Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNF8RGNXYYD2CH55H8DV3BD

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Duration:
2m 8s
Cost:
$0.003378
Provider:
Minimax

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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The path vanished three turns ago. Aurora pressed her palm against the rough bark of an oak that had no business being so wide, so ancient, its roots buckling the earth into ridges like frozen waves. Behind her, Nyx moved in that strange way of theirs—not quite walking, more like shadow unspooling and respooling, their form flickering between solid and smoke whenever the light changed. "You said it was just past the oak circle," Aurora said. "We've passed seven oak circles." "Eight," Nyx corrected, their voice carrying thatwind-carried quality, like the words were being whispered from somewhere far away. "You counted the one made of moonlight twice." She hadn't. She was certain she hadn't. But the grove was doing something to her sense of time, her sense of direction, and she was beginning to suspect her sense of reality too. The Heartstone Pendant lay warm against her chest—not the nervous warmth of proximity to a Hel portal, but something gentler, like the gem was responding to the magic saturating the air. They had entered Richmond Park at dusk. That had been... she checked her phone. The screen showed 6:47 PM, the same time it had shown when they'd passed through the tree line. The battery icon blinked once, twice, then stopped blinking altogether. "The clock's broken," she said. "Time moves strangely here." Nyx's violet eyes—faintly glowing, always faintly glowing—turned toward her. "It has been perhaps an hour. Perhaps a day. The Grove doesn't abide by the rules of your world." Our world, Aurora thought. But she didn't correct them. Nyx had been dead for centuries, bound to a half-existence that made them something other than human but not quite whatever dwelt in Hel. Perhaps the Fae Grove felt like home to them in a way it couldn't to her. The trees began to thin. What emerged stopped her breath. The clearing opened before them like a secret finally told, a space that shouldn't exist tucked between the ancient oaks. The standing stones rose in a perfect circle—orange-brown bark transformed into something that looked like stone but felt like living wood when she'd touched one earlier, warm beneath her fingertips, almost humming. And the flowers. God, the flowers. They grew in impossible abundance, wildflowers of every variety blooming in defiance of the late November chill. Lavender and poppy, roses that should have been dormant, bluebells that had no business being open, all carpeting the ground in layers of color that shifted as she watched—blue bleeding into purple bleeding into gold. The air smelled of honey and rain and something else, something that made her think of starlight. "Beautiful," she breathed. "Trap," Nyx said, but without conviction. They drifted closer to the nearest standing stone, their shadow-hand trailing across its surface. "The Fae make beautiful things. It is their nature." "Everything's a trap with you." "Not everything. Merely most things." Aurora stepped into the clearing, and the ground beneath her feet felt wrong. Soft, too soft, like walking on moss that breathed. With each step, the flowers seemed to part for her, then close behind her, as if the grove was remembering her path. She heard it then. Music. Or something like music. Notes that didn't belong to any instrument she knew, weaving through the air in patterns that made her think of mathematics, of geometry, of the spaces between stars. It came from everywhere and nowhere, from the flowers themselves perhaps, or from the standing stones, or from the silver sky that had replaced the London grey. The sky. She looked up and her steps slowed to a stop. It wasn't night. It wasn't day. It was something else—a perpetual soft glow that had no source, that cast no shadows, that made everything look like a memory of itself. And in that sky, something moved. Distant shapes, vast and slow, like whales through an ocean of milk. "What are those?" "Fae," Nyx said. "Or their cousins. Or their dreams. The Grove exists between worlds. What you see may be real, or may be a reflection of something real, or may be a lie so beautiful you believe it anyway." "Helpful." "I am always helpful." She walked deeper, drawn toward the center of the circle where the standing stones gathered closest. The music grew louder, or maybe it just grew more insistent, pressing against her awareness like a hand against glass. