Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ75BKMTQ4ETFVNAYF0KA7

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36.5s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt clicked like a gunshot. Rory stood in the doorway, her fingers still curled around the key, her bright blue eyes wide. The scent of curry from downstairs curled around her ankles, thick and cloying, but the air between them was colder than a January frost. Lucien Moreau leaned against the doorframe of Eva’s flat, his heterochromatic gaze—one amber, one black—fixed on her with the precision of a predator. The ivory handle of his cane gleamed under the dim hallway light, the blade inside it no doubt just as sharp as the tension between them. “You’re not Eva,” Rory said, her voice steadier than she felt. “No,” Lucien replied, his French accent smooth as aged whisky. “But I do bring news.” She didn’t move. Didn’t invite him in. The three deadbolts on the door suddenly felt like a joke. “News that couldn’t wait until morning?” “News that couldn’t wait for *you* to decide when you’d grace me with your presence again.” His lips quirked, but there was no humour in it. Just the barest edge of something darker—something that sent a shiver down her spine. Rory exhaled through her nose, stepping back just enough to let him in. The flat was exactly as she remembered it: books stacked on every available surface, scrolls unrolled across the coffee table, Ptolemy the tabby cat glaring at Lucien from his perch on the armchair like he was considering whether to scratch his eyes out. The door clicked shut behind them, sealing them in. Lucien didn’t sit. He never did when he was working. Instead, he prowled the small space, his tailored charcoal suit moving with him like a second skin. “You’ve been avoiding me.” “No,” Rory said, crossing her arms. “I’ve been *busy*.” “Busy delivering dumplings?” His gaze flicked to the Golden Empress logo on her jacket, then back to her face. “Or busy pretending the last three months didn’t happen?” The crescent-shaped scar on her wrist throbbed. A childhood accident, her mother had called it. But some accidents left deeper marks than others. “What do you want, Lucien?” He stopped in front of her, close enough that she could see the faintest shadow of stubble along his jaw. Close enough that she could smell the bergamot and gunpowder scent that always clung to him. “I want to know why you ran.” “I didn’t run.” “You *vanished*.” His voice dropped, low and dangerous. “One day you were there, the next—poof. No note, no explanation. Just gone.” Rory’s pulse jumped. She forced herself to meet his gaze, even as the weight of everything unsaid pressed down on her. “I had my reasons.” “Reasons you couldn’t share with me?” “Would you have listened?” His jaw tightened. “Try me.” A beat of silence. Ptolemy chose that moment to leap down from the chair and wind himself around Lucien’s legs, purring like a traitor. Lucien didn’t look away from Rory as he reached down to scratch the cat’s ears. “You always did have terrible taste in allies.” Rory’s fingers curled into fists. “And you always did have a habit of assuming you know what’s best for everyone.” “Someone has to.” He straightened, the movement fluid, controlled. “Because you certainly don’t.” The words hit like a slap. Rory’s breath came faster, her chest tight. “You don’t get to judge me.” “Don’t I?” Lucien stepped closer, his cane tapping against the floor. “You left without a word. You ignored my calls. You acted like I was the enemy when all I ever did was—” “What?” Rory snapped. “What did you ever do, Lucien? Besides lie to me? Besides treat me like some fragile thing that needed fixing?” His expression darkened. “I never lied to you.” “You didn’t tell me the truth either.” “And what truth was that, *chérie*?” The endearment rolled off his tongue like a curse. “That I wanted you? That I still do? That every time I close my eyes, I see your face?” Rory’s breath caught. The air between them crackled, charged with something far more dangerous than anger. Her pulse roared in her ears, her skin suddenly too hot, too tight. She should have stepped back. Should have put distance between them. She didn’t. Lucien’s gaze dropped to her mouth. “You feel it too.” “No,” she whispered. “Liar.” His hand came up, fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—light, almost reverent. Rory’s breath hitched. The touch was electric, sending a jolt straight through her. She should have pulled away. Should have told him to leave. Instead, she leaned in. Lucien’s fingers slid up her arm, his touch searing through the fabric of her jacket. His other hand found her waist, pulling her flush against him. The cane clattered to the floor, forgotten. Rory’s hands fisted in his lapels, her body betraying her as she arched into him. “This changes nothing,” she breathed. Lucien’s lips curved, sharp and knowing. “Everything.” And then he kissed her. It wasn’t gentle. It wasn’t sweet. It was fire and fury, years of tension and unsaid words pouring into that single, searing moment. Rory kissed him back just as fiercely, her nails digging into his shoulders as if she could anchor herself to him. His tongue swept into her mouth, hot and demanding, and Rory moaned against him, her body melting into his. Lucien’s hands slid down to cup her arse, lifting her effortlessly. Rory wrapped her legs around his waist, her back hitting the wall with a thud. The books on the shelves rattled, but neither of them cared. Lucien’s mouth left hers, trailing scorching kisses down her throat, his teeth grazing her pulse point. Rory gasped, her head falling back against the wall. “Lucien—” “Say my name again,” he growled against her skin. “Lucien.” His hands tightened on her, his breath hot against her collarbone. “Again.” “Lucien, *please*—” A sharp knock at the door shattered the moment. Rory froze. Lucien’s head snapped up, his eyes black with hunger—and something else. Something darker. The knock came again, louder this time. “Rory?” Eva’s voice, muffled through the wood. “You in there?” Rory’s heart hammered against her ribs. She unwrapped her legs from Lucien’s waist, her body protesting as he set her down. Lucien’s hands lingered on her hips, his breath ragged. The doorknob rattled. “Rory, I know you’re in there. Open up.” Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers, his expression unreadable. Then, slowly, he bent to retrieve his cane. The blade inside it glinted as he straightened, his voice a low murmur. “This isn’t over.” Rory swallowed hard, her lips still tingling from his kiss. “It never is with you.” The door burst open. Eva stood in the doorway, her dark eyes flicking between them, her expression thunderous. “What the *hell* is going on here?” Lucien adjusted his cuffs, his composure slipping back into place like a second skin. “Ah, Eva. Perfect timing, as always.” Eva’s glare could have melted steel. “Get out.” Lucien smirked, brushing past her. “Ladies.” The moment the door clicked shut behind him, Eva rounded on Rory. “What the *actual fuck*, Rory?” Rory’s hands trembled as she reached for the nearest book, flipping it open to a random page. Her voice was steadier than she felt. “It’s not what it looks like.” Eva scoffed. “It looks like you were *two seconds* from riding Lucien Moreau against the wall.” Rory’s face burned. “Eva—” “No.” Eva held up a hand. “I don’t want to hear it. Not right now.” She stormed into the kitchen, yanking open the fridge. The clink of glass followed as she pulled out a bottle of wine. “But you *will* explain. Eventually.” Rory exhaled, her body still humming from Lucien’s touch. The taste of him lingered on her lips, the ghost of his hands on her skin. She closed her eyes, her fingers pressing against her mouth. This wasn’t over. Not even close.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.276
