Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNF67V8EV7W0J8RKBYM3CVQ

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Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.161805

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain hammered London's streets like a thousand tiny fists, turning the pavement into a mirror of neon and headlights. Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped through puddles as she pursued the figure ahead, her breath misting in the October chill. The suspect—a wiry man in a torn bomber jacket—vaulted over a rubbish bin and cut hard left into an alley. Quinn followed, her worn leather watch catching on the corner of a dumpster as she squeezed past. Eighteen years on the force had taught her to read the geography of a chase. This one was heading north, toward Camden. The suspect knew these streets better than she did, but Quinn had something he didn't—the stubborn fury that had driven her every day since Morris died. "Metropolitan Police! Stop where you are!" Her voice cracked like a whip through the rain, but the figure only ran faster. They burst out of the alley onto Camden High Street. Late-night revelers scattered as the suspect barreled through them, sending a kebab flying from someone's hands. Quinn dodged the cursing drunk, her military precision keeping her on course despite the obstacles. The salt-and-pepper strands plastered to her skull dripped cold water down her neck. The suspect glanced back, and in the orange streetlight, she caught a glimpse of his face—pale, terrified, with something clutched in his right hand. He darted between two market stalls shuttered for the night and disappeared down a service stairway she'd never noticed before. Quinn skidded to a stop at the top of the stairs. They descended into darkness, the kind of absolute black that seemed to swallow light. The rain couldn't reach here, but water cascaded down the steps in miniature waterfalls. She pulled out her torch, the beam cutting through the gloom to reveal crumbling Victorian brickwork and the ghost of old London Transport signage. An abandoned Tube station. Christ. She descended carefully, weapon drawn, torch held high and away from her body. The steps were slick with more than just rainwater—something viscous and foul-smelling coated the walls. At the bottom, the beam of her torch swept across an empty platform, the tracks long since removed. But there were fresh footprints in the grime, leading to a maintenance door hanging ajar. Quinn approached, every nerve singing. Through the gap, she could hear voices—dozens of them, maybe more. The air that drifted out smelled of incense and copper and something else, something that made her skin crawl the way it had three years ago, the night Morris had walked into that warehouse and never walked out. She pushed the door wider. Beyond lay a tunnel, but not the abandoned ruin she expected. Strings of lights—not electric but something that flickered like candleflame—illuminated a bustling market. Stalls lined both sides of the tunnel, their wares gleaming in the strange light. People moved between them, but Quinn's trained eye caught details that made her sharp jaw clench: hands with too many fingers, eyes that reflected light like a cat's, shadows that moved independently of their owners. The suspect was there, twenty meters ahead, pushing through the crowd. In his hand, she could now see what he carried—a white disc that might have been carved from bone. Quinn stood at the threshold, her brown eyes taking in every detail, cataloging exits, counting potential threats. This was what Morris had found, what he'd stumbled into that night. She was sure of it. The normal world—her world of evidence and procedure and rational explanation—ended at this doorway. She thought of the crime scene photos scattered across her desk, the connections she'd been tracking for months. The mysterious disappearances, the witnesses who spoke of impossible things before recanting, the evidence that simply vanished from lockup. All roads led here, to this impossible market beneath Camden. A woman at the nearest stall turned to look at her, and Quinn's hand tightened on her weapon. The woman's face was beautiful in the way a snake was beautiful—all wrong angles and too many teeth when she smiled. "First time at the Veil Market, detective?" the woman asked, her voice like honey over broken glass. "That's a brave thing, coming here without invitation." Quinn kept her expression neutral, though her pulse hammered. "I'm pursuing a suspect." "Are you now?" The woman's laugh tinkled like wind chimes made of bone. "And what makes you think your authority extends here? This is neutral ground, older than your Scotland Yard, older than your London above." The crowd was beginning to notice her. Conversations died, replaced by whispers that slithered through the air like living things. Quinn counted exits again—three visible, possibly more hidden. Too many variables. Too many unknowns. But the suspect was getting away, and with him, her only lead to whoever was behind the murders plaguing her district. The same people, she suspected, who had killed Morris. "I don't need authority," Quinn said, stepping across the threshold. "Just answers." The moment her foot touched the tunnel floor, the world shifted. The air became thick, syrupy, like breathing underwater. The lights seemed brighter and dimmer at the same time, casting shadows that bent in impossible directions. Her torch flickered and died. "Bold," the woman said, and now Quinn could see her clearly—the scales beneath her skin, the vertical pupils. "But bone tokens are required for entry. What will you trade?" Quinn's mind raced. This was insane. She should call for backup, establish a perimeter, follow procedure. But procedure hadn't helped Morris. Procedure didn't explain the impossible things she'd been