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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ0C67D4WZ07MD6CJG2GPR
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Model:
Ministral 3B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
25.9s
Cost:
$0.000343
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
76.50%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
10.91%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
(details)
98.63%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
77.30%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
48.03%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
56.88%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
100.00%
Technical jargon density
(details)
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
82.2750%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
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The door creaked open before
Aurora had even reached the handle.
A gust of cold air
slithered through the gap, carrying the faintest scent of damp stone and something sharper—something metallic, like old blood.
She froze, her fingers still
hovering over the lock. The flat was too quiet. Too still. Then the light
flicked
on. Lucien stood in the doorway, his cane tapping against the floor with deliberate precision.
His amber eye gleamed in
the dim glow of the lamp, the other black as a void.
He wore his usual charcoal
suit, tailored to perfection, but his expression wasn’t quite right. Too sharp. Too *
aware
*.
Aurora exhaled slowly, her breath
fogging the air between them. "You shouldn’t be here." "Not supposed to?"
His voice was smooth, but
there was a edge to it, like he’d been sharpening it for days.
She stepped back, her scarred
wrist aching where the old wound still lingered. "You know I don’t answer to you." Lucien didn’t move.
Just stood there, watching her
like she was something fragile he might break. "I don’t need permission."
The words hit her like
a punch. She should’ve left. Should’ve walked away before she let herself
get caught
up in this again. But the flat smelled of tea and old books, of the way Eva used to leave her notes tucked behind the coffee pot. And then there was the way his fingers twitched toward the cane, as if he couldn’t decide whether to step forward or not. Aurora crossed her arms. "What do you want?"
His gaze flicked to the
door, then back to her. "You." The word hung between them, heavy as a lead
weight
. She should’ve walked out. Should’ve told him to go back to wherever he came from. But the flat felt too small now.
Too small without the comfort
of the past. Lucien took another step forward. "You’re not supposed to be here."
Aurora’s pulse hammered in her
throat. "I’m not."
His voice dropped, low and
dangerous. "Then why are you?"
She opened her mouth, but
no words came.
Instead, she just stared at
him, at the way his hair caught the light, at the way his eyes—one amber, one black—
seemed to
see right through her. Then he was closer. Too close. His breath brushed her cheek, warm and
familiar
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s
stomach
twisted. "I know." His fingers brushed the deadbolt, testing it. "But you are." The flat was too small. The air too thick. And for the first time in years, she wasn’t sure if she wanted to run. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor again, slower this time. "You remember what happened last time." Aurora’s jaw tightened. "I remember." His voice dropped even lower. "I remember, too." She should’ve walked out. Should’ve told him to leave. But the flat felt like a cage now, and she was trapped inside. Lucien’s fingers brushed the lock again, just for a second. Then he stepped back. "I’m not here to hurt you." Aurora’s breath hitched. "Then why are you here?" His gaze locked onto hers, intense and
unreadable
. "Because I can’t let you go."
The words hit her like
a physical blow. She should’ve walked out. Should’ve told him to leave. But the flat felt too small now.
Too small without the comfort
of the past. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor once more,
as if deciding
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I’m not."
His voice was a whisper
now, barely above a murmur. "But you are." She should’ve walked out. Should’ve told him to leave. But the flat felt like a cage now, and she was trapped inside. Lucien’s fingers brushed the deadbolt one last time, just to be sure.