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed now, a steady rhythm that matched her heartbeat or perhaps had replaced it, she couldn't tell. And then she saw her. The woman sat on a fallen log at the center of the grove, utterly still, silver hair pooling around her like liquid mercury. She was beautiful in the way a glacier is beautiful, in the way a blade is beautiful—something to be admired from a distance, something that could kill you and look stunning doing it. Her eyes were pale lavender, and when she looked at Aurora, it felt like being seen in a way she hadn't been seen in years. Not just her body, not just her face, but everything underneath—the fear she'd carried since Evan, the guilt about leaving Cardiff, the quiet hope she didn't let herself feel. "Rory." The woman's voice was music and riddle, each word carrying three meanings. "You came." "I—" Aurora stopped. "You know my name." "I know many names. Yours is written in the stone of paths not yet taken." The woman rose, and her feet—bare, pale as birch bark—left no impressions in the soft earth. "I am Isolde. You sought me." "I need—" Aurora touched the pendant, its warmth suddenly炙热, burning. "I need to know what this is. What it means. It started pulsing after I delivered to that address in Whitechapel, and then there was the rift, and Nyx said—" "Nyx said many things." Isolde's pale eyes shifted to the Shade, and something passed between them—recognition, perhaps, or old acquaintance. "The Wardens have been busy. The Veil grows thin, and winter approaches." "The solstice," Aurora said. "It's in a few weeks." "The solstice." Isolde nodded, and her silver hair moved like water. "The Barrier weakens. Rifts open. Things slip through. You hold a piece of Dymas against your chest, child. A gift from a benefactor you have not yet met, for a journey you have not yet begun." "What journey?" But Isolde only smiled, and the smile was sad and strange and knowing. "All journeys begin with a single step into the unknown. You have taken many such steps already. Here is a truth for your trouble: the pendant will lead you to what you seek, but what you seek is not what you need. The blade will protect you from what hunts you, but it cannot protect you from yourself." "That's not—" Aurora frowned. "That's not an answer." "It is the only answer that matters." Isolde stepped closer, and her presence was overwhelming, ancient, vast—a being who had lived centuries and seen civilizations rise and fall like tides. She reached out and touched Aurora's cheek, and her fingers were cold, so cold, like holding ice. "You carry a shadow with you. Literally. They will be important. The Courts have eyes everywhere, and the Lords of Hel are hungry. Be careful what you promise, Rory Carter. Be careful what you desire. In the Grove, in Hel, in the spaces between—intention is currency, and debts come due." The clearing seemed to darken, just for a moment, the impossible silver sky pressing down. The music had stopped. The flowers stilled. Even Nyx had gone quiet, their form flickering uncertainly. Then Isolde laughed—a sound like wind chimes, like distant bells—and the warmth returned, the light returned, the wonder of the place rushing back like a held breath finally released. "But enough darkness. You came seeking answers, and I have given you what I can. The rest—" she gestured at the grove, at the impossible sky, at the standing stones humming with ancient power, "—the rest you must find yourself. That is the only way anything is ever truly learned." Aurora wanted to argue, wanted to push, wanted to demand more. But her voice caught in her throat, and the pendant pulsed once, twice, and she understood—perhaps not fully, but enough—that this was all she would get. For now. "Thank you," she said finally. Isolde tilted her head, silver hair catching light that had no source. "Thank me by surviving what comes. The Hel rifts are not random, Rory. Someone is opening them. Someone wants something from this world, and they have already begun to reach for it through the people you love." The words landed like stones in still water. "What do you mean, the people I love?" But Isolde was already fading, her form becoming translucent, transparent, until she was nothing but a shimmer in the air and a final whisper: "Watch the shadows, Rory. Trust the shadow. And beware the winter solstice—the Veil will be at its weakest, and what waits on the other side has been waiting a very long time." Then she was gone, and Aurora stood alone in the Grove with a Shade and a pulsing gem and the weight of a warning she didn't fully understand. "We should go," Nyx said quietly. "Before the Grove decides to keep you." "I thought you said it was a trap." "Everything is a trap." They drifted closer, their shoulder nearly brushing hers—an unusual gesture from the usually distant being. "But some traps are worth walking into. And some warnings are worth heeding." Aurora looked back at the clearing one last time. The flowers had begun to move again, swaying in a wind she couldn't feel. The sky pulsed with those distant shapes. And somewhere, far away, the music had started again—strange and beautiful and utterly alien. She turned toward the path that had reappeared between the trees, and she walked. The Grove let her go easily, as if it had been expecting her to leave all along. They emerged from the tree line into what should have been darkness but was instead the pale grey of a London morning, frost on the ground, her breath misting in the cold. Her phone lit up. 7:23 AM. Saturday. December 2nd. They had been inside for twelve hours. Or twelve minutes. Or no time at all. "Merry Christmas," Nyx murmured, their form solidifying as they stepped into the pale winter light. "I believe you have a dinner reservation to cancel." Aurora laughed, and the sound was strange in her ears—too light, too normal, after everything. "Yeah," she said. "I think I do." She started walking toward the city, toward whatever was coming, toward the solstice and the shadows and the warnings she didn't yet understand. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her chest, steady as a heartbeat, warm as a promise. Behind her, the trees closed ranks, and the Fae Grove vanished between one blink and the next.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
