Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNF38WWV758M00JKDEA7H6T

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Duration:
1m 31s
Cost:
$0.003381
Provider:
Minimax

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The oak trees parted like curtains drawn by an unseen hand. Aurora stopped at the threshold, her breath catching in her throat. The path they'd been following—a barely visible track through the bracken and birch of Richmond Park—had led them here, to a gap between two ancient trunks that should not have been wide enough to admit a person. Yet somehow it was, and beyond it lay something that made her certain she'd stepped through a door into another world entirely. "You've never been here," Nyx said. Their voice drifted like smoke, barely audible, though they stood close enough that Aurora could feel the cool absence of body heat where their shoulder nearly touched hers. In the amber light of the late afternoon—which somehow filtered through the canopy in golden threads that seemed to move with their own slow purpose—the Shade appeared more substantial than usual. Their shadow-form held its shape with unusual clarity, the edges of them sharp against the impossible landscape beyond. "No." Aurora's throat was dry. She'd seen strange things since that night in Cardiff, since she'd found herself suddenly, terrifyingly aware that the world held more than she'd ever imagined. She'd walked through a portal into Dymas. She'd stood in the amber-lit halls of Hel's realm of gluttony, the Heartstone pendant burning against her chest like a second heartbeat. She'd faced things that should not exist. But this was different. This felt like the first time, all over again, that she'd truly understood how small human understanding was. "Neither have I." Nyx's violet eyes—so faint they were nearly transparent in this light—moved across the clearing beyond. "I've walked many shadows. Crossed many thresholds. But the Fae realms..." They paused, and for a moment their form flickered, shadows rippling across their features like water disturbed by a stone. "They exist slightly to the left of where they should. It's disorienting." Aurora nodded, though she wasn't sure she'd understood. She adjusted the strap of the satchel on her shoulder—light, containing only the essentials Isolde had told her to bring—and took the first step forward. The ground beneath her feet was soft, springy, as if she walked on a carpet of moss and wildflowers that should have been dead at this time of year. But the codex had mentioned that—wildflowers bloom year-round in the Grove. She looked down and saw them: tiny bluebells, not the driedks she'd expected, brown hus but vibrant and alive, their petals soft against the leather of her boots. She could smell them, too, a sweet perfume that seemed to settle at the base of her skull and linger there. The clearing opened around her in all directions, though she knew from Isolde's instructions that they needed to move toward the center. The ancient oaks stood like sentinels at the perimeter, their bark dark and gnarled, their branches reaching overhead in a canopy so dense that the golden light filtered through in scattered coins of luminescence. Between the trees, she could see the standing stones—seven of them, arranged in a rough circle, each one carved with symbols that seemed to shift and writhe at the edges of her vision. "Don't stare at the carvings too long," Nyx murmured, their whisper carrying easily across the stillness. "The Fae mark things differently. Looking too long can invite their attention." Aurora tore her gaze away, focusing instead on the path ahead. The grass was taller here, waist-high in places, and as she pushed through it, she realized that it made no sound. No rustling. No whisper of blades against stems. The silence was so complete that she could hear her own heartbeat, the soft rhythm of her own breathing, and beneath it all, something else—a humming, almost subsonic, that seemed to come from the earth itself. "Can you hear that?" she asked. Nyx tilted their head, listening. "Hear what?" "That... humming. Like a vibration, just below hearing." The Shade was quiet for a moment. Then: "I hear nothing but the silence between sounds. Perhaps it's something only the living can perceive." Aurora wasn't sure if that was comforting or unsettling. She kept walking. The standing stones grew closer, and with each step, she became more aware of the wrongness of this place—not hostile, not threatening, but simply *other*. The air smelled of honey and rain and something else, something that made her think of starlight and old promises. The temperature was mild, neither warm nor cold, as if the concept of seasons had not occurred to this place. As they reached the first of the standing stones, Aurora felt a shift. The light changed, becoming brighter but somehow softer, and she looked up to see that the canopy above had opened, revealing a sky that was not the gray-blue of an English autumn but a deep, luminous violet, streaked with colors she had no names for. "Nyx." Her voice came out hoarse. "The sky." They looked up, and for the first time since she'd known them, she saw something like surprise cross their featureless face. "I've walked in the spaces between realms," they said slowly. "I've seen the void that swallows stars. But this..." They trailed off. Aurora reached up to touch the Heartstone pendant at her chest, seeking its familiar weight. The gemstone was warm—warmer than it had ever been, pulsing with a slow, rhythmic heat that matched her heartbeat. When she'd held it near the Dymasian portal, it had burned, literally scorched her palm through the fabric of her shirt. Now it simply glowed, a gentle warmth that seemed to say: *you are close now. You are close to where you need to be.