Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ1P8PKF4VKMESJBVT92WN

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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--- The door swung open before the first knock could fully connect with wood. A gust of cold, damp air rushed in, carrying the scent of wet pavement and something sharper—ozone, like the second before a storm breaks. The flat’s dim bulb flickered, casting long, jagged shadows across the threshold. Rory stood there, one hand on the doorframe, the other clutching a battered leather satchel against her chest. Her breath hitched, just once, but the way her fingers tightened around the strap told him everything. Lucien didn’t move. Didn’t breathe. Just stood in the hallway, his cane tapping once against the floorboards, the blade inside it gleaming dully in the dim light. He’d come straight from the docks, the salt still clinging to his cuffs, his suit coat damp at the shoulders. The fabric clung to him like a second skin, the charcoal grey of it now streaked with grime. “You’re wet,” she said. It wasn’t a question. “You look like you’ve been waiting for me.” A beat. The air between them crackled, thick with something neither of them named. Rory’s throat worked, but she didn’t step back. Didn’t invite him in. Just stood there, her black hair falling in a loose wave over one shoulder, the scar on her wrist catching the light. The same scar that had once been a secret, then a confession, then a weapon. Lucien exhaled through his nose, slow and controlled. “I’ve got a lead on the package you were after.” “You’re here about the *package*?” Her voice sharpened, just enough to sting. “Or are you here to finish what you started?” The words hung between them, sharp as broken glass. His jaw tightened. “I’m here because you left me no choice.” She laughed, low and bitter. “Oh, I left you plenty of choices, *Lucien*. You just never made a good one.” The flat was small, cramped with the kind of clutter that came from living above a bar—takeaway menus, half-empty bottles of whiskey, the faint scent of fried onions from Silas’ kitchen below. Rory’s things were scattered: a pile of unwashed laundry on the couch, a laptop open on the coffee table, its screen dark. The only sign of life was Ptolemy, the tabby cat, who had the audacity to saunter into the room and immediately begin licking his paw with the air of a man who had just won the lottery. “He’s judging you,” Rory murmured, nodding at the cat. “He’s judging *me* for being here.” Lucien’s voice was smooth, but there was an edge to it, like steel wrapped in silk. He set his satchel down on the nearest surface, a small wooden table by the window. The glass was fogged with condensation, the view of Brick Lane blurred. “You didn’t answer my messages.” “Because I didn’t want to talk to you.” She crossed her arms, her sleeve riding up just enough to reveal the crescent scar again. “And because I didn’t want you to know where I was.” “You think I don’t know where you are?” His eyes flicked to the scar, then back to her face. “You think I don’t know *everything* about you?” Rory’s breath hitched. The air between them thickened, pressing down like a physical weight. She swallowed hard, her pulse hammering in her throat. “What do you want, Lucien?” He didn’t answer right away. Instead, he reached into his satchel and pulled out a manila envelope. It was sealed with a wax stamp, the wax cracked and yellowed at the edges. “This.” She didn’t take it. Just watched him, her blue eyes wide and unblinking. “What is it?” “A ledger.” His voice was quiet, deliberate. “Names. Dates. Places. Everything you asked for.” Rory’s fingers twitched at her sides. “You found it.” “Found it.” He tossed it onto the table. The envelope landed with a soft *thud*, the wax seal broken. “But it’s not just a ledger. It’s a *map*. And it leads to something bigger than you realised.” She reached for it, her hand hovering just above the paper. “How much?” “Not for sale.” His voice was cold, final. “But I’ll tell you where to find it. For a price.” Rory’s laugh was sharp, derisive. “You always did have a way with words, didn’t you? ‘For a price’—as if I haven’t been paying for your favours since the day we met.” Lucien’s gaze darkened. “You’re the one who walked away, Rory. You’re the one who left me with nothing.” She flinched, just slightly, but it was enough. Enough to make his chest tighten, to make the blade inside his cane ache with the memory of her touch. “I didn’t have a choice.” “You always had a choice.” His voice dropped, rougher now. “You just didn’t want to make the right one.” The words hung between them, heavy and loaded. Rory’s breath came faster, her chest rising and falling too quickly. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “What do you want from me, Lucien?” He stepped closer, the cane tapping against the floorboards. Close enough that he could see the flecks of gold in her irises, close enough to smell the faint scent of lavender soap she used, close enough to feel the heat radiating off her skin. “I want you to listen.” She didn’t answer. Just stood there, her body tense, her fingers curled into fists at her sides. The silence stretched between them, thick and suffocating. Lucien exhaled, slow and steady. “There’s a name in that ledger. A name you’ve been looking for. A name that could change everything.” Rory’s breath hitched. “Who?” “Evan.” The name hung between them, heavy and loaded. Rory’s body went still, every muscle coiling tight. “Evan’s dead.” “Is he?” Lucien’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “Or is he just *gone*?” Rory’s fingers tightened around the edge of the table. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” “Do I not?” He reached into his satchel again, this time pulling out a photograph. It was faded, the edges yellowed with age. In it, a younger Evan stood beside a younger Rory, their arms slung around each other’s shoulders, their smiles bright and unguarded. “This was taken three years ago. The night before you left London.” Rory’s breath caught in her throat. She reached out, her hand trembling as she took the photograph. “Where did you get this?” “Does it matter?” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “You ran, Rory. You left everything behind. And now you want to pretend like it never happened.” She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “You don’t know what happened.” “I know enough.” His voice was rough, raw. “I know you didn’t just walk away from him. You *ran*. And I know why.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the floor, to the pile of laundry, to anything but him. “It doesn’t matter anymore.” “Doesn’t it?” Lucien stepped closer, his cane tapping against the floorboards. “Because if it doesn’t, then why are you still looking for him?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “I’m not looking for him.” “Then why are you here?” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “Why are you back in London?” She didn’t answer. Just stood there, her body tense, her fingers curled into fists at her sides. The silence stretched between them, thick and suffocating. Lucien exhaled, slow and steady. “Because you think you can outrun the past, Rory. But you can’t. And neither can he.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t know what you’re talking about.” “Do you not?” Lucien stepped closer, his cane tapping against the floorboards. Close enough that he could see the flecks of gold in her irises, close enough to smell the faint scent of lavender soap she used, close enough to feel the heat radiating off her skin. “Because I know where he is. And I know what he’s doing.” Rory’s breath caught in her throat. She reached out, her hand trembling as she took the photograph. “Where?” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “He’s not just in London anymore. He’s in Paris. And he’s not alone.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “What do you mean?” “He’s got people there. People who want the same thing you do.” Lucien’s voice dropped, rougher now. “Power. Control. And they’re not afraid to use violence to get it.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the photograph. “I don’t believe you.” “Do you not?” Lucien stepped closer, his cane tapping against the floorboards. “Because I’ve seen what he’s capable of. And I’ve seen what he’s done to people who cross him.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t care.” “Do you not?” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “Because if you don’t, then you’re already dead.” The words hung between them, heavy and loaded. Rory’s breath came faster, her chest rising and falling too quickly. She looked up at him, her blue eyes wide and unblinking. “What do you want from me?” Lucien exhaled, slow and steady. “I want you to come with me.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “Why?” “Because you’re not safe here.” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “And because I need your help.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the photograph. “What kind of help?” “To find him.” Lucien’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “To bring him back.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “Why?” “Because he’s not the only one who’s been looking for you.” Lucien’s voice dropped, rougher now. “And if he finds you first, you won’t like what he does to you.” Rory’s breath caught in her throat. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t believe you.” “Do you not?” Lucien stepped closer, his cane tapping against the floorboards. Close enough that he could see the flecks of gold in her irises, close enough to smell the faint scent of lavender soap she used, close enough to feel the heat radiating off her skin. “Because I’ve seen what he’s capable of. And I’ve seen what he’s done to people who cross him.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the photograph. “I don’t care.” “Do you not?” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “Because if you don’t, then you’re already dead.” The door behind her creaked open, the sound sharp and sudden. Rory turned, her breath catching in her throat. Standing in the doorway was a man, his face half-hidden in shadow. He was tall, broad-shouldered, his presence filling the doorway like a physical force. His eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle. “Rory,” the man said. His voice was rough, gravelly, like gravel underfoot. “I’ve been looking for you.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “Evan.” The man stepped into the room, his gaze flicking between Rory and Lucien. “It’s been a long time.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “What are you doing here?” Evan’s gaze darkened. “I came to take you home.” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “You don’t belong here.” Evan’s gaze flicked to Lucien, then back to Rory. “I’ve missed you, Rory.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t want to go back.” Evan’s voice was rough, gravelly. “You don’t have a choice.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “She does.” Evan’s gaze darkened. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “I know what I want.” Evan’s voice was low, dangerous. “And what’s that?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “Freedom.” Evan’s gaze darkened. “Freedom?