91.18% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags22
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Nyx's violet eyes—faintly [faintly]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
2"Nyx said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.431
leniency0.863
rawRatio0.136
effectiveRatio0.118
86.44% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1844
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"suddenly"
2"truly"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.33% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1844
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"sense of"
count3
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"perfect"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count4
5
word"desire"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"sense of"
1"warmth"
2"perfect"
3"chill"
4"pulsed"
5"desire"
6"whisper"
7"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences103
matches
0"was sad"
45.77% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences103
filterMatches
0"think"
1"look"
2"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
98.18% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences131
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen58
ratio0.008
matches
0"\"I need—\" Aurora touched the pendant, its warmth suddenly炙热, burning."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1817
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1309
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.07
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Nyx9
Heartstone3
Pendant3
Hel2
Richmond1
Park1
Aurora14
Fae2
Grove4
November1
London2
Evan1
Cardiff1
Isolde7
Shade2
persons
0"Nyx"
1"Aurora"
2"November"
3"Evan"
4"Isolde"
places
0"Hel"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Fae"
4"Grove"
5"London"
6"Cardiff"
7"Shade"
globalScore0.965
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"not quite walking, more like shadow unspooling and respooling, their form flickering between solid and smoke whenever the light changed"
1"not quite whatever dwelt in Hel"
2"felt like home to them in a way it coul"
3"looked like stone but felt like living wo"
4"felt like living wood when she'd touche"
5"felt like being seen in a way she hadn'"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords2.201
wordCount1817
matches
0"not the nervous warmth of proximity to a Hel portal, but something gentler, like the gem was responding to the magic"
1"Not just her body, not just her face, but everything underneath"
2"not just her face, but everything underneath"
3"not fully, but enough"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs63
mean28.84
std24.33
cv0.844
sampleLengths
06
159
216
326
464
542
65
732
849
95
105
1158
1269
133
1429
155
165
1744
184
1960
2012
2148
223
2339
241
254
2656
275
28110
2915
307
3137
3240
3332
349
3547
362
3771
388
3997
4031
4129
4250
4339
445
4549
468
478
4856
4928
95.04% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences103
matches
0"being whispered"
1"being seen"
2"been seen"
3"was gone"
48.48% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs220
matches
0"was doing was beginning"
1"was responding"
2"was remembering"
3"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences131
ratio0.122
matches
0"Behind her, Nyx moved in that strange way of theirs—not quite walking, more like shadow unspooling and respooling, their form flickering between solid and smoke whenever the light changed."
1"The Heartstone Pendant lay warm against her chest—not the nervous warmth of proximity to a Hel portal, but something gentler, like the gem was responding to the magic saturating the air."
2"\"Time moves strangely here.\" Nyx's violet eyes—faintly glowing, always faintly glowing—turned toward her."
3"The standing stones rose in a perfect circle—orange-brown bark transformed into something that looked like stone but felt like living wood when she'd touched one earlier, warm beneath her fingertips, almost humming."
4"Lavender and poppy, roses that should have been dormant, bluebells that had no business being open, all carpeting the ground in layers of color that shifted as she watched—blue bleeding into purple bleeding into gold."
5"It was something else—a perpetual soft glow that had no source, that cast no shadows, that made everything look like a memory of itself."
6"She was beautiful in the way a glacier is beautiful, in the way a blade is beautiful—something to be admired from a distance, something that could kill you and look stunning doing it."
7"Not just her body, not just her face, but everything underneath—the fear she'd carried since Evan, the guilt about leaving Cardiff, the quiet hope she didn't let herself feel."
8"\"I know many names. Yours is written in the stone of paths not yet taken.\" The woman rose, and her feet—bare, pale as birch bark—left no impressions in the soft earth."
9"\"Nyx said many things.\" Isolde's pale eyes shifted to the Shade, and something passed between them—recognition, perhaps, or old acquaintance."
10"\"It is the only answer that matters.\" Isolde stepped closer, and her presence was overwhelming, ancient, vast—a being who had lived centuries and seen civilizations rise and fall like tides."
