Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZ9FSXT066W0C1W1SYV7SJ

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
--- The door swung open with a *creak*—too loud in the dead silence of the flat above Silas’ bar. A gust of cold air rushed in, carrying the sharp tang of rain and something sharper: the scent of expensive cologne, the kind that clung to skin like a promise. “You’re late.” The voice was smooth, polished, the kind of accent that slid between words like oil between gears. A hand, long-fingered and too elegant for this part of town, rested on the doorframe, fingers curled just enough to suggest restraint. Or perhaps it was just the way he held himself—always poised, always in control. Rory didn’t look up from the takeout bag she’d just set on the counter. “You’re early.” A pause. The air between them thickened, charged. Then, the slow, deliberate click of the door closing behind him. “Lucien.” The name tasted like ash on her tongue. She kept her back to him, fingers tightening around the plastic handle of the bag. The takeout from Golden Empress—Yu-Fei’s favorite—was still warm, the steam curling just enough to make her stomach growl. She hadn’t eaten since lunch. “You’re not supposed to be here.” His boots made no sound on the linoleum. Close. Too close. The scent of him—leather, something citrus, the faint metallic tang of the cane he never let her forget—filled her lungs. “Neither are you,” he said, voice dropping just low enough to vibrate against her skin. “But here I am.” Rory exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-frustration. She turned, finally, and the sight of him stole her breath. Tailored charcoal suit, the lapels just sharp enough to make her fingers itch to undo them. Platinum blond hair slicked back, the way it always was, like he’d spent an hour in front of a mirror perfecting the illusion of effortlessness. One hand still rested on the doorframe, the other—*God*, the other—clasped the ivory cane, the blade hidden beneath the polished wood a promise she’d never forget. “What do you want, Lucien?” His lips quirked, just once, a ghost of a smile. “The same thing I always want, Rory. You.” The words hit her like a slap. She should’ve been offended. Should’ve thrown something at him. Instead, her pulse jumped, betraying her. “You’re delusional.” “Am I?” He stepped forward, close enough that she could see the faintest flecks of gold in his amber eye, the way the black one seemed to swallow the light. “Because the last time we spoke, you were the one begging me not to leave.” Her fingers twitched toward the scar on her wrist, the one that had been a reminder of his touch for years. She flexed them into a fist. “That was different.” “Was it?” He tilted his head, just slightly, the way he always did when he was amused. “Or was it just easier to pretend you didn’t like it when I was gone?” Rory’s jaw clenched. She should’ve walked away. Should’ve called the police. Should’ve done anything but stand here, breathing him in like a fool. “You’re not here to make nice,” she said, voice steadier than she felt. “What do you want?” His gaze flicked to the takeout bag, then back to her. “Dinner.” “With me?” “With you.” The word was a promise, a threat. “I’ve been watching you, Rory. Delivering for Golden Empress. Working your little job. You look tired.” She scoffed, but her chest ached at the admission. “I’m fine.” “You’re not.” He stepped closer, close enough that she could feel the heat radiating off him, close enough that she had to tilt her chin up to meet his gaze. “You’ve been running. And running burns you out.” Rory’s hands curled into fists at her sides. “I don’t need your help.” “No.” His voice dropped, rougher now, like he was fighting something. “But you need *me*.” The words should’ve made her flinch. Should’ve made her step back. Instead, her body leaned into the space between them, as if drawn by some invisible thread. “You’re impossible.” “And you’re stubborn.” His fingers twitched toward her, just an inch away from brushing against her wrist. “But I like that about you.” Rory’s breath hitched. She should’ve pulled away. Should’ve done something. Instead, she found herself reaching up, her fingers closing around his wrist before she could stop herself. “What are you doing?” she whispered. His thumb traced the crescent scar on her wrist, the one that had been there since she was a child, the one he’d never asked about. “Remembering.” Her pulse hammered in her throat. “Don’t.” “Why not?” His voice was a velvet rasp. “You’ve been carrying it for years. Let me help you carry it.” Rory’s breath came faster. She could feel the heat of him, the way his body was angled just so, like he was waiting for her to make the first move. She should’ve been terrified. Should’ve been furious. Instead, all she could think about was the way his fingers felt against her skin, the way his gaze locked onto hers like he was memorizing every detail. “You’re a liar,” she said, voice barely above a whisper. “Am I?” He leaned in, close