Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNEYZ03YN7DMQK2ZR2GDY4Z

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Duration:
1m 23s
Cost:
$0.186480

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Detective Harlow Quinn's boots hammered against the rain-slicked pavement, each stride sending up sprays of water that soaked through her trousers. The figure ahead—just a dark blur against the sodium-yellow streetlights—vaulted over a toppled rubbish bin and veered hard left into an alley. Quinn cursed, her breath coming in controlled bursts as she followed. Eighteen years on the force had kept her fit, but her quarry moved with an unsettling grace that had nothing to do with athletic training. The alley walls pressed close, brick scraping against her jacket as she squeezed through. The rain hammered harder here, channeled by the narrow space into sheets that blurred her vision. She swiped water from her eyes with the back of her hand, the leather of her watch strap rough against her face. The suspect—male, approximately six feet, wearing what looked like a long coat—was pulling away. "Metropolitan Police! Stop!" Her voice bounced off the walls, swallowed by the storm. He didn't even slow. Quinn's hand moved to her radio, then stopped. Backup would take too long, and she'd already lost too many suspects connected to the Raven's Nest investigation. Three months of surveillance, three months of watching that green neon sign blink against Soho's grimy windows, and this was her first real lead. The man had emerged from the bar's hidden back room—the one behind the bookshelf that she wasn't supposed to know about—carrying a package wrapped in oilcloth. When their eyes met through the rain-streaked window, he'd bolted. The alley spat them out onto a broader street. Camden High Street, she realized, recognizing the shuttered market stalls. The suspect darted between parked cars, his coat billowing behind him like wings. Quinn followed, her sharp jaw set with determination. A taxi honked as she sprinted across its path, the driver's curses lost in the downpour. The man suddenly veered toward a tube entrance—except this wasn't right. Quinn knew every station on this stretch, and there shouldn't be one here. The entrance gaped like a mouth in the building's facade, stairs descending into darkness. Ancient tiles spelled out "CAMDEN DEEP" in faded letters above the opening. Her suspect didn't hesitate, plunging down the steps three at a time. Quinn skidded to a stop at the entrance, rain streaming down her salt-and-pepper hair. Every instinct screamed danger. Abandoned stations weren't just closed—they were sealed. This one stood open, and from below came sounds that raised the hair on her neck: voices, too many voices, and underneath them a rhythm like drums or heartbeats. She thought of Morris. Three years ago, her partner had followed a suspect into a building that shouldn't have existed. They'd found his body two days later, cause of death listed as "undetermined." The coroner's report made no sense—cellular damage consistent with extreme age, though Morris had been thirty-four. Quinn had pushed for answers until her superiors ordered her to drop it. Now she stood at another threshold, water pooling at her feet. The smart move was to call it in, wait for backup, follow procedure. But the suspect was getting away, and with him whatever was in that oilcloth package. Evidence, maybe. Answers. Quinn descended. The temperature dropped ten degrees between the street and the platform below. Emergency lighting cast sickly green shadows across cracked tiles and rusted fixtures. But this was no abandoned station. Crowds moved through the space—people in modern clothes mixed with others wearing fashions from different eras, different worlds. A woman passed her with scales glinting on her neck. A man argued with a vendor over something that writhed in a jar. The Veil Market. She'd heard whispers of it in interrogation rooms, always dismissed as criminal folklore. A black market that moved locations, where anything could be bought or sold. The suspect was halfway across the platform now, weaving between stalls hung with things that hurt to look at directly. Quinn pushed forward, trying to process what she was seeing while keeping her target in sight. Vendors hawked their wares in languages she didn't recognize. Glass bottles filled with liquid light lined one table. Another displayed weapons that seemed to bend space around them. The crowd parted reluctantly for her passage, and she caught murmurs of "mundane" and "unmarked" in her wake. A hand caught her arm. She spun, ready to strike, but stopped short. Tomás Herrera stood before her, his Saint Christopher medallion catching the unnatural light. She recognized him from the surveillance photos—one of the Raven's Nest regulars, suspected of running some kind of underground medical practice. "Detective Quinn." His warm brown eyes were serious, concerned. "You shouldn't be here." "I'm in pursuit of a suspect." She