Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSYZKZCAQ69K8HEVHYB83RB

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Duration:
24.8s
Cost:
$0.016276

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air smelled of damp stone and something older, something that clung to the back of my throat like copper. I crouched beside the body, my knees pressing into the cracked tile of what used to be a Tube platform. The victim lay sprawled on his back, arms splayed as if he’d been dropped from a great height. His suit was expensive—tailored wool, the kind that didn’t wrinkle—but it was ruined now, stained dark at the collar and sleeves. "Quinn." Davies didn’t look up from his notebook. "You’re late." I ignored him, my gaze fixed on the victim’s face. His eyes were open, glassy, the pupils dilated. No signs of struggle. No defensive wounds. Just… stillness. Too still. "Time of death?" I asked. "Rigor’s set in. Probably between midnight and three." Davies snapped his notebook shut. "No ID on him, but his wallet’s still in his pocket. Cash, cards, everything intact. Not a robbery." I reached for the man’s wrist, careful not to disturb the scene. His skin was cold, but not clammy. The kind of cold that came from being underground for hours. My fingers brushed against something hard beneath his sleeve—a watch. Not the kind you bought off a market stall. This was a Patek Philippe, the face cracked, the hands frozen at 2:17. "Odd place to die," I muttered. Davies exhaled through his nose. "Not really. Abandoned Tube stations are a dime a dozen. Homeless, junkies, kids looking for a place to drink. You know how it is." I did. But this didn’t feel like any of those things. I stood, scanning the platform. The tiles were grimy, the paint peeling, but there was something else—subtle, almost imperceptible. A pattern in the dust. Not footprints. Something else. Lines. Curves. Like someone had traced something in the grime. "See this?" I pointed. Davies squinted. "Looks like someone dragged their shoe." "No. It’s deliberate." I pulled a pen from my pocket and traced the outline. A sigil. Not one I recognised, but it had the weight of something old, something that didn’t belong in a place like this. "This wasn’t an accident." Davies crossed his arms. "Or it’s a prank. You know how these occult kids are. Always leaving their little marks everywhere." I ignored him, moving closer to the edge of the platform. The tracks stretched into darkness, the rails rusted but intact. No trains had run here in decades. The air was thick, stagnant. Then I saw it—a glint of metal near the third rail. I stepped carefully, avoiding the live wire, and crouched again. A bone token. Small, carved from something that looked like ivory but wasn’t. The edges were smooth, worn, as if it had been handled many times. I picked it up, turning it over in my fingers. There was a symbol etched into it—a crescent moon cradling a star. "Quinn." Davies’ voice was sharper now. "You’re contaminating the scene." I pocketed the token. "This isn’t a crime scene. Not in the way you think." Davies stepped forward, his boots scuffing against the tile. "What the hell are you talking about?" I stood, brushing the dust from my knees. "This man didn’t die here. He was placed here. Look at the body. No lividity where it should be. No blood pooling. He was moved after death." Davies opened his mouth, then closed it. He knew I was right. He just didn’t want to admit it. "And this?" I held up the token. "This isn’t something you pick up at a tourist shop. It’s a key. To a place that doesn’t officially exist." Davies’ expression darkened. "You’re not suggesting—" "The Veil Market." I said it quietly, but the words echoed in the hollow space. "This man was there. And whatever he saw, whatever he found, it killed him." Davies rubbed his temples. "Quinn, we’ve been over this. The Veil Market is a myth. A story cops tell each other when they’ve had too much to drink." I turned back to the body. The man’s face was pale, his lips slightly parted, as if he’d died mid-sentence. I reached into his jacket and pulled out a folded piece of paper. It was a receipt. Not from a shop. From a dealer. A name scrawled in ink: *E. Kowalski*. My stomach tightened. "Eva Kowalski," I said. "Works at the British Museum. Restricted archives." Davies frowned. "The occult researcher?" I nodded. "She’s been on my radar for a while. Always poking around where she shouldn’t be." Davies exhaled. "You think she’s involved?" I didn’t answer. Instead, I unfolded the receipt fully. There was a second name beneath Eva’s—*Aurora Voss*. And an address. A flat in Camden. I pocketed the paper. "We need to talk to her." Davies grabbed my arm. "Quinn, this is a bad idea. If you’re wrong—" "I’m not wrong." I pulled free. "This man didn’t just die. He was silenced. And if we don’t find out why, there’ll be more bodies." Davies didn’t argue. He knew me well enough to recognise the look in my eyes—the same one I’d had three years ago, when Morris died. The same one that said I wasn’t stopping until I had answers. I turned toward the tunnel, the darkness swallowing the tracks. Somewhere down there, beneath the city’s skin, was the truth. And I was going to find it. Even if it killed me.
total_cost0.016276