Then he turned, his back
to her, his cane still tapping against the floor. "I’ll be waiting." The door clicked shut behind him. Aurora stood there, her breath coming in ragged gasps, her heart
pounding
in her chest. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And for the first time in years, she wasn’t sure if she wanted to run. She turned toward the kitchen, her fingers trembling as she reached for the coffee pot. The flat smelled of tea and old books, of the way Eva used to leave her notes tucked behind the coffee pot. And then there was the way Lucien had looked at her, like he could see right through her. She poured herself a cup, her hands shaking. She should’ve walked out. Should’ve told him to leave. But the flat felt like a cage now, and she was trapped inside. Aurora took a sip of the bitter coffee, her eyes never leaving the door. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And for the first time in years, she wasn’t sure if she wanted to run. The door handle turned. Aurora’s breath caught in her throat. She didn’t move. Lucien stood in the doorway, his cane tapping against the floor. His expression was
unreadable
, but his eyes—one amber, one black—
seemed to
see right through her. Aurora’s fingers tightened around the coffee mug. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s voice was a low rumble. "I know." Aurora stepped back, her heart
pounding
. "What do you want?" Lucien took another step forward, his cane tapping against the floor. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s fingers brushed the deadbolt, testing it. "But you are." Aurora’s
stomach
twisted. "I know." His voice dropped, a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "I’m not." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor once more, slower this time. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "Then why are you here?" Lucien’s gaze
flicked
to the door, then back to her. "Because I can’t let you go." The words settled between them, heavy and final. Aurora exhaled, her breath fogging the air. "I remember." Lucien’s voice was a low growl. "I remember, too." Aurora turned toward the kitchen, her coffee mug still trembling in her hand. The flat smelled of tea and old books, of the way Eva used to leave her notes tucked behind the coffee pot. Lucien stepped forward, his cane tapping against the floor. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "I’m not." His fingers brushed the deadbolt, just to be sure. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. "What do you want?" Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You." She should’ve walked out. But the flat felt too small now. Too small without the past. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor once more. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I know." He moved closer, his presence filling the room. "I can’t let you go." Aurora’s fingers tightened around the mug, her knuckles white. "Then leave." Lucien’s voice was a low, dangerous purr. "I won’t." Aurora’s eyes burned. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, slow and deliberate. "I know." She turned toward the bed, her mind
racing
. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And for the first time in years, she wasn’t sure if she wanted to run. Lucien’s fingers brushed the deadbolt one last time. The lock clicked, and the door swung open. Aurora’s breath caught. Lucien stepped inside, his gaze never leaving hers. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I’m not." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "What do you want?" Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he reached out, his fingers brushing hers. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was a low, steady rumble. "I know." Aurora pulled her hand away, her heart
pounding
. "Leave." Lucien’s fingers brushed the deadbolt again, just for a second. "I won’t." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his, her mind
racing
. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And the past was too close. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora exhaled
sharply
. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want to be." Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, the scar on her arm catching his attention. "You always have." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I don’t." Lucien’s voice was low, intense. "You do." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I don’t." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he stepped closer, his breath warm against her ear. "You always have." Aurora’s
pulse
roared in her ears. "I don’t." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheek. "You do." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, then pulled back. "You." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze was intense, his voice a low rumble. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "Leave." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he stepped back, his gaze never leaving hers. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her breath fogging the air. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And the past was too close. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "I’m not." His fingers brushed the deadbolt, just to test. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips again. "You do." Aurora’s heart
raced
. "I don’t." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheek. "You always have." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I don’t." Lucien’s voice was a low rumble. "I know." Aurora pulled away, her fingers curling into fists. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor. "I know." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, lingering on the scar. "You." Aurora’s breath caught. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s gaze
flicked
to the door, then back to him. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, then pulled back. "You." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s gaze was intense, his voice low. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he stepped forward, his fingers brushing her cheek. "You." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I don’t." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her fingers trembling. The flat was too small. Too quiet. And the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, his thumb brushing her cheekbone. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze locked onto hers. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her lower lip. "You do." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t." Lucien’s voice was a low rumble. "I know." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his, her fingers curling into fists. "Leave." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving his. The past was too close. The flat too small. And the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips once more. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s gaze was intense, his voice a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheek. "You." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was low, steady. "I know." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, lingering just a second too long. "You." Aurora’s breath caught. The flat was too small. The air too thick. And the past was too close. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he stepped back, his gaze never leaving hers. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I’m not." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "But you are." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her breath fogging the air. The past was too close. The flat too small. And the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, lingering on the scar. "You always have." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I don’t." Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips. "I know." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not supposed to be here." The door handle turned. Aurora’s breath caught. Lucien stood in the doorway, his cane tapping against the floor. His expression was
unreadable
, but his eyes—one amber, one black—
seemed to
see right through her. Aurora’s fingers tightened around the coffee mug. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s voice was a low rumble. "I know." Aurora stepped toward the door, her heart
pounding
. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed the deadbolt, testing it. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze locked onto her lips. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "Leave." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, then he stepped back. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the
tension
between them was too thick to ignore. Lucien’s voice dropped to a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his. "I’m not." His fingers brushed the deadbolt one last time. The lock clicked. The door swung shut. Aurora’s breath hitched, her
pulse
racing
. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the attraction between them was undeniable. She turned toward the kitchen, her coffee mug still trembling. The flat smelled of tea and old books, of the way Eva used to leave notes tucked behind the coffee pot. Lucien’s voice
echoed
from the other room, low and intense. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s gaze
flicked
toward the door, then back to the mug. "I’m not." He stepped forward again, his cane tapping against the floor. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, lingering on the scar. "You do." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her fingers curling into fists. "Leave." Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers, his voice steady. "I won’t." Aurora’s gaze shifted to the door, the deadbolt still locked. The past was too close, and the room
felt like it was suffocating
. Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheekbone. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering on her wrist. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "Then why are you here?" Lucien’s voice was low, intense. "Because I can’t let you go." Aurora’s breath caught, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist—another mark from the past. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s fingers brushed her cheek, his thumb
tracing
her lower lip. "I know." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his, the room too quiet, the air too
charged
. "What do you want?" Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You." Aurora exhaled, her breath fogging the air. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the past was too close. Lucien stepped closer, his fingers brushing her jaw. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers curled around the mug. "I’m not." His gaze never left hers. "But you are." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice dropped to a low rumble. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. The past was too close. The flat too small. And the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, lingering. "You." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his, the door still locked behind them. The past was too close, and the attraction was too fierce. She exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving his. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers brushing her cheek. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not."
