Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSYYZFZTAZCF8ZHFP70JGS2

Run Details

Duration:
3m 2s
Cost:
$0.002521
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The third deadbolt slid back with a clunk that echoed through the quiet flat. Rory pulled the door open, a half-formed excuse for her tardiness ready on her lips—she’d forgotten the tamarind paste Eva wanted, had to loop back to the Empress—but the words dissolved into the damp Brick Lane air. Lucien Moreau stood on the narrow landing, the amber light from the curry house sign below painting one side of his face in garish neon. He leaned on his ivory-handled cane, his other hand tucked into the pocket of a charcoal overcoat tailored to sharp perfection. Rain glistened on the shoulders of the wool, caught like tiny diamonds in the slicked-back platinum of his hair. His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black as a starless sky—fixed on her, and for a beat, neither moved. "Rory," he said. His voice was the same: low, unhurried, accented in a way that suggested Marseille by way of several other, darker places. She hadn't seen him in four months. Not since the night at the warehouse by the docks, the smell of ozone and burnt herbs, his hand on her arm pulling her back from a precipice she hadn't even seen. He'd looked at her with something like fury, something like fear, and told her to stay away from him. To forget his face. She’d called him a coward. The last thing she’d heard was the sharp, retreating tap of his cane on wet cobblestones. Now he was here. At Eva's door. Unannounced. "Aurora?" Eva's voice floated from the kitchen, accompanied by the hiss of a kettle. "Did you get the—" Rory stepped aside, her movement wooden. She kept her grip on the doorframe. "Come in." Lucien crossed the threshold. He brought the damp chill of the evening with him, along with the faint, clean scent of sandalwood and something metallic, like a storm on iron rails. He paused just inside, his gaze sweeping the cramped space—the towers of books threatening to topple from every surface, the scrolls cascading over the arm of the sofa, the tabby cat Ptolemy blinking at him from a nest of ancient-looking maps on the floor. Eva appeared in the kitchen doorway, a chipped mug in one hand. She froze, her eyes widening behind her glasses. "Lucien." "Eva." He inclined his head, a gesture both polite and utterly detached. "My apologies for the intrusion." "You're not intruding." Eva’s voice had gone tight, professional. She set the mug down on a stack of journals. "Is this business?" "It is." His eyes flicked back to Rory. She hadn't moved from the door. "And it isn't." "Right." Eva looked between them, her mouth pressing into a thin line. She scooped up Ptolemy, who offered a half-hearted mrrp of protest. "I'll just... take Ptolemy for his evening constitutional. The alleys are lovely this time of night." "Eva—" Rory started. "He needs the air!" Eva called over her shoulder, already shrugging into her coat by the door. "Don't wait up!" The door clicked shut behind her. The sudden silence in the flat was dense, suffocating. The hiss of the kettle had stopped. From the street below, the muffured laughter of late-night diners spilled up, a wave of normalcy that broke against the quiet between them. Lucien set his cane against the arm of the sofa. He didn't take off his coat. "Why are you here, Luc?" He smiled, a thin, humorless twist of his lips. "You haven't called me that in a while." "You haven't been around to call anything." She crossed her arms, the wool of her jumper rough against her skin. "Eva said you dropped off the grid. Even your usual haunts went quiet." "I was occupied." "Doing what?" "Surviving." The word landed flat, final. He turned his back to her, examining a sheaf of Eva's notes pinned to a corkboard. His posture was perfect, the line of his shoulders rigid under the fine wool. "There was... fallout. From the warehouse. From helping you." A cold knot tightened in her stomach. "What kind of fallout?" "Ambitious people don't like loose ends. Or meddlesome half-breeds who spoil their rituals." He traced a line of text on the page with a gloved finger. "My father's associates have long memories. They consider my interference a familial insult." She stared at the back of his head, the elegant sweep of his hair. "You said they couldn't touch you here. That London was neutral ground." "I was mistaken." He turned then, and the light from the desk lamp caught the amber of his left eye, making it glow like banked embers. The black one remained depthless, absorbing the light. "Or I lied. To you. To myself. Does it matter?" "Yes. It matters." Her voice cracked. She hated the sound of it. "You just vanished. After everything we—" She cut herself off, teeth clicking together. "After everything we what, Rory?" He took a step toward her. His movements were fluid, precise, the tap of his cane absent now. He didn't need it, not really; it was part of the persona, the prop of the impeccable fixer. "Shared a few close calls? Exchanged some heated words in the dark? You have a talent for finding trouble. I have a talent for extracting people from it. It was a business arrangement." The words were calculated, clean, designed to wound. They found their mark. She felt the heat rise in her cheeks. "Is that why you kissed me? After the thing with the ghouls in Stepney Green? Just part of the service?" A muscle jumped in his jaw. His gloved hands flexed at