Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNFQTR3H9Y21PVYMVS6EG9F

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Duration:
1m 4s
Cost:
$0.001579
Provider:
SiliconFlow

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air in Richmond Park was thick with the promise of rain, and the scent of damp earth and crushed grass clung to Rory’s boots. Ahead, between two gnarled oaks that seemed to lean toward each other in conspiracy, stood the circle of standing stones. They weren’t stone at all, she realized as she drew closer, but ancient, petrified wood, their surfaces whorled with patterns that looked less like bark and more like frozen, silent music. “This is the place,” Isolde said, her voice a soft chime. The Half-Fae seer moved ahead of them, her silver hair a beacon in the grey afternoon. She left no imprint in the soft ground, a detail that made the back of Rory’s neck prickle. Nyx flowed beside her, their form a concentrated patch of evening in the daylight, edges shimmering like heat haze. “The boundary is… pliable here,” they whispered, the sound seeming to come from just behind Rory’s left ear. “It tastes of old magic and regret.” Rory’s fingers found the Heartstone pendant beneath her jacket. It was cool, inert. This wasn’t a Hel gate. This was something else. The Fae-Forged Blade, a weight at her hip in a borrowed sheath, felt no different either, just its perpetual, soothing cold. She took a steadying breath, the one she used before stepping into a crowded courtroom or a silent, hostile flat. Cool-headed. Think. “What do we do? Just walk through?” she asked. Isolde turned, her lavender eyes holding a light that didn’t come from the clouded sky. “You must want to see. Truly. The grove does not welcome the indifferent.” She stepped between two of the oak-stones and simply faded, as if the shadows there had drunk her in. Nyx glanced at Rory, their violet gaze unreadable. “After you, mortal.” Right. Rory squared her shoulders and walked toward the gap. For a moment, there was only the pressure of a strong wind against her face, the smell of ozone, and a dizzying sense of vertigo, as if she’d missed a step in the dark. Then she was through. The sound changed first. The distant hum of London traffic, the chatter of birds in the park—it all vanished, replaced by a profound, living silence. Not an absence of sound, but a blanket of it: the gentle sigh of moving air, the soft, liquid drip of moisture, a faint, melodic humming that seemed to come from the earth itself. Then the light. It was the golden, honeyed light of a perpetual late afternoon, but source-less. No sun, no sky as she knew it. Above was a canopy of impossible leaves in shades of copper, amethyst, and deep, heartwood green, filtering the glow. The air was warm and carried a fragrance that made her head spin—jasmine, ripe peach, damp moss, and something spicy, like cinnamon and starlight. “Oh,” Rory breathed, the word swallowed by the grove. They stood in a clearing carpeted with moss so vibrant and green it looked soft as velvet. Wildflowers bloomed in reckless, perfect profusion: bell-shaped blossoms of indigo, star-shaped flowers that glittered with dewdrops, and curling vines heavy with fat, golden berries. The standing stones formed a perfect circle behind them, but looking back, the park was gone. Through the arches, she saw only more of the grove, stretching away in confusing, beautiful perspectives. Nyx solidified fully beside her, their shadow-form gaining strange definition in the magical light. They held up a hand, examining it. “The shadows here are not shadows,” they murmured. “They are… memories of light. It is disconcerting.” Isolde was waiting a few paces away, standing by a pool of water so clear it seemed not to be there at all, just a hole in the world filled with the reflection of the glowing canopy. “Time rests lightly here,” she said. “An hour may be a minute in your London. Or a day. The grove decides what you need.” Rory moved forward, her boots sinking silently into the moss. She reached out and touched the petal of a nearby flower. It was cool and faintly resilient, like polished silk. “It’s real.” “More real than the world you left, in some ways,” Isolde said. “This is a place of essence. Of truth. That is why liars and hollow men wither if they stay too long.” A shiver that had nothing to do with temperature traced Rory’s spine. She thought of Evan, his charming smiles that never reached his eyes. He would have hated it here. Curiosity, her old, relentless companion, pushed the unease aside. She walked toward the pool. Kneeling at its edge, she saw her own reflection—her straight black hair, her bright blue eyes wide with wonder. Then the image rippled and changed. For a heartbeat, she saw herself older, wearier, a scar on her cheek that wasn’t there, holding the Fae blade aloft against a sky the colour of burnt amber. She jerked back, falling onto the moss. “The waters show not what is, but what may be,” Isolde said, not unkindly. “Fragments. Possibilities. Do not be anchored by them.” Nyx had drifted to the edge of the clearing, where the trees grew denser. “There are paths,” they observed. “They shift when I look at them.” Rory stood, brushing off her jeans. She approached Nyx, and together they peered into the woodland. Indeed, what looked like a clear path between two silver-barked trees seemed to curve away the moment she tried to focus on its destination. Another, overhung with weeping vines of sapphire flowers, appeared to her left. “The grove leads you where it wills,” Isolde said, joining them. “You sought knowledge. Understanding of the Veil that you have brushed against. So look.” Rory forced herself to be still, to stop trying to *solve* the grove like a puzzle. She just listened. She felt the cool weight of the blade, saw the way the unnatural light played over Nyx’s form, making the shadows they were made of seem deeper and more profound. She thought of the Heartstone’s warm pulse in the presence of Hel’s energy, a sensation absent here. This was a different kind of magic. Older. Less about consumption, like Dymas, and more about… being. “This is a tear,” she said slowly, working it out. “But not a torn one. A… woven one. A place where the Veil was made to be thin on purpose.” Isolde’s lips curved in the faintest smile. “The mortal sees. The Veil is not a wall. It is a tapestry. In some places, the weave is tight and strong. In others, worn. In others still, threads from different realms were deliberately knotted together. This grove is such a knot.” As she spoke, a soft light began to emanate from the Fae-Forged Blade at Rory’s hip. She drew it, and the slender moonsilver dagger glowed with a gentle, moonlike radiance. The vines near her trembled, and the sapphire flowers turned their faces toward the light. “It remembers its home,” Nyx whispered, a note of longing in their