seeing at crime scenes for the past three years. "Information," Quinn said, surprising herself with how steady her voice remained. "I know things about the world above. Recent things. Things that might interest... merchants." The woman's smile widened, showing far too many teeth. "Now you're learning, detective. But first, a small fee. Something precious to you. Something that marks time." Quinn's hand moved unconsciously to her left wrist, to the worn leather watch that had been her father's, that she'd worn every day for fifteen years. She understood instinctively what was being asked. The suspect was almost out of sight now, disappearing deeper into the market. Around her, creatures that shouldn't exist conducted business in languages she didn't recognize. This was the heart of it, the hidden truth Morris had died trying to expose. She unclasped the watch, feeling naked without its familiar weight. "This buys me safe passage?" "It buys you entry," the woman corrected, plucking the watch from Quinn's fingers with nails like talons. "Safety is never guaranteed in the Veil Market. But then, you're a detective. You should be used to danger." Quinn moved past her, into the impossible. The market stretched further than the tunnel should have allowed, twisting and turning like the inside of some vast creature. Stalls sold things that hurt to look at directly—bottles of liquid starlight, cages full of whispers, books that bled when opened. She pushed through crowds of the not-quite-human, following the bobbing head of her suspect. A man with bark for skin tried to sell her "memories of tomorrow," while a child with too many joints offered her a map "to find what was lost." The suspect turned down a side passage, and Quinn followed, leaving the main thoroughfare behind. Here, the lights were dimmer, the crowds thinner. She could hear his ragged breathing, smell his fear-sweat even over the market's alien scents. He stumbled, the bone token flying from his grasp to skitter across the floor. Quinn lunged forward, her hand closing around his collar just as her fingers brushed the token. The moment she touched it, images flooded her mind—Morris in this very market, following a lead about supernatural artifacts being smuggled into London. Morris asking too many questions. Morris being led to a private stall where— "Please," the suspect gasped, twisting in her grip. "I didn't mean to. They said if I brought them subjects, they'd fix me. Make me normal again." Quinn processed this, even as the token's visions continued. She saw herself from the outside, saw how she looked to the market's denizens—a woman out of place, burning with the kind of determination that could either save her or destroy her. "Who are 'they'?" she demanded. But before he could answer, a shadow fell across them both. Quinn looked up to see a figure she recognized from the token's vision—the last person Morris had spoken to before he died. The figure smiled, and the market lights dimmed in response. "Detective Quinn," the figure said, voice like grinding stone. "We've been expecting you."
total_cost0.161805

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
59.09% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Her voice cracked like [like]"
1"The woman's laugh tinkled like [like]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.182
93.11% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1451
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1451
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"electric"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"gleaming"
count1
5
word"potential"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"variables"
count1
8
word"raced"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"processed"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"gloom"
2"electric"
3"flickered"
4"gleaming"
5"potential"
6"pulse"
7"variables"
8"raced"
9"familiar"
10"weight"
11"processed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences94
matches(empty)
82.07% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences94
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences105
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1426
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.77% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1261
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.74
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London3
Harlow1
Quinn22
October1
Camden3
Morris10
High1
Street1
Victorian1
Transport1
Tube1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Morris"
places
0"London"
1"Camden"
2"High"
3"Street"
globalScore0.628
windowScore0.667
88.27% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences81
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"seemed brighter and dimmer at the same time, casting shadows that bent in impossible directions"
1"not-quite human, following the bobbing head of her suspect"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.701
wordCount1426
matches
0"not electric but something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences105
matches
0", that she'd"
89.34% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean37.53
std17.36
cv0.463
sampleLengths
060
165
221
354
444
563
65
761
854
978
1030
1148
1247
1339
1425
1513
1636
1734
1830
1912
2041
2129
2238
2325
2426
2533
2641
2715
2836
2948
3043
3138
3266
3326
3441
355
3643
3713
90.33% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences94
matches
0"been carved"
1"being asked"
2"being smuggled"
3"being led"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs229
matches
0"was heading"
1"was beginning"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount19
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences105
ratio0.152
matches
0"The suspect—a wiry man in a torn bomber jacket—vaulted over a rubbish bin and cut hard left into an alley."
