Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEVVV1B4J6H8FG0AX9S6VF

Run Details

Duration:
9.9s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Stealth

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the cobblestones of Soho, turning the city’s veins into slick ribbons of black glass. The neon green of The Raven’s Nest flickered above the doorway, a sickly pulse that cut through the gloom like a warning. Quinn stood under the sign, the worn leather strap of her watch digging into the left wrist as she checked the time. The rain’s rhythm was a metronome against the metal awning, each drop a reminder that the night was alive with secrets. She pulled the collar of her coat tighter, the sharp jawline of her face set in a line of concentration. Her brown eyes scanned the street, catching the glint of a figure slipping past the doorway of the bar. The suspect— a woman in a dark trench coat, hair slicked back, a scarred left cheek that caught the neon light. Quinn’s heart thudded against her ribs; the same rhythm that had driven her through eighteen years of service, the same rhythm that had once marked the night DS Morris vanished. “Hold it,” Quinn muttered, her voice low, barely audible over the rain. She stepped forward, boots splashing through puddles, the leather of her coat creaking with each stride. The woman glanced back, eyes flashing a brief, almost imperceptible panic. She turned the corner, disappearing into an alley that smelled of stale ale and old cigarettes. Quinn’s mind raced. The alley was a narrow slit between a shuttered laundromat and a graffiti‑splashed brick wall, the kind of place where the city’s underbelly whispered its own stories. She slipped through the gap, the rain soaking her hair, the cold seeping into her bones. The alley opened onto a side street where the pavement was slick with oil, reflecting the green neon sign like a broken mirror. She heard a faint clatter, a metallic echo that rose above the rain’s percussion. The suspect was moving faster now, her heels clicking against the wet stone. Quinn’s trained eyes caught a glint of something metallic on the woman’s wrist—a small, silver token that caught the light with each motion. It was a bone token, the kind required for entry to the Veil Market, the underground black market that existed beneath Camden’s abandoned Tube station. Quinn’s breath caught. The Veil Market was a rumor among the precinct, a place whispered about in hushed tones, a market that moved locations every full moon, selling enchanted goods and forbidden alchemical substances. It was a place where the supernatural and the criminal intertwined, a place where the city’s darkness was given flesh. She could turn back, retreat to the safety of the street, to the familiar sirens and flashing lights of the Metropolitan Police. But the memory of Morris—his laugh, his steady hand, the way his eyes had widened the the night the case went wrong—pushed her forward. She remembered the night his body was found, twisted in an alley, the air thick with an unexplainable chill, the shadows moving as if alive. The case had been closed, the supernatural dismissed as superstition. Yet now, the token in the suspect’s hand was a reminder that something else lingered beneath the city’s veneer. Quinn tightened her grip on her coat, the leather watch on her left wrist ticking the seconds. She could feel the weight of the decision pressing against her ribs like the rain against her skin. She could not let the suspect slip into the market; she could not let the clue vanish into the labyrinth of underground stalls and whispered deals. She surged forward, the rain a curtain that blurred the world, the neon green sign a distant beacon. The suspect turned a corner into a narrow stairwell that led down into darkness. The stairwell was a rusted iron shaft, the steps slick with rain, the air growing colder with each descent. Quinn’s boots echoed, a steady thud that matched the rhythm of her heartbeat. At the bottom, a heavy steel door stood ajar, a faint glow spilling from within. The smell of damp stone mixed with the metallic tang of old blood. She slipped through the doorway, the rain falling away behind her as if the city itself was shedding its skin. The interior was a cavernous space, the remnants of an old Tube station repurposed into a market that seemed to pulse with a low, humming energy. Lanterns hung from the vaulted ceiling, casting amber light over stalls of strange artifacts: jars of glowing liquid, bundles of dried herbs that hissed when touched, and a counter where a man in a tattered coat sold vials of blackened oil. Quinn’s eyes adjusted, taking in the scene. The Veil Market was alive, a hive of whispers and bar. A low murmur rose from the crowd, a chorus of languages she could not decipher. The suspect vanished into the throng, her coat a dark blot against the market’s kaleidoscope of colors. Quinn moved forward, her steps deliberate, her