Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEXWPWPPAQ9TKKTSF9816R

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Duration:
2m 14s
Cost:
$0.281430

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Quinn's leather boots slapped against wet pavement as she pursued the figure ahead, rain streaming down her face and blurring the streetlights into amber halos. The suspect—male, approximately five-ten, dark jacket—had bolted from The Raven's Nest the moment she'd flashed her warrant card. That alone told her plenty. She pushed harder, her breath misting in the October chill. The worn leather of her watch caught on her jacket cuff as she pumped her arms, but she ignored it. Eighteen years on the force had taught her to compartmentalize discomfort. The suspect veered left down a narrow alley between two Georgian townhouses, and Quinn followed without hesitation. "Metropolitan Police! Stop where you are!" The figure didn't slow. If anything, he accelerated, vaulting over a cluster of bins with surprising agility. Quinn grimaced and took the obstacle at speed, clearing it cleanly despite the slick conditions. Military training never truly left you. They emerged onto Camden High Street, the late-night crowd of drunks and night workers scattering as the chase barreled through. Quinn's suspect—she could see him more clearly now under the shop lights, olive skin and dark curly hair—cut across traffic, causing a black cab to slam its brakes. The driver leaned on his horn and shouted something anatomically improbable. Quinn waited for a gap in the traffic, losing precious seconds. When she made it across, the suspect was already disappearing down a side street she didn't recognize. She followed, her sharp jaw set with determination. The street narrowed, Victorian brick pressing close on either side. Her quarry was pulling ahead—younger legs, familiar territory. But Quinn had persistence on her side. She'd run down suspects through Birmingham estates and Thames-side warehouses. One more wouldn't break her streak. Then the suspect did something that made her stumble. He leaped over a construction barrier and dropped through a hole in the pavement—except it wasn't a hole. As Quinn approached, she saw stone steps descending into darkness. An old Tube entrance, but wrong somehow. The metalwork was too ornate, too old. No London Underground signage, just strange symbols carved into the archway. She hesitated at the top, rain pattering on her shoulders. Every instinct screamed danger. In eighteen years of policing, she'd learned to trust her gut, and right now her gut was doing somersaults. But she thought of Morris. Three years gone, and she still didn't have answers. Just fragments—witness statements that didn't add up, evidence that vanished from lockup, and her partner's body found in a locked room with wounds no weapon could have made. The brass had buried it, called it a gang killing, case closed. But Quinn knew better. The same feeling she'd had that night prickled along her spine now. That sense of standing at the edge of something vast and hidden, something that operated by different rules. She checked her radio. Static, despite being in central London. Her mobile showed no signal. Of course. Quinn descended. The stairs were worn smooth by countless feet, but dust-free. Someone maintained this place. Emergency lighting—if that's what the pale blue glow was—cast strange shadows on the walls. The sound of rain faded above, replaced by something else. Voices. Music. The distant ring of metal on metal. Twenty steps down, the passage opened into a vast space that shouldn't exist. Quinn stopped, her brown eyes widening. The abandoned platform stretched before her, but abandoned was the wrong word. Transformed, maybe. Where tracks should have been, market stalls crowded in impossible configurations. Vendors in clothing from a dozen different eras hawked wares that hurt to look at directly. The curved ceiling, which should have shown advertising posters and tube maps, rippled with what looked like living darkness. The suspect—she could see him clearly now, the Saint Christopher medallion glinting at his throat—was moving through the crowd with practiced ease. But it wasn't just any crowd. Quinn's trained eye catalogued details that didn't fit: a woman whose shadow moved independently of her body, a man with too many joints in his fingers, a child whose eyes reflected light like a cat's. "First time, Detective?" Quinn spun, hand moving to her ASP baton. A vendor, elderly and somehow both there and not there, smiled at her from behind a stall of bottles filled with swirling mist. "I'm not—" "Oh, but you are. Can smell the law on you, can't we?" The vendor's grin widened, showing too many teeth. "Need a token to be here proper-like. Bone token. But you're chasing our Tomás, aren't you? The healer." Healer. Quinn filed that away. She kept one eye on the vendor while tracking Tomás through the crowd. He'd stopped at a stall deeper in the market, engaged in rapid conversation with someone wrapped in layers of dark fabric. "He's wanted for questioning in connection with—" The