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.313
leniency0.625
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.39% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount903
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"carefully"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount903
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"traced"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"echoed"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"traced"
2"weight"
3"glint"
4"etched"
5"echoed"
6"stomach"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences86
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords4
totalWords895
ratio0.004
matches
0"E. Kowalski"
1"Aurora Voss"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount611
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.96
worstName"Davies"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Davies"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Davies12
Patek1
Philippe1
Eva1
Camden1
Morris1
persons
0"Davies"
1"Patek"
2"Philippe"
3"Eva"
4"Morris"
places
0"Camden"
globalScore0.518
windowScore0.5
91.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like ivory but wasn’t"
88.27% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.117
wordCount895
matches
0"Not one I recognised, but it had the weight of something old, something"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean22.95
std17.76
cv0.774
sampleLengths
079
110
229
35
431
562
66
729
811
938
104
118
1241
1321
1454
153
1645
1710
1815
1916
2035
2119
2227
236
2429
2528
2651
273
2811
295
3017
316
3224
3310
3413
3525
3637
3727
385
93.02% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences86
matches
0"been dropped"
1"was ruined"
2"been handled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs119
matches
0"wasn’t stopping"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences109
ratio0.064
matches
0"His suit was expensive—tailored wool, the kind that didn’t wrinkle—but it was ruined now, stained dark at the collar and sleeves."
1"My fingers brushed against something hard beneath his sleeve—a watch."
2"The tiles were grimy, the paint peeling, but there was something else—subtle, almost imperceptible."
3"Then I saw it—a glint of metal near the third rail."
4"There was a symbol etched into it—a crescent moon cradling a star."
5"There was a second name beneath Eva’s—*Aurora Voss*."
6"He knew me well enough to recognise the look in my eyes—the same one I’d had three years ago, when Morris died."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount535
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.028037383177570093
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.003738317757009346
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean8.21
std5.97
cv0.727
sampleLengths
020
120
218
321
48
52
610
78
84
93
101
111
122
135
1413
1518
1612
177
1811
1910
209
2113
226
235
2424
252
269
275
2814
295
302
312
321
331
348
354
362
376
3814
392
4021
414
424
4317
4411
4510
467
475
4811
4910
60.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.3761467889908257
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners41
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences68
matches
0"Then I saw it—a glint"
1"Instead, I unfolded the receipt"
2"Somewhere down there, beneath the"
ratio0.044
61.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences68
matches
0"I crouched beside the body,"
1"His suit was expensive—tailored wool,"
2"I ignored him, my gaze"
3"His eyes were open, glassy,"
4"I reached for the man’s"
5"His skin was cold, but"
6"My fingers brushed against something"
7"I stood, scanning the platform."
8"I pulled a pen from"
9"I ignored him, moving closer"
10"I stepped carefully, avoiding the"
11"I picked it up, turning"
12"I pocketed the token."
13"I stood, brushing the dust"
14"He knew I was right."
15"He just didn’t want to"
16"I held up the token"
17"I said it quietly, but"
18"I turned back to the"
19"I reached into his jacket"
ratio0.397
92.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences68
matches
0"The air smelled of damp"
1"I crouched beside the body,"
2"The victim lay sprawled on"
3"His suit was expensive—tailored wool,"
4"Davies didn’t look up from"
5"I ignored him, my gaze"
6"His eyes were open, glassy,"
7"Davies snapped his notebook shut"
8"I reached for the man’s"
9"His skin was cold, but"
10"The kind of cold that"
11"My fingers brushed against something"
12"This was a Patek Philippe,"
13"Davies exhaled through his nose."
14"I stood, scanning the platform."
15"The tiles were grimy, the"
16"A pattern in the dust."
17"I pulled a pen from"
18"Davies crossed his arms."
19"I ignored him, moving closer"
ratio0.735
73.53% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Even if it killed me."
ratio0.015
85.71% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The air smelled of damp stone and something older, something that clung to the back of my throat like copper."
1"Not one I recognised, but it had the weight of something old, something that didn’t belong in a place like this."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I said, but the words echoed in the hollow space"
87.50% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Davies snapped (snap)"
1"I muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.313
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.125
86.6124%