Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZAAY0W7VRENGVGPJP2W63

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Duration:
30.0s
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$0.017516

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt scraped back with a sound like a blade being drawn. Aurora stood in the doorway, one hand still on the chain, the other gripping the edge of the door so tightly her knuckles had turned white. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist pulsed faintly, as if remembering the last time she’d seen him. The scent of curry from the restaurant below curled around her ankles, thick and cloying, but it was the man on her doorstep who made her throat go dry. Lucien Moreau leaned against the doorframe, his ivory-handled cane resting lightly against his thigh. The amber of his left eye glinted in the dim hallway light, sharp as a blade, while the black of his right seemed to swallow the space around it. He wore one of his tailored charcoal suits, the fabric so dark it looked like it had been cut from the night itself. A single platinum strand of hair had escaped its slicked-back prison, curling against his temple in a way that made her fingers twitch with the memory of how soft it had been. “Rory,” he said, and his voice was the same—smooth, low, with that faint French lilt that had always made her name sound like a promise. Or a threat. She didn’t answer. The chain stayed latched. Lucien exhaled through his nose, a sound that might have been amusement if it hadn’t been so carefully controlled. “May I come in?” “No.” “You don’t even know why I’m here.” “I don’t care.” A beat of silence. Then, softer, “Liar.” The word landed like a punch. She flinched, just slightly, but he saw it. Of course he saw it. Lucien missed nothing. That was the problem. Aurora unlatched the chain. The flat was exactly as he remembered it—cramped, cluttered, every surface buried under books and scrolls and half-empty mugs of tea gone cold. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, was curled on the armchair, tail flicking in lazy disdain. He didn’t so much as open an eye as Lucien stepped inside, shutting the door behind him with a quiet click. “Eva’s not here,” Aurora said, crossing her arms. The movement pulled her black shirt taut across her shoulders, and she hated that she noticed the way his gaze flicked down, then back up. “I know.” He tapped the cane against his palm, the ivory handle catching the light. “I came to see you.” “Why?” “Because you’ve been avoiding me.” “I’ve been busy.” “For three months?” She turned away, busying herself with the kettle. The clatter of it hitting the counter was louder than she intended. “What do you want, Lucien?” He didn’t answer right away. Instead, he moved deeper into the flat, his fingers trailing over the spines of books, the edges of scrolls. His cane left faint indentations in the carpet. “You left in the middle of the night.” Aurora’s hands stilled. “You were asleep.” “Convenient.” “It was easier that way.” “For you, perhaps.” He turned, his heterochromatic eyes locking onto hers. “I woke up to an empty bed and a note that said *I can’t do this* in your neat little handwriting.” The kettle whistled, shrill and sudden. She yanked it off the burner, sloshing water over her fingers. The burn was sharp, grounding. “What did you expect? You knew what I was. What I am.” “A human.” “Yes.” “And?” “And *that’s* the problem.” She spun around, the words spilling out before she could stop them. “You’re half-demon, Lucien. You live in a world of shadows and deals and things that go bump in the night. I deliver takeaway for a living.” “You’re also the only person who’s ever outsmarted me in a negotiation.” “That’s not the point.” “Isn’t it?” He took a step closer. The scent of him—bergamot and something darker, something that made her think of midnight in Marseille—wrapped around her. “You’re brilliant, Rory. Resourceful. Quick. You think I haven’t noticed the way you move through this city like a ghost? The way you see things no one else does?” “It doesn’t matter.” She swallowed. “I can’t—we can’t—” “Can’t what?” His voice dropped, low and dangerous. “Can’t want me? Can’t need me? Can’t admit that you feel this too?” Her breath hitched. The air between them was thick, charged, like the moment before a storm breaks. She wanted to step back. She wanted to step forward. She wanted to scream. Instead, she said, “You don’t get to show up here after three months and act like nothing’s changed.” “Everything’s changed.” His fingers brushed against her wrist, just below the scar. A whisper of a touch. “You think I don’t know what it cost you to walk away? You think I didn’t spend every night since wondering if I’d ever see you again?” Her pulse jumped beneath his fingers. “Lucien—” “No.” His grip tightened, just for a second, before he let go. “You don’t get to run this time.” The flat was too small. The walls were closing in. Aurora backed up until her spine hit the counter, the edge digging into her skin. “What do you want from me?” “Everything.” The word was a growl, a demand, a plea. “I want your sharp tongue and your quicker mind. I want your secrets and your scars. I want the woman who looks at me like I’m not a monster, even when I am.” Her chest ached. “And what do I get?” Lucien went still. Then, slowly, he reached into his jacket and pulled out a folded sheet of paper. He held it out to her. Aurora took it. The paper was thick, expensive, the kind used for contracts. Her fingers trembled as she unfolded it. It was a deed. To a flat in Soho. Not the cramped space above Silas’ bar, not Eva’s cluttered one-bedroom, but something new. Something *hers*. “What is this?” she whispered. “A start.” His voice was rough. “If you want it.” She looked up. His face was unreadable, but his eyes burned. “And if I don’t?” “Then I’ll walk out that door.” A pause. “But I won’t stop trying.” The silence stretched between them, taut as a wire. Aurora’s heart hammered against her ribs. She could say no. She could tell him to leave. She could go back to her life—the deliveries, the late nights, the careful, controlled existence where no one could hurt her because she never let them close enough to try. But then Lucien reached out, his thumb brushing over her bottom lip, and all her careful control shattered. “Yes,” she breathed. His mouth crashed into hers before she could take it back.
total_cost0.017516