his sides. "That was a mistake." "The biggest one you've made?" "No." He held her gaze. "The biggest one was walking away from the warehouse. Letting you think you could handle what was coming next on your own." "I handled it." "Did you?" His gaze dropped to her left wrist, exposed where her sleeve had ridden up. The small, crescent-shaped scar from a childhood bicycle accident gleamed pale against her skin. "I heard about the fire at the archives. I heard three of Valerius's enforcers were found in the Thames with their throats cut. That didn't sound like your style." "It wasn't." She didn't elaborate. The memory of that night was a closed room in her mind, the door locked, the key melted down. "I had help." "From whom?" "Does it matter?" He was close enough now that she could see the faint lines at the corners of his eyes, the tension in the set of his mouth. The sandalwood-and-iron scent of him was dizzying. "It matters to me." "Why?" She didn't back up. The door was behind her, but retreat felt like surrender. "Why now? After months of silence, you just appear at my friend's door? What do you want, Lucien?" "I want you to leave London." She laughed, a short, sharp sound with no humor in it. "Not a chance." "It isn't safe." "It hasn't been safe since the day I met you. That's never stopped me before." "This is different." He reached out, gloved fingers brushing her arm just above the scar. His touch was electric, a jolt that went straight to her spine. "The players have changed. The stakes have escalated. Valerius was a thug with ambition. What's coming... it's older. Hungrier. It doesn't play by the rules of the shadow markets." "And you think I do?" "I think you have a habit of walking into the dark without a light." His fingers tightened, a brief, almost imperceptible pressure. "I can't protect you this time, Rory." "I never asked you to." "You didn't have to." He released her arm, his hand dropping back to his side. "I failed you once. I won't survive failing you again." The raw honesty in his voice stunned her. It was a crack in the armor, a glimpse of the man beneath the impeccable suits and the multilingual composure. The man who'd pressed her against a rain-slicked wall in an alley off Whitechapel, his mouth desperate on hers, his hands cradling her face like she was something precious, something breakable. "You didn't fail me," she whispered. "I left." "You had your reasons." "Reasons are poor comfort when you're burning." He looked away, his profile etched in stark relief against the cluttered bookshelves. "I went back to Avaros. To my father's domain. I made a... a bargain. For information. For a path forward." Her blood went cold. "What kind of bargain?" "The kind with teeth." He touched his chest, just over his heart. "I am bound now, more than ever, to the currents of that realm. To his will. My presence here is a risk. To you, to Eva, to anyone close to me. But I had to see you. To warn you." "You could have called." "And say what? 'Run, the monsters are coming, and they're wearing my father's face?'" He shook his head. "Some things require a personal touch." "Or you just wanted to see if I'd still be here." The words escaped before she could stop them, tinged with a bitterness she'd thought she'd buried. He went very still. His heterochromatic eyes locked onto hers, and for a moment, the pretense, the polished distance, evaporated. She saw the exhaustion in the lines around his mouth, the shadows under his eyes, the faint, silvery traceries of old scars peeking above his collar—new ones, ones she didn't recognize. "I thought about you," he said, his voice so low it was almost a vibration in the quiet room. "Every day. In that place, where the light is a memory and the air tastes of ash. I thought about the sound of your laugh. The way you chew your lip when you're thinking. The precise shade of blue in your eyes. It was the only thing that felt real." The confession hung between them, fragile as spun glass. Outside, a siren wailed in the distance, fading into the hum of the city. Rory stepped forward, closing the last of the distance. She reached up, her fingers brushing the cold, damp wool of his coat, then higher, to trace the line of his jaw. He caught his breath, his eyes drifting shut for a second. "You're a fool, Lucien Moreau." "I know." "You should have stayed gone." "I tried." Her thumb smoothed over his lower lip. "What does your bargain get you? Exactly?" "Knowledge. A name. The source of the convergence that's poisoning the ley lines under the city." He opened his eyes. The amber one seemed to burn. "It's here, Rory. In London. And it's waking up." "And you're going to stop it." "I'm going to try." "Alone?" He didn't answer. His gaze dropped to her mouth. She kissed him. It wasn't gentle. It was all the unsaid things, all the months of silence and worry and anger, poured into the press of her lips against his. A collision. He made a low sound in his throat, his arms coming around her, pulling her tight against him. The taste of him—rain and that faint metallic edge—flooded her senses. His gloves were rough against her neck, his other hand splayed against her back, holding her as if she might vanish. He broke the kiss, his forehead resting against hers. His breathing was ragged. "This is a terrible idea." "Your best ones usually are." "I'm not... I can't promise you anything. Not safety. Not tomorrow." "I don't want your promises." She fisted her hands in the lapels of his