Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ122BZ8Y946Z5TRF3AE6W

Run Details

Duration:
1m 56s
Cost:
$0.002341
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air in the clearing changed the moment Rory stepped between the ancient oak standing stones. It wasn’t just the smell — from damp London park to something like crushed mint and wet stone — but the weight of it, as if the atmosphere had thickened. The late afternoon light, which had been a flat November grey outside the stones, bled into a soft, perpetual twilight. It was neither day nor night, but something suspended in between. “Alright,” Nyx’s whisper brushed against her ear, though they were a few paces behind her, a humanoid silhouette of shifting shadow. “This is… not Richmond Park.” Isolde walked ahead of them, barefoot and soundless. Her silver hair seemed to drink the muted light. She left no footprints in the carpet of moss and fallen petals. “Mortals would call it a pocket. A fold in the world’s fabric. My home.” The grove unfolded around them. Trees Rory didn’t recognize towered overhead, their bark smooth and pale as bone, their leaves a deep, shimmering violet. Between their roots, mushrooms glowed with a soft, bioluminescent blue. The ground underfoot was spongy with moss of impossible colors: emerald, gold, a blue so deep it was almost black. Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic profusion — star-shaped blossoms of silver, bell-like flowers that chimed softly in a breeze Rory couldn’t feel, and ones that looked like tiny, frozen flames. “Don’t touch the singing bells,” Isolde said without turning. “They’re having a conversation you wouldn’t understand.” Rory kept her hands close to her sides. The Heartstone pendant against her chest pulsed, not with the sharp warmth she associated with Hel portals, but with a cooler, rhythmic beat, like a slow, distant drum. Nyx flowed past her, their form condensing from a wisp of shadow into a more solid shape. They reached out a hand of darkness towards a trickle of water that ran over a stone covered in luminous lichen. The water looked clear, but where it pooled, it swirled with tiny, shimmering motes like suspended glitter. “The water remembers,” Isolde said. She knelt by the pool, her reflection perfectly still despite the gentle flow. “Every story it has ever carried. It can show you things, if you know how to ask.” “Can it show us how to get what we need?” Rory asked. Her voice sounded too loud in the hushed space. Isolde’s lavender eyes lifted to hers. “It shows what it chooses to show. Not what you want to see.” Further in, the trees began to arch over the path, forming a living tunnel. The air grew cooler. Strange, floating seed pods drifted on unseen currents, each one emitting a faint, musical hum. One drifted close to Rory’s face, and she saw it wasn’t a seed at all, but a tiny, winged creature with gossamer wings folded around a glowing core. It hovered for a second, then darted away. The unease started as a prickle at the back of her neck. It wasn’t fear, not exactly. It was the feeling of being watched by something vast and ancient that had simply paused to note their passing. The wonder of the place was still there — the impossible beauty of it — but underpinning it was a stark, unsettling truth: this was not a place meant for humans. Nyx stopped, their shadowy form blending with the deeper gloom under the tree-tunnel. “Do you feel that?” “The silence,” Rory murmured. She’d only just noticed. There were sounds — the chime of the bell-flowers, the hum of the seed-creatures, the whisper of the strange leaves — but no bird calls. No insects. No scuttling of life in the undergrowth. As if the grove was a beautiful, empty stage. “Life here is… different,” Isolde said. She placed a hand on the pale bark of a tree. A soft, answering light pulsed beneath her fingertips and traveled up the trunk, vanishing into the canopy. “It does not need to chirp or scuttle. It simply is.” They emerged from the tunnel into a wider clearing. At its center stood a structure that Rory’s mind struggled to process. It looked like a tree had decided to grow into a house. Its walls were woven from living branches, thick with silver leaves. Windows were gaps in the foliage, revealing a warm, golden light within. A door, shaped from a single curved piece of wood that looked both incredibly old and still alive, stood slightly ajar. No smoke rose from the chimney-like opening in the roof, but the scent of herbs and something sweet — like baking fruit — drifted out. “Home,” Isolde said, a rare, soft note in her voice. But Rory’s attention was caught by something else. To the side of the living house, half-concealed by a curtain of weeping, glass-like vines, was a pedestal of the same pale stone as the standing stones. On it rested a shallow basin carved from a single piece of crystal. The water within was perfectly still, black as obsidian. Nyx flowed towards it. “A scrying pool.” “One of them,” Isolde acknowledged. “This one looks forward. And sideways. And sometimes back. It is… capricious.” Rory approached. The black water showed no reflection. It was a void. As she watched, a single ripple crossed its surface from edge to edge, though nothing had touched it. The Heartstone pendant gave a single, hard throb against her skin, so sharp it made her gasp. “It knows you carry a piece of another world,” Isolde said, appearing beside her. “Hel resonates here. An unpleasant chord.” “Can you use it?” Rory asked, rubbing her chest where the pendant lay. “To see Dymas? To see what we’re walking into?” Isolde looked from Rory to the pool and back. Her ageless face was unreadable. “I can ask. The water may answer. Or it may show us something else entirely. The future is not a straight road. It is a… a tangle of roots.” She moved to the pedestal and knelt before the basin. She breathed a word onto the water’s surface, a sound that had no English equivalent, all soft consonants and bell-like vowels. The black water shimmered. Then, like ink dispersing in milk, images began to form. Not a clear picture, but impressions. The warm amber sky of Dymas. The overwhelming scent of roasting meats and exotic spices that was almost a taste in the air. Then, a figure — large, imposing, seated on a throne that