Run: 2026-02-17-01KHNFXK12JXBFMR73M7KD8FYB

Run Details

Model:: DeepSeek V3 (2025-03-24)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 40.2s
Cost:: $0.001544
Provider:: AtlasCloud

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
97.37%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
70.56%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
21.49%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
100.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
58.88%	Name drop frequency	(details)
60.71%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
88.60%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
72.22%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
55.56%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
43.33%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
23.81%	Technical jargon density	(details)
13.89%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
44.74%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
71.7055%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The Heartstone pendant pulsed against Rory's collarbone like a second heartbeat as she stepped through the standing stones. The oak monoliths towered around them, their bark black with age and carved with spiraling sigils that throbbed with a sickly light. A shiver ran down her spine—part fear, part exhilaration—as the air thickened with the scent of honeysuckle and wet earth.

"Don't look back," Isolde murmured from ahead, her silver hair shifting like liquid moonlight in the grove's strange glow. "The stones remember those who hesitate."

Behind Rory, Nyx's presence hummed like static electricity. Their shadow-form flickered at the edges, the violet glow of their eyes the only constant in their shifting silhouette. "How far to the center?" Nyx's whisper curled around Rory's ears like smoke.

Isolde moved silently across the moss. Not a blade of grass bent beneath her feet. "Time is—" she tilted her head "—fluid here. Faster or slower, as the grove wills it."

Rory's left wrist itched where her crescent scar sat. She rubbed at it absently as they followed Isolde between the tree trunks—if they could be called that. These trees grew twisted, their bark glistening with something like sap that caught the dim light and fractured it into rainbows. When Rory reached out to touch one, the surface yielded like skin under her fingertips. She yanked her hand back just as the tree shuddered, a low groan resonating through its trunk.

Nyx materialized at her shoulder. "Everything here lives. Breathes. Best not to disturb it unless you mean to."

Ahead, the canopy opened suddenly, revealing a clearing dotted with flowers that shouldn't have existed—blossoms the color of fresh bruises, petals edged in silver, stamen that glowed faintly blue. In the center stood a pool so still it could have been glass, its surface reflecting not the sky above but constellations Rory didn't recognize.  

Isolde knelt at the pool's edge. "Here." She traced a finger along the water's surface, ripples spreading in patterns that seemed deliberate. The reflection shifted—stars rearranging themselves into what might have been a face. "The visions come when they choose. Not before."

Rory crouched beside her, the Fae-forged blade cold against her thigh even through the fabric of her jeans. The pool smelled of ozone and something sweetly metallic, like blood mixed with nectar. Her pendant pulsed faster now, the crimson gemstone almost luminescent. 

Nyx drifted to the far side of the pool, their form less distinct here, shadows bleeding into the grove's dim light. "Do you feel it? The heartbeat under everything?"

Rory opened her mouth to answer, but the water surged before she could speak. 

The surface erupted, not with water but with images—a feast hall draped in amber silks, tables groaning under platters of fruit that gleamed like jewels, goblets overflowing with wine the color of fresh blood. Figures moved through the vision—some human, others not, their features too sharp, teeth too white. And at the head of the table, a being with skin like polished onyx, his grin stretching impossibly wide as he bit into something that screamed.

"Dymas," Isolde whispered. "The feasting halls of Prince Belphegor."

The vision twisted—showing now a marketplace where stalls sold cuts of meat Rory didn't recognize, skinned creatures hanging from hooks, their scales still iridescent in death. A chef with too many arms pressed a steaming pastry into a customer's hands, the filling oozing something dark that dripped onto the cobblestones and hissed.

Rory's stomach lurched. The pendant burned against her skin now. She fumbled for it, fingers closing around the gemstone just as the vision dissolved, the water going still again.

Nyx was at her side in an instant, their cool shadow-hand gripping her wrist. "The stone reacted to the vision. It's tied to that place." Their violet eyes flickered toward Isolde. "Who gave this to her?"

The seer's lavender gaze remained fixed on the pool. "Many things have happened without my knowing. The threads tangle." She reached out, plucked a flower from the bank—the petals blackening and curling instantly in her palm. "The Veil weakens at the solstice. Things slip through."