* "Isolde said the Grove would know why she sent us," Aurora said. "She said the answers would be here." "The Seer speaks in riddles," Nyx replied. "She may have meant that the Grove itself would provide the questions." Aurora wanted to argue, but as she stepped between two of the standing stones, she felt it—a tremor in the air, a ripple like heat haze over summer pavement. The world tilted, just slightly, and for a moment she was somewhere else entirely: standing in a vast hall of amber light, the scent of roasting meat and spiced wine heavy in the air, the sound of laughter and clinking glasses ringing in her ears. She saw tables stretching into infinity, laden with food that glistened and steamed, and at the head of the hall, a figure with too many eyes and a smile that promised everything and nothing— Then she was back in the Grove, gasping, her hand clenching the pendant so hard its edges bit into her palm. "Aurora." Nyx was beside her, their form solidifying, shadows wrapping around her arm like a sleeve of darkness. "What did you see?" "Dymas," she whispered. "I saw Dymas. The pendant—I think it showed me where I've been. Or where I'm going." The Shade's grip on her arm tightened—or rather, the shadows did, coalescing around her in a protective cocoon. "The Veil is thin here," Nyx said, their voice urgent, threaded with something that might have been concern. "Isolde warned us. The boundaries between realms are not stable in this place. What you saw may have been a memory, an echo—or it may have been a door." Aurora steadied her breathing, forcing her heartbeat to slow. She thought of Eva, her best friend, the one who'd pulled her out of Cardiff and into this mad new life. She thought of her mother's voice on the phone, confused and worried, asking why she'd moved to London without telling anyone. She thought of Evan's hands, and the way he'd looked at her when she finally left, and the small crescent scar on her wrist that would never fully fade. She was not going to lose herself in some Fae-tainted grove. Not now. Not when she was so close to understanding what was happening to her. "The pendant is warmer here," she said, more to herself than to Nyx. "In Dymas, it burned. But here, it's just... warm. Like it's welcoming me." "Perhaps it is." They walked on, deeper into the Grove, and the standing stones rose around them like the ribs of some vast, sleeping creature. The light shifted again, settling into a soft, silver glow that came from everywhere and nowhere, and Aurora realized that hours might have passed—or minutes—or days. Time moved differently here. She'd known that going in. But knowing and experiencing were different things, and she felt the disorientation of it settle into her bones like a chill. Ahead, the trees thinned, and a structure emerged from the undergrowth: a circle of mushrooms, each one the size of a small wagon wheel, their caps a deep, luminous blue that seemed to pulse with inner light. At the center of the circle stood a figure. Aurora's hand moved to the Fae-forged blade at her hip before she consciously decided to reach for it. The moonsilver was cold even through the leather of its sheath, a constant reminder that she carried something not of this world—a gift from a Seer who could not lie, for reasons Aurora still didn't fully understand. "Hello?" she called out. The figure turned. It was a woman, or something wearing the shape of one—tall and willowy, with silver hair that reached her waist and eyes the color of pale lavender. She wore a gown that seemed to be made of moonlight and morning mist, and when she smiled, Aurora felt the air around them grow lighter, as if some great weight had been lifted. "Aurora Carter," the woman said. Her voice was like music, like the wind through leaves, like every beautiful sound Aurora had ever heard distilled into a single utterance. "You came." "Isolde sent us," Aurora said, though she was certain this was not Isolde. This was something older, something stranger. The woman's smile widened. "I know. I've been waiting." She extended a hand, pale and slender, fingers long and elegant. "Come. There is much to show you. Much to tell you. The Grove has been patient, but even patience has its limits." Aurora looked at Nyx. The Shade's form was flickering again, shadows rippling across their features, but they nodded—a small, almost imperceptible movement. "This is why we came," Nyx said. "The answers." Aurora took a breath. Then another. Then she stepped forward, into the circle of glowing mushrooms, toward the figure who might have been a welcome or a trap, toward the secrets that waited in this place where the world bent and time forgot itself, where the Veil was a gossamer thread and anything—anything—might be waiting. She went.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
97.37% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Nyx's violet eyes—so [so]"
1"they said slowly [slowly]"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.528
leniency1
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.105