tried to pull free, but his grip was firm. The scar on his forearm stood out pale against his olive skin. "Without a bone token? They'll know. They'll—" He glanced around, lowering his voice. "The Market has rules. You're breaking all of them just by being here." "I don't have time for this." She could still see her suspect, now examining something at a weapons stall. "Make time." Tomás stepped closer, blocking her view. "That man you're chasing—do you even know what he is? What you're walking into?" "He's a criminal who fled a crime scene." "He's a courier for the Autumn Court. And if you arrest him here, in neutral territory..." Tomás shook his head. "The last mundane officer who tried to make an arrest at the Market, they found pieces of him in seven different boroughs. Different dimensions, actually, but you wouldn't understand that." Quinn's jaw tightened. "Is that a threat?" "It's a warning. From someone who used to save lives for a living." His expression softened. "I know about your partner. Morris. I treated him once, off the books. Good man. He stumbled into something beyond his understanding, and it killed him. Don't make the same mistake." The mention of Morris hit like cold water. Quinn looked around again, really seeing this time. The impossible architecture. The non-human features barely concealed. The way reality seemed negotiable here, subject to rules she didn't know. Her suspect had completed his transaction, tucking something new into his coat. He glanced her way, and for a moment their eyes met across the impossible market. He smiled—too many teeth, all sharp—and melted into the crowd. "Go back up those stairs," Tomás said quietly. "Forget what you've seen. The Raven's Nest, the Market, all of it. There are cases you can solve, Detective. This isn't one of them." Quinn stood frozen, watching her suspect disappear. Every cop instinct demanded she pursue, arrest, interrogate. But Morris had been a good cop too, and it hadn't saved him from whatever killed him in that impossible building. "Why warn me?" she asked finally. Tomás released her arm, adjusting his medallion. "Because I've seen too many people die for crossing lines they didn't know existed. And because someone needs to keep the real monsters in check—the human ones. You do good work up there, Detective Quinn. Don't throw it away down here." The drums—or heartbeats—grew louder. The crowd was watching her now, dozens of inhuman eyes tracking her movement. Quinn felt like prey that had wandered into the wrong hunting ground. She took a step backward, toward the stairs. Then another. It went against everything she'd trained for, everything she believed about justice and law. But Morris was dead, and she was alone in a place that shouldn't exist, surrounded by things that violated every natural law she knew. "The package he took from the Nest," she said to Tomás. "What was in it?" "Nothing that concerns your world." He paused, considering. "But if it helps—nothing that will hurt anyone human. The courier serves powers that have their own justice. Brutal, but balanced." Quinn backed up another step. The Market crowd began to lose interest, returning to their impossible transactions. Her suspect was long gone, swallowed by shadows that seemed deeper than they should be. "This isn't over," she said. "No," Tomás agreed. "But for tonight, it is. Go home, Detective. There are other crimes to solve. Human crimes. Leave the rest to those equipped to handle it." Quinn climbed the stairs slowly, each step feeling like surrender. The rain still pounded Camden High Street, washing the impossible underground from her skin but not her memory. She stood in the downpour, looking back at the entrance. Already it was fading, tiles crumbling, shadows deepening. By morning, she suspected, there would be nothing here but solid wall. Her radio crackled. Dispatch calling about a body in Whitechapel. Human crime, human violence, things she could understand and fight. Quinn keyed her radio to respond, then paused, looking one last time at the fading entrance to the Veil Market. Morris had charged ahead into the impossible and died for it. Maybe backing down wasn't cowardice. Maybe it was wisdom. But as she walked back to her car, water squelching in her boots, Quinn knew this wasn't over. The Raven's Nest was still there, that green neon sign still blinking. The Market existed, even if she couldn't prove it. And somewhere in London, creatures that shouldn't exist were trading in goods that defied natural law. She'd seen it now. There was no unknowing it. The radio crackled again, more insistent. Quinn answered, giving her position, saying she'd respond to the Whitechapel scene. But even as she drove through the rain-soaked streets, her mind kept circling back to sharp-toothed smiles and impossible markets and a former paramedic who'd saved her life with a warning. Next time, she'd be better prepared. Next time, she'd understand the rules. If there was a next time. If she was that foolish. Or that brave.