coat. "I want your help. Stop trying to send me away. Let me in." He studied her face, his expression a war of longing and dread. "You have no idea what you're asking." "I'm asking to stand beside you. Not behind you. However this ends." "It could end badly." "Most things do." She managed a weak smile. "But I'd rather face it with you than wonder what happened to you in the dark." He closed his eyes again, a surrender. When he opened them, resignation had softened the hard edges of his face. "Stubborn. Impossible woman." "You knew that when you kissed me in Whitechapel." A ghost of his old smirk touched his lips. "I did." He lowered his head and kissed her again, slower this time. Deliberate. A seal on a pact. When they parted, the world had narrowed to the space between them, warm and charged with a fragile, desperate hope. Downstairs, the curry house door banged open, releasing a burst of laughter and the rich smell of spices. The ordinary world, carrying on. Lucien rested his forehead against hers once more. "Eva will be back soon." "She'll understand." "She'll have opinions." Rory smiled, a real one this time. "She always does." He straightened, his hands sliding from her back to cradle her face. His thumbs brushed her cheekbones. "There's a place. A tavern in Southwark, called the Gilded Oar. It's neutral ground, even for my father's kind. Meet me there tomorrow night. Nine o'clock." "And then?" "Then we start." He released her, stepping back. The distance felt like a physical ache. He retrieved his cane, the movement smooth, the fixer's mask slipping back into place. But his eyes stayed on her, warmth lingering in the amber, shadows held at bay in the black. "Bring your quick thinking. And a weapon you're comfortable with." "I have a repurposed kitchen knife." He almost smiled. "It'll do." He moved to the door, paused with his hand on the latch. He didn't look back. "Don't be late, Aurora Carter." He was gone before she could reply, the door clicking shut softly behind him, leaving her alone in the flat with the smell of rain and sandalwood and the echo of his words in the air. Outside, the city glowed, a web of light and shadow, hiding its secrets in plain sight. She pressed her fingers to her lips, still tasting him, and knew with a certainty that settled deep in her bones: the running was over. The real fight was just beginning.
created_at"2026-02-19T03:26:41.465Z" 2/19/2026, 3:26:41 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"His eyes flicked back [back]"
1"He turned then [then]"
2"He looked away [away]"
dialogueSentences109
tagDensity0.294
leniency0.587
rawRatio0.094
effectiveRatio0.055
91.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2356
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"really"
2"very"
3"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2356
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"the last thing"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"cascading"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"silence"
count3
6
word"normalcy"
count1
7
word"perfect"
count1
8
word"stomach"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"calculated"
count1
11
word"tension"
count1
12
word"electric"
count1
13
word"etched"
count1
14
word"stark"
count1
15
word"tinged"
count1
16
word"charged"
count1
17
word"warmth"
count1
18
word"comfortable"
count1
19
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"the last thing"
2"chill"
3"cascading"
4"flicked"
5"silence"
6"normalcy"
7"perfect"
8"stomach"
9"traced"
10"calculated"
11"tension"
12"electric"
13"etched"
14"stark"
15"tinged"
16"charged"
17"warmth"
18"comfortable"
19"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
highlights
0"blood went cold"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences134
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences134
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences211
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2337
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1520
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity0.53
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva8
Empress1
Brick1
Lane1
Moreau1
Marseille1
Rory6
Ptolemy2
Whitechapel1
Lucien4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Ptolemy"
4"Lucien"
places
0"Empress"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
3"Marseille"
globalScore1
windowScore0.667
76.47% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"something like fury, something like fear, an"
1"something like fear, and told her to stay aw"
2"felt like surrender"
3"felt like a physical ache"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2337
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences211
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs99
mean23.61
std21.67
cv0.918
sampleLengths
051
183
224
383
48
518
615
775
821
917
1022
1117
1239
133
1420
1545
1616
175
1817
1933
203
212
2245
2311
2439
2526
2644
2725
2874
2940
3017
315
3227
333
3459
3527
362
373
3837
3933
406
4114
423
4315
4456
455
4629
475
4825
4959
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences134
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs234
matches(empty)
61.61% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences211
ratio0.028
matches
0"Rory pulled the door open, a half-formed excuse for her tardiness ready on her lips—she’d forgotten the tamarind paste Eva wanted, had to loop back to the Empress—but the words dissolved into the damp Brick Lane air."