86.13% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1803
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"truly"
2"slightly"
3"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
47.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1803
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"could feel"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"comforting"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"rhythmic"
count1
9
word"warmth"
count1
10
word"clenching"
count1
11
word"echo"
count1
12
word"chill"
count1
13
word"structure"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"could feel"
1"flickered"
2"sentinels"
3"whisper"
4"silence"
5"comforting"
6"familiar"
7"weight"
8"rhythmic"
9"warmth"
10"clenching"
11"echo"
12"chill"
13"structure"
14"pulse"
15"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
23.81% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences96
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords14
totalWords1772
ratio0.008
matches
0"other"
1"you are close now. You are close to where you need to be."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount1520
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora19
Shade4
Cardiff2
Dymas1
Hel1
Heartstone2
Isolde3
Grove3
Nyx10
English1
Dymasian1
Eva1
London1
Evan1
Fae-tainted1
Fae-forged1
Seer1
Veil1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Shade"
2"Hel"
3"Isolde"
4"Nyx"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Cardiff"
3"Dymas"
4"Grove"
5"Dymasian"
6"London"
7"Fae-forged"
8"Seer"
globalScore0.875
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"threads that seemed to move with their own slow purpose—the Shade appeared more substantial than usual"
1"appeared more substantial than usual"
2"felt like the first time, all over agai"
3"perfume that seemed to settle at the base of her skull and linger there"
4"symbols that seemed to shift and writhe at the edges of her vision"
5"something like surprise cross their featurel"
6"warmth that seemed to say: *you are close now"
7"gown that seemed to be made of moonlight and morning mist, and when she smiled, Aurora felt the air around them grow lighter, as if some great weight had been lifted"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.822
wordCount1772
matches
0"not the driedks she'd expected, brown hus but vibrant"
1"not hostile, not threatening, but simply *other*"
2"not threatening, but simply *other*"
3"neither warm nor"
4"not the gray-blue of an English autumn but a deep, luminous violet, streaked with colors she had no nam"
46.55% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences111
matches
0"mentioned that—wildflowers"
1"realized that it"
2"see that the"
3"realized that hours"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean40.27
std28.93
cv0.718
sampleLengths
011
170
283
366
422
561
633
789
889
928
1076
116
127
138
1424
1512
1665
1758
188
1943
2079
2119
2219
23108
2421
2522
2619
2765
2880
2926
3026
313
3278
3346
3455
354
3664
3730
3819
3942
4022
419
4255
432
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"been lifted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs258
matches
0"was happening"
1"was flickering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount23
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences111
ratio0.153
matches
0"The path they'd been following—a barely visible track through the bracken and birch of Richmond Park—had led them here, to a gap between two ancient trunks that should not have been wide enough to admit a person."
1"In the amber light of the late afternoon—which somehow filtered through the canopy in golden threads that seemed to move with their own slow purpose—the Shade appeared more substantial than usual."
2"\"Neither have I.\" Nyx's violet eyes—so faint they were nearly transparent in this light—moved across the clearing beyond."
3"She adjusted the strap of the satchel on her shoulder—light, containing only the essentials Isolde had told her to bring—and took the first step forward."
4"But the codex had mentioned that—wildflowers bloom year-round in the Grove."
5"Between the trees, she could see the standing stones—seven of them, arranged in a rough circle, each one carved with symbols that seemed to shift and writhe at the edges of her vision."
6"The silence was so complete that she could hear her own heartbeat, the soft rhythm of her own breathing, and beneath it all, something else—a humming, almost subsonic, that seemed to come from the earth itself."
7"The standing stones grew closer, and with each step, she became more aware of the wrongness of this place—not hostile, not threatening, but simply *other*."
8"The gemstone was warm—warmer than it had ever been, pulsing with a slow, rhythmic heat that matched her heartbeat."
9"Aurora wanted to argue, but as she stepped between two of the standing stones, she felt it—a tremor in the air, a ripple like heat haze over summer pavement."
10"She saw tables stretching into infinity, laden with food that glistened and steamed, and at the head of the hall, a figure with too many eyes and a smile that promised everything and nothing—"
11"The Shade's grip on her arm tightened—or rather, the shadows did, coalescing around her in a protective cocoon."
12"The light shifted again, settling into a soft, silver glow that came from everywhere and nowhere, and Aurora realized that hours might have passed—or minutes—or days."