vendor cackled. "Your laws don't reach here, Detective. This is the Veil Market. Older than your Scotland Yard, older than your London above. We trade in different currencies here." Quinn's jaw tightened. She took a step toward the market proper and immediately felt resistance, like walking through thick honey. Her vision swam. "Need a token," the vendor repeated, almost kindly. "Or an invitation. Or..." They leaned forward conspiratorially. "A trade. Information, perhaps? You smell of grief, Detective Quinn. Old grief. Partner-shaped grief." The words hit like a physical blow. Quinn's hand tightened on her baton. "How do you—" "DS Morris, wasn't it? Three years, two months, sixteen days. Still dream about that room, don't you? The blood that wasn't quite blood. The wounds that weren't quite wounds." Rage and desperate hope warred in Quinn's chest. She forced her voice steady. "What do you know about Morris?" "Everything has a price at the Veil Market." The vendor produced a small bone disc from seemingly nowhere, holding it between translucent fingers. "This will let you walk freely, ask your questions. Even our Tomás can't refuse a token-holder's query. But the price..." "Name it." "One hour of your memory. Just one. I'm not greedy. The hour you realized you loved your partner. Not romantically—no, no. The hour you realized they were family." Quinn's throat constricted. That hour was precious, one of the few untainted memories she had left of Morris. They'd been working a child abduction case, forty hours straight, and Morris had shown up at her flat with Thai food and terrible coffee, refusing to let her work alone. They'd cracked the case by dawn, found the kid alive. But if this market held answers about Morris's death... "How do I know you'll keep your word?" The vendor looked genuinely offended. "The Market has rules, Detective. Older than your laws, but twice as binding. You'll get your token, your access, your chance to question the healer. I'll get my memory. Fair trade." Quinn looked across the market again. Tomás was moving, heading deeper into the impossible space. In a moment, she'd lose him entirely. And even if she came back with backup, she suspected this place wouldn't be here. The vendor had said it moved every full moon. "Fine." The word tasted like ash. "Take it." The vendor's grin widened impossibly. They reached out, fingers passing through Quinn's forehead like cold water. For a moment, she felt the memory sharpen—Morris's laughter, the smell of pad thai, the weight of exhaustion transformed into determination—and then it was gone. Not forgotten, exactly, but distant. Faded. Like looking at a photograph through frosted glass. The bone token dropped into her palm, warm as living flesh. "Welcome to the Veil Market, Detective Quinn. Mind the shadows—they bite." Quinn pushed into the crowd, the resistance gone. The token pulsed in her grip as she wove between stalls selling impossible things: bottled moonlight, maps of places that didn't exist, photographs of events that hadn't happened yet. The sensory assault was overwhelming, but she forced herself to focus. Track the target. Get answers. Get out. She found Tomás at a stall near what might have been the platform's original edge. He was examining a leather satchel while the proprietor—a woman whose age seemed to shift with each blink—watched with predatory patience. "Tomás Herrera," Quinn said, her voice carrying despite the market's cacophony. He turned slowly, no surprise on his face. Up close, she could see the scar along his left forearm, pale against olive skin. His warm brown eyes held a weariness that seemed too heavy for his twenty-nine years. "Detective Quinn." His accent carried traces of Seville. "I wondered when you'd find your way down here." "You ran from a lawful police inquiry." "I ran from questions you're not ready to hear the answers to." He touched the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat—a nervous gesture. "But you have a token. So ask." Quinn's training warred with the unreality of the situation. But she'd paid for this chance. "Three nights ago, a woman named Sarah Chen was admitted to St. Mary's with wounds consistent with ritual torture. She died within hours, but not before mentioning The Raven's Nest. And you." "I tried to save her." No deception in his voice, just regret. "She'd been touched by something from... beyond the Veil. Normal medicine couldn't help her, but I tried anyway." "Beyond the Veil?" Tomás gestured at the market around them. "This is where your world and others meet, Detective. Sometimes things cross over that shouldn't. Sometimes people like me try to help the victims. Sometimes people like you try to understand what can't be understood with warrant cards and evidence bags." "And sometimes," Quinn said carefully, "detectives die in locked rooms with impossible wounds." Tomás went very still. The market noise seemed to fade, creating a bubble of silence around them. "You're talking about DS Morris." "You know about that?" "Everyone in the shadow community knows about that. It was... unfortunate. Your partner stumbled onto