enough that she could feel his breath against her lips. “Or are you just afraid to admit you’ve missed me?” Rory’s heart pounded in her chest. She should’ve pushed him away. Should’ve done something. Instead, she found herself closing the distance between them, her lips brushing against his in a kiss that was desperate, hungry. Lucien groaned, his hands cupping her face, his thumb brushing against her cheekbone. “God, Rory.” She pulled back just enough to look at him, her fingers tangling in the fabric of his suit jacket. “What now?” His lips curved into a slow, knowing smile. “Now? Now we eat. And then we talk.” Rory’s stomach growled, betraying her. She pulled away, just slightly, and Lucien’s grin widened. “Hungry, are we?” She shot him a look, but the corner of her mouth twitched. “I’m always hungry when you’re around.” His laugh was low, dark, and full of promise. “Good.” He reached for the takeout bag, his fingers brushing against hers as he pulled it toward the table. Rory watched him, her pulse still racing, her body still humming with the aftershocks of his touch. “You’re going to regret this,” she said, though her voice lacked conviction. Lucien’s gaze flicked to her, sharp and assessing. “I don’t think so.” He pulled out a chair, gesturing for her to sit. Rory hesitated, then took the seat across from him. The table between them felt like a chasm, but the air between them was thick with something else—something electric, something dangerous. Lucien opened the takeout bag, pulling out two cartons of dumplings. The scent of soy sauce and garlic filled the air, making her stomach growl again. “Yu-Fei’s dumplings,” he said, nodding approvingly. “I see you’ve been keeping up your standards.” Rory picked up a dumpling, taking a bite. The flavors exploded on her tongue—spicy, savory, just the way she liked them. She swallowed, then looked up at Lucien, who was watching her with an intensity that made her skin prickle. “What?” she asked, though she knew exactly what he was thinking. “You’re beautiful when you eat.” Rory’s cheeks flushed. She took another bite, chewing slowly, savoring the moment. The silence between them was thick, charged, full of unspoken words and promises. Lucien reached across the table, his fingers brushing against hers as he took a dumpling from her carton. Their eyes locked, and for a moment, the world narrowed down to just the two of them. “You’re still stubborn,” he murmured, his voice rough with something she couldn’t name. “And you’re infuriating,” she shot back, but her smile betrayed her. Lucien’s lips quirked, just slightly. “Infuriating, but worth it.” Rory’s breath hitched. She should’ve been angry. Should’ve been furious. Instead, she found herself leaning in, her lips brushing against his in another kiss, quick and desperate. Lucien groaned, his hands tangling in her hair, pulling her closer. The table rattled beneath them, the takeout cartons forgotten as they lost themselves in the moment. When they finally pulled apart, Rory’s chest heaved, her breath coming in ragged gasps. Lucien’s gaze was dark, intense, his fingers still tangled in her hair. “You’re trouble,” she whispered. “And you’re mine,” he murmured back, his lips brushing against hers once more before pulling away. Rory’s heart pounded in her chest. She should’ve been terrified. Should’ve been furious. Instead, she found herself leaning into him, her body pressing against his, her fingers tangling in the fabric of his suit jacket. “What now?” she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. Lucien’s lips curved into a slow, knowing smile. “Now? Now we eat. And then we talk.” Rory’s stomach growled again, betraying her. She pulled away, just slightly, and Lucien’s grin widened. “Hungry, are we?” She shot him a look, but the corner of her mouth twitched. “I’m always hungry when you’re around.” Lucien’s laugh was low, dark, and full of promise. “Good.” He reached for the takeout bag, his fingers brushing against hers as he pulled it toward the table. Rory watched him, her pulse still racing, her body still humming with the aftershocks of his touch. The table between them felt like a chasm, but the air between them was thick with something else—something electric, something dangerous. Lucien opened the takeout bag, pulling out two cartons of dumplings. The scent of soy sauce and garlic filled the air, making her stomach growl again. “Yu-Fei’s dumplings,” he said, nodding approvingly. “I see you’ve been keeping up your standards.” Rory picked up a dumpling, taking a bite. The flavors exploded on her tongue—spicy, savory, just the way she liked them. She swallowed, then looked up at Lucien, who was watching her with an intensity that made her skin prickle. “What?” she asked, though she knew exactly what he was thinking. “You’re beautiful when you eat.” Rory’s cheeks flushed. She took another bite, chewing slowly, savoring the moment. The silence between them was thick, charged, full of unspoken words and promises. Lucien reached across the table, his fingers