13"The moonsilver was cold even through the leather of its sheath, a constant reminder that she carried something not of this world—a gift from a Seer who could not lie, for reasons Aurora still didn't fully understand."
14"It was a woman, or something wearing the shape of one—tall and willowy, with silver hair that reached her waist and eyes the color of pale lavender."
15"The Shade's form was flickering again, shadows rippling across their features, but they nodded—a small, almost imperceptible movement."
16"Then she stepped forward, into the circle of glowing mushrooms, toward the figure who might have been a welcome or a trap, toward the secrets that waited in this place where the world bent and time forgot itself, where the Veil was a gossamer thread and anything—anything—might be waiting."
96.02% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1549
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount69
adverbRatio0.04454486765655261
lyAdverbCount21
lyAdverbRatio0.01355713363460297
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean15.96
std11.02
cv0.69
sampleLengths
011
111
237
322
46
528
631
718
85
925
107
1122
127
134
1418
1518
1631
1712
188
1925
2029
2111
2228
2321
2422
2534
2633
2716
2812
2911
3021
312
326
3336
346
355
362
378
387
3917
409
413
4225
4320
4420
4513
4645
476
482
4921
39.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3153153153153153
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners35
78.43% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences85
matches
0"Then she was back in"
1"Then she stepped forward, into"
ratio0.024
83.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences85
matches
0"Their voice drifted like smoke,"
1"Their shadow-form held its shape"
2"She'd seen strange things since"
3"She'd walked through a portal"
4"She'd stood in the amber-lit"
5"She'd faced things that should"
6"They paused, and for a"
7"She adjusted the strap of"
8"She looked down and saw"
9"She could smell them, too,"
10"She kept walking."
11"Her voice came out hoarse"
12"They looked up, and for"
13"they said slowly"
14"They trailed off"
15"You are close to where"
16"She saw tables stretching into"
17"She thought of Eva, her"
18"She thought of her mother's"
19"She thought of Evan's hands,"
ratio0.341
48.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences85
matches
0"The oak trees parted like"
1"Aurora stopped at the threshold,"
2"The path they'd been following—a"
3"Their voice drifted like smoke,"
4"Their shadow-form held its shape"
5"Aurora's throat was dry"
6"She'd seen strange things since"
7"She'd walked through a portal"
8"She'd stood in the amber-lit"
9"She'd faced things that should"
10"This felt like the first"
11"Nyx's violet eyes—so faint they"
12"They paused, and for a"
13"Aurora nodded, though she wasn't"
14"She adjusted the strap of"
15"The ground beneath her feet"
16"She looked down and saw"
17"She could smell them, too,"
18"The clearing opened around her"
19"The ancient oaks stood like"
ratio0.824
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Now it simply glowed, a"
ratio0.012
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"The path they'd been following—a barely visible track through the bracken and birch of Richmond Park—had led them here, to a gap between two ancient trunks that…"
1"In the amber light of the late afternoon—which somehow filtered through the canopy in golden threads that seemed to move with their own slow purpose—the Shade a…"
2"The ground beneath her feet was soft, springy, as if she walked on a carpet of moss and wildflowers that should have been dead at this time of year."
3"The air smelled of honey and rain and something else, something that made her think of starlight and old promises."
4"The temperature was mild, neither warm nor cold, as if the concept of seasons had not occurred to this place."
5"The light changed, becoming brighter but somehow softer, and she looked up to see that the canopy above had opened, revealing a sky that was not the gray-blue o…"
6"The gemstone was warm—warmer than it had ever been, pulsing with a slow, rhythmic heat that matched her heartbeat."
7"She saw tables stretching into infinity, laden with food that glistened and steamed, and at the head of the hall, a figure with too many eyes and a smile that p…"
8"Then she was back in the Grove, gasping, her hand clenching the pendant so hard its edges bit into her palm."
9"The light shifted again, settling into a soft, silver glow that came from everywhere and nowhere, and Aurora realized that hours might have passed—or minutes—or…"
10"The moonsilver was cold even through the leather of its sheath, a constant reminder that she carried something not of this world—a gift from a Seer who could no…"
11"It was a woman, or something wearing the shape of one—tall and willowy, with silver hair that reached her waist and eyes the color of pale lavender."
12"Then she stepped forward, into the circle of glowing mushrooms, toward the figure who might have been a welcome or a trap, toward the secrets that waited in thi…"
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx murmured, their whisper carrying easily across the stillness"
1"she said, more to herself than to Nyx"
94.44% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences36
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.111
71.2910%