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black as a starless sky—fixed on her, and for a beat, neither moved."
2"He paused just inside, his gaze sweeping the cramped space—the towers of books threatening to topple from every surface, the scrolls cascading over the arm of the sofa, the tabby cat Ptolemy blinking at him from a nest of ancient-looking maps on the floor."
3"He didn't need it, not really; it was part of the persona, the prop of the impeccable fixer."
4"She saw the exhaustion in the lines around his mouth, the shadows under his eyes, the faint, silvery traceries of old scars peeking above his collar—new ones, ones she didn't recognize."
5"The taste of him—rain and that faint metallic edge—flooded her senses."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1538
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.02340702210663199
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.002600780234070221
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences211
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences211
mean11.08
std8.75
cv0.79
sampleLengths
014
137
225
321
419
518
63
721
87
932
1019
114
125
1316
144
153
161
1714
184
196
207
212
224
2327
2444
2512
268
271
2812
295
309
3110
323
338
346
353
3612
3711
3816
393
4017
413
426
439
447
4523
4610
476
485
499
44.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.27014218009478674
totalSentences211
uniqueOpeners57
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount78
totalSentences128
matches
0"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
2"His voice was the same:"
3"She hadn't seen him in"
4"He'd looked at her with"
5"She’d called him a coward."
6"She kept her grip on"
7"He brought the damp chill"
8"He paused just inside, his"
9"She froze, her eyes widening"
10"He inclined his head, a"
11"She set the mug down"
12"His eyes flicked back to"
13"She hadn't moved from the"
14"She scooped up Ptolemy, who"
15"He didn't take off his"
16"He smiled, a thin, humorless"
17"She crossed her arms, the"
18"He turned his back to"
19"His posture was perfect, the"
ratio0.609
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount118
totalSentences128
matches
0"The third deadbolt slid back"
1"Rory pulled the door open,"
2"Lucien Moreau stood on the"
3"He leaned on his ivory-handled"
4"Rain glistened on the shoulders"
5"His heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one"
6"His voice was the same:"
7"She hadn't seen him in"
8"He'd looked at her with"
9"She’d called him a coward."
10"The last thing she’d heard"
11"Eva's voice floated from the"
12"Rory stepped aside, her movement"
13"She kept her grip on"
14"Lucien crossed the threshold."
15"He brought the damp chill"
16"He paused just inside, his"
17"Eva appeared in the kitchen"
18"She froze, her eyes widening"
19"He inclined his head, a"
ratio0.922
78.13% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences128
matches
0"To forget his face."
1"Now he was here."
ratio0.016
58.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"He paused just inside, his gaze sweeping the cramped space—the towers of books threatening to topple from every surface, the scrolls cascading over the arm of t…"
1"She scooped up Ptolemy, who offered a half-hearted mrrp of protest."
2"From the street below, the muffured laughter of late-night diners spilled up, a wave of normalcy that broke against the quiet between them."
3"The man who'd pressed her against a rain-slicked wall in an alley off Whitechapel, his mouth desperate on hers, his hands cradling her face like she was somethi…"
4"He made a low sound in his throat, his arms coming around her, pulling her tight against him."
5"His gloves were rough against her neck, his other hand splayed against her back, holding her as if she might vanish."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags32
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Eva’s voice had, professional"
1"Eva looked, her mouth pressing into a thin line"
2"She crossed, the wool of her jumper rough against her skin"
3"The word landed flat, final"
4"She cut, teeth clicking together"
5"He released, his hand dropping back to his side"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences109
tagDensity0.037
leniency0.073
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.018
78.5361%