Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNF1XPW28528AZ26PGEDSN1

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Duration:
1m 20s
Cost:
$0.003474
Provider:
Novita

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The gate wasn't what Aurora expected. She'd imagined something grand — a sweeping archway, perhaps, or an ancient stone portal wreathed in mist like something from a storybook. Instead, there was only a break in the ring of oaks, a thinning of the woods where the bark twisted in patterns that hurt to look at directly. The air there tasted different. Sweet and sharp, like honey over copper. "Through here," Isolde said, already stepping toward the gap. Her silver hair caught the fading light of the winter afternoon, glowing faintly as if lit from within. Aurora hesitated. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her chest — a steady, warm rhythm she'd grown accustomed to over the past weeks. But here, so close to whatever lay beyond, it beat faster. Stronger. Like a second heart trying to sync with something vast. "Rory." Nyx's voice came from just behind her, that wind-whisper quality softer than usual. They had assumed solid form for the journey — a tall, shadow-dark silhouette that somehow still seemed to shift at the edges, as if the light couldn't quite decide what to do with them. "You don't have to go." "I know." Aurora took a breath. "But I need to." She stepped through. The change was immediate and total. One moment she was standing in the grey December woods of Richmond Park, the bare branches scratching at a pale sky. The next, she was somewhere else entirely. Aurora staggered, her balance reeling as her senses recalibrated. The light was wrong. It wasn't darker or brighter — it was *different*, as if the sun here burned at a slightly different temperature, casting colors she'd never seen before. The sky above was still blue, but it was a blue that seemed to breathe, to shift between hues like oil on water. "Nyx—" She turned, and stopped. They weren't there. Neither was the gap in the oaks. Aurora spun, her heart clenching, but there was only the grove now. Only this place. Behind her, the ancient standing stones rose in a rough circle — twelve oaks, gnarled and massive, their roots crawling across the mossy ground like frozen rivers. They marked a clearing perhaps fifty feet across, and the clearing was carpeted with flowers. Wildflowers, dozens of varieties, blooming in defiance of the season. Petals in deep violet and pale gold, crimson and white, all swaying gently though there was no wind. "Welcome, child of Earth." Aurora's hand flew to her belt where the Fae blade hung — Isolde's gift, cold as ice even now, its moonsilver surface dimly luminescent. She drew it without thinking, the motion smooth and instinctive. Isolde stood in the center of the clearing. She wore a gown of some fabric that seemed woven from moonlight, her silver hair unbound and reaching past her waist. Her pale lavender eyes watched Aurora with an expression that might have been amusement, or might have been something else entirely. "You're not afraid," Isolde observed. Her voice was like music played underwater — beautiful and strange and slightly wrong. "Most mortals weep. Some scream." "I'm not most mortals." Aurora kept the blade raised, though her arm trembled slightly. The cold radiating from the weapon was grounding, real. "And you're not exactly what I expected either." "No." Isolde smiled, and it was a strange thing — too wide, too many teeth, but somehow still beautiful. "I am exactly what you expected, Aurora Carter. You simply expected many things, and I am only one." "That's not confusing at all." The seer laughed — a sound like wind chimes in a storm. "You have your father's tongue. Sharp. Quick." Her smile faded slightly. "Your mother would have hated this place." Aurora's grip tightened on the blade. "You know my parents?" "I know what was written. What will be written. What might have been written, in all the paths not taken." Isolde began to walk among the flowers, her bare feet leaving no impressions in the moss. "The gift of sight is not always a blessing, child. I have seen your mother teach in a classroom full of bright young minds. I have seen her read to you at bedtime, your small hand curled in hers. I have also seen the version where she never met your father, where she lived and died in a small village in Wales, unknown and unwed, and never knew what she missed." "Stop." Aurora's voice came out harder than she intended. "I cannot lie," Isolde said simply. "I can only show you which truths to look at. Come. Walk with me. There is much to see, and less time than you think." The pendant pulsed again, and Aurora became aware of something she'd missed at first — the quality of the silence. It wasn't truly silent; there were sounds, distant and ethereal, music that wasn't music, voices that spoke in languages she didn't recognize. But there was a pressure to it, a weight, as if the air itself was listening. "How long?" she asked. "You said time moves differently here." "Minutes or days. It depends." Isolde gestured for her to follow. "On the sun. On the moon. On what you bring with you and what you leave behind." Her pale eyes flickered to the blade in Aurora's hand. "You brought steel from the Courts. That is wise. The grove is not always kind to those who come unprepared." Aurora hesitated, then sheathed the blade. The cold lingered against her hip, a reminder. She looked back once more at the ring of oaks, searching for any sign of Nyx, of the world she'd left behind. The trees stood silent, their bark gleaming with an odd luminescence now, their branches swaying in that wind she couldn't feel. "They cannot follow," Isolde said. "Not through the front. Your shadow-friend is bound to the mortal plane. They would need an invitation, and I have not given one." "They're not my friend." The words came out before Aurora could stop them. "They're... I don't know what they are." "Neither do they," Isolde said, and there was something in her voice — not pity, exactly, but something close. "That is the tragedy of the Shade, child. To exist between, belonging to