mind cataloguing every detail. She felt the weight of her leather watch, the worn strap a reminder of the countless hours she’d spent chasing ghosts—both literal and figurative. The rain had ceased, but a damp chill lingered on her skin, a reminder that she was now far from the familiar streets. She scanned the stalls, looking for any sign of the woman. A vendor with a scarred face, his left arm wrapped in bandages, caught her eye. He was arranging a set of silver charms, each etched with a rune that seemed to pulse faintly. Quinn approached, the crowd parting as she passed. “Looking for something?” the vendor asked, his voice low, eyes darting to the shadows. Quinn’s jaw tightened. “A woman in a trench coat. She had a bone token. You seen her?” The vendor’s eyes flickered, a brief flash of recognition. “Tokens get you in, but they don’t keep you out. She headed toward the back room. The secret room behind the bookshelf. Not many know about it. Most think it’s just a rumor.” Quinn’s pulse quickened. The secret room—she remembered the story of The Raven’s Nest, the hidden back room accessed through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings. The Veil Market had a similar hidden space, a place where the most dangerous deals were made. She needed to find it, to cut off whatever the suspect was planning. She turned, moving through the market with a predator’s grace. The rain‑slicked floor reflected her reflection, a woman with salt‑and‑pepper hair, eyes narrowed, a sharp jawline set against the chaos. The market’s patrons were a mix of humans and things that defied classification—eyes that glowed, limbs that shifted, shadows that seemed to breathe. A sudden shout rose from a corner, a man clutching his throat, his eyes wide with terror. “The token! The token! It’s cursed!” he screamed, his voice cracking. Quinn’s mind raced. The token—bone, ancient, perhaps a relic of a forgotten rite. If the suspect possessed it, she could be planning something far beyond a simple smuggling run. The market’s humming seemed to intensify, as if the walls themselves were listening. She pushed through the crowd, her boots silent on the wet stone. The suspect was near a wall lined with old books, their spines cracked, titles in languages long dead. The bookshelf was slightly ajar, a thin sliver of darkness beyond it. Quinn’s hand brushed the wood, feeling the grain, the subtle give that hinted at a hidden mechanism. She pressed her palm against the wood, feeling the faint click of a latch. The bookshelf swung inward, revealing a narrow passage lit by a single flickering candle. The air inside was colder, the scent of incense and old paper mingling with something metallic—blood. Quinn hesitated for a heartbeat, the memory of Morris’s death flashing before her eyes. He had been taken by something unseen, a darkness she could not comprehend. She clenched her fists, feeling the leather strap of her watch tighten around her wrist. She stepped into the passage, the candle’s flame dancing on the walls, casting long shadows that seemed to stretch like fingers. The passage opened into a small room, walls lined with maps of the city, each marked with red pins and cryptic symbols. In the center, a wooden table bore a single object—a silver dagger, its blade etched with runes that glowed faintly. The suspect stood across the table, her coat removed, revealing a tattoo of a raven across her neck. Her eyes met Quinn’s, a mixture of fear and resolve. “You shouldn’t have come here,” she whispered, voice hoarse from the rain. Quinn’s breath caught. “What are you doing?” she asked, her tone low, the sound of the rain still echoing in her ears. The woman’s gaze flickered to the dagger. “I’m trying to end it. The token… it’s a key. It opens a door that should never be opened. My brother—he’s trapped in that world. I need to close it before it consumes us all.” Quinn’s mind whirled. The token, the dagger, the maps—this was more than a criminal case. It was a battle for the city’s soul. She thought of the bone token she had seen earlier, the way it glinted in the suspect’s hand. She thought of the night her partner had disappeared, the inexplicable chill, the shadows that seemed to move on their own. “Who’s your brother?” Quinn asked, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands. The woman’s eyes softened. “Elias. He vanished three years ago, the same night your partner… your partner… he was taken.” She swallowed, a tear slipping down her cheek, mixing with the rain that still clung to her skin. Quinn’s heart hammered. The coincidence was too sharp to ignore. “What do you need?” she asked, the detective in her rising, the need to control the chaos. “The dagger,” the woman said, gesturing to the blade. “It can sever the link. But it must be used at the exact moment when the market shifts, under the full moon. The token is the key, but without the dagger, the door will never close.” Quinn glanced at the maps, the