Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ0CC00T7DVXPX1S8YRFBJ

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Duration:
9.6s
Cost:
$0.041595
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Greek," Davies muttered, snapping photos of the symbols etched into the stone wall. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside the body, her sharp jawline set in a grim line. The victim lay sprawled in the centre of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden, a place known to few as The Veil Market. The air was thick with the scent of copper and something else—something ancient and unsettling. "Someone's been watching too many horror films," Harlow said, picking up a crumpled receipt from the floor. It was from an occult supply shop in Camden, paid by credit card. Amateur hour. Davies glanced at her, his brow furrowed. "Could be dangerous though. Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." Harlow pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." Davies chuckled, but his eyes remained wary. "Speaking of followers..." He pointed to the heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" Harlow asked, standing up and dusting off her hands. Her worn leather watch caught the dim light, a reminder of time slipping away. "Already on it," Davies replied, his camera clicking away. "But there's something else. Look at the body." Harlow turned her attention back to the victim. A young woman, early twenties, with curly red hair and a freckled complexion. Her round glasses lay shattered beside her, and a worn leather satchel full of books was slung over her shoulder. Harlow's heart skipped a beat. Eva Kowalski. "Eva," she whispered, her voice barely audible. She felt a pang of guilt. Eva had been her best friend, her confidante. And now she was gone. Davies looked at her, concern etched on his face. "You knew her?" Harlow nodded, her eyes never leaving Eva's lifeless form. "She was a researcher at the British Museum. We grew up together." Davies placed a hand on her shoulder, a rare gesture of comfort. "I'm sorry, Harlow. But we need to figure out what happened here." Harlow took a deep breath, forcing herself to focus. "Right. Let's start with the obvious. Cause of death?" "Blunt force trauma to the head," Davies said, pointing to a jagged rock nearby. "But there's something off about it. The angle, the force... it doesn't match up with a simple fall." Harlow's eyes narrowed. "What are you saying?" Davies hesitated. "I think she was pushed. But there's no sign of a struggle. No defensive wounds. It's like she didn't see it coming." Harlow's mind raced. Eva was smart, cautious. She wouldn't have let her guard down so easily. Unless... "Check her satchel," Harlow said, her voice steady. "There might be something in there." Davies rummaged through the satchel, pulling out a small brass compass with a patina of verdigris. The face was etched with protective sigils, and the needle pointed unwaveringly to the north. "The Veil Compass," Harlow murmured, recognising the artefact. "It points to the nearest supernatural rift or portal." Davies looked puzzled. "Why would she have this?" "She was researching the Veil Market," Harlow explained. "Trying to uncover its secrets. She must have found something." Davies nodded, his expression serious. "But what? And who would want to stop her?" Harlow's mind raced, piecing together the fragments of the puzzle. Eva had been on the verge of a breakthrough, something big enough to get her killed. But who could have known? And why here, in the depths of the Veil Market? "There's more to this," Harlow said, her voice firm. "We need to find out what she discovered. And who wanted to silence her." Davies nodded, his camera clicking away. "I'll start with the shop. See if anyone remembers her." Harlow stood up, her eyes scanning the dark, abandoned station. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, a hidden world beneath the city. And now, it held the key to Eva's death. "Be careful," she warned. "This place... it's not what it seems." Davies nodded, his expression grim. "You too, Harlow. We'll get to the bottom of this." As Davies left, Harlow took one last look at Eva's lifeless form. She felt a surge of determination. She owed it to her friend to find the truth, no matter the cost. She turned her attention back to the symbols on the wall, her mind racing. The Veil Market moved locations every full moon, a labyrinth of enchanted goods and forbidden knowledge. Eva had been close to something, something dangerous. Harlow's eyes narrowed as she studied the symbols. They were a mix of ancient languages, a code that only someone with Eva's expertise could decipher. But there was something else, something hidden beneath the surface. She traced her fingers over the symbols, feeling a faint pulse of energy. The compass in her hand vibrated, the needle pointing to a spot on the wall. Harlow's heart raced as she pressed against the stone, feeling it give way. A hidden compartment slid open, revealing a small, leather-bound journal. Harlow's hands trembled as she opened it, recognising Eva's neat handwriting. The pages were filled with notes, sketches, and cryptic messages. "Eva, what did you find?" Harlow whispered, her eyes scanning the pages. The journal was a treasure trove of information, a map to the secrets of the Veil Market. But it was also a death sentence. Eva had uncovered something that someone wanted to keep hidden, something worth killing for. Harlow's mind raced as she pieced together the fragments of the puzzle. Eva had been on the verge of a breakthrough, something big enough to get her killed. But who could have known? And why here, in the depths of the Veil Market? She closed the journal, her resolve hardening. She would find out who killed Eva, and why. And she would bring them to justice. As she left the abandoned station, the compass in her hand vibrated, the needle pointing to the north. Harlow's heart raced as she followed its lead, determined to uncover the truth. The Veil Market held many secrets, but Harlow Quinn was determined to uncover them all. And she would stop at nothing to find justice for her friend.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1040