brushing against hers as he took a dumpling from her carton. Their eyes locked, and for a moment, the world narrowed down to just the two of them. “You’re still stubborn,” he murmured, his voice rough with something she couldn’t name. “And you’re infuriating,” she shot back, but her smile betrayed her. Lucien’s lips quirked, just slightly. “Infuriating, but worth it.” Rory’s breath hitched. She should’ve been angry. Should’ve been furious. Instead, she found herself leaning in, her lips brushing against his in another kiss, quick and desperate. Lucien groaned, his hands tangling in her hair, pulling her closer. The table rattled beneath them, the takeout cartons forgotten as they lost themselves in the moment. When they finally pulled apart, Rory’s chest heaved, her breath coming in ragged gasps. Lucien’s gaze was dark, intense, his fingers still tangled in her hair. “You’re trouble,” she whispered. “And you’re mine,” he murmured back, his lips brushing against hers once more before pulling away. Rory’s heart pounded in her chest. She could feel the heat of his gaze on her, the way his body was still pressed against hers, the way his fingers were still tangled in her hair. “What now?” she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. Lucien’s lips curved into a slow, knowing smile. “Now? Now we eat. And then we talk.” Rory’s stomach growled again, betraying her. She pulled away, just slightly, and Lucien’s grin widened. “Hungry, are we?” She shot him a look, but the corner of her mouth twitched. “I’m always hungry when you’re around.” Lucien’s laugh was low, dark, and full of promise. “Good.” He reached for the takeout bag, his fingers brushing against hers as he pulled it toward the table. Rory watched him, her pulse still racing, her body still humming with the aftershocks of his touch. The flat seemed smaller, the air thicker, as if the walls themselves were holding their breath. Lucien’s gaze never left hers, his fingers tracing idle patterns on the tabletop, each one sending a shiver down her spine. “You’re not leaving,” she said, more a statement than a question. Lucien’s lips twitched. “I don’t think so.” Rory exhaled sharply, her fingers tightening around the edge of the table. “You’re going to regret this.” “Am I?” His voice was a purr, low and dangerous. “Because the last time I checked, you were the one who couldn’t stay away.” She wanted to argue. Wanted to tell him he was wrong. But the words died in her throat as his gaze locked onto hers, dark and unyielding. “You always were a liar,” she muttered, though her voice lacked conviction. Lucien’s grin was slow, deliberate. “And you always were a fool for me.” Rory’s breath hitched. She should’ve been furious. Should’ve been terrified. Instead, she found herself leaning forward, her fingers brushing against his wrist, her thumb tracing the faint scar that ran along the inside of his forearm—the one she’d given him, years ago, in a moment of reckless passion. “What now?” she asked, her voice barely a whisper. Lucien’s fingers twitched, his gaze dropping to where their hands met. “Now?” His voice was rough, strained. “Now we finish what we started.” Rory’s pulse jumped. She should’ve been afraid. Should’ve been cautious. Instead, she found herself nodding, just slightly, her fingers curling around his wrist, pulling him closer. Lucien’s breath hitched. His gaze locked onto hers, dark and intense, his fingers tangling in her hair, pulling her closer still. “Now?” he repeated, his voice a growl. “Now we burn.” And just like that, the world narrowed down to the two of them, the table between them forgotten, the takeout cartons abandoned. The only thing that mattered was the heat of his touch, the way his lips brushed against hers, the way his body pressed against hers, the way his fingers tangled in her hair, pulling her closer still. Rory’s breath came in ragged gasps. She could feel the heat of him, the way his body was angled just so, the way his fingers were still tangled in her hair, the way his gaze never left hers. “Now?” she whispered, her voice barely audible. Lucien’s lips curved into a slow, knowing smile. “Now we start again.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags31
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he murmured back [back]"
1"he murmured back [back]"
dialogueSentences87
tagDensity0.356
leniency0.713
rawRatio0.065
effectiveRatio0.046
73.04% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2411
totalAiIsmAdverbs13
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count7
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count3
2
adverb"slowly"
count2
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"slowly"
3"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
6.68% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2411
totalAiIsms45
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"charged"
count3
2
word"stomach"
count6
3
word"pulse"
count6
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"jaw clenched"
count1
6
word"flicked"
count2
