Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSYYZFVCE98HJKQ8NMCGMW9

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Duration:
28.8s
Cost:
$0.022097
Provider:
Cohere

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The familiar sound of the deadbolts unlatching should have offered a sense of comfort, but something felt amiss. Ptolemy's usual running leaps into my arms as I walked in were noticeably absent. My stomach dropped as I pushed the door open, knowing full well that Eva wasn't one for surprises. The scent of ink and parchment, characteristic of her paper-filled flat, hit me as the door creaked open. Sunlight sliced through the room, illuminating the stacks of books like stalagmites, reaching dangerously close to the ceiling. But something was off—an acute absence of clutter in one corner of the room. A particular stack of boxes, once piled high with miscellaneous enchantment artefacts, was gone. "Hello?" My voice cracked slightly as I called out. What had I walked into? Ptolemy finally strolled into view from the kitchen, nonchalantly cleaning his paws, oblivious to the tension thickening in the air. He did not even flinch at the off-key tone of the bells above the door. Their intrusive jingling was a definite sign that a visitor had come and gone. Ignoring the sinking feeling in my gut, I approached the kitchen area, where the feline was gently pawing a sock towards his food bowl in an attempt to cover the fresh food smell. A quick glance confirmed Eva's absence; her cherry-coloured silk robe was missing from its usual hook. I spotted a note wedged under a cracked teacup on the counter. With a flick of the wrist, I flipped the cup, revealing a single page torn from a notebook, the faintest scent of lavender and vanilla clinging to the creases. '"Aurora," my eyes skimmed, "blackmailer is at it again. Can you—"' I stopped mid-sentence, my mouth dry. Those words could only mean one thing. "No, no, no, no!" I repeated in my head, crumpling the note in anger. I hurled the scrunched-up paper across the room, sending Ptolemy scampering under the table, frightened. How could she be so reckless? I thought it was settled—that both Eva and I had moved on. A loud crash from outside jolted me from my thoughts. Unsheathing the short sword tucked under my shirt, I crouched, ready to defend against a possible intruder. But as my eyes adjusted, I spotted an all-too-familiar figure glancing sheepishly through the open window. His dark brow arched in amusement as he noticed my sword drawn. "Hey, no need for fancy hardware. Just me." Lucien grinned, his heterochromatic gaze unwavering. "Didn't mean to scare the cat—or the living daylights out of you, apparently." He held up his hands to show he was unarmed—no cane, no grimoires; nothing but the pure audacity of letting himself into the flat unannounced. "The door, the locks, is this how you treat all your unwanted guests?" I demanded, now with added frustration. "Ah, the door, well that was my first thought. But I've been standing out there for seven minutes, and I'd imagine your neighbours are pretty uptight about burglars." Lucien waltzed in, his strides purposeful, his platinum hair tied back neatly in a low ponytail. "Seven minutes?" I exclaimed. "How could you know?" Did this mean he'd been observing me? My pulse quickened at the thought. "Well, let's just say I've learned the art of patience in recent times." He lowered his voice, his expression turning serious. "It's essential when waiting for an answer from someone whose mind is as impenetrable as yours." "Look, I'm sorry, but I don't have time for your theatrics today." My eyes darted, ensuring nothing vital had been disturbed. His sly grin taunted my unease. If he knew about my recent 'activities', what else did he suspect? As if he could hear my thoughts, Lucien chuckled. "Fret not, Ms. Carter. I'm not here to pry into your sneaky midnight escapades." He took a step closer, his tone relaxed but still echoing with authority. "But someone is already sniffing around. Someone who, let's say, has an insatiable thirst for certain secrets you've been harbouring." My pulse quickened again at this sobering revelation. "Who is it? What exactly do they know?" A part of me hoped it wasn't him—that sly smile and enigmatic glint could conceal any truth. "Careful, Aurora. The paranoia doesn't suit you." Lucien's expression softened, a hint of familiarity creeping into his voice. "But I sense your instincts are, as usual, spot on. As for who, we'll find out in due time. I'm here to offer a guiding hand—if you'll have it." He waved his hand, a grand gesture bordering on mockery. My mind whirled. Trusting him would be a precarious choice. Yet, here he was, offering an olive branch. One I couldn't decline, especially if it meant easing Eva's troubles and keeping the blackmailer at bay. After all, Lucien Moreau was not just any ally. In London's supernatural underworld, he was the trusted informer, the fixer for hire, who spoke four tongues with fluid eloquence. Sighing, I sheathed my blade and took the bait. "Alright, Mr Moreau. I presume you have a plan?"