red pins marking locations across the city—places where strange phenomena had been reported, where people had disappeared, where the veil between worlds seemed thin. She felt the weight of the decision settle on her shoulders. She could arrest the suspect, confiscate the token, and hand everything over to the precinct. She could close the case, file it as a supernatural anomaly, and go back to the safety of her badge. Or she could step into the unknown, risk everything, and perhaps finally understand the darkness that had taken her partner. The rain outside had stopped, but the air inside the secret room was thick with anticipation. The candle flickered, casting a wavering light on the dagger’s runes. Quinn could feel the pulse of the city, the hum of the market, the whisper of the veil. She made her choice. She reached for the dagger, the metal cold against her palm. The woman’s hand brushed hers, a fleeting contact that sent a shiver up her arm. “We have to move quickly,” the woman whispered. “The market will shift soon. If we miss the window—” Quinn’s eyes narrowed. “Then we lose everything.” She turned toward the narrow passage, the candle’s flame dancing behind her. The sound of rain echoed faintly, a reminder of the world above, of the streets she had chased through, of the neon green sign that still glowed in the distance. She could still hear the distant wail of sirens, the hum of the city’s heartbeat. She stepped back into the market, the suspect at her side, the dagger clutched tightly. The crowd surged around them, a sea of shadows and whispered deals. The hidden back room’s door slammed shut behind them, the bookshelf returning to its place, sealing the secret. Quinn’s mind raced as she moved through the market’s labyrinthine aisles. She caught sight of a stall selling bone tokens, each one polished to a dull sheen. She reached for one, feeling the weight of the bone, the history it carried. The token pulsed under her fingertips as if alive, resonating with the dagger’s runes. She heard a voice behind her, low and guttural. “You think you can stop it?” a figure stepped out of the shadows, a man with a scar across his cheek, eyes glowing a faint amber. “The market is not yours to control.” Quinn’s hand tightened around the dagger. “I’m not here to control. I’m here to close the door.” The man laughed, a sound that seemed to echo off the stone walls. “Close it? You’ll need more than a dagger and a token. You’ll need a sacrifice.” She glanced at the woman, her eyes fierce. “Then we’ll give it what it wants.” The market’s lights flickered, the lanterns sputtering as if the very air was shifting. The hum grew louder, a low vibration that resonated in Quinn’s bones. She felt the rain’s aftertaste on her skin, the cold of the underground, the weight of her watch ticking against her wrist. She raised the dagger, the runes glowing brighter, the silver blade humming. The token in her hand pulsed in sync, a rhythm that matched the market’s heartbeat. The man stepped back, his eyes widening in fear. “Now!” the woman shouted, her voice echoing through the cavern. Quinn thrust the dagger forward, the blade slicing through the air, a thin line of light cutting the darkness. The token shattered, fragments of bone scattering like ash. A shockwave rippled through the market, the lanterns exploding in a burst of amber fire. The walls seemed to breathe, the maps on the walls fluttering as if caught in a wind. The market’s patrons screamed, some fleeing, others frozen in terror. The hidden back room’s door burst open, a blinding light spilling out, illuminating the cavern. Quinn felt a pull, a tug at the very fabric of reality, as if the veil between worlds was being torn. She clung to the dagger, the runes blazing, the light enveloping her. The woman’s eyes widened, tears streaming down her face. “Elias!” she cried, her voice a mixture of hope and dread. The light intensified, a vortex forming in the center of the room. Quinn could see silhouettes—figures of men and women, their faces blurred, their forms shifting. She recognized the shape of her partner, DS Morris, his coat fluttering as if caught in a storm. He reached out, his hand trembling. Quinn’s breath caught. She could feel the pull, the temptation to step into the vortex, to join the silhouettes, to let the darkness consume her. She could also feel the weight of her badge, the promise she had made to protect the city, the memory of her partner’s sacrifice. She tightened her grip on the dagger, the metal humming against her palm. The vortex swirled, the light pulsing like a heartbeat. The market’s walls cracked, the stone crumbling, the lanterns exploding in a cascade of sparks. She made a choice. She thrust the dagger into the vortex, the runes flaring, the blade sinking into the heart of the darkness. The token’s fragments dissolved, the vortex recoiling, a scream of pure, raw energy echoing through the cavern. The light exploded, a blinding