Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEVR0QBP4QGPRA0QBBD3QR

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Duration:
9.6s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The stale air of the abandoned tube station clung to Quinn’s lungs like a damp blanket as she stepped through the iron gates of The Veil Market. The bone token she’d been handed by an informant earlier that night—an ivory fragment etched with a single, looping rune—had been the only thing that let her through the unmarked door hidden behind a graffiti‑splashed wall. The token had felt warm in her palm, as if it remembered the pulse of something alive. The market was a maze of flickering lanterns and low‑hanging awnings, each stall draped in faded velvet and lit by candles that sputtered with a blue‑green flame. Merchants whispered behind curtains of silk, their voices low enough to blend with the hum of unseen energy that seemed to vibrate through the stone walls. The scent of incense mixed with the metallic tang of old blood and something else—something sweet and acrid, like burnt amber. Quinn’s eyes, brown and sharp, scanned the scene with the precision of a soldier. She noted the way the light caught the edge of a cracked tile, the way a thin veil of dust hovered over a brass compass lying face‑up on the floor. The compass was small, its casing a verdigris‑patinated brass that seemed to have been polished by time itself. Etched into its face were protective sigils, their lines faint but still discernible. The needle, however, was still, pointing directly at a wall of graffiti‑covered brick. She moved forward, the worn leather watch on her left wrist ticking in a steady rhythm that matched her heartbeat. The watch had been a gift from her partner, DS Morris, before he vanished three years ago—a reminder of a time when the world felt more predictable. The weight of it on her wrist was a comfort, a small anchor in a place where reality seemed to fray. “Detective Quinn,” a voice called from behind a stall draped in black silk. The speaker was a woman with curly red hair, her strands escaping a loose knot as she tucked a strand behind her left ear—a nervous habit Quinn recognized from a case file. The woman wore round glasses that caught the lantern light, and a worn leather satchel bulged with books and scrolls. “Eva Kowalski. I didn’t expect to see a police officer here.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “Kowalski. You’re not supposed to be here.” Eva’s green eyes flicked to the compass, then to the body lying on the cracked tile a the merchant’s corpse. He was a middle‑aged man, his shirt torn, a deep gash across his chest that seemed to pulse with a dark, viscous fluid. The blood didn’t clot; instead, it shimmered faintly, as if it were made of liquid midnight. “Officer,” Eva said, her voice low, “the blood is not ordinary. It’s a—what the archivists call a ‘blood echo.’ It’s a residue left when a portal is opened and closed. The victim may have been pulled into a rift rather than murdered.” Quinn crouched beside the body, her fingers brushing the edge of the compass. The metal was cool, but she could feel a faint vibration, a low hum that resonated with the pulse of the market itself. She lifted the compass, turning it over in the light. The protective sigils were partially charred, as if a flame had licked at them, yet there was no scorch mark on the surrounding floor. She glanced up at the wall the needle pointed toward. A thin line of phosphorescent residue glowed along the brick, a faint, ghostly trail that seemed to fade in and out of existence. It was not paint, not dust—something that had been left behind by an energy field. “Someone opened a portal here,” Eva said, her tone a mixture of awe and professional detachment. “The Veil Compass is designed to point to the nearest rift. Whoever did this—likely a Shade artisan—would have used it to locate a passage.” Quinn’s mind raced. The Shade artisans were rumored to be the most skilled at weaving shadows into tools, but they were also the most secretive. Their work was rarely seen, and when it was, it was usually hidden behind layers of myth. She had heard whispers of a “clique” operating in the market, a group of smugglers who dealt in forbidden alchemical substances and cursed artifacts. She suspected they were involved, but the evidence before her was a puzzle she could not yet solve. She stood, the weight of her watch a steady reminder of time slipping through her fingers. She examined the wound on the merchant’s chest. The gash was clean, almost surgical, its edges too precise for a knife. The blood, dark and shimmering, seemed to rise and fall like a tide, as if it were breathing. “Look at the angle of the wound,” Quinn said, her voice low but firm. “It’s not a forward thrust. The attacker—or whatever forced this—came from behind, but the victim was turned away. The force was directed upward, not downward. That suggests a pull, not a stab.” Eva adjusted her glasses, the lenses catching the candlelight. “If it’s a pull, then the portal must have been opened directly above the victim. The compass needle points to the wall, but perhaps the rift opened beneath the floor, using the wall as a conduit.” Quinn’s eyes narrowed. She stepped