11"Then Isolde laughed—a sound like wind chimes, like distant bells—and the warmth returned, the light returned, the wonder of the place rushing back like a held breath finally released."
12"But her voice caught in her throat, and the pendant pulsed once, twice, and she understood—perhaps not fully, but enough—that this was all she would get."
13"\"Everything is a trap.\" They drifted closer, their shoulder nearly brushing hers—an unusual gesture from the usually distant being."
14"And somewhere, far away, the music had started again—strange and beautiful and utterly alien."
15"Aurora laughed, and the sound was strange in her ears—too light, too normal, after everything."
70.53% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1318
adjectiveStacks3
stackExamples
0"lay warm against her"
1"earlier, warm beneath her"
2"insistent, pressing against her"
adverbCount70
adverbRatio0.05311077389984825
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.011380880121396054
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences131
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences131
mean13.87
std12.03
cv0.867
sampleLengths
06
130
229
311
45
518
68
72
85
926
1031
117
123
134
1418
1510
165
1713
1819
194
205
2124
2216
235
245
2520
2632
273
283
2917
3035
3117
323
336
3414
359
365
375
3813
399
4022
414
421
434
4428
4527
462
4710
483
493
45.55% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.3511450381679389
totalSentences131
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences88
matches
0"Perhaps the Fae Grove felt"
1"Then Isolde laughed—a sound like"
2"Then she was gone, and"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences88
matches
0"She was certain she hadn't."
1"They had entered Richmond Park"
2"she checked her phone."
3"Our world, Aurora thought."
4"They grew in impossible abundance,"
5"They drifted closer to the"
6"She heard it then."
7"It came from everywhere and"
8"She looked up and her"
9"It wasn't night."
10"It wasn't day."
11"It was something else—a perpetual"
12"She walked deeper, drawn toward"
13"She was beautiful in the"
14"Her eyes were pale lavender,"
15"She reached out and touched"
16"she gestured at the grove,"
17"she said finally"
18"They drifted closer, their shoulder"
19"She turned toward the path"
ratio0.273
90.68% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences88
matches
0"The path vanished three turns"
1"Aurora pressed her palm against"
2"Nyx corrected, their voice carrying"
3"She was certain she hadn't."
4"The Heartstone Pendant lay warm"
5"They had entered Richmond Park"
6"That had been..."
7"she checked her phone."
8"The screen showed 6:47 PM,"
9"The battery icon blinked once,"
10"Nyx's violet eyes—faintly glowing, always"
11"Our world, Aurora thought."
12"Nyx had been dead for"
13"The trees began to thin."
14"The clearing opened before them"
15"The standing stones rose in"
16"God, the flowers."
17"They grew in impossible abundance,"
18"Lavender and poppy, roses that"
19"The air smelled of honey"
ratio0.739
56.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Even Nyx had gone quiet,"
ratio0.011
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Aurora pressed her palm against the rough bark of an oak that had no business being so wide, so ancient, its roots buckling the earth into ridges like frozen wa…"
1"Behind her, Nyx moved in that strange way of theirs—not quite walking, more like shadow unspooling and respooling, their form flickering between solid and smoke…"
2"Nyx had been dead for centuries, bound to a half-existence that made them something other than human but not quite whatever dwelt in Hel."
3"The standing stones rose in a perfect circle—orange-brown bark transformed into something that looked like stone but felt like living wood when she'd touched on…"
4"Lavender and poppy, roses that should have been dormant, bluebells that had no business being open, all carpeting the ground in layers of color that shifted as …"
5"With each step, the flowers seemed to part for her, then close behind her, as if the grove was remembering her path."
6"It came from everywhere and nowhere, from the flowers themselves perhaps, or from the standing stones, or from the silver sky that had replaced the London grey."
7"It was something else—a perpetual soft glow that had no source, that cast no shadows, that made everything look like a memory of itself."
8"She was beautiful in the way a glacier is beautiful, in the way a blade is beautiful—something to be admired from a distance, something that could kill you and …"
9"Isolde tilted her head, silver hair catching light that had no source."
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags22
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Aurora touched, its warmth suddenly炙热, burning"
1"Isolde stepped, and her presence was overwhelming, ancient, vast—a being who had lived centuries and seen civilizations rise and fall like tides"
91.18% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Nyx corrected (correct)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
2"Nyx murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.216
leniency0.431
rawRatio0.273
effectiveRatio0.118
74.1797%