flash that washed over everything. Quinn felt the world tilt, the rain outside fading into a distant echo. When the light dimmed, the market was silent. The lanterns were dark, the stalls empty. The hidden back room’s door stood ajar, the bookshelf closed, the secret room sealed once more. Quinn fell to her knees, the dagger clattering to the stone floor, the runes dimming. She could hear her own ragged breathing, the rain’s memory on her skin, the weight of her watch ticking against her wrist. The woman collapsed beside her, tears streaming down her cheeks, clutching the broken token. “It’s over,” the woman whispered, her voice trembling. “He’s free.” Quinn looked up, the neon green sign of The Raven’s Nest still visible through the cracked ceiling, a distant beacon in the night. The rain had ceased, the city’s streets now dry, the sky a slate of gray. She rose, the leather watch still ticking, the sound a steady metronome in the quiet. She brushed the rain from her coat, feeling the chill of the underground recede. The city’s pulse returned, the distant wail of sirens echoing in the distance, the hum of traffic beginning again. She turned toward the exit, the secret room’s door closing behind her, the bookshelf sliding back into place. The market’s darkness was gone, the veil sealed, the token shattered. The night was still, the rain’s memory lingering on the cobblestones. Quinn stepped out into the street, the neon green sign of The Raven’s Nest flickering above her. The rain had left a sheen on the pavement, reflecting the city’s lights like a mirror. She could feel the weight of the night settle on her shoulders, the echo of the chase, the decision that had led her into the unknown. She glanced back once, the bar’s doorway a dark silhouette against the street. The sound of a distant siren rose, a reminder that the city never slept, that the hunt never truly ended. She tightened her grip on her coat, the leather watch on her left wrist ticking, a reminder of time’s relentless march. She walked away, her boots echoing on the wet stone, the rain’s memory fading, the city’s pulse beating beneath her feet. The case was far from over, but for now, the night had claimed its secrets, and Detective Harlow Quinn had stepped into the darkness and emerged, scarred but unbroken.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.56
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2953
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"tightly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count2
4
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
2"tightly"
3"very"
4"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2953
totalAiIsms78
found
0
word"flickered"
count5
1
word"pulse"
count7
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"reminder"
count7
4
word"scanned"
count2
5
word"glint"
count2
6
word"raced"
count3
7
word"echo"
count4
8
word"familiar"
count2
9
word"chill"
count4
10
word"could feel"
count4
11
word"weight"
count8
12
word"beacon"
count2
13
word"echoed"
count2
14
word"kaleidoscope"
count1
15
word"etched"
count2
16
word"quickened"
count1
17
word"clandestine"
count1
18
word"predator"
count1
19
word"dancing"
count2
20
word"resolve"
count1
21
word"echoing"
count5
22
word"anticipation"
count1
23
word"wavering"
count1
24
word"whisper"
count1
25
word"fleeting"
count1
26
word"pulsed"
count2
27
word"resonated"
count1
28
word"shattered"
count2
29
word"streaming"
count2
highlights
0"flickered"
1"pulse"
2"gloom"
3"reminder"
4"scanned"
5"glint"
6"raced"
7"echo"
8"familiar"
9"chill"
10"could feel"
11"weight"
12"beacon"
13"echoed"
14"kaleidoscope"
15"etched"
16"quickened"
17"clandestine"
18"predator"
19"dancing"
20"resolve"
21"echoing"
22"anticipation"
23"wavering"
24"whisper"
25"fleeting"
26"pulsed"
27"resonated"
28"shattered"
29"streaming"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count3
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"clenched her fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences181
matches
0"e with terror"
1"k with anticipation"
2"g in fear"
3"n in terror"
8.68% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount8
hedgeCount9
narrationSentences181
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
1"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences192
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2940
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions64
wordCount2706
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.33
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho1
Raven4
Nest4
Morris4
Veil4
Market4
Camden1
Tube2
Metropolitan1
Police1
Quinn36
Detective1
Harlow1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Morris"
3"Camden"
4"Quinn"
5"Harlow"
places
0"Soho"
1"Market"
globalScore0.835
windowScore0.667
44.58% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences166
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"market that seemed to pulse with a low, humming energy"