something they shouldn't have. A trafficking ring moving creatures across the Veil. Morris tried to stop them alone." He paused. "I treated them, you know. After. Tried to stabilize the wounds, but it was too late. The kind of claws that made those marks—" "Claws." Quinn's voice was flat. "You have a token. You're in the Veil Market. You've already accepted that impossible things are possible, or you wouldn't be here." Tomás pulled a small journal from his jacket. "I kept notes from that night. Standard procedure when treating supernatural injuries. The police took the official records, but these..." He offered the journal. Quinn took it with hands that barely trembled. "Why help me now?" "Because the same ring that killed your partner is still operating. Sarah Chen was their latest victim—a test subject for moving humans across the Veil. And because..." He hesitated. "Because I took an oath once. First, do no harm. I couldn't save Morris, but maybe I can help you stop their killers." Quinn flipped through the journal, medical terminology mixed with words that belonged in fantasy novels. But the anatomical drawings were precise, clinical. Professional. "If I wanted to find this trafficking ring," she said slowly, "where would I start?" "You've already started." Tomás nodded toward The Raven's Nest direction. "The bar's owner, Silas Ashford. He's connected, though careful. Never directly involved, always three steps removed. But his back room... people meet there. Plans are made." "And you know this how?" "Because I patch up the survivors when plans go wrong." His hand touched the scar on his forearm unconsciously. "This was a warning, two years ago. Stop healing their victims or join them." "Yet you're still practicing." "Some oaths are harder to break than others, Detective." The market around them pulsed with activity, oblivious to their conversation. Quinn made her decision. "The token—how long does it last?" "Until sunrise or until you leave the Market, whichever comes first. But Detective..." Tomás stepped closer, lowering his voice. "Be careful how deep you dig. Your world has laws, procedures, backup. This world? It has teeth." Quinn thought of Morris, of three years of unanswered questions, of Sarah Chen dead on a hospital gurney. "I've faced teeth before." "Not like these." But he smiled slightly, sadly. "There's a gathering tomorrow night. Midnight, at the Nest. Back room. I'll be there—they need medical support for a major crossing. Could use someone watching my back." "You're offering to be an informant?" "I'm offering to help you find your partner's killers. What you do with that information..." He shrugged. "That's between you and whatever conscience guides you in the dark." A bell rang somewhere in the market—deep, resonant, wrong. Vendors began covering their wares. "Market's closing," Tomás said. "Dawn comes early below. You should go, Detective. Leave the way you came, don't look back, and whatever you do, don't accept any gifts on the way out." Quinn pocketed the journal. "Tomorrow night." "Midnight." He turned to go, then paused. "Your partner—Morris. They fought. The wounds, the pattern of injuries... they didn't go quietly. Thought you should know." Then he was gone, melting into the crowd of impossible figures packing up impossible wares. Quinn made her way back through the market, the bone token growing cold in her hand. The vendor who'd traded for her memory was gone, stall and all, as if they'd never existed. She climbed the stairs on legs that shook only slightly. The rain had stopped, leaving Camden washed clean and gleaming under streetlights that seemed pale and ordinary after the market's alien glow. Her radio crackled back to life, full of routine chatter. Her mobile showed seventeen missed calls. Quinn looked back once at the entrance. Already it was fading, solid pavement replacing ancient steps. By dawn, she suspected, there would be no sign it had ever existed. But the journal in her pocket was real. The knowledge in her head was real. And tomorrow at midnight, she had an appointment at The Raven's Nest. As she walked back to where she'd left her car, Quinn touched the place where the memory of Morris had been diminished. The sacrifice ached, but beneath the ache was something harder. Purpose. Three years she'd been searching for the truth. Now, finally, she had a thread to pull. Even if it led her into darkness with different rules and terrible teeth. Even if it cost her more memories, more certainties, more pieces of the world she thought she knew. Morris had fought. The least she could do was finish what her partner had started. Detective Harlow Quinn had built her career on evidence and procedure, on the solid ground of law and logic. But as she drove through the pre-dawn streets of London, the city looked different. Shadows seemed deeper. Lights seemed less certain. And somewhere beneath the ordinary streets, a market that shouldn't exist sold impossible things to impossible people. She'd crossed a threshold tonight, paid a price in memory for a chance at truth. There was no going back now. Only forward, into the dark.
