Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNFWYPE2JZ6ST7AZ8DF6FH5

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37.2s
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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The rain had a way of making London feel like a dying city, the kind of place where the sky itself was bleeding out over the streets. Detective Harlow Quinn didn't mind the weather. Eighteen years on the force had taught her that the worst things happened on nights like this — when the rain drowned out the sounds that might have warned you, when the streetlights turned to smears of gold through a windshield and the city became a place of shadows and wet pavement and the hard, bright syntax of a blue light barrelling through a红灯. She was doing ninety down Camden Road, hands tight on the wheel, the dashboard lights casting blue shadows across her face. The suspect's car — a black Mercedes, registration logged six hours ago when a woman named Celina Voss had walked into a betting shop in Brockley and left without placing a single bet — had turned north off the main road and into the warren of narrow streets behind the market. Quinn had seen her face in the driver's seat. Late thirties. Blond hair. A scar through her left eyebrow. She matched the description from the Marsh Street incident, the one the informant had called "the Viper" — though Quinn had learned long ago that the people she pursued didn't use names like that for themselves. Those were names the world gave to the things it didn't understand. The Mercedes took a hard left into a service road and Quinn followed, tires screaming against the wet tarmac. The road ended at a chain-link fence surrounding what looked like an abandoned lot — old railway arches, a rusted gate, the kind of place that appeared on no map and attracted no attention from the council. But Quinn had been a detective long enough to know that the places which appeared on no map were often the ones that mattered most. She pulled up twenty metres from the fence and killed the engine. The rain hammered the roof of her car like a thousand small fists. Through the windshield, she could see the Mercedes parked diagonally across the entrance to the arches, driver's door hanging open. No sign of the driver. Quinn reached for the glove compartment and retrieved her service weapon — a Glock 19, the grip worn smooth by years of her own grip — and checked the magazine by touch, the way she'd done ten thousand times since her first year in the Metropolitan Police. Fourteen rounds. She slid out of the car and into the rain. The water soaked through her wool coat in seconds. She didn't care. She moved forward in a low crouch, weapon raised, crossing the wet gravel with steps she'd learned in the Royal Marines before she'd transferred to the Met — weight on the balls of the feet, breath steady, eyes sweeping the dark. The arches led into the old Camden Town tube station. She'd read the files. Everyone who'd worked the East End long enough had heard whispers about it, the Veil Market, the underground bazaar that appeared and disappeared like a fever dream. But she'd never believed — not fully — not until three years ago, not until Morris. She stopped at the entrance to the first arch. The darkness beyond was total, the kind of dark that didn't exist in a city — a dark with weight and texture, the sort that pressed against your eyes. Somewhere inside, she could hear water dripping. The echo was wrong, too vast, as though the tunnel opened into a space far larger than any underground station had a right to be. Quinn pulled a small torch from her coat pocket and clicked it on. The beam cut into the dark and found brick — old London stock, crumbling, the walls slick with moisture. The tunnel sloped downward at a gentle angle. At the bottom, perhaps forty metres ahead, she could see a faint green glow. She moved forward. The tunnel opened into a cavern — there was no other word for it. The old ticket hall had been expanded somehow, the walls pushed back, the ceiling lost in shadow. And it was alive with light and sound and people. Stalls lined the perimeter, their canopies draped in dark velvet, their surfaces covered with objects Quinn couldn't immediately identify — glass vials, books with no titles, bone combs, silver mirrors that seemed to fog and clear on their own. Torches burned with flames that were the wrong color — blue, green, pale violet — and the air smelled of something sharp and herbal, like burning rosemary and copper pennies. The Veil Market. Quinn kept her weapon low, hidden against her thigh, and moved along the edge of the crowd. These were not ordinary people. She could see it in the way they moved, the way their shadows fell at angles that didn't match their bodies, the way a woman at a fruit stall turned to look at her and her eyes were black all the way through, no iris, no white, just a void that swallowed light. Quinn looked away. She'd seen things like this before. She knew how to survive them. She scanned the crowd for the blond woman, the scar, the face she'd memorized from the database. Near the back of the market, past a stall selling what appeared to be preserved hands in jars, she caught a flash of movement. The woman was moving fast, heading for a narrow passage between two stalls, her face tight with the look of someone who knew these tunnels, who had used them before. Quinn pushed through the crowd. A man with too many joints in his fingers stepped into her path and she shouldered him aside, not slowing, not breaking eye contact with the blond woman. The passage was dark and the woman was fast, but Quinn was faster — she ran track in the academy and she ran now, her shoes slapping against the wet stone, her breath sharp in her chest. The passage opened into a smaller chamber. The blond woman had stopped at the far end, near a door of dark wood bound with iron. She was holding something — a small white object, oblong, smooth. She