7
word"could feel"
count5
8
word"traced"
count1
9
word"velvet"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count4
11
word"racing"
count3
12
word"electric"
count2
13
word"intensity"
count2
14
word"unspoken"
count2
15
word"tracing"
count2
16
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"charged"
2"stomach"
3"pulse"
4"reminder"
5"jaw clenched"
6"flicked"
7"could feel"
8"traced"
9"velvet"
10"whisper"
11"racing"
12"electric"
13"intensity"
14"unspoken"
15"tracing"
16"down her spine"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count3
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences184
matches
0"was desperate"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences184
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences237
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords2396
ratio0.001
matches
0"creak"
1"God"
2"me"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions71
wordCount2032
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.38
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Yu1
Fei1
Rory28
Lucien27
Should12
persons
0"Fei"
1"Rory"
2"Lucien"
3"Should"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore0.811
windowScore0.667
77.01% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences137
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"tasted like ash on her tongue"
1"felt like a chasm, but the air between"
2"felt like a chasm, but the air between"
3"seemed smaller the air thicker, as if the walls themselves were holding their breath"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount2396
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences237
matches
0"like that, the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs118
mean20.31
std13.76
cv0.678
sampleLengths
01
148
22
353
416
519
61
746
86
931
1019
1122
1267
135
1418
1522
162
1745
1827
193
2032
2123
2217
2312
242
2525
2611
2738
2813
2915
3027
312
3223
3327
346
3527
367
3720
3865
3910
4026
4135
4215
4321
4416
4514
463
4718
4810
4935
91.91% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences184
matches
0"been offended"
1"was amused"
2"was angled"
3"been terrified"
4"been terrified"
5"been terrified"
6"was angled"
53.08% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount8
totalVerbs363
matches
0"was fighting"
1"was waiting"
2"was memorizing"
3"was watching"
4"was thinking"
5"was watching"
6"was thinking"
7"were holding"
22.30% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences237
ratio0.042
matches
0"The door swung open with a *creak*—too loud in the dead silence of the flat above Silas’ bar."
1"Or perhaps it was just the way he held himself—always poised, always in control."
2"The takeout from Golden Empress—Yu-Fei’s favorite—was still warm, the steam curling just enough to make her stomach growl."
3"The scent of him—leather, something citrus, the faint metallic tang of the cane he never let her forget—filled her lungs."
4"One hand still rested on the doorframe, the other—*God*, the other—clasped the ivory cane, the blade hidden beneath the polished wood a promise she’d never forget."
5"The table between them felt like a chasm, but the air between them was thick with something else—something electric, something dangerous."
6"The flavors exploded on her tongue—spicy, savory, just the way she liked them."
7"The table between them felt like a chasm, but the air between them was thick with something else—something electric, something dangerous."
8"The flavors exploded on her tongue—spicy, savory, just the way she liked them."
9"Instead, she found herself leaning forward, her fingers brushing against his wrist, her thumb tracing the faint scar that ran along the inside of his forearm—the one she’d given him, years ago, in a moment of reckless passion."
86.61% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount217
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.055299539170506916
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences237
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences237
mean10.11
std7.13
cv0.706
sampleLengths
018
130
22
317
422
514
614
72
82
96
1011
111
128
1315
1418
155
166
178
181
192
2020
2115
224
2311
2411
2516
2625
2726
285
2910
308
317
324
335
346
352
3630
3715
3821
396
403
4117
4215
433
444
454
4612
4713
484
4911
47.05% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.17721518987341772
totalSentences237
uniqueOpeners42
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount11
totalSentences178
matches
0"Then, the slow, deliberate click"
1"Instead, her pulse jumped, betraying"
2"Instead, her body leaned into"
3"Instead, she found herself reaching"
4"Instead, all she could think"
5"Instead, she found herself closing"
6"Instead, she found herself leaning"
7"Instead, she found herself leaning"
8"Instead, she found herself leaning"
9"Instead, she found herself leaning"
10"Instead, she found herself nodding,"
ratio0.062
51.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount75
totalSentences178
matches
0"She kept her back to"
1"She hadn’t eaten since lunch."