total_cost0.28143

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
89.39% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"The word tasted like [like]"
1"Quinn said carefully [carefully]"
2"she said slowly [slowly]"
3"But he smiled slightly [slightly]"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.303
leniency0.606
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.121
84.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2512
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count2
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"slightly"
count2
5
adverb"sadly"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"slowly"
2"carefully"
3"very"
4"slightly"
5"sadly"
60.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Chen"
1"Sarah"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2512
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"streaming"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"sense of"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"practiced ease"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count2
8
word"cacophony"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"standard"
count1
11
word"trembled"
count1
12
word"gleaming"
count1
highlights
0"streaming"
1"chill"
2"familiar"
3"sense of"
4"glinting"
5"practiced ease"
6"weight"
7"pulsed"
8"cacophony"
9"silence"
10"standard"
11"trembled"
12"gleaming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences171
matches
0"t with determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences171
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences215
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2482
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions80
wordCount1690
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity1.95
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Raven3
Nest3
October1
Georgian1
Quinn33
Camden2
High1
Street1
Victorian1
Birmingham1
Thames-side1
Tube1
London3
Underground1
Morris8
Saint2
Christopher2
Healer1
Tomás9
Thai1
Seville1
Sarah1
Chen1
Harlow1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Morris"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Tomás"
5"Sarah"
6"Chen"
7"Harlow"
places
0"Raven"
1"Camden"
2"High"
3"Street"
4"Birmingham"
5"Thames-side"
6"London"
7"Seville"
globalScore0.524
windowScore0.333
88.52% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences122
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"looked like living darkness"
1"bone disc from seemingly nowhere, holding it"
2"seemed pale and ordinary after the market's alien glow"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.403
wordCount2482
matches
0"Not forgotten, exactly, but distant"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences215
matches
0"had that night"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs94
mean26.4
std18.13
cv0.687
sampleLengths
048
158
26
338
459
536
641
79
853
933
1058
1130
1217
132
1447
1513
1666
1763
183
1931
202
2138
2239
237
2430
2523
2630
2716
2829
2919
3043
312
3228
3358
349
358
3636
3746
388
3955
4011
4111
4255
4336
4411
4538
4617
477
4830
4947
97.06% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences171
matches
0"was gone"
1"was gone"
2"was gone"
3"been diminished"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs302
matches
0"was pulling"
1"was doing"
2"was examining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences215
ratio0.051
matches
0"The suspect—male, approximately five-ten, dark jacket—had bolted from The Raven's Nest the moment she'd flashed her warrant card."
1"Quinn's suspect—she could see him more clearly now under the shop lights, olive skin and dark curly hair—cut across traffic, causing a black cab to slam its brakes."
2"Her quarry was pulling ahead—younger legs, familiar territory."
3"He leaped over a construction barrier and dropped through a hole in the pavement—except it wasn't a hole."
4"Just fragments—witness statements that didn't add up, evidence that vanished from lockup, and her partner's body found in a locked room with wounds no weapon could have made."
5"Emergency lighting—if that's what the pale blue glow was—cast strange shadows on the walls."