pressed it to the door and the wood shimmered, and Quinn understood with a jolt that it was a bone token, the key to whatever lay beyond, and she didn't have one. The woman looked back at her. For a moment their eyes met. The blond woman's expression wasn't fear. It was something worse. It was pity. Then the door opened and she was gone. Quinn stood in the chamber, rain dripping from her coat onto the stone floor, the weapon heavy in her hand. The door was closing. Beyond it, she could see only darkness — and the faintest sound of music, something old and stringed and played at a tempo that didn't exist in any modern composition. She didn't know what was on the other side of that door. She didn't know what laws governed this place, what powers moved through its tunnels, what had killed Morris three years ago in a warehouse in Poplar when she'd heard him scream her name over the radio and arrived to find nothing but a scorch mark on the concrete and his watch — her watch, the worn leather one she'd given him as a joke years ago — lying in a puddle of water that hadn't come from any pipe. She didn't know, and every instinct she'd honed over eighteen years was screaming at her to turn around, to climb back up to the surface, to file the report and go home and drink a bottle of whisky and pretend this city was the kind of place that made sense. But Morris had died reaching for something. And she had spent three years since then reaching for the same thing — the truth, the explanation, the thing behind the curtain that everyone else had learned to stop looking at. She couldn't stop now. She wouldn't. Harlow Quinn holstered her weapon, stepped forward, and pressed her palm to the dark wood. The door didn't open. She tried again, pushing, feeling the grain of the ancient timber against her skin. Nothing. The green light of the market behind her seemed to pulse, and she became aware — suddenly, viscerally — that she was alone in a chamber with a door that would not open for her, surrounded by things she did not understand, in a place that did not exist on any map, with no way in and no guarantee of a way out. The rain continued to fall somewhere above her, in the world she'd known for forty-one years, the world of rank and procedure and the certain, brutal logic of the law. She listened to it. It sounded very far away. Then the door to her left — a different door, one she hadn't noticed, set into the wall at an angle that seemed to defy geometry — swung open. A man stood in the threshold. He was olive-skinned, dark-haired, with warm brown eyes and a scar running along his left forearm that looked like it had been made by something more shaped like a claw than a blade. Around his neck hung a medallion on a silver chain, a small figure she couldn't quite make out in the low light. He looked at her with an expression of weary recognition, as though she were a problem he'd been expecting. "You're Metropolitan Police," he said. It wasn't a question. "Detective Harlow Quinn." Her voice was steady. She'd learned to make it steady even when her heart was a fist hammering against her ribs. The man sighed. "You followed someone in here. Someone with a bone token." "How do you know that?" "Because they always follow someone in here. And they never have a token of their own." He tilted his head, studying her. "How much do you know about what happens in this place, Detective?" "I know enough to be here." He laughed — a short, dry sound, no humor in it. "No. You don't know enough. Nobody does, until it's too late." He touched the medallion at his chest. "My name is Tomás Herrera. I used to work for the NHS. Now I work for the people who can't go to hospital. And right now, you're standing in a market that exists between the world you know and the world you don't, and the door that woman went through leads to a chamber where a very old and very dangerous woman is waiting for exactly the kind of person you are." "What kind of person is that?" "The curious kind. The kind that doesn't stop." Quinn held his gaze. "The woman I'm chasing. Voss. She's involved with the clique. The one running the fentanyl shipments through the East End." Tomás's expression shifted. Something flickered behind his eyes — surprise, maybe, or the recognition of a bigger problem than the one he'd expected. "The Viper," he said quietly. "She doesn't work for the clique, Detective. She is the clique. And the woman she's meeting now — the one behind the door — she doesn't sell fentanyl. She sells the kind of things that make people need fentanyl. Things that eat you from the inside and leave you wanting more." He paused. "You can still go back. I can show you the exit. You can file your report, go home, pretend tonight was a mistake." "Is it?" "No. It's the night you've been building toward since your partner died." The words landed like a slap. Quinn felt them in her chest, in the place where she'd kept Morris's absence for three years, a wound that hadn't healed because she wouldn't let it, because healing meant forgetting and she couldn't forget the sound of his voice saying her name over the radio, couldn't forget the scorch mark, couldn't forget the watch. "Show me the door," she said. Tomás looked at her for a long moment. Then he reached into his coat and produced a bone token — small, white, smooth, identical to the one the blond woman had pressed to the dark wood. "I can't guarantee you'll come back out," he said. "But I can guarantee that if you don't go through that door, you'll spend the rest of your life wondering what you missed. And I've seen that look before. On the faces of people in this city who never got the answers they needed." He held the token out to her. "It's your choice, Detective." The rain drummed above. The torchlight from the market flickered. Somewhere beyond the dark wood, the old music played on. Quinn took the token. It was warm in her hand, as though it had been sitting in the sun, though no sun had touched this place in what might have been decades. She pressed it to the door.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.409