back, scanning the floor for any irregularities. The tiles were uneven, some cracked, others intact. One tile, near the victim’s head, bore a faint imprint—a shallow depression that matched the shape of a bone token. She pressed her thumb against it, feeling a faint warmth. “The token,” she murmured. “It’s not just an entry token. It’s a key. Someone placed it here to anchor the portal.” She turned to Eva. “You said the blood echo is a residue from a portal. If that’s true, the rift must have been closed quickly. Otherwise, the echo would have dissipated. Someone—maybe the victim himself—closed it, or someone else did.” Eva’s fingers twitched, as if she were about to pull a notebook from her satchel. “There’s a ledger in the restricted archives that mentions a ‘Veil Compass’ used in a ritual to bind a Shade artisan’s work. The ritual requires a token of bone, a sigil of protection, and a sacrifice of blood. The victim might have been the sacrifice.” Quinn’s mind clicked. The sigils on the compass were burnt, perhaps to break their protection. The bone token imprint suggested the token had been placed deliberately. The victim’s blood was not his own—it was a “blood echo,” a residue left by the portal itself. The murder was a cover, a misdirection. She lifted the compass again, feeling the faint hum intensify as she angled it toward the wall. The needle quivered, then steadied, pointing to a narrow crack in the brick, just barely wide enough for a hand to slip through. The phosphorescent residue traced a line from the crack to the floor, disappearing where the tile gave way. “Someone’s trying to hide the entrance,” Quinn said, her voice barely above a whisper. “The crack is the portal’s mouth. The token was used to open it, the compass to locate it, and the sigils to protect it. When the portal was closed, the sigils were burned to prevent anyone else from using it again.” Eva’s eyes widened. “If the portal is still active, even partially, it could be feeding off the residual energy. That would explain the blood echo—it's a by‑product of the portal’s collapse.” Quinn’s gaze shifted to the crowd of market stalls, to the low murmur of voices that seemed to fade as she approached the crack. She could feel the hum of unseen currents, the subtle tug of something just beyond the veil of ordinary perception. She pressed a gloved hand against the brick, feeling the faint vibration of magic, like a heartbeat. “Detective,” Eva said, “if we close this portal completely, we might prevent whatever is feeding on it from escaping. But we need to know what’s on the other side.” Quinn’s mind flashed to DS Morris, the partner she’d lost under circumstances she still didn’t understand. The supernatural had always been a whisper at the edge of her world, a shadow she’d learned to ignore. Now, it was staring back at her, demanding attention. She turned to the compass, its brass casing warm under her palm. The needle still pointed at the crack. “We’ll need to stabilize the portal before we can close it. The compass can guide us, but we need a way to anchor the energy.” Eva reached into her satchel, pulling out a thin, vellum‑bound notebook. She flipped to a page filled with cramped handwriting and sketches of sigils. “There’s a binding rite here—‘The Veil’s Lament.’ It uses a mirror of obsidian and a chant of three verses. If we perform it here, the portal will collapse and the energy will be sealed.” Quinn nodded, her jaw set. “Get the obsidian mirror. I’ll keep watch on the compass. If anything changes, we’ll know.” She glanced back at the victim, his eyes still open, staring at a ceiling that seemed to ripple with unseen currents. The wound on his chest was no longer bleeding; the dark fluid had settled into a thin sheen that reflected the lantern light like oil on water. She felt a pang of sorrow mingled with resolve. He had become a conduit, a pawn in a game she was only beginning to understand. “Eva,” Quinn said, her tone softening, “you’ve seen things most people would dismiss as myth. I’ve spent my career hunting criminals, but this… this is something else. I need you to trust me.” Eva’s red hair fell over her shoulder as she tucked a strand behind her ear. “I trust you, Quinn. I’ve seen the archives—there are references to a ‘clique’ that uses the Veil Market as a front for their experiments. They’re after something called the ‘Shadow Thread.’” Quinn’s eyes hardened. “The Shadow Thread is a rumor, a legend. If they’re real, they’re dangerous. And if they’ve already opened a portal, they might have already slipped something through.” She turned back to the crack, the phosphorescent residue now pulsing faintly, as if responding to her thoughts. The compass needle trembled, then steadied, pointing directly at the opening. The hum grew louder, a low, resonant tone that seemed to vibrate through her bones. “Everyone, stay back,” she ordered, her voice cutting through the market’s murmurs. “We’re dealing with a supernatural event. No one touches the evidence.” The market vendors, a mix of humans and shadowy figures, retreated into the alcoves, their eyes wide with fear and curiosity. The air grew colder, the lantern flames flickering as if a wind were passing through an unseen doorway. Quinn knelt beside the crack, her