Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ6RGMJK39HZ289HMVYE5P

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3.4s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The lock clicked with a sharp *snap*, the sound like a blade unsheathing. Aurora pressed her back against the doorframe, her pulse hammering against her ribs. The flat was too quiet—no cat to mewl, no distant hum of the kitchen. Just the creak of the floorboards under Lucien’s boots. Then the door swung open. He stood there, his tailored suit already rumpled from the journey, his cane tapping against the floor like a metronome counting down to something inevitable. His amber eyes locked onto hers, and for a heartbeat, the air between them thickened, charged with the same unspoken tension that had always lingered between them. “You shouldn’t have come,” she said, voice tight. Lucien didn’t flinch. “No.” The flat smelled of something faintly metallic—old wine, maybe, or the faintest trace of something darker. His fingers brushed the doorknob, then stopped, as if he’d forgotten how to move. “I thought you’d want to know.” Aurora exhaled sharply. “About what?” He didn’t answer. Just turned, his back to her, and walked toward the kitchen. The flat’s single window was dark, the only light coming from the streetlamps outside, casting long shadows that stretched like fingers across the floor. She followed, her heels clicking against the linoleum. “You’re here because of Eva,” she said, voice low. Lucien didn’t look back. “She’s in trouble.” “And you’re here to fix it?” He spun, his cane raised just enough to keep her in his line of sight. “I’m here to make sure she doesn’t die.” A cold knot settled in Aurora’s stomach. “You know her.” “She’s my friend.” “And you’re her fixer.” The words tasted bitter. “You always have been.” Lucien’s jaw tightened. “She’s not just a job.” “Then what is she?” He didn’t answer. Instead, he reached for the coffee machine, the one she’d bought him last year, the one he’d never used. The machine whirred to life, steam curling into the air like a ghost. He poured two cups, the liquid dark and bitter, the way he always was when he was tense. Aurora took a seat at the small kitchen table, her fingers tracing the scar on her wrist—the one that should’ve been healed long ago. “You’re not the only one who’s been keeping secrets.” Lucien’s eyes flicked to her wrist. “I know.” “About Eva.” “About you.” “What about me?” He set his cup down with deliberate slowness. “You were always the one who ran.” “And you were the one who chased.” His gaze darkened. “I was the one who stopped you.” The words hung between them, sharp as a blade. Aurora leaned forward, her elbows on the table. “You stopped me from what?” Lucien’s voice was a rasp. “From leaving.” The flat felt suddenly too small, the air thick with the weight of all the things they’d never said. The cat, Ptolemy, padded in from the hallway, his tail flicking as he sniffed the air, as if sensing the storm brewing. Aurora reached out, and he leaped onto the table, pressing his warm body against her leg. Lucien’s fingers twitched near his cane. “Eva’s been taken.” Aurora’s breath hitched. “Who?” “Someone who knows what she knows.” The words sent a jolt through her. “And you’re sure it’s not just some random abduction?” Lucien’s expression was unreadable. “I’m sure.” She stood abruptly, her chair scraping against the floor. “Then we need to move fast.” Lucien didn’t move. “You’re coming with me.” Aurora’s stomach twisted. “I’m not leaving again.” “You have to.” “Why?” “Because if she dies, you’ll never forgive yourself.” The words struck like a punch to the gut. She turned away, her fingers digging into the edge of the table. “And what if I don’t?” Lucien’s voice was a growl. “Then I’ll make sure you regret it.”
total_cost0.00020439999999999998

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.081
leniency0.162
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount629
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"sharply"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"sharply"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
20.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount629
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"pulse"
count1
1
word"charged"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"stomach"
count2
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"unreadable"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"charged"
2"unspoken"
3"tension"
4"stomach"
5"tracing"
6"flicked"
7"weight"
8"unreadable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a jolt through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences46
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences46
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences80
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords626
ratio0.002
matches
0"snap"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
42.01% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount463
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity2.16
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Lucien10
Aurora8
Ptolemy1
persons
0"Lucien"
1"Aurora"
2"Ptolemy"
places(empty)
globalScore0.42
windowScore0.667
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences29
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if sensing the storm brewing"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount626
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean14.9
std15.52
cv1.042
sampleLengths
049
15
252
38
44
536
65
746
89
97
106
1123
1210
133
1412
158
164
1753
1833
198
202
212
223
2315
247
2510
2622
277
2857
299
304
316
3216
336
3415
357
367
373
381
398
4026
4112
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences46
matches
0"been healed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs81
matches(empty)
35.71% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences80
ratio0.038
matches
0"The flat was too quiet—no cat to mewl, no distant hum of the kitchen."
1"The flat smelled of something faintly metallic—old wine, maybe, or the faintest trace of something darker."
2"Aurora took a seat at the small kitchen table, her fingers tracing the scar on her wrist—the one that should’ve been healed long ago."
95.57% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount466
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.045064377682403435
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.01072961373390558
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences80
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences80
mean7.83
std6.09
cv0.779
sampleLengths
013
113
214
39
45
525
627
78
83
91
1016
1114
126
133
142
153
1611
1724
188
199
204
213
226
2315
248
257
263
273
288
294
303
315
324
333
3419
3513
3618
3724
389
396
402
412
422
433
448
457
467
473
487
499
47.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.275
totalSentences80
uniqueOpeners22
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences46
matches
0"Just the creak of the"
1"Then the door swung open."
2"Just turned, his back to"
3"Instead, he reached for the"
ratio0.087
98.26% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences46
matches
0"He stood there, his tailored"
1"His amber eyes locked onto"
2"she said, voice tight"
3"His fingers brushed the doorknob,"
4"He didn’t answer."
5"She followed, her heels clicking"
6"she said, voice low"
7"He spun, his cane raised"
8"He didn’t answer."
9"He poured two cups, the"
10"He set his cup down"
11"His gaze darkened."
12"She stood abruptly, her chair"
13"She turned away, her fingers"
ratio0.304
3.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount42
totalSentences46
matches
0"The lock clicked with a"
1"Aurora pressed her back against"
2"The flat was too quiet—no"
3"He stood there, his tailored"
4"His amber eyes locked onto"
5"she said, voice tight"
6"Lucien didn’t flinch."
7"The flat smelled of something"
8"His fingers brushed the doorknob,"
9"Aurora exhaled sharply."
10"He didn’t answer."
11"The flat’s single window was"
12"She followed, her heels clicking"
13"she said, voice low"
14"Lucien didn’t look back."
15"He spun, his cane raised"
16"A cold knot settled in"
17"The words tasted bitter"
18"Lucien’s jaw tightened."
19"He didn’t answer."
ratio0.913
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences46
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"He stood there, his tailored suit already rumpled from the journey, his cane tapping against the floor like a metronome counting down to something inevitable."
1"His amber eyes locked onto hers, and for a heartbeat, the air between them thickened, charged with the same unspoken tension that had always lingered between th…"
2"The flat’s single window was dark, the only light coming from the streetlamps outside, casting long shadows that stretched like fingers across the floor."
3"The cat, Ptolemy, padded in from the hallway, his tail flicking as he sniffed the air, as if sensing the storm brewing."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she said, voice tight"
1"she said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.054
leniency0.108
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
76.2857%