Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ1329V4MQT34FJJ2RSAH6

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Duration:
10.9s
Cost:
$0.042850
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora's hand froze on the doorknob, her breath catching in her throat. The three deadbolts clinked as she unlocked them, each sound echoing louder than the last in the cramped hallway. She swung the door open, and there he stood — Lucien Moreau, the Frenchman, the half-demon who had once turned her world upside down. "Rory," he said, his voice smooth as silk, yet carrying an edge that sent shivers down her spine. "Lucien," she replied, her tone colder than she intended. "What are you doing here?" He stepped inside without waiting for an invitation, his tailored charcoal suit brushing against her as he passed. The scent of his cologne, a mix of sandalwood and something darker, filled the small space. Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, hissed and darted under the sofa. "I need your help," Lucien said, turning to face her. His heterochromatic eyes — one amber, one black — bore into hers, searching for something she wasn't ready to give. "Help?" Aurora scoffed, crossing her arms over her chest. "The last time you needed my help, I ended up with a knife in my back." Lucien's gaze flickered to the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, a reminder of a childhood accident, but also of the more recent wounds he'd inflicted. "That was a misunderstanding," he said, his voice softer now, almost pleading. "A misunderstanding?" Aurora's laugh was bitter. "You left me to die, Lucien." He took a step closer, his cane tapping lightly on the wooden floor. "I had no choice. You know that." "There's always a choice," she shot back, her eyes narrowing. "You just didn't choose me." Silence hung heavy between them, the weight of their shared past pressing down on them both. Aurora's heart pounded in her chest, a mix of anger and something else — something she didn't want to acknowledge. "I made a mistake," Lucien admitted, his voice barely above a whisper. "But I'm here now, asking for your help. Please, Rory." She hated the way her name sounded on his lips, hated the way it made her feel. Vulnerable. Exposed. "What do you want?" she asked, her voice hardening. Lucien reached into his coat pocket and pulled out a small, ornate box. He opened it to reveal a delicate silver necklace, the pendant shaped like a crescent moon. "This," he said, holding it out to her. "It's a key. To something... important." Aurora eyed the necklace warily. "And why should I care?" "Because," Lucien said, his eyes locking onto hers, "it's the only thing that can save your friend Eva." Her blood ran cold. "Eva? What have you done?" "Nothing," he said quickly. "But she's in danger. Real danger. And this necklace is the only way to protect her." Aurora's mind raced. Eva was the one person she trusted, the one person who had stood by her through everything. If she was in danger, Aurora had no choice but to act. But trusting Lucien again? That was a different matter entirely. "Why should I believe you?" she asked, her voice trembling despite her best efforts to keep it steady. "Because," Lucien said, stepping closer until they were inches apart, "I owe you. And I never break a debt." His words hung in the air, a promise and a challenge all at once. Aurora's heart warred with her mind, the old wounds reopening, the old feelings resurfacing. She wanted to push him away, to slam the door in his face and never look back. But she couldn't. Not if Eva's life was at stake. "Fine," she said, snatching the necklace from his hand. "But if you betray me again, Lucien, I will kill you." A ghost of a smile played on his lips. "Understood." Aurora turned away, her mind already racing with plans and contingencies. She couldn't afford to let her guard down, not with Lucien involved. But as she felt the weight of the necklace in her hand, she couldn't help but wonder if this was the beginning of something new, or the end of everything she held dear. "Let's get this over with," she said, her voice firm. Lucien nodded, his eyes never leaving hers. "After you, Rory." She led him through the cluttered flat, past the stacks of books and scrolls that covered every surface. Ptolemy peeked out from under the sofa, his green eyes wide with curiosity and fear. Aurora couldn't blame him. Having Lucien back in her life was like inviting a storm into a fragile glass house. They reached the small kitchen, where Aurora set the necklace on the table. "Start talking," she said, crossing her arms again. "What kind of danger is Eva in?" Lucien took a deep breath, his gaze flickering to the necklace. "There's a group," he began, "a cult, really. They call themselves the Children of Avaros. They're after something — or someone — with a connection to the demon realm. Eva fits their criteria." Aurora's stomach churned. "And this necklace?" "It's a ward," Lucien explained. "It can protect her from their influence, but only if she wears it." "Why didn't you give it to her yourself?" Aurora asked, suspicion lacing her words. "Because," Lucien said, his eyes darkening, "they're watching me. If I go near her, they'll know. But you... they don't know about you." Aurora's mind raced. It made sense, in a twisted way. But that didn't make it any easier to swallow. "And what do you get out of this?" she asked, her voice sharp. "Redemption," Lucien said simply. "A chance to make things right." Aurora studied him, searching for any sign of deceit. But all she saw was a man haunted by his past, a man desperate for a second chance. She wanted to believe him, wanted to trust him. But trust was a luxury she couldn't afford. "Fine," she said finally. "I'll take the necklace to Eva. But if this is some kind of trap, Lucien, I swear—" "It's not," he interrupted, his voice earnest. "I promise you, Rory. I just want to keep her safe." Aurora nodded, though her heart remained heavy with doubt. "Then let's go." Lucien followed her to the door, his cane tapping softly on the floor. As they stepped out into the hallway, Aurora couldn't shake the feeling that she was walking into a storm. But for Eva's sake, she had no choice but to face it head-on. "Stay close," she said, glancing back at Lucien. "Always," he replied, a hint of a smile on his lips. And as they descended the stairs, Aurora couldn't help but wonder if this was the beginning of a new chapter, or the final act in a story that had started long ago. Either way, there was no turning back now.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