gloved hand hovering just above the edge. The bone token imprint glowed faintly, a reminder of the ritual that had been performed. She pressed her other hand against the compass, feeling the subtle vibration of magic. The needle pointed unwaveringly toward the opening. “Eva,” she said, “if the portal is still active, we need to seal it before anything else comes through. The obsidian mirror—where is it?” Eva rummaged through her satchel, pulling out a small, black disc that reflected the lantern light with an unnerving clarity. The surface was smooth, absorbing rather than reflecting. She held it up, and for a moment, the market seemed to tilt, as if the world itself were holding its breath. Quinn placed the mirror on the floor, aligning it with the crack. The phosphorescent residue seemed to coalesce, forming a thin, shimmering veil that stretched across the opening. The needle on the compass quivered, then steadied, pointing directly at the mirror’s surface. “Now,” Quinn said, her voice steady, “the chant.” Eva opened her notebook, her fingers tracing the ancient verses. She began to chant in a low, melodic tone, each word resonating with the hum of the portal. The words were old, their syllables heavy with meaning, and as she spoke, the veil of light around the crack grew brighter, pulsing in rhythm with her voice. Quinn watched the compass, its needle moving in a slow, deliberate arc, as if marking the passage of time. The hum grew louder, then began to waver, as if the portal was fighting against the binding. The blood echo on the floor started to evaporate, the dark fluid turning to vapor and disappearing into the air. The phosphorescent residue dimmed, the glow fading like a dying star. “Almost there,” Eva whispered, her eyes fixed on the mirror. Quinn felt a sudden rush of wind, cold and sharp, as if the portal were exhaling. The mirror reflected a flash of darkness, a silhouette of something that seemed to be pulled back into the void. The needle on the compass spun wildly for a heartbeat, then settled, pointing straight down. The portal shuddered, the crack in the brick sealing itself with a soft, crystalline sound. The stone became smooth, the imprint of the bone token disappearing as if never existed. The market fell silent, the lanterns steadier, the hum fading into a faint, lingering echo. Quinn stood, her breath heavy, her heart pounding. She glanced at the body, now still, the dark fluid gone, the wound a clean line of flesh. The victim’s eyes were closed, his face peaceful, as if he had finally found rest. Eva lowered her notebook, her hands trembling. “We did it,” she said, a mixture of relief and awe in her voice. Quinn looked at the compass, its needle now pointing to the center of the market, to nothing in particular. She slipped it into her pocket, feeling the weight of the brass against her thigh. The watch on her wrist ticked, each second a reminder that time moved on, even in places where reality frayed. “Eva,” Quinn said, her voice softening, “thank you. You saw what I missed. You saw the magic that the others dismissed as myth.” Eva smiled, a faint, nervous smile that tugged at the corners of her mouth. “And you, Detective, saw the pattern in the chaos. You turned a murder scene into a portal’s collapse. That’s something even the most seasoned occult researchers can’t claim.” Quinn’s eyes drifted to the market’s stalls, to the shadows that lingered in the corners. She thought of DS Morris, of the night he vanished, of the supernatural origins she still didn’t understand. She felt a cold resolve settle in her bones. The veil between worlds was thinner than she’d ever imagined, and the market—this hidden place of secrets—was a crossroads where the ordinary met the uncanny. She turned to leave, the compass now a silent weight in her pocket. The bone token, once a key to entry, was gone, its purpose fulfilled. The market’s murmurs resumed, but now they carried an undercurrent of reverence, as if the patrons sensed that something had been a. Quinn stepped back into the night, the cool air of Camden wrapping around her like a cloak. The full moon rose high, its silver light casting long shadows over the streets. She glanced at her watch, the worn leather strap creaking as she tightened it around her wrist. She had come looking for a crime, a murder, a broken case. She had found a portal, a veil, and a clue that pointed to something far larger than any file. The evidence didn’t add up—nothing ever did in this city. But now, with the Veil Compass tucked safely away, she had a new direction, a new thread to pull. The market would move again at the next full moon, its location shifting like a phantom. The clique would regroup, perhaps more cautious, perhaps more desperate. And somewhere, deeper in the shadows, a Shade artisan watched, waiting for the next opportunity to stitch a new rift. Quinn’s jaw set, her eyes narrowing. She would follow the compass, follow the clues, and she would uncover the truth, no matter how supernatural it became. The night was still, the city alive with hidden currents, and she—Detective Harlow Quinn—was ready to walk the thin line between the known and the unknown, her military precision guiding her through the darkness.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.485