His voice was a whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips again. "I know." Aurora’s heart
raced
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. The past was too close, and the room
felt like it was closing in
. Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheekbone. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I’m not." His voice was low, intense. "But you are." Aurora exhaled, her gaze locked onto his. The flat was too small, the air too thick, and the past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, lingering. "You." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I’m not supposed to be here." The door handle turned. The lock clicked. Aurora’s breath caught. Lucien stood in the doorway, his cane tapping against the floor. His gaze was intense, one eye amber, the other black. Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed hers, lingering. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. The past was too close. The flat too small. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his gaze never leaving hers. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze locked onto his. "I’m not."
His voice was a whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s heart pounded. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheek. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the past was too close. Lucien’s voice dropped to a low rumble. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. "I’m not." His fingers brushed hers, lingering. "But you are." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his gaze intense. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "Leave." Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close, the room felt suffocating. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His fingers brushed her lips. "You." Aurora’s heart pounded. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the past was too close. Aurora stepped back, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheekbone. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. The past was too close, the air too thick. Lucien’s voice was low, intense. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora exhaled
sharply
. "I’m not." Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his eyes. The flat was too small, the past too close. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering on her wrist. "You." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I don’t want this." The door handle turned again. The lock clicked open. Aurora’s
eyes widened
. Lucien stepped inside, his cane tapping against the floor, his gaze fixed on her. Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "You shouldn’t be here." Lucien’s voice was a low rumble. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. "What do you want?" Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, lingering on the scar. "You." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close, the
tension
too heavy. Lucien stepped closer, his fingers brushing her jaw. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed hers. "I know." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "Leave." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his gaze intense. "I won’t." Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. "Why?" Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "Because I can’t." Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close, the flat too small, and the past was too close. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I’m not." His fingers brushed her lips. "You." Aurora’s heart pounded. The past was too close. Aurora turned toward the door, her fingers trembling. The flat smelled of tea and old books, of the past. Lucien’s voice
echoed
from the doorway. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "I’m not." Lucien stepped forward, his cane tapping against the floor. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I know." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his eyes. The past was too close. The flat was too small. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I’m not." His fingers brushed her lips. "You." Aurora exhaled, her breath fogging the air. The past was too close, the room too small. Aurora opened her mouth to speak, but no words came.
Instead, she just stared at
him, at the way his fingers lingered on her wrist, at the way his gaze
seemed to
see right through her. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers brushing her jaw. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. The past was too close. The flat was too small. Aurora closed her eyes, her fingers trembling. The past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her lips, lingering just a second too long. "You." Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close. The flat was too small. Aurora opened her eyes, her gaze locked onto his. The past was too close. The past was too close. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers curled around the coffee mug, her breath coming fast. The past was too close. Aurora took a step back, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "I’m not." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers. "I won’t let you." Aurora’s breath hitched. The past was too close, the room too small. Aurora turned toward the kitchen, her fingers trembling. The flat smelled of tea and Eva’s old books. Lucien’s voice
echoed
from the doorway. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s gaze
flicked
to the door, then back to the mug. "I’m not." Lucien stepped inside, his cane tapping against the floor. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, lingering on the scar. "You do." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was low, intense. "I know." Aurora’s heart
raced
. The past was too close, and the flat was too small. Aurora stepped toward the door, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "Leave." Lucien’s fingers brushed hers. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze locked onto his eyes. The past was too close. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering on her wrist. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath caught. "I’m not." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers. "I won’t let you." Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. The past was too close. Aurora reached for the door handle. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist, stopping her. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s heart pounded. The past was too close. Aurora turned, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The flat was too small, the past too close. Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I’m not." His fingers brushed her lips. "You." Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close. The past was too close. Aurora stepped back, her gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I won’t let you." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his eyes. The flat was too small. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I’m not."