1"rune that seemed to pulse faintly"
2"shadows that seemed to breathe"
3"shadows that seemed to stretch like fingers"
4"shadows that seemed to move on their own"
5"seemed thin"
6"sound that seemed to echo off the stone walls"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2940
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences192
matches
0"slept, that the"
76.54% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean46.67
std19.5
cv0.418
sampleLengths
081
190
255
369
475
554
6100
761
864
948
1067
1150
1258
1352
1414
1517
1642
1755
1853
1928
2042
2159
2244
2342
2463
2540
2622
2742
2862
2914
3038
3127
3245
3396
3445
3548
367
3757
3845
3955
4042
4117
4228
4315
4448
4536
4610
4760
4846
4932
89.75% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences181
matches
0"was given"
1"was found"
2"been closed"
3"were made"
4"been taken"
5"been reported"
6"being torn"
7"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs430
matches
0"was shedding"
1"was arranging"
2"was planning"
3"were listening"
4"was shifting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences192
ratio0.073
matches
0"The suspect— a woman in a dark trench coat, hair slicked back, a scarred left cheek that caught the neon light."
1"Quinn’s heart thudded against her ribs; the same rhythm that had driven her through eighteen years of service, the same rhythm that had once marked the night DS Morris vanished."
2"Quinn’s trained eyes caught a glint of something metallic on the woman’s wrist—a small, silver token that caught the light with each motion."
3"But the memory of Morris—his laugh, his steady hand, the way his eyes had widened the the night the case went wrong—pushed her forward."
4"She could not let the suspect slip into the market; she could not let the clue vanish into the labyrinth of underground stalls and whispered deals."
5"She felt the weight of her leather watch, the worn strap a reminder of the countless hours she’d spent chasing ghosts—both literal and figurative."
6"The secret room—she remembered the story of The Raven’s Nest, the hidden back room accessed through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings."
7"The market’s patrons were a mix of humans and things that defied classification—eyes that glowed, limbs that shifted, shadows that seemed to breathe."
8"The token—bone, ancient, perhaps a relic of a forgotten rite."
9"The air inside was colder, the scent of incense and old paper mingling with something metallic—blood."
10"In the center, a wooden table bore a single object—a silver dagger, its blade etched with runes that glowed faintly."
11"The token, the dagger, the maps—this was more than a criminal case."
12"Quinn glanced at the maps, the red pins marking locations across the city—places where strange phenomena had been reported, where people had disappeared, where the veil between worlds seemed thin."
13"Quinn could see silhouettes—figures of men and women, their faces blurred, their forms shifting."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2718
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount49
adverbRatio0.018027961736571008
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.004047093451066961
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences192
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences192
mean15.31
std7.05
cv0.46
sampleLengths
016
122
222
321
420
519
621
730
812
916
1011
1116
123
1327
1416
1523
1614
1713
1823
1925
203
2131
2220
2322
2424
2525
2610
2719
2817
2918
3026
3118
3214
3319
3413
3515
3613
3720
3826
3941
407
4111
4215
4317
4411
4524
4623
4711
4815
4918
33.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats32
diversityRatio0.14583333333333334
totalSentences192
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences181
matches(empty)
ratio0
78.56% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount64
totalSentences181
matches
0"She pulled the collar of"
1"Her brown eyes scanned the"
2"She stepped forward, boots splashing"
3"She turned the corner, disappearing"
4"She slipped through the gap,"
5"She heard a faint clatter,"
6"It was a bone token,"
7"It was a place where"
8"She could turn back, retreat"
9"She remembered the night his"
10"She could feel the weight"
11"She could not let the"
12"She surged forward, the rain"
13"She slipped through the doorway,"
14"She felt the weight of"
15"She scanned the stalls, looking"
16"He was arranging a set"
17"She needed to find it,"
18"She turned, moving through the"
19"he screamed, his voice cracking"
ratio0.354
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount173
totalSentences181
matches
0"The neon green of The"
1"Quinn stood under the sign,"
2"The rain’s rhythm was a"
3"She pulled the collar of"
4"Her brown eyes scanned the"
5"The suspect— a woman in"
6"Quinn’s heart thudded against her"
7"Quinn muttered, her voice low,"
8"She stepped forward, boots splashing"
9"The woman glanced back, eyes"
10"She turned the corner, disappearing"
11"Quinn’s mind raced."