leniency0.552
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
88.59% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1315
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1315
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"predator"
count1
1
word"tension"
count2
2
word"down her spine"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count3
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"charged"
count1
9
word"electric"
count1
10
word"searing"
count2
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"unreadable"
count1
13
word"perfect"
count1
14
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"predator"
1"tension"
2"down her spine"
3"flicked"
4"throbbed"
5"pulse"
6"weight"
7"silence"
8"charged"
9"electric"
10"searing"
11"shattered"
12"unreadable"
13"perfect"
14"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences105
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences147
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords11
totalWords1308
ratio0.008
matches
0"you"
1"busy"
2"vanished"
3"chérie"
4"please"
5"hell"
6"actual fuck"
7"two seconds"
8"will"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
34.65% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount997
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.31
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
January1
Moreau1
Eva7
Lucien19
French1
Ptolemy2
Golden1
Empress1
Rory23
persons
0"January"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Lucien"
4"Ptolemy"
5"Rory"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore0.347
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a joke"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1308
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences147
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean20.44
std18.48
cv0.904
sampleLengths
06
190
211
315
424
540
665
731
89
928
1028
1143
123
1321
1425
156
164
175
1847
1920
2013
2119
2233
2323
248
257
2634
2740
282
2910
303
311
3237
334
3448
355
367
375
3863
3962
401
419
421
4312
442
459
4622
4710
4830
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences105
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs173
matches
0"was considering"
1"was working"
65.11% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences147
ratio0.027
matches
0"Lucien Moreau leaned against the doorframe of Eva’s flat, his heterochromatic gaze—one amber, one black—fixed on her with the precision of a predator."
1"Just the barest edge of something darker—something that sent a shiver down her spine."
2"His hand came up, fingers brushing the scar on her wrist—light, almost reverent."
3"Lucien’s head snapped up, his eyes black with hunger—and something else."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1003
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.03788634097706879
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005982053838484547
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences147
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences147
mean8.9
std6.53
cv0.734
sampleLengths
06
117
224
323
426
511
610
75
83
94
1011
116
1226
1314
1413
1543
169
173
187
1917
204
216
223
2319
249
257
268
278
285
2920
3016
317
323
338
3413
353
3618
374
386
394
403
412
424
4320
4415
458
465
4715
489
494
45.92% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.29931972789115646
totalSentences147
uniqueOpeners44
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences98
matches
0"Just the barest edge of"
1"Instead, he prowled the small"
2"Instead, she leaned in."
3"Then, slowly, he bent to"
ratio0.041
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences98
matches
0"She didn’t move."
1"His lips quirked, but there"
2"He never did when he"
3"His gaze flicked to the"
4"He stopped in front of"
5"His voice dropped, low and"
6"She forced herself to meet"
7"His jaw tightened."
8"He straightened, the movement fluid,"
9"His expression darkened."
10"Her pulse roared in her"
11"She should have stepped back."
12"His hand came up, fingers"
13"She should have pulled away."
14"His other hand found her"
15"It wasn’t gentle."
16"It wasn’t sweet."
17"It was fire and fury,"
18"His tongue swept into her"
19"he growled against her skin"
ratio0.255
16.12% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences98
matches
0"The deadbolt clicked like a"
1"Rory stood in the doorway,"
2"The scent of curry from"
3"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
4"The ivory handle of his"
5"Rory said, her voice steadier"
6"Lucien replied, his French accent"
7"She didn’t move."
8"The three deadbolts on the"
9"His lips quirked, but there"
10"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
11"The flat was exactly as"
12"The door clicked shut behind"
13"Lucien didn’t sit."
14"He never did when he"
15"Rory said, crossing her arms"
16"His gaze flicked to the"
17"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
18"A childhood accident, her mother"
19"He stopped in front of"
ratio0.888
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
ratio0
89.29% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences40
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Just the barest edge of something darker—something that sent a shiver down her spine."
1"Rory kissed him back just as fiercely, her nails digging into his shoulders as if she could anchor herself to him."
2"Lucien’s mouth left hers, trailing scorching kisses down her throat, his teeth grazing her pulse point."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"Rory said, her voice steadier than she felt"
1"Lucien replied, his French accent smooth as aged whisky"
2"Lucien stepped, his cane tapping against the floor"
81.03% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Rory snapped (snap)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
2"she breathed (breathe)"
3"he growled (growl)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.121
leniency0.241
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.138
82.6576%