neither world. Aldric wanted power. He sought to summon forces beyond the Veil, to bend them to his will. The Veil had other ideas." They walked in silence for a time, deeper into the grove. Aurora's eyes darted from detail to detail, cataloging everything. The flowers seemed to shift as they passed — not moving, exactly, but changing color, cycling through hues like a slow-motion rainbow. The air grew sweeter, thicker, almost intoxicating. She could feel it now, a hum beneath her skin, a vibration in her blood. "What is this place?" she asked finally. "You know what it is." Isolde stopped beside a pool of water so still it looked like solid silver. "You have seen the Veil. You have walked through Hel's门. You know what lies beyond." "This is the Fae Realm." "It is a *breach*. A pocket. The Fae Courts are vast beyond measure, stretching in directions your mind cannot conceive. This..." Isolde waved her hand at the clearing, the flowers, the standing stones. "This is a wound. Small. Hidden. A place where the barriers grew thin enough for someone like me to take root." "Someone like you. A half-Fae." "Exiled. Cast out. Sent to wander the mortal world until I learned the error of my ways." Isolde's smile was bitter now. "It has been three hundred years. I have not learned. I suspect I never will." The pool before them rippled, though nothing had touched it. Aurora leaned closer, curious despite herself, and saw her reflection looking back — but wrong. The girl in the silver water had bright blue eyes, yes, but there were shadows beneath them that she didn't recognize. Her features were slightly too sharp, her skin too pale. She looked like someone else. Someone older. Someone who had seen too much. "Don't look too long," Isolde warned. "The pool shows what might be. Not what will be. There is a difference." "What's the difference?" "The future can be changed. The might-be is more stubborn." The seer turned away from the pool. "Come. I have a gift for you, child of Carter. Something to help with what is coming." Aurora tore her gaze from the reflection with an effort. Her heart was beating faster now, the pendant warm against her chest, and she had the sudden, overwhelming sense that she was standing at the edge of something vast. Something that had been waiting for her a very long time. "What came you mean, what's coming?" Isolde didn't answer. She simply walked, her silver hair streaming behind her like a banner, and after a moment Aurora followed. The grove stretched on ahead, impossibly deep, impossibly wide, the ancient oaks rising like pillars in a cathedral made of living wood and patient stone. The flowers bloomed. The air hummed. And somewhere, far away, Aurora could have sworn she heard music — soft and sweet and terrible, the kind of music that made you want to dance until you forgot who you were. She thought of Nyx, waiting beyond the gap in the trees. Of her flat above Silas' bar, of the deliveries she still had to make, of the life she'd left behind. Then she thought of Evan. Of the bruises that had healed. Of the fear that never quite had. She kept walking.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Her smile faded slightly [slightly]"
1"Isolde said simply [simply]"
2"she asked finally [finally]"
3"The seer turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.458
leniency0.917
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.167
74.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1577
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count5
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
2"truly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1577
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"pulsed"
count2
1
word"whisper"
count1
2
word"clenching"
count1
3
word"trembled"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"streaming"
count1
11
word"dance"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"whisper"
2"clenching"
3"trembled"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"flickered"
7"reminder"
8"gleaming"
9"could feel"
10"streaming"
11"dance"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences94
matches
0"was bitter"
82.07% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences94
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
97.65% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen71
ratio0.008
matches
0"\"You have seen the Veil. You have walked through Hel's门. You know what lies beyond.\""
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords2
totalWords1585
ratio0.001
matches
0"different"
1"breach"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1079
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora19
Heartstone1
Pendant1
December1
Richmond1
Park1
Fae1
Isolde15
Nyx3
Evan1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Isolde"
2"Nyx"
3"Evan"
places
0"December"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
globalScore0.62
windowScore0.5
7.14% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"quite decide what to do with them"
1"blue that seemed to breathe, to shift between hues like oil on water"
2"seemed woven from moonlight, her silver hair unbound and reaching past her waist"
3"looked like solid silver"
73.82% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.262
wordCount1585
matches
0"not pity, exactly, but something close"
1"not moving, exactly, but changing color, cycling through hues like a slow-motion rain"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs49
mean32.35
std23.72
cv0.733
sampleLengths
06
162
227
344
453
510
63
734
862
95
1025
1170
124
1334
1450
1524
1631
1737
185
1930
2010
21107
229
2331
2458
2510
2658
2757
2828
2920
3056
3164
327
3334
345
3554
365
3737
3869
3920
403
4134
4250
436
4421
4564
4631
4718
483
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences94
matches
0"was carpeted"
12.73% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs178
matches
0"was standing"
1"was grounding"
2"was listening"
3"was beating was standing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences119
ratio0.126
matches
0"She'd imagined something grand — a sweeping archway, perhaps, or an ancient stone portal wreathed in mist like something from a storybook."