leniency0.818
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.091
90.66% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2141
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count3
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2141
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"eyebrow"
count1
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"scanned"
count1
5
word"database"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"flickered"
count2
highlights
0"eyebrow"
1"weight"
2"echo"
3"velvet"
4"scanned"
5"database"
6"shimmered"
7"pulse"
8"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences114
matches(empty)
55.14% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences114
filterMatches
0"feel"
1"watch — watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"appeared to"
97.97% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences126
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen77
ratio0.008
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had taught her that the worst things happened on nights like this — when the rain drowned out the sounds that might have warned you, when the streetligh…"
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2168
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions53
wordCount1844
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity0.98
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
London2
Harlow2
Quinn18
Camden2
Road1
Mercedes3
Celina1
Voss1
Brockley1
Marsh1
Street1
Glock1
Metropolitan1
Police1
Royal1
Marines1
Met1
Town1
East1
End1
Veil2
Market2
Morris4
Poplar1
Tomás2
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Mercedes"
3"Celina"
4"Voss"
5"Market"
6"Morris"
7"Tomás"
places
0"London"
1"Camden"
2"Road"
3"Brockley"
4"Marsh"
5"Street"
6"Metropolitan"
7"Royal"
8"Met"
9"Town"
10"East"
11"End"
12"Poplar"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
28.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences82
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like an abandoned lot — old railwa"
1"angle that seemed to defy geometry — swung open"
2"looked like it had been made by something"
3"quite make out in the low light"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2168
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences126
matches
0"know that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs48
mean45.17
std35.9
cv0.795
sampleLengths
098
1139
281
350
459
5110
670
754
83
9110
103
1190
1271
1370
1469
1525
168
1754
1891
1950
2045
2115
224
2378
2439
2590
2619
279
2824
2913
305
3134
326
33101
346
358
3624
3723
3881
392
4012
4161
426
4336
4464
4520
4632
476
96.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences114
matches
0"been expanded"
1"was gone"
2"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs288
matches
0"was bleeding"
1"was doing"
2"was holding"
3"was screaming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount29
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences22
totalSentences126
ratio0.175
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had taught her that the worst things happened on nights like this — when the rain drowned out the sounds that might have warned you, when the streetlights turned to smears of gold through a windshield and the city became a place of shadows and wet pavement and the hard, bright syntax of a blue light barrelling through a红灯."
1"The suspect's car — a black Mercedes, registration logged six hours ago when a woman named Celina Voss had walked into a betting shop in Brockley and left without placing a single bet — had turned north off the main road and into the warren of narrow streets behind the market."
2"She matched the description from the Marsh Street incident, the one the informant had called \"the Viper\" — though Quinn had learned long ago that the people she pursued didn't use names like that for themselves."
3"The road ended at a chain-link fence surrounding what looked like an abandoned lot — old railway arches, a rusted gate, the kind of place that appeared on no map and attracted no attention from the council."
4"Quinn reached for the glove compartment and retrieved her service weapon — a Glock 19, the grip worn smooth by years of her own grip — and checked the magazine by touch, the way she'd done ten thousand times since her first year in the Metropolitan Police."
5"She moved forward in a low crouch, weapon raised, crossing the wet gravel with steps she'd learned in the Royal Marines before she'd transferred to the Met — weight on the balls of the feet, breath steady, eyes sweeping the dark."
6"But she'd never believed — not fully — not until three years ago, not until Morris."
7"The darkness beyond was total, the kind of dark that didn't exist in a city — a dark with weight and texture, the sort that pressed against your eyes."
8"The beam cut into the dark and found brick — old London stock, crumbling, the walls slick with moisture."
9"The tunnel opened into a cavern — there was no other word for it."
10"Stalls lined the perimeter, their canopies draped in dark velvet, their surfaces covered with objects Quinn couldn't immediately identify — glass vials, books with no titles, bone combs, silver mirrors that seemed to fog and clear on their own."
11"Torches burned with flames that were the wrong color — blue, green, pale violet — and the air smelled of something sharp and herbal, like burning rosemary and copper pennies."
12"The passage was dark and the woman was fast, but Quinn was faster — she ran track in the academy and she ran now, her shoes slapping against the wet stone, her breath sharp in her chest."
13"She was holding something — a small white object, oblong, smooth."
14"Beyond it, she could see only darkness — and the faintest sound of music, something old and stringed and played at a tempo that didn't exist in any modern composition."