12"The alley was a narrow"
13"She slipped through the gap,"
14"The alley opened onto a"
15"She heard a faint clatter,"
16"The suspect was moving faster"
17"Quinn’s trained eyes caught a"
18"It was a bone token,"
19"Quinn’s breath caught."
ratio0.956
27.62% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences181
matches
0"If the suspect possessed it,"
ratio0.006
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences138
technicalSentenceCount23
matches
0"She stepped forward, boots splashing through puddles, the leather of her coat creaking with each stride."
1"She turned the corner, disappearing into an alley that smelled of stale ale and old cigarettes."
2"Quinn’s trained eyes caught a glint of something metallic on the woman’s wrist—a small, silver token that caught the light with each motion."
3"It was a bone token, the kind required for entry to the Veil Market, the underground black market that existed beneath Camden’s abandoned Tube station."
4"The Veil Market was a rumor among the precinct, a place whispered about in hushed tones, a market that moved locations every full moon, selling enchanted goods …"
5"She remembered the night his body was found, twisted in an alley, the air thick with an unexplainable chill, the shadows moving as if alive."
6"Quinn’s boots echoed, a steady thud that matched the rhythm of her heartbeat."
7"The interior was a cavernous space, the remnants of an old Tube station repurposed into a market that seemed to pulse with a low, humming energy."
8"Lanterns hung from the vaulted ceiling, casting amber light over stalls of strange artifacts: jars of glowing liquid, bundles of dried herbs that hissed when to…"
9"The market’s humming seemed to intensify, as if the walls themselves were listening."
10"Quinn’s hand brushed the wood, feeling the grain, the subtle give that hinted at a hidden mechanism."
11"She stepped into the passage, the candle’s flame dancing on the walls, casting long shadows that seemed to stretch like fingers."
12"She thought of the night her partner had disappeared, the inexplicable chill, the shadows that seemed to move on their own."
13"The woman’s hand brushed hers, a fleeting contact that sent a shiver up her arm."
14"The hidden back room’s door slammed shut behind them, the bookshelf returning to its place, sealing the secret."
15"The token pulsed under her fingertips as if alive, resonating with the dagger’s runes."
16"The market’s lights flickered, the lanterns sputtering as if the very air was shifting."
17"The hum grew louder, a low vibration that resonated in Quinn’s bones."
18"The token in her hand pulsed in sync, a rhythm that matched the market’s heartbeat."
19"She recognized the shape of her partner, DS Morris, his coat fluttering as if caught in a storm."
20"The woman collapsed beside her, tears streaming down her cheeks, clutching the broken token."
21"She could feel the weight of the night settle on her shoulders, the echo of the chase, the decision that had led her into the unknown."
22"She walked away, her boots echoing on the wet stone, the rain’s memory fading, the city’s pulse beating beneath her feet."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"Quinn muttered, her voice low, barely audible over the rain"
1"the vendor asked, his voice low, eyes darting to the shadows"
2"he screamed, his voice cracking"
3"Quinn asked, her voice steady despite the tremor in her hands"
4"the woman shouted, her voice echoing through the cavern"
5"she cried, her voice a mixture of hope and dread"
6"the woman whispered, her voice trembling"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Quinn muttered (mutter)"
1"he screamed (scream)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"the woman whispered (whisper)"
4"the woman shouted (shout)"
5"she cried (cry)"
6"the woman whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.48
leniency0.96
rawRatio0.583
effectiveRatio0.56
62.4243%