2"His boots made no sound"
3"he said, voice dropping just"
4"She turned, finally, and the"
5"His lips quirked, just once,"
6"She should’ve been offended."
7"He stepped forward, close enough"
8"Her fingers twitched toward the"
9"She flexed them into a"
10"He tilted his head, just"
11"She should’ve walked away."
12"she said, voice steadier than"
13"His gaze flicked to the"
14"She scoffed, but her chest"
15"He stepped closer, close enough"
16"His voice dropped, rougher now,"
17"His fingers twitched toward her,"
18"She should’ve pulled away."
19"His thumb traced the crescent"
ratio0.421
47.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount147
totalSentences178
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"A gust of cold air"
2"The voice was smooth, polished,"
3"A hand, long-fingered and too"
4"Rory didn’t look up from"
5"The air between them thickened,"
6"The name tasted like ash"
7"She kept her back to"
8"The takeout from Golden Empress—Yu—Fei’s"
9"She hadn’t eaten since lunch."
10"His boots made no sound"
11"The scent of him—leather, something"
12"he said, voice dropping just"
13"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
14"She turned, finally, and the"
15"Platinum blond hair slicked back,"
16"His lips quirked, just once,"
17"The words hit her like"
18"She should’ve been offended."
19"He stepped forward, close enough"
ratio0.826
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences178
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences75
technicalSentenceCount18
matches
0"A gust of cold air rushed in, carrying the sharp tang of rain and something sharper: the scent of expensive cologne, the kind that clung to skin like a promise."
1"Rory exhaled through her nose, a sound that was half-laugh, half-frustration."
2"Instead, she found herself reaching up, her fingers closing around his wrist before she could stop herself."
3"Instead, she found herself closing the distance between them, her lips brushing against his in a kiss that was desperate, hungry."
4"Lucien groaned, his hands cupping her face, his thumb brushing against her cheekbone."
5"Lucien reached across the table, his fingers brushing against hers as he took a dumpling from her carton."
6"Instead, she found herself leaning in, her lips brushing against his in another kiss, quick and desperate."
7"Lucien groaned, his hands tangling in her hair, pulling her closer."
8"Instead, she found herself leaning into him, her body pressing against his, her fingers tangling in the fabric of his suit jacket."
9"Lucien reached across the table, his fingers brushing against hers as he took a dumpling from her carton."
10"Instead, she found herself leaning in, her lips brushing against his in another kiss, quick and desperate."
11"Lucien groaned, his hands tangling in her hair, pulling her closer."
12"The flat seemed smaller, the air thicker, as if the walls themselves were holding their breath."
13"Lucien’s gaze never left hers, his fingers tracing idle patterns on the tabletop, each one sending a shiver down her spine."
14"Instead, she found herself leaning forward, her fingers brushing against his wrist, her thumb tracing the faint scar that ran along the inside of his forearm—th…"
15"Instead, she found herself nodding, just slightly, her fingers curling around his wrist, pulling him closer."
16"His gaze locked onto hers, dark and intense, his fingers tangling in her hair, pulling her closer still."
17"The only thing that mattered was the heat of his touch, the way his lips brushed against hers, the way his body pressed against hers, the way his fingers tangle…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags31
uselessAdditionCount16
matches
0"he said, voice dropping just low enough to vibrate against her skin"
1"she said, voice steadier than she felt"
2"she said, voice barely above a whisper"
3"she said, though her voice lacked conviction"
4"he murmured, his voice rough with something she couldn’t name"
5"she shot back, but her smile betrayed her"
6"he murmured back, his lips brushing against hers once more before pulling away"
7"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
8"he murmured, his voice rough with something she couldn’t name"
9"she shot back, but her smile betrayed her"
10"he murmured back, his lips brushing against hers once more before pulling away"
11"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
12"she muttered, though her voice lacked conviction"
13"she asked, her voice barely a whisper"
14"he repeated, his voice a growl"
15"she whispered, her voice barely audible"
35.06% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"he murmured (murmur)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"he murmured back (murmur)"
4"he murmured (murmur)"
5"she whispered (whisper)"
6"he murmured back (murmur)"
7"she muttered (mutter)"
8"he repeated (repeat)"
9"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences87
tagDensity0.253
leniency0.506
rawRatio0.455
effectiveRatio0.23
70.8203%