneath the city’s surface."
5"The suspect’s footsteps were muffled by the water, but his pace was erratic, as if he were trying to lose a tail that was already too close."
6"He was no ordinary criminal; his movements suggested someone who had learned to navigate the shadows of the city, someone who knew the hidden arteries that puls…"
7"She quickened her stride, the rain pounding against her coat, each step a drumbeat that matched the thudding of her heart."
8"Lanterns made from hollowed-out skulls flickered, casting dancing shadows that seemed to move of their own accord."
9"Vendors with gaunt faces and eyes that glowed with an unnatural light hawked their wares—bottles of liquid that shimmered like liquid moonlight, talismans etche…"
10"Tomás cut her off, his eyes flickering to the crowd as if listening for a hidden threat."
11"Harlow’s mind raced—her partner’s disappearance, the supernatural whispers that had haunted her investigations, the token that could unlock a portal to somethin…"
12"He held a small, polished bone token in his gloved hand, its surface etched with runes that seemed to shift under the lantern light."
13"The market’s patrons turned their heads, their eyes lingering on the exchange, as if sensing the shift in the atmosphere."
14"The scent of ozone and old stone mingled with the faint perfume of the herbs, creating a heady mixture that seemed to cloud her thoughts."
15"Tomás slipped a small, iron charm into her palm—a tiny amulet shaped like a crescent moon, etched with an ancient sigil that glowed faintly when pressed against…"
16"The suspect’s eyes never left hers, his grin widening as if he had been waiting for this moment."
17"She thought of DS Morris—his laughter, his steady hand, his disappearance that had left a void she could never fill."
18"She could hear a low hum, a resonant vibration that seemed to come from the door itself, as if it were alive."
19"In the center, a large, ancient bookshelf stood, its back hidden behind a false panel that now swung open, revealing a narrow stairwell that descended into dark…"
20"He dropped the bone token onto the floor, and it shattered, scattering shards of bone that dissolved into a mist that rose like a phantom."
21"The room trembled, the shelves shaking, the photographs on the walls fluttering as if caught in a sudden wind."
22"Harlow felt the charm’s glow intensify, a protective shield that seemed to push back against the encroaching darkness."
23"He held a small vial of liquid that glowed faintly, its surface swirling with colors that seemed impossible."
24"She thought of the medallion, the Saint Christopher that had guided travelers through perilous journeys."
25"The hum in the room rose to a crescendo, the runes on the walls glowing brighter, as if reacting to the shift in intent."
26"He poured it onto the floor, the elixir spreading in a thin, luminous film that seeped into the cracks of the stone."
27"The iron charm in Harlow’s hand pulsed in sync, a rhythm that matched the heartbeat of the room."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount10
matches
0"she said, her voice barely above a whisper,"
1"he said, his voice a low rasp,"
2"he whispered, his voice barely audible over the murmurs of the market"
3"she said, her voice low but firm"
4"she said, the words cutting through the silence like a blade"
5"she called, her voice echoing through the stone chamber,"
6"he whispered, his voice barely audible"
7"she asked, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands"
8"she said, her voice a low promise"
9"she asked, the question hanging in the stale air"
87.50% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he whispered (whisper)"
1"he whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.125
62.3492%