1"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her chest — a steady, warm rhythm she'd grown accustomed to over the past weeks."
2"They had assumed solid form for the journey — a tall, shadow-dark silhouette that somehow still seemed to shift at the edges, as if the light couldn't quite decide what to do with them."
3"It wasn't darker or brighter — it was *different*, as if the sun here burned at a slightly different temperature, casting colors she'd never seen before."
4"Behind her, the ancient standing stones rose in a rough circle — twelve oaks, gnarled and massive, their roots crawling across the mossy ground like frozen rivers."
5"Aurora's hand flew to her belt where the Fae blade hung — Isolde's gift, cold as ice even now, its moonsilver surface dimly luminescent."
6"Her voice was like music played underwater — beautiful and strange and slightly wrong."
7"\"No.\" Isolde smiled, and it was a strange thing — too wide, too many teeth, but somehow still beautiful."
8"The seer laughed — a sound like wind chimes in a storm."
9"The pendant pulsed again, and Aurora became aware of something she'd missed at first — the quality of the silence."
10"It wasn't truly silent; there were sounds, distant and ethereal, music that wasn't music, voices that spoke in languages she didn't recognize."
11"\"Neither do they,\" Isolde said, and there was something in her voice — not pity, exactly, but something close."
12"The flowers seemed to shift as they passed — not moving, exactly, but changing color, cycling through hues like a slow-motion rainbow."
13"Aurora leaned closer, curious despite herself, and saw her reflection looking back — but wrong."
14"And somewhere, far away, Aurora could have sworn she heard music — soft and sweet and terrible, the kind of music that made you want to dance until you forgot who you were."
87.13% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1084
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount59
adverbRatio0.0544280442804428
lyAdverbCount22
lyAdverbRatio0.02029520295202952
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean13.32
std10.03
cv0.753
sampleLengths
06
122
228
35
47
59
618
72
820
911
101
1110
1214
1334
145
156
164
173
186
1921
207
219
224
2326
2423
255
263
277
2812
293
3027
3115
3210
3318
344
3524
3610
378
3821
3921
405
4114
425
4314
449
458
4619
4718
485
4912
53.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.36134453781512604
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences87
matches
0"Instead, there was only a"
1"Only this place."
2"Then she thought of Evan."
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences87
matches
0"She'd imagined something grand —"
1"Her silver hair caught the"
2"They had assumed solid form"
3"She stepped through."
4"It wasn't darker or brighter"
5"She turned, and stopped"
6"They weren't there."
7"They marked a clearing perhaps"
8"She drew it without thinking,"
9"She wore a gown of"
10"Her pale lavender eyes watched"
11"Her voice was like music"
12"Her smile faded slightly"
13"It wasn't truly silent; there"
14"Her pale eyes flickered to"
15"She looked back once more"
16"They walked in silence for"
17"She could feel it now,"
18"she asked finally"
19"Her features were slightly too"
ratio0.287
34.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences87
matches
0"The gate wasn't what Aurora"
1"She'd imagined something grand —"
2"The air there tasted different."
3"Isolde said, already stepping toward"
4"Her silver hair caught the"
5"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against"
6"Nyx's voice came from just"
7"They had assumed solid form"
8"Aurora took a breath"
9"She stepped through."
10"The change was immediate and"
11"The next, she was somewhere"
12"Aurora staggered, her balance reeling"
13"The light was wrong."
14"It wasn't darker or brighter"
15"The sky above was still"
16"She turned, and stopped"
17"They weren't there."
18"Neither was the gap in"
19"Aurora spun, her heart clenching,"
ratio0.851
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"Her silver hair caught the fading light of the winter afternoon, glowing faintly as if lit from within."
1"They had assumed solid form for the journey — a tall, shadow-dark silhouette that somehow still seemed to shift at the edges, as if the light couldn't quite dec…"
2"It wasn't darker or brighter — it was *different*, as if the sun here burned at a slightly different temperature, casting colors she'd never seen before."
3"She wore a gown of some fabric that seemed woven from moonlight, her silver hair unbound and reaching past her waist."
4"Her pale lavender eyes watched Aurora with an expression that might have been amusement, or might have been something else entirely."
5"It wasn't truly silent; there were sounds, distant and ethereal, music that wasn't music, voices that spoke in languages she didn't recognize."
6"The trees stood silent, their bark gleaming with an odd luminescence now, their branches swaying in that wind she couldn't feel."
7"And somewhere, far away, Aurora could have sworn she heard music — soft and sweet and terrible, the kind of music that made you want to dance until you forgot w…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Aurora kept, though her arm trembled slightly"
1"Isolde began, her bare feet leaving no impressions in the moss"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Isolde observed (observe)"
1"Isolde warned (warn)"
dialogueSentences48
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.083
72.5072%