seemed carved from marbled fat and gemstones. Prince Belphegor. His face was indistinct, but the aura of lazy, oppressive power was not. The scene shifted to a long table groaning under platters of fantastical food, and around it, figures eating with a desperate, frantic intensity that had nothing to do with hunger. Then the image fractured. For a split second, Rory saw herself, standing in a vineyard under that amber sky, the Fae-forged blade cold in her hand. Her own face was grim, set. Behind her, shadows writhed. The water clouded and went black again. Nyx let out a breath that was more a rustle of darkness. “So it’s a party. With a demon prince. And we’re crashing it.” “More than crashing,” Isolde said, rising. The vision seemed to have cost her something; her ethereal pallor was even more pronounced. “You will be entering a realm of obsession. Gluttony is not about sustenance. It is about consumption for its own sake. It is a hunger that can never be filled. It will be in the air, in the food, in the very thoughts of those bound there. Your own desires will be… amplified.” Rory stared at the now-still water. The image of her own determined face lingered in her mind. “What was that last part? The shadows?” Isolde’s lips pressed into a thin line. “The water showed a possibility. One thread in the tangle. Shadows are… plural. They do not belong only to our friend here.” She glanced at Nyx. “There are other things that move in darkness in Dymas. Things that serve the Prince.” The wonder of the grove had evaporated, replaced by a cold, practical dread. The alien beauty was still there — the glowing fungi, the chiming flowers — but now it felt like a mask. A beautiful trap. This was a place of power, of ancient, capricious magic, and they were borrowing a piece of it for a dive into hell. “We need a plan,” Rory said, her voice firm. The cool-headed logic that had gotten her through law tutorials and Evan’s tirades kicked in. “We know the realm. We know the ruler. We have a weapon that can hurt them.” She touched the cool hilt of the Fae-forged blade at her belt. “And we have a way in.” She held up the Heartstone pendant. It pulsed gently, a crimson star against her palm. Nyx solidified beside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes meeting hers. “We also have the element of surprise. They won’t expect mortals to walk in willingly.” Isolde watched them both, her head tilted. A silver flower fell from her hair and dissolved into light before it hit the moss. “You have resolve. That is something the gluttonous cannot comprehend. Their hunger makes them impatient, predictable. Your hunger… is different. Sharper. Use it.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.455
leniency0.909
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
80.49% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1538
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count2
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"very"
count1
4
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"perfectly"
2"slightly"
3"very"
4"gently"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.98% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1538
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"weight"
count1
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"chaotic"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count3
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count1
6
word"stark"
count1
7
word"gloom"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"structure"
count1
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"throb"
count1
12
word"unreadable"
count1
13
word"shimmered"
count1
14
word"imposing"
count1
15
word"oppressive"
count1
16
word"intensity"
count1
17
word"fractured"
count1
18
word"determined"
count1
19
word"resolve"
count1
20
word"predictable"
count1
highlights
0"weight"
1"whisper"
2"chaotic"
3"pulsed"
4"warmth"
5"rhythmic"
6"stark"
7"gloom"
8"silence"
9"structure"
10"crystal"
11"throb"
12"unreadable"
13"shimmered"
14"imposing"
15"oppressive"
16"intensity"
17"fractured"
18"determined"
19"resolve"
20"predictable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"let out a breath"
count1
highlights
0"let out a breath"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences101
matches(empty)
86.28% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences101
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences119
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen53
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1541
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
87.13% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1193
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.26
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory15
London1
November1
Isolde12
Heartstone3
Hel1
English1
Dymas1
Belphegor1
Fae-forged2
Nyx7
Evan1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Isolde"
2"Heartstone"
3"Belphegor"
4"Nyx"
5"Evan"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.871
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences77
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"something like crushed mint and wet stone —"
1"looked like tiny, frozen flames"
2"looked like a tree had decided to grow in"
3"seemed carved from marbled fat and gemstones"
4"felt like a mask"
5.32% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.947
wordCount1541
matches
0"neither day nor"
1"not with the sharp warmth she associated with Hel portals, but with a cooler, rhythmic beat, like a slow, distant drum"
2"Not a clear picture, but impressions"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs36
mean42.81
std24.61
cv0.575
sampleLengths
077
126
243
383
416
536
655
735
821
919
1069
1168
1217
1351
1445
15102
1610
1757
187
1917
2047
2120
2222
2343
2445
2592
2636
277
2824
2974
3024
3148
3260
3373
3426
3546
94.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences101
matches
0"being watched"
1"were woven"
2"was caught"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs183
matches
0"were borrowing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences119
ratio0.067
matches
0"It wasn’t just the smell — from damp London park to something like crushed mint and wet stone — but the weight of it, as if the atmosphere had thickened."