15"She didn't know what laws governed this place, what powers moved through its tunnels, what had killed Morris three years ago in a warehouse in Poplar when she'd heard him scream her name over the radio and arrived to find nothing but a scorch mark on the concrete and his watch — her watch, the worn leather one she'd given him as a joke years ago — lying in a puddle of water that hadn't come from any pipe."
16"And she had spent three years since then reaching for the same thing — the truth, the explanation, the thing behind the curtain that everyone else had learned to stop looking at."
17"The green light of the market behind her seemed to pulse, and she became aware — suddenly, viscerally — that she was alone in a chamber with a door that would not open for her, surrounded by things she did not understand, in a place that did not exist on any map, with no way in and no guarantee of a way out."
18"Then the door to her left — a different door, one she hadn't noticed, set into the wall at an angle that seemed to defy geometry — swung open."
19"He laughed — a short, dry sound, no humor in it."
20"Something flickered behind his eyes — surprise, maybe, or the recognition of a bigger problem than the one he'd expected."
21"Then he reached into his coat and produced a bone token — small, white, smooth, identical to the one the blond woman had pressed to the dark wood."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1820
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"blue, green, pale violet —"
adverbCount39
adverbRatio0.02142857142857143
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0038461538461538464
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences126
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences126
mean17.21
std16.21
cv0.942
sampleLengths
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17
264
321
451
59
62
72
86
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1012
1119
1237
1325
1412
1513
1620
175
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192
2010
219
223
2341
2410
254
2627
2716
289
2929
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3125
3213
3319
348
3514
363
3714
3817
3910
4039
4130
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4317
445
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476
486
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39.68% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.30952380952380953
totalSentences126
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences105
matches
0"Somewhere inside, she could hear"
1"Then the door opened and"
2"Then the door to her"
3"Then he reached into his"
4"Somewhere beyond the dark wood,"
ratio0.048
82.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences105
matches
0"She was doing ninety down"
1"She matched the description from"
2"She pulled up twenty metres"
3"She slid out of the"
4"She didn't care."
5"She moved forward in a"
6"She'd read the files."
7"She stopped at the entrance"
8"She moved forward."
9"She could see it in"
10"She'd seen things like this"
11"She knew how to survive"
12"She scanned the crowd for"
13"She was holding something —"
14"She pressed it to the"
15"It was something worse."
16"It was pity."
17"She didn't know what was"
18"She didn't know what laws"
19"She didn't know, and every"
ratio0.343
45.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences105
matches
0"The rain had a way"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn didn't mind"
2"She was doing ninety down"
3"The suspect's car — a"
4"Quinn had seen her face"
5"A scar through her left"
6"She matched the description from"
7"Those were names the world"
8"The Mercedes took a hard"
9"The road ended at a"
10"She pulled up twenty metres"
11"The rain hammered the roof"
12"Quinn reached for the glove"
13"She slid out of the"
14"The water soaked through her"
15"She didn't care."
16"She moved forward in a"
17"The arches led into the"
18"She'd read the files."
19"Everyone who'd worked the East"
ratio0.829
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Eighteen years on the force had taught her that the worst things happened on nights like this — when the rain drowned out the sounds that might have warned you,…"
1"The road ended at a chain-link fence surrounding what looked like an abandoned lot — old railway arches, a rusted gate, the kind of place that appeared on no ma…"
2"Everyone who'd worked the East End long enough had heard whispers about it, the Veil Market, the underground bazaar that appeared and disappeared like a fever d…"
3"The echo was wrong, too vast, as though the tunnel opened into a space far larger than any underground station had a right to be."
4"Torches burned with flames that were the wrong color — blue, green, pale violet — and the air smelled of something sharp and herbal, like burning rosemary and c…"
5"The woman was moving fast, heading for a narrow passage between two stalls, her face tight with the look of someone who knew these tunnels, who had used them be…"
6"Beyond it, she could see only darkness — and the faintest sound of music, something old and stringed and played at a tempo that didn't exist in any modern compo…"
7"She didn't know what laws governed this place, what powers moved through its tunnels, what had killed Morris three years ago in a warehouse in Poplar when she'd…"
8"She didn't know, and every instinct she'd honed over eighteen years was screaming at her to turn around, to climb back up to the surface, to file the report and…"
9"The green light of the market behind her seemed to pulse, and she became aware — suddenly, viscerally — that she was alone in a chamber with a door that would n…"
10"He was olive-skinned, dark-haired, with warm brown eyes and a scar running along his left forearm that looked like it had been made by something more shaped lik…"
11"He looked at her with an expression of weary recognition, as though she were a problem he'd been expecting."
12"Quinn felt them in her chest, in the place where she'd kept Morris's absence for three years, a wound that hadn't healed because she wouldn't let it, because he…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
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uselessAdditionCount0
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100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
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