total_cost0.18648

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
25.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"The crowd parted reluctantly [reluctantly]"
1"He glanced around [around]"
2"Tomás said quietly [quietly]"
3"she asked finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.552
leniency1
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.25
87.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1640
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"reluctantly"
2"really"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
87.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1640
totalAiIsms4
found
0
word"facade"
count1
1
word"streaming"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count1
3
word"charged"
count1
highlights
0"facade"
1"streaming"
2"glinting"
3"charged"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences121
matches
0"t with determination"
95.63% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences121
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences133
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1613
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
81.30% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount1310
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.37
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn18
Raven3
Nest3
Soho1
High2
Street2
Morris6
Veil2
Market4
Herrera1
Saint1
Christopher1
Tomás7
Camden2
Whitechapel2
London1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Raven"
3"Morris"
4"Market"
5"Herrera"
6"Saint"
7"Christopher"
8"Tomás"
places
0"Soho"
1"High"
2"Street"
3"Veil"
4"Camden"
5"Whitechapel"
6"London"
globalScore0.813
windowScore1
14.13% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences92
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like a long coat—was pulling away"
1"weapons that seemed to bend space around them"
2"seemed negotiable here, subject to rules she didn't know"
3"felt like prey that had wandered into t"
4"seemed deeper than they should be"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1613
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean35.07
std22.08
cv0.63
sampleLengths
079
166
213
34
486
556
662
754
862
942
102
1171
1249
1362
1447
1513
1628
1726
1819
1922
208
2150
227
2347
2436
2537
2632
2736
286
2948
3029
3148
3215
3329
3432
355
3628
3758
3840
3920
4055
419
4249
4312
4411
453
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
93.76% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs251
matches
0"was pulling"
1"was seeing"
2"was watching"
3"were trading"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences133
ratio0.075
matches
0"The figure ahead—just a dark blur against the sodium-yellow streetlights—vaulted over a toppled rubbish bin and veered hard left into an alley."
1"The suspect—male, approximately six feet, wearing what looked like a long coat—was pulling away."
2"The man had emerged from the bar's hidden back room—the one behind the bookshelf that she wasn't supposed to know about—carrying a package wrapped in oilcloth."
3"The man suddenly veered toward a tube entrance—except this wasn't right."
4"Abandoned stations weren't just closed—they were sealed."
5"They'd found his body two days later, cause of death listed as \"undetermined.\" The coroner's report made no sense—cellular damage consistent with extreme age, though Morris had been thirty-four."
6"Crowds moved through the space—people in modern clothes mixed with others wearing fashions from different eras, different worlds."
7"She recognized him from the surveillance photos—one of the Raven's Nest regulars, suspected of running some kind of underground medical practice."
8"He smiled—too many teeth, all sharp—and melted into the crowd."
9"The drums—or heartbeats—grew louder."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1334
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.03523238380809595
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.0074962518740629685
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences133
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences133
mean12.13
std7.24
cv0.597
sampleLengths
021
122
211
325
414
516
622
714
813
94
108
1118
1224
1326
1410
159
1610
1713
188
1916
2011
2113
2214
2312
2412
2514
264
277
2829
294
3016
3129
3213
3311
3413
3515
362
371
382
3912
4012
416
4218
4310
4413
453
4613
4713
4820
4916
59.40% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.40601503759398494
totalSentences133
uniqueOpeners54
86.96% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences115
matches
0"Already it was fading, tiles"
1"Maybe backing down wasn't cowardice."
2"Maybe it was wisdom."
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences115
matches
0"She swiped water from her"
1"Her voice bounced off the"
2"He didn't even slow."
3"Her suspect didn't hesitate, plunging"
4"She thought of Morris."
5"They'd found his body two"
6"She'd heard whispers of it"
7"She spun, ready to strike,"
8"She recognized him from the"
9"His warm brown eyes were"
10"She tried to pull free,"
11"He glanced around, lowering his"
12"She could still see her"
13"His expression softened"
14"Her suspect had completed his"
15"He glanced her way, and"
16"He smiled—too many teeth, all"
17"she asked finally"
18"She took a step backward,"
19"It went against everything she'd"
ratio0.226
68.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences115
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots hammered"
1"The figure ahead—just a dark"
2"Quinn cursed, her breath coming"
3"The alley walls pressed close,"
4"The rain hammered harder here,"
5"She swiped water from her"
6"The suspect—male, approximately six feet,"
7"Her voice bounced off the"
8"He didn't even slow."
9"Quinn's hand moved to her"
10"Backup would take too long,"
11"The man had emerged from"
12"The alley spat them out"
13"Camden High Street, she realized,"
14"The suspect darted between parked"
15"Quinn followed, her sharp jaw"
16"A taxi honked as she"
17"The man suddenly veered toward"
18"Quinn knew every station on"
19"The entrance gaped like a"
ratio0.783
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences115
matches
0"Now she stood at another"
1"If there was a next"
2"If she was that foolish."
ratio0.026
85.25% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences62
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"This one stood open, and from below came sounds that raised the hair on her neck: voices, too many voices, and underneath them a rhythm like drums or heartbeats…"
1"But Morris was dead, and she was alone in a place that shouldn't exist, surrounded by things that violated every natural law she knew."
2"Her suspect was long gone, swallowed by shadows that seemed deeper than they should be."
3"And somewhere in London, creatures that shouldn't exist were trading in goods that defied natural law."
4"Quinn answered, giving her position, saying she'd respond to the Whitechapel scene."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She tried, but his grip was firm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Tomás agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.172
leniency0.345
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.069
85.9827%