A wind Rory couldn't feel stirred the trees around them, their groans deepening into words she almost understood. The shadows between the trunks thickened, shifting with intent. Nyx tensed beside her, their form going razor-edged. "Something watches."

Isolde rose gracefully. "We've been here too long. The grove grows restless." She started toward the path, silver hair streaming behind her like a banner. 

Rory hesitated, her eyes drawn back to the pool. For a second, her reflection didn't match—the woman in the water wore a crown of bone, her eyes twin pits of darkness—before it righted itself. She swallowed hard and turned away, following Isolde's retreating form.

The walk back felt shorter, the trees pressing closer, their branches twitching overhead. Once, Rory could have sworn something brushed her ankle—something cool and slick that retreated too quickly when she startled.

When the standing stones came into view again, their carvings pulsed faster, the light harsh now, almost aggressive. 

"Step through quickly," Isolde commanded, her voice ringing oddly in the charged air. "Don't pause between."

Nyx went first, dissolving into smoke that poured through the gap between stones. Isolde motioned for Rory to follow. The moment her foot crossed the threshold, the pendant went ice-cold against her skin, the gemstone flaring crimson bright enough to paint the stones in bloody light. 

Behind her, the grove exhaled—a sigh that carried the faintest laughter. 

Then silence. 

Richmond Park spread before them, ordinary under a pale afternoon sun. Nyx reformed beside her, their edges solidifying slowly. Rory pressed a hand to her chest—the pendant quiet now, inert as any ordinary stone.  

Isolde studied her with those unsettling lavender eyes. "You carry pieces of places that shouldn't mix. Be careful where you step, Aurora Carter." 

Rory thought of the feast hall, of the thing with onyx skin and too many teeth. The Fae blade at her side hummed, ever so slightly, as if in answer.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

97.37%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Nyx's whisper curled around [around]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.474

leniency

0.947

rawRatio

0.111

effectiveRatio

0.105

70.56%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1019

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"suddenly"
count	1

adverb	"sweetly"
count	1

adverb	"quickly"
count	2

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

adverb	"ever so slightly"
count	1

highlights

0	"suddenly"
1	"sweetly"
2	"quickly"
3	"slowly"
4	"ever so slightly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

21.49%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1019

totalAiIsms

found

word	"pulsed"
count	3

word	"throbbed"
count	1

word	"down her spine"
count	1

word	"flickered"
count	2

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"glistening"
count	1

word	"fractured"
count	1

word	"traced"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"lurched"
count	1

word	"streaming"
count	1

word	"charged"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	1

highlights

0	"pulsed"
1	"throbbed"
2	"down her spine"
3	"flickered"
4	"whisper"
5	"glistening"
6	"fractured"
7	"traced"
8	"stomach"
9	"lurched"
10	"streaming"
11	"charged"
12	"silence"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"shiver down spine"
count	1

highlights

0	"A shiver ran down her spine"

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	62
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"started to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	72
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	35
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	999
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	3
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

58.88%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

878

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.82

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Heartstone	1
Rory	16
Nyx	8
Isolde	11
Fae-forged	1
Park	1
Fae	2

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Nyx"
2	"Isolde"

places

"Park"

globalScore

0.589

windowScore

0.833

60.71%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"something like sap that caught the dim light"
1	"seemed deliberate"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

2.002

wordCount

999

matches

0	"not the sky above but constellations Rory didn't recognize"
1	"not with water but with images"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	72
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.45

std

18.11

0.526

sampleLengths

0	60
1	25
2	40
3	31
4	80
5	18
6	54
7	42
8	42
9	29
10	14
11	75
12	9
13	52
14	29
15	36
16	45
17	37
18	25
19	44
20	32
21	18
22	16
23	46
24	11
25	2
26	34
27	23
28	30

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	62
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount	0
totalVerbs	149
matches	(empty)