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and unblinking. “Yes.” Evan’s voice was rough, gravelly. “You don’t understand what you’re asking for.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I understand more than you think.” Evan’s gaze darkened. “Do you?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “Yes.” Evan’s voice was low, dangerous. “Then come with me.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I can’t.” Evan’s gaze darkened. “You can.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and unblinking. “No.” Evan’s voice was rough, gravelly. “You don’t have a choice.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “She does.” Evan’s gaze flicked to Lucien, then back to Rory. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I know what I want.” Evan’s voice was low, dangerous. “And what’s that?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “Freedom.” The door behind them slammed shut, the sound echoing through the flat like a gunshot. Rory turned, her breath catching in her throat. Standing in the doorway was a woman, her face half-hidden in shadow. She was tall, her presence filling the doorway like a physical force. Her eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle. “Rory,” the woman said. Her voice was smooth, almost amused. “I’ve been waiting for you.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “Eva.” Eva stepped into the room, her gaze flicking between Rory and Lucien. “It’s been a long time.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at her, her eyes wide and wild. “What are you doing here?” Eva’s gaze darkened. “I came to help you.” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “You don’t belong here.” Eva’s gaze flicked to Lucien, then back to Rory. “I’ve missed you, Rory.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t want your help.” Eva’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “You don’t have a choice.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “She does.” Eva’s gaze darkened. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at Eva, her eyes wide and unblinking. “I know what I want.” Eva’s voice was low, dangerous. “And what’s that?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “Freedom.” Eva’s gaze darkened. “Freedom?” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at Eva, her eyes wide and wild. “Yes.” Eva’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “Then come with me.” The flat seemed to hold its breath, the air thick with tension. Rory looked between Eva, Evan, and Lucien, her mind racing. She took a step back, her fingers curling into fists at her sides. “I can’t.” Eva’s voice was low, dangerous. “You can.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “No.” Evan’s voice was rough, gravelly. “You don’t have a choice.” Lucien’s body tensed, his fingers curling around the handle of his cane. “She does.” Eva’s gaze darkened. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at them, her eyes wide and unblinking. “I do.” The door behind them creaked open again, the sound sharp and sudden. Rory turned, her breath catching in her throat. Standing in the doorway was a man, his face half-hidden in shadow. He was tall, broad-shouldered, his presence filling the doorway like a physical force. His eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle. “Rory,” the man said. His voice was rough, gravelly, like gravel underfoot. “I’ve been waiting for you.” The room seemed to spin. Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and wild. “Who are you?” The man stepped into the room, his gaze flicking between Rory and the others. “I’m the one who can help you find what you’re looking for.” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “Who the hell are you?” The man’s gaze darkened. “Someone who knows more than you think.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass. “I don’t need your help.” The man’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “You don’t have a choice.” The flat seemed to hold its breath, the air thick with tension. Rory looked between them all, her mind racing. She took a step back, her fingers curling into fists at her sides. “I can’t.” The man’s voice was low, dangerous. “You can.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked up at him, her eyes wide and unblinking. “No.” The door slammed shut behind them, the sound echoing through the flat like a gunshot. Rory turned, her breath catching in her throat. The room was filled with faces, all of them watching her with intensity, all of them waiting for her to make a choice. She looked at Lucien, his amber and black eyes burning with something she couldn’t name. She looked at Eva, her sharp features softened by something like concern. She looked at Evan, his cold gaze filled with something darker. And she looked at the man in the doorway, his presence a physical force in the room. Rory took a deep breath. She looked at each of them in turn, her mind racing. She knew what she wanted. She knew what she had to do. “Fine,” she said, her voice steady despite the storm inside her. “But I’m doing this on my terms.” The room fell silent, the air thick with tension. Rory looked at each of them in turn, her gaze unwavering. “And I want answers.” Lucien’s voice was low, dangerous. “You’ll get them.” Evan’s voice was rough, gravelly. “You’ll get what you deserve.” Eva’s voice was smooth, almost amused. “You’ll get what you need.” The man in the doorway stepped forward, his gaze locking onto Rory’s. “You’ll get what you’re looking for.” Rory’s breath hitched. She looked at each of them, her mind racing. She knew what she had to do. She knew what she had to say. “Then let’s go,” she said, her voice steady. “Before it’s too late.”