His voice was a whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s heart
raced
. The past was too close. Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her fingers curling into fists. "Leave." Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers. "I won’t." Aurora’s gaze shifted to the door, the lock still secure. The past was too close. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s eyes burned. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I know." Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. The flat was too small, the past too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
as she reached for the mug. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering. "I know." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was low. "You do." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. The past was too close. Aurora took a step back. "Leave." Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "I won’t." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. The past was too close. Aurora turned toward the door, her fingers trembling. The flat smelled of tea and old books. Lucien’s voice
echoed
from the doorway. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s gaze locked onto the handle. "I’m not." Lucien stepped inside, his cane tapping against the floor. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "I know." Aurora’s heart
raced
. The past was too close, the flat too small. Aurora reached for the door handle. Lucien’s fingers brushed hers. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath caught. "I’m not." His gaze dropped to her lips. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was low. "I won’t let you." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. The past was too close. Aurora stopped moving. Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw, his thumb brushing her cheekbone. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His gaze locked onto hers. "But you are." Aurora’s heart pounded. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers curled around the mug. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. The past was too close. The flat was too small. Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora exhaled, her fingers trembling. "I’m not." His fingers brushed her wrist. "But you are." Aurora’s breath came fast. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers, his voice steady. "I won’t let you go." Aurora’s eyes burned. The past was too close. Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. The flat was too small. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
as she placed the mug on the counter. "Leave." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor. "I won’t." Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close. Aurora turned toward the door. The lock clicked. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his eyes. "I’m not."
His voice was a whisper
. "But you are." Aurora’s heart pounded. The past was too close. The flat was too small. Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips. "I know." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close. Aurora reached for the door handle. Lucien’s fingers brushed hers. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His voice was low. "But you are." Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, his fingers lingering on her wrist. "I won’t let you." Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. The past was too close. Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist, her breath coming fast. The past was too close. Aurora stepped back, her fingers curling around the mug. "I’m not supposed to be here." Lucien’s voice was a
whisper
. "I know." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s fingers brushed her jaw. "You do." Aurora’s heart
raced
. The past was too close. Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. The flat was too small, the past too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
as she turned toward the door. The lock clicked. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s breath hitched. "I’m not." His voice was low. "But you are." Aurora’s gaze locked onto his eyes. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
. "I don’t want this." Lucien’s gaze dropped to her lips. "I won’t let you." Aurora’s eyes locked onto the scar on his wrist. The past was too close, the flat too small. Aurora’s gaze locked onto his lips. The past was too close. Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
as she reached for the mug. The past was too close. Aurora’s gaze locked onto Lucien’s lips. The past was too close. Aurora’s breath hitched. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist. The past was too close. Aurora turned toward the door, her breath coming fast. Lucien’s fingers brushed her wrist. "You’re not supposed to be here." Aurora’s eyes locked onto his eyes. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers curled into fists. "I’m not." His voice was low. "But you are." Aurora exhaled
sharply
, her gaze never leaving him. The past was too close. Aurora’s gaze locked onto the scar on his wrist. The past was too small. Aurora’s breath caught. The past was too close. Aurora’s fingers
trembled
as she opened the door. The lock clicked shut behind her.
total_cost
0.000343
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
1
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
319
tagDensity
0.003
leniency
0.006
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
76.50%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
5107
totalAiIsmAdverbs
24
found
0
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
23
highlights
0
"slowly"
1
"sharply"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
10.91%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
5107
totalAiIsms
91
found
0
word
"flicked"
count
6
1
word
"weight"
count
1
2
word
"pulse"
count
3
3
word
"familiar"
count
1
4
word
"stomach"
count
2
5
word
"unreadable"
count
3
6
word
"whisper"
count
30
7
word
"pounding"
count
4
8
word
"raced"
count
11
9
word
"racing"
count
3
10
word
"trembled"
count
19
11
word
"tension"
count
2
12
word
"echoed"
count
4
13
word
"tracing"
count
1
14
word
"charged"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicked"
1
"weight"
2
"pulse"
3
"familiar"
4
"stomach"
5
"unreadable"
6
"whisper"
7
"pounding"
8
"raced"
9
"racing"
10
"trembled"
11
"tension"
12
"echoed"
13
"tracing"
14
"charged"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes widened"
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
597
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
597
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
915
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
29
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
1
markdownWords
1
totalWords
5099
ratio
0
matches
0
"aware"
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
7
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
0.00%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
391
wordCount
4071
uniqueNames
4
maxNameDensity
5.55
worstName
"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity
9
worstWindowName
"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora
226
Eva
5
Lucien
154
Should
6
persons
0
"Aurora"
1
"Eva"
2
"Lucien"
3
"Should"
places
(empty)
globalScore
0
windowScore
0
98.63%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
292
glossingSentenceCount
6
matches
0
"felt like a cage now, and she was trapp"
1
"as if deciding"
2
"felt like a cage now, and she was trapp"
3
"felt like a cage now, and she was trapp"
4
"felt like it was suffocating"
5
"felt like it was closing in"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
5099
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
915
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
435
mean
11.72
std
7.23
cv
0.617
sampleLengths
0
11
1
39
2
5
3
50
4
14
5
21
6
20
7
20
8
69
9
8
10
11
11
40
12
11
13
8
14
10
15
35
16
20
17
5
18
10
19
24
20
16
21
5
22
8
23
22
24
20
25
8
26
14
27
32
28
17
29
7
30
13
31
22
32
29
33
6
34
37
35
55
36
30
37
36
38
4
39
9
40
26
41
11
42
8
43
10
44
12
45
9
46
10
47
5
48
11
49
7
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
597
matches
0
"get caught"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
756
matches
0
"was suffocating"
1
"was closing"
100.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
8
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
5
totalSentences
915
ratio
0.005
matches
0
"A gust of cold air slithered through the gap, carrying the faintest scent of damp stone and something sharper—something metallic, like old blood."