wind-voice. A new path suddenly clarified before them, not shifting away. It led to a small, natural archway formed from the intertwined branches of two trees. Through it, Rory could see a smaller clearing where a single, colossal flower grew, its petals closed tight like a fist of opal and pearl. “The grove offers a gift,” Isolde said. “Or a test. They are often the same.” Rory sheathed the blade, its glow fading. She looked at Nyx, who gave a slight, shadowy nod. Together, with Isolde gliding behind, they walked the offered path. The air grew sweeter, heavier. The melodic humming grew louder, resolving into something almost like a wordless song. The opal flower was the size of a armchair, rooted in a patch of pure white crystal. As they approached, it began to unfurl, each petal moving with a soft, crystalline sound. In its centre, on a cushion of shimmering pollen, rested a single, perfect acorn, carved from what looked like solid moonlight. “A seed of a World Tree,” Isolde breathed, true awe in her voice for the first time. “A memory of a time before the Veil was fully woven.” Rory felt no desire to take it. It felt too vast, too sacred. This wasn’t a trinket or a tool. It was a piece of a world. “Why show us this?” she asked. “Because you carry a blade that can cut wards, and walk with a spirit born of a torn Veil,” Isolde said. “The grove shows you what was lost, so you may understand the fragility of what remains. The Veil weakens where it is not remembered. It fails where it is not respected.” The opal flower slowly began to close again, hiding the luminous acorn from sight. The path behind them was still there, leading back to the standing stones. The audience, it seemed, was over. The wonder of the place was now underpinned by a deep, resonant unease. The beauty was not for them. It was a reminder. A lesson etched in living light and shadow. As they walked back through the arch of trees, Rory felt the grove’s attention lift from her, like the sun moving behind a cloud. The silence felt less like peace and more like a held breath. They passed the vision-pool, now showing only the reflection of the leaves. They reached the circle of petrified oaks. “Time,” Nyx said suddenly, their voice taut. “How long?” Isolde stepped through the boundary first. “Come and see.” Rory followed, the transition less dizzying this time, a slipping from a dream back into a familiar, if greyer, reality. The cold, damp air of the park hit her like a slap. The sky was still overcast, the light the same flat grey as when they’d entered. Nyx coalesced beside her, a tense column of darkness. Rory fumbled for her phone. The lock screen showed the time. Only twenty minutes had passed. She let out a long, shaky breath that misted in the chill air. But when she looked down, she saw it. Clutched in her left hand, pressed so hard the impression was etched into her skin, was not the luminous acorn. It was a single, perfect petal from the opal flower, now the colour of dull pearl, its edges faintly glowing. She had no memory of picking it up. The grove had given its gift after all. Or its marker. She tucked the petal into her inner pocket, next to the cool, silent Heartstone. The wonder and the unease were now hers to carry, out here where time moved in only one direction, and the Veil was just a faint, forgotten shimmer in the air.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.44% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said slowly [slowly]"
1"Nyx said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.529
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
80.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"deliberately"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"truly"
1"lightly"
2"slowly"
3"deliberately"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.79% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1790
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"beacon"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"unreadable"
count1
3
word"sense of"
count1
4
word"profound"
count2
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count4
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"pulse"
count1
11
word"tapestry"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"resolving"
count1
14
word"crystal"
count1
15
word"crystalline"
count1
16
word"desire"
count1
17
word"reminder"
count1
18
word"etched"
count2
19
word"familiar"
count1
20
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"beacon"
1"weight"
2"unreadable"
3"sense of"
4"profound"
5"silence"
6"velvet"
7"perfect"
8"silk"
9"traced"
10"pulse"
11"tapestry"
12"trembled"
13"resolving"
14"crystal"
15"crystalline"
16"desire"
17"reminder"
18"etched"
19"familiar"
20"chill"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences125
matches
0"e with wonder"
51.43% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences125
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"appeared to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences141
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1776
ratio0.001
matches
0"solve"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1458
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.23
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory18
Half-Fae1
Heartstone3
Hel2
Fae-Forged2
Blade2
Isolde12
Nyx10
London1
Evan1
Fae4
Dymas1
Veil1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Hel"
3"Blade"
4"Isolde"
5"Nyx"
6"Evan"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae-Forged"
3"London"
4"Fae"
globalScore0.883
windowScore0.833
46.91% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences97
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"oaks that seemed to lean toward each other in conspiracy, stood the circle of standing stones"
1"humming that seemed to come from the earth itself"
2"looked like a clear path between two silv"
3"looked like solid moonlight"
87.39% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.126
wordCount1776
matches
0"Not an absence of sound, but a blanket of it: the gentle sigh of moving air, the soft, li"
1"not what is, but what may be,” Isolde said, not unkindly"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences141
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean40.36
std20.68
cv0.512
sampleLengths
076
145
244
365
49
547
611
748
859
967
109
1173
1237
1361
1432
1533
1630
1775
1822
1926
2052
2125
2283
2330
2449
2545
2613
2750
2815
2945
3053
3128
3227
336
3452
3533
3667
3719
389
399
4047
4138
4256
4356
96.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences125
matches
0"was gone"
1"were made"
2"was etched"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs246
matches
0"was waiting"
82.07% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences141
ratio0.021
matches
0"The distant hum of London traffic, the chatter of birds in the park—it all vanished, replaced by a profound, living silence."