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She spun around [around]"
1"His grip tightened just [just]"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.255
leniency0.51
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.078
77.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1111
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"tightly"
count1
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"tightly"
1"lightly"
2"carefully"
3"slightly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
50.50% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1111
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"pulsed"
count1
1
word"lilt"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"trembled"
count1
8
word"unreadable"
count1
9
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"lilt"
2"silence"
3"flicked"
4"charged"
5"whisper"
6"pulse"
7"trembled"
8"unreadable"
9"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences80
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences114
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords6
totalWords1100
ratio0.005
matches
0"I can’t do this"
1"that’s"
2"hers"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount769
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.91
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
French1
Eva1
Lucien6
Marseille1
Soho1
Aurora7
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
3"Aurora"
places
0"Marseille"
1"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
36.36% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if remembering the last time she’d seen him"
1"looked like it had been cut from the nigh"
18.18% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.818
wordCount1100
matches
0"Not the cramped space above Silas’ bar, not Eva’s cluttered one-bedroom, but something new"
1"not Eva’s cluttered one-bedroom, but something new"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences114
matches
0"hated that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean20.37
std20.02
cv0.983
sampleLengths
012
173
298
328
47
523
61
77
83
97
1026
114
1258
1333
1420
151
165
173
183
1925
2040
216
221
235
2432
2534
262
271
281
2942
3012
314
3254
338
3421
3531
3618
3744
387
3919
4031
4143
428
4324
4420
4525
465
4710
4815
4913
96.49% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences80
matches
0"being drawn"
1"was curled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs138
matches
0"were closing"
42.61% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences114
ratio0.035
matches
0"“Rory,” he said, and his voice was the same—smooth, low, with that faint French lilt that had always made her name sound like a promise."
1"The flat was exactly as he remembered it—cramped, cluttered, every surface buried under books and scrolls and half-empty mugs of tea gone cold."
2"The scent of him—bergamot and something darker, something that made her think of midnight in Marseille—wrapped around her."
3"She could go back to her life—the deliveries, the late nights, the careful, controlled existence where no one could hurt her because she never let them close enough to try."
90.10% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount682
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.051319648093841645
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010263929618768328
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences114
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences114
mean9.65
std8.03
cv0.833
sampleLengths
012
126
218
329
414
529
623
732
825
93
103
114
1219
134
141
157
163
174
183
196
208
215
223
234
244
2523
2614
2721
288
2925
3015
315
321
335
343
353
368
3712
385
395
4019
418
428
433
443
451
465
4711
4821
496
43.86% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3157894736842105
totalSentences114
uniqueOpeners36
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences74
matches
0"Of course he saw it."
1"Instead, he moved deeper into"
2"Instead, she said,"
3"Then, slowly, he reached into"
ratio0.054
47.03% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences74
matches
0"He wore one of his"
1"he said, and his voice"
2"She didn’t answer."
3"She flinched, just slightly, but"
4"He didn’t so much as"
5"He tapped the cane against"
6"She turned away, busying herself"
7"He didn’t answer right away."
8"His cane left faint indentations"
9"He turned, his heterochromatic eyes"
10"She yanked it off the"
11"She spun around, the words"
12"He took a step closer"
13"His voice dropped, low and"
14"Her breath hitched."
15"She wanted to step back."
16"She wanted to step forward."
17"She wanted to scream."
18"His fingers brushed against her"
19"Her pulse jumped beneath his"
ratio0.432
14.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences74
matches
0"The deadbolt scraped back with"
1"Aurora stood in the doorway,"
2"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
3"The scent of curry from"
4"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
5"The amber of his left"
6"He wore one of his"
7"A single platinum strand of"
8"he said, and his voice"
9"She didn’t answer."
10"The chain stayed latched."
11"Lucien exhaled through his nose,"
12"A beat of silence."
13"The word landed like a"
14"She flinched, just slightly, but"
15"Lucien missed nothing."
16"That was the problem."
17"Aurora unlatched the chain."
18"The flat was exactly as"
19"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, was"
ratio0.892
67.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"To a flat in Soho."
ratio0.014
23.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences24
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist pulsed faintly, as if remembering the last time she’d seen him."
1"The scent of curry from the restaurant below curled around her ankles, thick and cloying, but it was the man on her doorstep who made her throat go dry."
2"A single platinum strand of hair had escaped its slicked-back prison, curling against his temple in a way that made her fingers twitch with the memory of how so…"
3"The scent of him—bergamot and something darker, something that made her think of midnight in Marseille—wrapped around her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, and his voice was the same—smooth, low, with that faint French lilt that had always made her name sound like a promise"
1"He tapped, the ivory handle catching the light"
2"He turned, his heterochromatic eyes locking onto hers"
3"She spun around, the words spilling out before she could stop them"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences51
tagDensity0.098
leniency0.196
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.078
76.9350%