1
"Instead, she just stared at him, at the way his hair caught the light, at the way his eyes—one amber, one black—seemed to see right through her."
2
"His expression was unreadable, but his eyes—one amber, one black—seemed to see right through her."
3
"His expression was unreadable, but his eyes—one amber, one black—seemed to see right through her."
4
"Aurora’s breath caught, her gaze fixed on the scar on his wrist—another mark from the past."
77.30%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
4079
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
269
adverbRatio
0.06594753616082373
lyAdverbCount
25
lyAdverbRatio
0.006128953174797744
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
915
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
915
mean
5.57
std
3.69
cv
0.663
sampleLengths
0
11
1
23
2
9
3
5
4
2
5
5
6
14
7
17
8
15
9
2
10
2
11
10
12
4
13
21
14
13
15
7
16
3
17
13
18
4
19
7
20
3
21
13
22
23
23
23
24
4
25
4
26
10
27
1
28
10
29
4
30
11
31
7
32
8
33
5
34
6
35
6
36
2
37
6
38
4
39
8
40
27
41
4
42
2
43
8
44
6
45
3
46
2
47
7
48
3
49
5
48.03%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
18
diversityRatio
0.022950819672131147
totalSentences
915
uniqueOpeners
21
56.88%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
10
totalSentences
586
matches
0
"Then the light flicked on."
1
"Just stood there, watching her"
2
"Too small without the comfort"
3
"Instead, she just stared at"
4
"Then he was closer."
5
"Then he stepped back."
6
"Too small without the comfort"
7
"Then he turned, his back"
8
"Too small without the past."
9
"Instead, she just stared at"
ratio
0.017
100.00%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
59
totalSentences
586
matches
0
"She froze, her fingers still"
1
"His amber eye gleamed in"
2
"He wore his usual charcoal"
3
"His voice was smooth, but"
4
"She stepped back, her scarred"
5
"She should’ve left."
6
"His gaze flicked to the"
7
"She should’ve walked out."
8
"His voice dropped, low and"
9
"She opened her mouth, but"
10
"His breath brushed her cheek,"
11
"His fingers brushed the deadbolt,"
12
"His voice dropped even lower."
13
"She should’ve walked out."
14
"His gaze locked onto hers,"
15
"She should’ve walked out."
16
"His voice was a whisper"
17
"She should’ve walked out."
18
"She turned toward the kitchen,"
19
"She poured herself a cup,"
ratio
0.101
0.00%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
549
totalSentences
586
matches
0
"The door creaked open before"
1
"A gust of cold air"
2
"She froze, her fingers still"
3
"The flat was too quiet."
4
"Lucien stood in the doorway,"
5
"His amber eye gleamed in"
6
"He wore his usual charcoal"
7
"Aurora exhaled slowly, her breath"
8
"His voice was smooth, but"
9
"She stepped back, her scarred"
10
"Lucien didn’t move."
11
"The words hit her like"
12
"She should’ve left."
13
"Aurora crossed her arms."
14
"His gaze flicked to the"
15
"The word hung between them,"
16
"She should’ve walked out."
17
"Lucien took another step forward."
18
"Aurora’s pulse hammered in her"
19
"His voice dropped, low and"
ratio
0.937
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
586
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
100.00%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
114
technicalSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"Aurora stood there, her breath coming in ragged gasps, her heart pounding in her chest."
100.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
1
uselessAdditionCount
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
82.2750%