1"The air was warm and carried a fragrance that made her head spin—jasmine, ripe peach, damp moss, and something spicy, like cinnamon and starlight."
2"Kneeling at its edge, she saw her own reflection—her straight black hair, her bright blue eyes wide with wonder."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1472
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount50
adverbRatio0.033967391304347824
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.010190217391304348
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences141
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences141
mean12.6
std8.22
cv0.653
sampleLengths
025
120
231
311
416
518
619
718
87
99
104
115
124
1321
1420
151
161
179
1815
1932
208
213
221
239
2434
254
264
2721
2834
293
3013
318
3219
3324
349
3517
3624
3716
3816
3914
407
418
428
4337
446
4518
4610
4711
489
492
46.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3404255319148936
totalSentences141
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences112
matches
0"Then she was through."
1"Then the light."
2"Then the image rippled and"
3"Indeed, what looked like a"
4"Only twenty minutes had passed."
ratio0.045
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences112
matches
0"They weren’t stone at all,"
1"She left no imprint in"
2"they whispered, the sound seeming"
3"It was cool, inert."
4"She took a steadying breath,"
5"She stepped between two of"
6"It was the golden, honeyed"
7"They stood in a clearing"
8"They held up a hand,"
9"She reached out and touched"
10"It was cool and faintly"
11"She thought of Evan, his"
12"He would have hated it"
13"She walked toward the pool."
14"She jerked back, falling onto"
15"She approached Nyx, and together"
16"She just listened."
17"She felt the cool weight"
18"She thought of the Heartstone’s"
19"she said slowly, working it"
ratio0.286
58.21% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount90
totalSentences112
matches
0"The air in Richmond Park"
1"They weren’t stone at all,"
2"Isolde said, her voice a"
3"The Half-Fae seer moved ahead"
4"She left no imprint in"
5"Nyx flowed beside her, their"
6"they whispered, the sound seeming"
7"Rory’s fingers found the Heartstone"
8"It was cool, inert."
9"This wasn’t a Hel gate."
10"This was something else."
11"The Fae-Forged Blade, a weight"
12"She took a steadying breath,"
13"Isolde turned, her lavender eyes"
14"She stepped between two of"
15"Nyx glanced at Rory, their"
16"Rory squared her shoulders and"
17"The sound changed first."
18"The distant hum of London"
19"It was the golden, honeyed"
ratio0.804
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences112
matches(empty)
ratio0
35.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences60
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"Ahead, between two gnarled oaks that seemed to lean toward each other in conspiracy, stood the circle of standing stones."
1"They weren’t stone at all, she realized as she drew closer, but ancient, petrified wood, their surfaces whorled with patterns that looked less like bark and mor…"
2"She left no imprint in the soft ground, a detail that made the back of Rory’s neck prickle."
3"Isolde turned, her lavender eyes holding a light that didn’t come from the clouded sky."
4"For a moment, there was only the pressure of a strong wind against her face, the smell of ozone, and a dizzying sense of vertigo, as if she’d missed a step in t…"
5"Not an absence of sound, but a blanket of it: the gentle sigh of moving air, the soft, liquid drip of moisture, a faint, melodic humming that seemed to come fro…"
6"The air was warm and carried a fragrance that made her head spin—jasmine, ripe peach, damp moss, and something spicy, like cinnamon and starlight."
7"Wildflowers bloomed in reckless, perfect profusion: bell-shaped blossoms of indigo, star-shaped flowers that glittered with dewdrops, and curling vines heavy wi…"
8"For a heartbeat, she saw herself older, wearier, a scar on her cheek that wasn’t there, holding the Fae blade aloft against a sky the colour of burnt amber."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde said, her voice a soft chime"
1"She stepped, as if the shadows there had drunk her in"
2"Rory breathed, the word swallowed by the grove"
3"Isolde said, not unkindly"
4"Nyx whispered, a note of longing in their wind-voice"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2"they murmured (murmur)"
3"they observed (observe)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
5"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.353
effectiveRatio0.353
76.1557%