1"Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic profusion — star-shaped blossoms of silver, bell-like flowers that chimed softly in a breeze Rory couldn’t feel, and ones that looked like tiny, frozen flames."
2"The wonder of the place was still there — the impossible beauty of it — but underpinning it was a stark, unsettling truth: this was not a place meant for humans."
3"There were sounds — the chime of the bell-flowers, the hum of the seed-creatures, the whisper of the strange leaves — but no bird calls."
4"No smoke rose from the chimney-like opening in the roof, but the scent of herbs and something sweet — like baking fruit — drifted out."
5"Then, a figure — large, imposing, seated on a throne that seemed carved from marbled fat and gemstones."
6"The vision seemed to have cost her something; her ethereal pallor was even more pronounced."
7"The alien beauty was still there — the glowing fungi, the chiming flowers — but now it felt like a mask."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1190
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.03361344537815126
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.008403361344537815
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences119
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences119
mean12.95
std8.19
cv0.632
sampleLengths
016
130
220
311
421
55
68
79
812
914
105
1119
1210
1320
1429
159
167
178
1828
1917
2021
2117
225
2313
2417
2512
269
276
2813
2914
304
3115
3228
338
3412
355
3620
3731
3813
394
404
414
4225
432
447
459
466
4711
4817
4911
60.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.3949579831932773
totalSentences119
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences93
matches
0"Further in, the trees began"
1"Then, like ink dispersing in"
2"Then, a figure — large,"
3"Then the image fractured."
ratio0.043
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences93
matches
0"It wasn’t just the smell"
1"It was neither day nor"
2"Her silver hair seemed to"
3"She left no footprints in"
4"They reached out a hand"
5"She knelt by the pool,"
6"Her voice sounded too loud"
7"It hovered for a second,"
8"It wasn’t fear, not exactly."
9"It was the feeling of"
10"She’d only just noticed."
11"She placed a hand on"
12"They emerged from the tunnel"
13"It looked like a tree"
14"Its walls were woven from"
15"It was a void."
16"Her ageless face was unreadable."
17"She moved to the pedestal"
18"She breathed a word onto"
19"His face was indistinct, but"
ratio0.269
62.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount74
totalSentences93
matches
0"The air in the clearing"
1"It wasn’t just the smell"
2"The late afternoon light, which"
3"It was neither day nor"
4"Nyx’s whisper brushed against her"
5"Isolde walked ahead of them,"
6"Her silver hair seemed to"
7"She left no footprints in"
8"The grove unfolded around them."
9"Trees Rory didn’t recognize towered"
10"The ground underfoot was spongy"
11"Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic profusion"
12"Isolde said without turning"
13"Rory kept her hands close"
14"The Heartstone pendant against her"
15"Nyx flowed past her, their"
16"They reached out a hand"
17"The water looked clear, but"
18"She knelt by the pool,"
19"Her voice sounded too loud"
ratio0.796
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences93
matches
0"As if the grove was"
1"To the side of the"
ratio0.022
30.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"It wasn’t just the smell — from damp London park to something like crushed mint and wet stone — but the weight of it, as if the atmosphere had thickened."
1"The late afternoon light, which had been a flat November grey outside the stones, bled into a soft, perpetual twilight."
2"Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic profusion — star-shaped blossoms of silver, bell-like flowers that chimed softly in a breeze Rory couldn’t feel, and ones that lo…"
3"A door, shaped from a single curved piece of wood that looked both incredibly old and still alive, stood slightly ajar."
4"She breathed a word onto the water’s surface, a sound that had no English equivalent, all soft consonants and bell-like vowels."
5"Then, a figure — large, imposing, seated on a throne that seemed carved from marbled fat and gemstones."
6"The scene shifted to a long table groaning under platters of fantastical food, and around it, figures eating with a desperate, frantic intensity that had nothin…"
7"The cool-headed logic that had gotten her through law tutorials and Evan’s tirades kicked in."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Rory said, her voice firm"
89.39% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags11
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Rory murmured (murmur)"
1"Isolde acknowledged (acknowledge)"
dialogueSentences33
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.121
80.3618%