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"My voice cracked slightly [slightly]"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.889
leniency1
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.063
88.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount846
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
5.44% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount846
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"sense of"
count1
2
word"amiss"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
4
word"tension"
count1
5
word"silk"
count1
6
word"unwavering"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"quickened"
count2
9
word"ensuring"
count1
10
word"echoing"
count1
11
word"enigmatic"
count1
12
word"glint"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"sense of"
2"amiss"
3"stomach"
4"tension"
5"silk"
6"unwavering"
7"pulse"
8"quickened"
9"ensuring"
10"echoing"
11"enigmatic"
12"glint"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences51
matches
0"e in anger"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences51
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences54
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords833
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"As if he could hear my thoughts, Lucien chuckled."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount618
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.81
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva4
Ptolemy3
Lucien5
Did1
Moreau1
London1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount833
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences54
matches
0"settled—that both"
97.30% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs20
mean41.65
std20.43
cv0.491
sampleLengths
050
164
214
349
490
511
613
747
855
952
1019
1144
1221
1337
1439
1556
1633
1757
1864
1918
84.62% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences51
matches
0"was gone"
1"was settled"
2"been disturbed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs115
matches
0"was, offering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences54
ratio0.093
matches
0"But something was off—an acute absence of clutter in one corner of the room."
1"A quick glance confirmed Eva's absence; her cherry-coloured silk robe was missing from its usual hook."
2"I thought it was settled—that both Eva and I had moved on."
3"\"Didn't mean to scare the cat—or the living daylights out of you, apparently.\" He held up his hands to show he was unarmed—no cane, no grimoires; nothing but the pure audacity of letting himself into the flat unannounced."
4"\"Who is it? What exactly do they know?\" A part of me hoped it wasn't him—that sly smile and enigmatic glint could conceal any truth."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount563
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.03019538188277087
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.019538188277087035
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences54
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences54
mean15.43
std8.73
cv0.566
sampleLengths
018
114
218
318
418
514
614
79
85
920
1015
1114
1233
1316
1412
1529
1611
176
187
1914
2015
216
2212
2310
2417
2516
2612
2714
2838
2919
3044
314
3211
336
3421
3516
3621
376
3812
399
4027
4120
428
4325
4418
4539
463
477
488
4917
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.7037037037037037
totalSentences54
uniqueOpeners38
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
ratio0
52.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences50
matches
0"My stomach dropped as I"
1"My voice cracked slightly as"
2"He did not even flinch"
3"Their intrusive jingling was a"
4"I spotted a note wedged"
5"my eyes skimmed"
6"I stopped mid-sentence, my mouth"
7"I repeated in my head,"
8"I hurled the scrunched-up paper"
9"I thought it was settled—that"
10"His dark brow arched in"
11"He held up his hands"
12"I demanded, now with added"
13"My pulse quickened at the"
14"He lowered his voice, his"
15"My eyes darted, ensuring nothing"
16"His sly grin taunted my"
17"He took a step closer,"
18"My pulse quickened again at"
19"He waved his hand, a"
ratio0.42
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount34
totalSentences50
matches
0"The familiar sound of the"
1"Ptolemy's usual running leaps into"
2"My stomach dropped as I"
3"The scent of ink and"
4"Sunlight sliced through the room,"
5"A particular stack of boxes,"
6"My voice cracked slightly as"
7"Ptolemy finally strolled into view"
8"He did not even flinch"
9"Their intrusive jingling was a"
10"A quick glance confirmed Eva's"
11"I spotted a note wedged"
12"my eyes skimmed"
13"I stopped mid-sentence, my mouth"
14"Those words could only mean"
15"I repeated in my head,"
16"I hurled the scrunched-up paper"
17"I thought it was settled—that"
18"A loud crash from outside"
19"His dark brow arched in"
ratio0.68
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences50
matches
0"If he knew about my"
1"As if he could hear"
2"Yet, here he was, offering"
ratio0.06
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"In London's supernatural underworld, he was the trusted informer, the fixer for hire, who spoke four tongues with fluid eloquence."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"Lucien grinned, his heterochromatic gaze unwavering"
1"He lowered, his expression turning serious"
2"Lucien's expression softened, a hint of familiarity creeping into his voice"
3"He waved, a grand gesture bordering on mockery"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"I repeated (repeat)"
1"I demanded (demand)"
2"I exclaimed (exclaim)"
dialogueSentences18
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.333
80.9179%