6"The suspect—she could see him clearly now, the Saint Christopher medallion glinting at his throat—was moving through the crowd with practiced ease."
7"For a moment, she felt the memory sharpen—Morris's laughter, the smell of pad thai, the weight of exhaustion transformed into determination—and then it was gone."
8"He was examining a leather satchel while the proprietor—a woman whose age seemed to shift with each blink—watched with predatory patience."
9"\"I ran from questions you're not ready to hear the answers to.\" He touched the Saint Christopher medallion at his throat—a nervous gesture."
10"A bell rang somewhere in the market—deep, resonant, wrong."
99.73% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1712
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount69
adverbRatio0.04030373831775701
lyAdverbCount29
lyAdverbRatio0.016939252336448597
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences215
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences215
mean11.54
std8
cv0.693
sampleLengths
025
118
25
310
420
511
617
76
84
913
1015
116
1220
1328
1411
1511
1617
178
1810
198
207
2110
226
239
2418
2510
267
277
2811
2910
304
3119
325
339
3428
3512
364
3712
3818
394
406
415
422
432
4410
454
4614
4710
481
491
62.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4
totalSentences215
uniqueOpeners86
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences156
matches
0"Then the suspect did something"
1"Just fragments—witness statements that didn't"
2"Then he was gone, melting"
3"Already it was fading, solid"
4"Only forward, into the dark."
ratio0.032
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences156
matches
0"She pushed harder, her breath"
1"They emerged onto Camden High"
2"She followed, her sharp jaw"
3"Her quarry was pulling ahead—younger"
4"She'd run down suspects through"
5"He leaped over a construction"
6"She hesitated at the top,"
7"She checked her radio."
8"Her mobile showed no signal."
9"She kept one eye on"
10"He'd stopped at a stall"
11"She took a step toward"
12"Her vision swam."
13"They leaned forward conspiratorially"
14"She forced her voice steady."
15"They'd been working a child"
16"They'd cracked the case by"
17"They reached out, fingers passing"
18"She found Tomás at a"
19"He was examining a leather"
ratio0.205
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount112
totalSentences156
matches
0"Quinn's leather boots slapped against"
1"The suspect—male, approximately five-ten, dark"
2"That alone told her plenty."
3"She pushed harder, her breath"
4"The worn leather of her"
5"The suspect veered left down"
6"The figure didn't slow."
7"Quinn grimaced and took the"
8"Military training never truly left"
9"They emerged onto Camden High"
10"Quinn's suspect—she could see him"
11"The driver leaned on his"
12"Quinn waited for a gap"
13"She followed, her sharp jaw"
14"The street narrowed, Victorian brick"
15"Her quarry was pulling ahead—younger"
16"She'd run down suspects through"
17"He leaped over a construction"
18"An old Tube entrance, but"
19"The metalwork was too ornate,"
ratio0.718
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences156
matches
0"If anything, he accelerated, vaulting"
1"Now, finally, she had a"
2"Even if it led her"
3"Even if it cost her"
ratio0.026
74.36% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Just fragments—witness statements that didn't add up, evidence that vanished from lockup, and her partner's body found in a locked room with wounds no weapon co…"
1"That sense of standing at the edge of something vast and hidden, something that operated by different rules."
2"Quinn's trained eye catalogued details that didn't fit: a woman whose shadow moved independently of her body, a man with too many joints in his fingers, a child…"
3"The token pulsed in her grip as she wove between stalls selling impossible things: bottled moonlight, maps of places that didn't exist, photographs of events th…"
4"His warm brown eyes held a weariness that seemed too heavy for his twenty-nine years."
5"The rain had stopped, leaving Camden washed clean and gleaming under streetlights that seemed pale and ordinary after the market's alien glow."
6"And somewhere beneath the ordinary streets, a market that shouldn't exist sold impossible things to impossible people."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Quinn said, her voice carrying despite the market's cacophony"
1"But he smiled slightly, sadly"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the vendor repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences66
tagDensity0.076
leniency0.152
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.03
87.8544%