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.167

matches

0	"A shiver ran down her spine—part fear, part exhilaration—as the air thickened with the scent of honeysuckle and wet earth."
1	"She rubbed at it absently as they followed Isolde between the tree trunks—if they could be called that."
2	"Ahead, the canopy opened suddenly, revealing a clearing dotted with flowers that shouldn't have existed—blossoms the color of fresh bruises, petals edged in silver, stamen that glowed faintly blue."
3	"The reflection shifted—stars rearranging themselves into what might have been a face."
4	"The surface erupted, not with water but with images—a feast hall draped in amber silks, tables groaning under platters of fruit that gleamed like jewels, goblets overflowing with wine the color of fresh blood."
5	"Figures moved through the vision—some human, others not, their features too sharp, teeth too white."
6	"The vision twisted—showing now a marketplace where stalls sold cuts of meat Rory didn't recognize, skinned creatures hanging from hooks, their scales still iridescent in death."
7	"\"Many things have happened without my knowing. The threads tangle.\" She reached out, plucked a flower from the bank—the petals blackening and curling instantly in her palm."
8	"For a second, her reflection didn't match—the woman in the water wore a crown of bone, her eyes twin pits of darkness—before it righted itself."
9	"Once, Rory could have sworn something brushed her ankle—something cool and slick that retreated too quickly when she startled."
10	"Behind her, the grove exhaled—a sigh that carried the faintest laughter."
11	"Rory pressed a hand to her chest—the pendant quiet now, inert as any ordinary stone."

88.60%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

888

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"ice-cold against her"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.04617117117117117

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.015765765765765764

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	72
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.88

std

7.3

0.526

sampleLengths

0	18
1	22
2	20
3	19
4	6
5	8
6	19
7	13
8	6
9	9
10	16
11	9
12	18
13	21
14	15
15	17
16	5
17	13
18	29
19	25
20	6
21	16
22	12
23	8
24	18
25	14
26	10
27	21
28	8
29	14
30	34
31	15
32	26
33	3
34	6
35	26
36	26
37	3
38	7
39	19
40	14
41	17
42	5
43	9
44	27
45	9
46	18
47	9
48	8
49	2

72.22%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.4583333333333333
totalSentences	72
uniqueOpeners	33

55.56%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Once, Rory could have sworn"

ratio

0.017

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Their shadow-form flickered at the"
1	"she tilted her head \"—fluid"
2	"She rubbed at it absently"
3	"She yanked her hand back"
4	"She traced a finger along"
5	"Her pendant pulsed faster now,"
6	"She fumbled for it, fingers"
7	"Their violet eyes flickered toward"
8	"She reached out, plucked a"
9	"She started toward the path,"
10	"She swallowed hard and turned"

ratio

0.183

43.33%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The Heartstone pendant pulsed against"
1	"The oak monoliths towered around"
2	"A shiver ran down her"
3	"Isolde murmured from ahead, her"
4	"Their shadow-form flickered at the"
5	"Nyx's whisper curled around Rory's"
6	"Isolde moved silently across the"
7	"she tilted her head \"—fluid"
8	"Rory's left wrist itched where"
9	"She rubbed at it absently"
10	"These trees grew twisted, their"
11	"She yanked her hand back"
12	"Nyx materialized at her shoulder."
13	"Isolde knelt at the pool's"
14	"She traced a finger along"
15	"The reflection shifted—stars rearranging themselves"
16	"Rory crouched beside her, the"
17	"The pool smelled of ozone"
18	"Her pendant pulsed faster now,"
19	"Nyx drifted to the far"

ratio

0.833

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	60
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

23.81%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The oak monoliths towered around them, their bark black with age and carved with spiraling sigils that throbbed with a sickly light."
1	"These trees grew twisted, their bark glistening with something like sap that caught the dim light and fractured it into rainbows."
2	"Ahead, the canopy opened suddenly, revealing a clearing dotted with flowers that shouldn't have existed—blossoms the color of fresh bruises, petals edged in sil…"
3	"The surface erupted, not with water but with images—a feast hall draped in amber silks, tables groaning under platters of fruit that gleamed like jewels, goblet…"
4	"And at the head of the table, a being with skin like polished onyx, his grin stretching impossibly wide as he bit into something that screamed."
5	"The walk back felt shorter, the trees pressing closer, their branches twitching overhead."

13.89%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"She traced, ripples spreading in patterns that seemed deliberate"
1	"Isolde commanded, her voice ringing oddly in the charged air"

44.74%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1	"Isolde whispered (whisper)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.105

leniency

0.211

rawRatio

effectiveRatio

0.211

71.7055%