total_cost0.0008705

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Her voice sharpened just [just]"
dialogueSentences161
tagDensity0.124
leniency0.248
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.012
95.22% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3136
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.14% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3136
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"gleaming"
count1
2
word"silk"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count4
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"silence"
count2
7
word"intensity"
count4
8
word"echoing"
count2
9
word"tension"
count3
10
word"racing"
count4
11
word"unwavering"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"gleaming"
2"silk"
3"flicked"
4"weight"
5"pulse"
6"silence"
7"intensity"
8"echoing"
9"tension"
10"racing"
11"unwavering"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"room fell silent"
count1
highlights
0"The room fell silent"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences247
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences247
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences378
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords8
totalWords3128
ratio0.003
matches
0"package"
1"Lucien"
2"me"
3"everything"
4"thud"
5"map"
6"gone"
7"ran"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions146
wordCount2255
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.93
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory66
Ptolemy1
Lucien38
Brick1
Lane1
Evan18
Close3
Eva15
Standing3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Lucien"
2"Evan"
3"Eva"
places
0"Brick"
1"Lane"
globalScore0.037
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences156
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"something like concern"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount3128
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences378
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs148
mean21.14
std15.52
cv0.734
sampleLengths
01
113
271
365
48
58
663
718
821
920
1020
1191
129
1355
1435
1527
1628
1733
1816
1914
209
2137
2213
2319
2431
2518
2633
2719
2841
2949
3025
3123
324
331
3418
3513
3616
3757
3822
3925
4015
4123
4225
4323
4418
4516
4625
4721
4825
4959
98.16% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences247
matches
0"were scattered"
1"was fogged"
2"was sealed"
3"was faded"
4"was filled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs414
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences378
ratio0.005
matches
0"A gust of cold, damp air rushed in, carrying the scent of wet pavement and something sharper—ozone, like the second before a storm breaks."
1"The flat was small, cramped with the kind of clutter that came from living above a bar—takeaway menus, half-empty bottles of whiskey, the faint scent of fried onions from Silas’ kitchen below."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2091
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount78
adverbRatio0.03730272596843615
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.005738880918220947
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences378
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences378
mean8.27
std5.97
cv0.722
sampleLengths
013
124
212
318
417
53
62
722
820
918
104
114
128
132
1412
158
164
1722
1815
198
2010
2112
229
239
243
258
265
2715
2832
2922
3037
319
3222
3316
3412
355
3624
3711
3819
398
403
4111
429
435
445
4512
4615
471
484
499
46.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.12698412698412698
totalSentences378
uniqueOpeners48
81.97% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount6
totalSentences244
matches
0"Just stood in the hallway,"
1"Just stood there, her black"
2"Instead, he reached into his"
3"Just watched him, her blue"
4"Just stood there, her body"
5"Just stood there, her body"
ratio0.025
87.21% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount81
totalSentences244
matches
0"Her breath hitched, just once,"
1"He’d come straight from the"
2"It wasn’t a question."
3"Her voice sharpened, just enough"
4"His jaw tightened."
5"She laughed, low and bitter."
6"He set his satchel down"
7"She crossed her arms, her"
8"His eyes flicked to the"
9"She swallowed hard, her pulse"
10"He didn’t answer right away."
11"It was sealed with a"
12"She didn’t take it."
13"His voice was quiet, deliberate"
14"He tossed it onto the"
15"She reached for it, her"
16"His voice was cold, final"
17"She flinched, just slightly, but"
18"His voice dropped, rougher now"
19"She looked away, her gaze"
ratio0.332
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount228
totalSentences244
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"A gust of cold, damp"
2"The flat’s dim bulb flickered,"
3"Rory stood there, one hand"
4"Her breath hitched, just once,"
5"Lucien didn’t move."
6"He’d come straight from the"
7"The fabric clung to him"
8"It wasn’t a question."
9"The air between them crackled,"
10"Rory’s throat worked, but she"
11"The same scar that had"
12"Lucien exhaled through his nose,"
13"Her voice sharpened, just enough"
14"The words hung between them,"
15"His jaw tightened."
16"She laughed, low and bitter."
17"The flat was small, cramped"
18"Rory’s things were scattered: a"
19"The only sign of life"
ratio0.934
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences244
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences98
technicalSentenceCount20
matches
0"Just stood there, her black hair falling in a loose wave over one shoulder, the scar on her wrist catching the light."
1"Rory’s breath came faster, her chest rising and falling too quickly."
2"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
3"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
4"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
5"Rory’s breath came faster, her chest rising and falling too quickly."
6"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
7"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
8"His eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle."
9"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
10"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
11"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
12"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
13"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
14"Her eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle."
15"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
16"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
17"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
18"His eyes were cold, hard, and they locked onto Rory’s with an intensity that made her skin prickle."
19"She looked away, her gaze flicking to the window, to the rain streaking the glass."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"He reached, this time pulling out a photograph"
1"Lucien stepped, his cane tapping against the floorboards"
2"Lucien stepped, his cane tapping against the floorboards"
3"Lucien stepped, his cane tapping against the floorboards"
4"Lucien stepped, his cane tapping against the floorboards"
5"she said, her voice steady despite the storm inside her"
6"she said, her voice steady"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences161
tagDensity0.043
leniency0.087
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.012
78.9753%