1"The suspect knew these streets better than she did, but Quinn had something he didn't—the stubborn fury that had driven her every day since Morris died."
2"The suspect glanced back, and in the orange streetlight, she caught a glimpse of his face—pale, terrified, with something clutched in his right hand."
3"The steps were slick with more than just rainwater—something viscous and foul-smelling coated the walls."
4"Through the gap, she could hear voices—dozens of them, maybe more."
5"Strings of lights—not electric but something that flickered like candleflame—illuminated a bustling market."
6"In his hand, she could now see what he carried—a white disc that might have been carved from bone."
7"The normal world—her world of evidence and procedure and rational explanation—ended at this doorway."
8"The woman's face was beautiful in the way a snake was beautiful—all wrong angles and too many teeth when she smiled."
9"Quinn counted exits again—three visible, possibly more hidden."
10"\"Bold,\" the woman said, and now Quinn could see her clearly—the scales beneath her skin, the vertical pupils."
11"Stalls sold things that hurt to look at directly—bottles of liquid starlight, cages full of whispers, books that bled when opened."
12"The moment she touched it, images flooded her mind—Morris in this very market, following a lead about supernatural artifacts being smuggled into London."
13"Morris being led to a private stall where—"
14"She saw herself from the outside, saw how she looked to the market's denizens—a woman out of place, burning with the kind of determination that could either save her or destroy her."
15"Quinn looked up to see a figure she recognized from the token's vision—the last person Morris had spoken to before he died."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1286
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.029548989113530325
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.007776049766718507
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences105
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences105
mean13.58
std7.13
cv0.525
sampleLengths
020
120
220
317
415
57
626
721
810
916
1015
1113
1224
1320
1411
1514
1614
1724
184
191
2013
2115
2218
2315
245
2511
2638
275
2811
2913
3014
3135
3211
3319
3417
3512
365
3714
3818
3919
4010
4118
4221
4317
448
459
464
4713
4823
497
63.49% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.4095238095238095
totalSentences105
uniqueOpeners43
72.46% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences92
matches
0"Too many variables."
1"Too many unknowns."
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences92
matches
0"Her voice cracked like a"
1"They burst out of the"
2"He darted between two market"
3"They descended into darkness, the"
4"She pulled out her torch,"
5"She descended carefully, weapon drawn,"
6"She pushed the door wider."
7"She was sure of it."
8"She thought of the crime"
9"Her torch flickered and died."
10"She should call for backup,"
11"She understood instinctively what was"
12"She unclasped the watch, feeling"
13"She pushed through crowds of"
14"She could hear his ragged"
15"He stumbled, the bone token"
16"She saw herself from the"
ratio0.185
36.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences92
matches
0"The rain hammered London's streets"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn's boots slapped"
2"The suspect—a wiry man in"
3"Quinn followed, her worn leather"
4"This one was heading north,"
5"The suspect knew these streets"
6"Her voice cracked like a"
7"They burst out of the"
8"Quinn dodged the cursing drunk,"
9"The salt-and-pepper strands plastered to"
10"The suspect glanced back, and"
11"He darted between two market"
12"Quinn skidded to a stop"
13"They descended into darkness, the"
14"The rain couldn't reach here,"
15"She pulled out her torch,"
16"An abandoned Tube station."
17"She descended carefully, weapon drawn,"
18"The steps were slick with"
19"Quinn approached, every nerve singing."
ratio0.848
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences92
matches(empty)
ratio0
82.32% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences59
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"The suspect knew these streets better than she did, but Quinn had something he didn't—the stubborn fury that had driven her every day since Morris died."
1"Strings of lights—not electric but something that flickered like candleflame—illuminated a bustling market."
2"People moved between them, but Quinn's trained eye caught details that made her sharp jaw clench: hands with too many fingers, eyes that reflected light like a …"
3"The mysterious disappearances, the witnesses who spoke of impossible things before recanting, the evidence that simply vanished from lockup."
4"Around her, creatures that shouldn't exist conducted business in languages she didn't recognize."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
13.64% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"the woman corrected (correct)"
1"the suspect gasped (gasp)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.364
leniency0.727
rawRatio0.375
effectiveRatio0.273
79.6060%