84.62% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"he said quickly [quickly]"
1"Lucien said simply [simply]"
2"she said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.553
leniency1
rawRatio0.115
effectiveRatio0.115
73.26% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"warily"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count1
4
adverb"really"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"warily"
3"quickly"
4"really"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
37.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1122
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"sent shivers down"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
6
word"weight"
count2
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"raced"
count2
9
word"racing"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"churned"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"silk"
2"sent shivers down"
3"flickered"
4"reminder"
5"silence"
6"weight"
7"whisper"
8"raced"
9"racing"
10"stomach"
11"churned"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches6
maxInWindow5
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"blood ran cold"
count1
2
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
3
label"couldn't help but"
count2
4
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"blood ran cold"
2"stomach churned"
3"couldn't help but wonder"
4"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences80
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1125
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions28
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount833
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.16
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Lucien17
Moreau1
Frenchman1
Eva4
Aurora18
Silence1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Aurora"
4"Silence"
places(empty)
globalScore0.42
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
22.22% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.778
wordCount1125
matches
0"no choice but"
1"no choice but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences100
matches
0"scrolls that covered"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean25.57
std14.73
cv0.576
sampleLengths
055
118
214
344
430
525
639
712
820
915
1036
1122
1228
1343
1410
1518
169
1720
1842
1918
2019
2155
2220
2310
2456
2510
2610
2753
2828
2944
306
3118
3214
3323
3432
3510
3644
3721
3818
3912
4045
418
4211
4340
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs161
matches
0"was walking"
57.14% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences100
ratio0.03
matches
0"She swung the door open, and there he stood — Lucien Moreau, the Frenchman, the half-demon who had once turned her world upside down."
1"His heterochromatic eyes — one amber, one black — bore into hers, searching for something she wasn't ready to give."
2"Aurora's heart pounded in her chest, a mix of anger and something else — something she didn't want to acknowledge."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount832
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.026442307692307692
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009615384615384616
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean11.25
std6.75
cv0.6
sampleLengths
012
119
224
318
49
55
618
716
810
910
1020
119
1216
1327
1412
156
166
1713
187
1910
205
2116
2220
2312
2410
2517
261
271
289
2913
3016
318
326
335
345
3518
364
375
384
3916
403
4117
4212
434
446
4518
4619
4714
4814
4917
69.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.42
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners42
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
62.11% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences76
matches
0"She swung the door open,"
1"he said, his voice smooth"
2"she replied, her tone colder"
3"He stepped inside without waiting"
4"His heterochromatic eyes — one"
5"he said, his voice softer"
6"He took a step closer,"
7"she shot back, her eyes"
8"She hated the way her"
9"she asked, her voice hardening"
10"He opened it to reveal"
11"he said, holding it out"
12"Her blood ran cold."
13"he said quickly"
14"she asked, her voice trembling"
15"His words hung in the"
16"She wanted to push him"
17"she said, snatching the necklace"
18"She couldn't afford to let"
19"she said, her voice firm"
ratio0.395
45.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences76
matches
0"Aurora's hand froze on the"
1"The three deadbolts clinked as"
2"She swung the door open,"
3"he said, his voice smooth"
4"she replied, her tone colder"
5"He stepped inside without waiting"
6"The scent of his cologne,"
7"Ptolemy, Eva's tabby cat, hissed"
8"Lucien said, turning to face"
9"His heterochromatic eyes — one"
10"Aurora scoffed, crossing her arms"
11"Lucien's gaze flickered to the"
12"he said, his voice softer"
13"Aurora's laugh was bitter"
14"He took a step closer,"
15"she shot back, her eyes"
16"Silence hung heavy between them,"
17"Aurora's heart pounded in her"
18"Lucien admitted, his voice barely"
19"She hated the way her"
ratio0.829
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"If she was in danger,"
1"Either way, there was no"
ratio0.026
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She swung the door open, and there he stood — Lucien Moreau, the Frenchman, the half-demon who had once turned her world upside down."
1"And as they descended the stairs, Aurora couldn't help but wonder if this was the beginning of a new chapter, or the final act in a story that had started long …"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount13
matches
0"she replied, her tone colder than she intended"
1"Lucien said, turning to face her"
2"he said, his voice softer now, almost pleading"
3"she shot back, her eyes narrowing"
4"Lucien admitted, his voice barely above a whisper"
5"she asked, her voice hardening"
6"Lucien said, his eyes locking onto hers,"
7"she said, her voice firm"
8"Aurora asked, suspicion lacing her words"
9"Lucien said, his eyes darkening,"
10"she asked, her voice sharp"
11"he interrupted, his voice earnest"
12"he replied, a hint of a smile on his lips"
86.17% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Lucien admitted (admit)"
1"Lucien explained (explain)"
2"he interrupted (interrupt)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.489
leniency0.979
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.128
75.4401%