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"etched"
count3
1
word"furrowed"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"shattered"
count1
4
word"skipped a beat"
count1
5
word"pang"
count1
6
word"raced"
count5
7
word"depths"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count2
10
word"racing"
count1
11
word"traced"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"vibrated"
count2
14
word"trembled"
count1
15
word"resolve"
count1
16
word"determined"
count2
highlights
0"etched"
1"furrowed"
2"reminder"
3"shattered"
4"skipped a beat"
5"pang"
6"raced"
7"depths"
8"silence"
9"scanning"
10"racing"
11"traced"
12"pulse"
13"vibrated"
14"trembled"
15"resolve"
16"determined"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"The air was thick with"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences84
matches
0"a pang of guilt"
1"a surge of determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences84
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences104
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen23
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1038
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions73
wordCount785
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity3.06
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Harlow24
Quinn2
Tube1
Camden2
Veil7
Market7
Davies14
Multiple1
Kowalski1
Eva13
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Davies"
4"Multiple"
5"Kowalski"
6"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences63
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1038
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
78.57% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean25.32
std10.76
cv0.425
sampleLengths
017
153
232
313
431
525
629
717
848
926
1012
1121
1224
1318
1432
157
1624
1717
1814
1931
2017
218
2218
2314
2441
2523
2616
2733
2811
2915
3032
3138
3235
3341
3431
3529
3621
3743
3823
3931
4027
88.55% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences84
matches
0"was gone"
1"was etched"
2"were filled"
3"was determined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs140
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences104
ratio0.01
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of copper and something else—something ancient and unsettling."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount787
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, leather-bound journal."
adverbCount13
adverbRatio0.016518424396442185
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.008894536213468869
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences104
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences104
mean9.98
std4.76
cv0.477
sampleLengths
013
14
215
323
415
517
613
72
87
96
1012
1119
127
1313
142
153
1615
1714
189
198
208
2113
2220
235
242
257
266
278
285
299
303
319
3212
3312
3412
359
369
3714
3818
393
404
412
4222
433
444
459
461
478
486
4916
53.53% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3557692307692308
totalSentences104
uniqueOpeners37
43.29% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences77
matches
0"All new trainers."
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences77
matches
0"It was from an occult"
1"He pointed to the heavy"
2"Her worn leather watch caught"
3"Her round glasses lay shattered"
4"she whispered, her voice barely"
5"She felt a pang of"
6"She wouldn't have let her"
7"She felt a surge of"
8"She owed it to her"
9"She turned her attention back"
10"They were a mix of"
11"She traced her fingers over"
12"She closed the journal, her"
13"She would find out who"
ratio0.182
44.42% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences77
matches
0"Davies muttered, snapping photos of"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside"
2"The victim lay sprawled in"
3"The air was thick with"
4"Harlow said, picking up a"
5"It was from an occult"
6"Davies glanced at her, his"
7"Harlow pointed to the nearest"
8"Davies chuckled, but his eyes"
9"He pointed to the heavy"
10"Harlow asked, standing up and"
11"Her worn leather watch caught"
12"Davies replied, his camera clicking"
13"Harlow turned her attention back"
14"A young woman, early twenties,"
15"Her round glasses lay shattered"
16"Harlow's heart skipped a beat."
17"she whispered, her voice barely"
18"She felt a pang of"
19"Eva had been her best"
ratio0.831
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Davies replied, his camera clicking away"
1"she whispered, her voice barely audible"
2"Harlow said, her voice steady"
3"Harlow said, her voice firm"
4"Harlow whispered, her eyes scanning the pages"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Davies muttered (mutter)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"Harlow murmured (murmur)"
3"Harlow explained (explain)"
4"she warned (warn)"
5"Harlow whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.353
leniency0.706
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.353
74.5231%