leniency0.97
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
92.67% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2729
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"deliberately"
2"barely above a whisper"
3"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
13.89% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2729
totalAiIsms47
found
0
word"etched"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count3
2
word"velvet"
count1
3
word"silk"
count2
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"reminder"
count4
6
word"predictable"
count1
7
word"weight"
count4
8
word"flicked"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"echo"
count7
11
word"could feel"
count2
12
word"resonated"
count1
13
word"raced"
count1
14
word"scanning"
count1
15
word"warmth"
count1
16
word"quivered"
count2
17
word"traced"
count1
18
word"whisper"
count2
19
word"pang"
count1
20
word"resolve"
count2
21
word"pawn"
count1
22
word"trembled"
count1
23
word"tracing"
count1
24
word"crystalline"
count1
25
word"pounding"
count1
26
word"uncanny"
count1
highlights
0"etched"
1"pulse"
2"velvet"
3"silk"
4"scanned"
5"reminder"
6"predictable"
7"weight"
8"flicked"
9"shimmered"
10"echo"
11"could feel"
12"resonated"
13"raced"
14"scanning"
15"warmth"
16"quivered"
17"traced"
18"whisper"
19"pang"
20"resolve"
21"pawn"
22"trembled"
23"tracing"
24"crystalline"
25"pounding"
26"uncanny"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells3
narrationSentences140
matches
0"a pang of sorrow"
1"d with resolve"
2"e with fear"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount15
narrationSentences140
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"started to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences157
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2707
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
85.44% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount2091
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.29
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Quinn27
Veil2
Market1
Morris3
Shade2
Eva15
Camden1
Compass1
Detective1
Harlow1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Eva"
3"Compass"
4"Harlow"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.854
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences125
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"energy that seemed to vibrate through the stone walls"
1"brass that seemed to have been polished by time itself"
2"chest that seemed to pulse with a dark, viscous fluid"
3"trail that seemed to fade in and out of existence"
4"voices that seemed to fade as she approached the crack"
5"ceiling that seemed to ripple with unseen currents"
6"as if responding to her thoughts"
7"tone that seemed to vibrate through her bones"
8"as if marking the passage of time"
9"something that seemed to be pulled back into the void"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2707
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences157
matches
0"sensed that something"
67.73% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean46.67
std18.06
cv0.387
sampleLengths
080
174
288
368
476
510
659
742
870
948
1040
1184
1255
1346
1445
1550
1621
1740
1860
1951
2058
2155
2231
2361
2429
2544
2644
2758
2820
2973
3033
3146
3230
3344
3423
3539
3649
3724
3850
3942
408
4156
4236
4331
4410
4551
4645
4741
4821
4954
82.71% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences140
matches
0"been handed"
1"been polished"
2"were made"
3"been left"
4"were rumored"
5"been placed"
6"been performed"
7"were closed"
8"was gone"
82.35% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs340
matches
0"were breathing"
1"was staring"
2"were passing"
3"were holding"
4"was fighting"
5"were exhaling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences157
ratio0.076
matches
0"The bone token she’d been handed by an informant earlier that night—an ivory fragment etched with a single, looping rune—had been the only thing that let her through the unmarked door hidden behind a graffiti‑splashed wall."
1"The scent of incense mixed with the metallic tang of old blood and something else—something sweet and acrid, like burnt amber."
2"The watch had been a gift from her partner, DS Morris, before he vanished three years ago—a reminder of a time when the world felt more predictable."
3"The speaker was a woman with curly red hair, her strands escaping a loose knot as she tucked a strand behind her left ear—a nervous habit Quinn recognized from a case file."
4"The blood didn’t clot; instead, it shimmered faintly, as if it were made of liquid midnight."
5"It was not paint, not dust—something that had been left behind by an energy field."
6"One tile, near the victim’s head, bore a faint imprint—a shallow depression that matched the shape of a bone token."
7"The victim’s blood was not his own—it was a “blood echo,” a residue left by the portal itself."
8"The wound on his chest was no longer bleeding; the dark fluid had settled into a thin sheen that reflected the lantern light like oil on water."
9"The veil between worlds was thinner than she’d ever imagined, and the market—this hidden place of secrets—was a crossroads where the ordinary met the uncanny."
10"The evidence didn’t add up—nothing ever did in this city."
11"The night was still, the city alive with hidden currents, and she—Detective Harlow Quinn—was ready to walk the thin line between the known and the unknown, her military precision guiding her through the darkness."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2104
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount69
adverbRatio0.03279467680608365
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.009505703422053232
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean17.24
std8.21
cv0.476
sampleLengths
027
136
217
327
426
521
614
730
818
913
1013
1120
1227
1321
1413
1532
1620
1711
183
197
2020
2123
2216
2342
2413
2523
2610
2724
2810
2923
3015
3116
3224
333
3422
3517
3624
3718
3816
398
4013
4118
4214
4332
449
4536
463
479
488
4920
30.25% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats31
diversityRatio0.17197452229299362
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners27
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences137
matches
0"She noted the way the"
1"She moved forward, the worn"
2"He was a middle‑aged man,"
3"She lifted the compass, turning"
4"She glanced up at the"
5"It was not paint, not"
6"Their work was rarely seen,"
7"She had heard whispers of"
8"She suspected they were involved,"
9"She stood, the weight of"
10"She examined the wound on"
11"She stepped back, scanning the"
12"She pressed her thumb against"
13"She turned to Eva."
14"She lifted the compass again,"
15"She could feel the hum"
16"She pressed a gloved hand"
17"She turned to the compass,"
18"She flipped to a page"
19"She glanced back at the"
ratio0.27
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount132
totalSentences137
matches
0"The stale air of the"
1"The bone token she’d been"
2"The token had felt warm"
3"The market was a maze"
4"Merchants whispered behind curtains of"
5"The scent of incense mixed"
6"Quinn’s eyes, brown and sharp,"
7"She noted the way the"
8"The compass was small, its"
9"The needle, however, was still,"
10"She moved forward, the worn"
11"The watch had been a"
12"The weight of it on"
13"a voice called from behind"
14"The speaker was a woman"
15"The woman wore round glasses"
16"Quinn’s jaw tightened."
17"Eva’s green eyes flicked to"
18"He was a middle‑aged man,"
19"The blood didn’t clot; instead,"
ratio0.964
36.50% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences137
matches
0"Now, it was staring back"
ratio0.007
9.80% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences102
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"The bone token she’d been handed by an informant earlier that night—an ivory fragment etched with a single, looping rune—had been the only thing that let her th…"
1"The market was a maze of flickering lanterns and low‑hanging awnings, each stall draped in faded velvet and lit by candles that sputtered with a blue‑green flam…"
2"Merchants whispered behind curtains of silk, their voices low enough to blend with the hum of unseen energy that seemed to vibrate through the stone walls."
3"She moved forward, the worn leather watch on her left wrist ticking in a steady rhythm that matched her heartbeat."
4"The metal was cool, but she could feel a faint vibration, a low hum that resonated with the pulse of the market itself."
5"The protective sigils were partially charred, as if a flame had licked at them, yet there was no scorch mark on the surrounding floor."
6"A thin line of phosphorescent residue glowed along the brick, a faint, ghostly trail that seemed to fade in and out of existence."
7"The blood, dark and shimmering, seemed to rise and fall like a tide, as if it were breathing."
8"One tile, near the victim’s head, bore a faint imprint—a shallow depression that matched the shape of a bone token."
9"Quinn’s gaze shifted to the crowd of market stalls, to the low murmur of voices that seemed to fade as she approached the crack."
10"The wound on his chest was no longer bleeding; the dark fluid had settled into a thin sheen that reflected the lantern light like oil on water."
11"She turned back to the crack, the phosphorescent residue now pulsing faintly, as if responding to her thoughts."
12"The air grew colder, the lantern flames flickering as if a wind were passing through an unseen doorway."
13"Eva rummaged through her satchel, pulling out a small, black disc that reflected the lantern light with an unnerving clarity."
14"The phosphorescent residue seemed to coalesce, forming a thin, shimmering veil that stretched across the opening."
15"Quinn watched the compass, its needle moving in a slow, deliberate arc, as if marking the passage of time."
16"Quinn felt a sudden rush of wind, cold and sharp, as if the portal were exhaling."
17"The mirror reflected a flash of darkness, a silhouette of something that seemed to be pulled back into the void."
18"The market’s murmurs resumed, but now they carried an undercurrent of reverence, as if the patrons sensed that something had been a."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"Eva said, her voice low,"
1"Eva said, her tone a mixture of awe and professional detachment"
2"Quinn said, her voice low but firm"
3"Quinn said, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"Quinn said, her tone softening,"
5"she ordered, her voice cutting through the market’s murmurs"
6"Quinn said, her voice steady,"
7"she said, a mixture of relief and awe in her voice"
8"Quinn said, her voice softening,"
59.09% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she murmured (murmur)"
1"she ordered (order)"
2"Eva whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.424
leniency0.848
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.182
64.2366%