Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZAS72240N8YEPWH1J4SK5

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39.6s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolt scraped back with a sound like a blade being drawn. Rory stood in the doorway, one hand still on the chain, the other gripping a takeaway bag from Golden Empress that had gone cold an hour ago. The scent of soy sauce and ginger clung to her fingers. "You." Lucien Moreau leaned against the doorframe, his ivory-handled cane tapping a slow rhythm against the worn carpet. The amber eye caught the dim hallway light; the black one swallowed it whole. "Evening, *chérie*." His voice was smooth, the French accent more pronounced than she remembered. "May I come in?" She didn’t move. "How did you find me?" "Trade secret." A faint smile played at the corners of his mouth. "Though I must say, your security is... quaint. Three deadbolts? Really?" "Eva’s paranoid." Rory stepped back, letting the chain fall. The flat smelled of old books and Ptolemy’s litter tray, the usual mix of dust and magic. "What do you want?" Lucien stepped inside, his tailored charcoal suit brushing against the doorframe as he passed. The flat was exactly as he’d imagined—cramped, cluttered, every surface buried under scrolls and half-empty mugs of tea. A tabby cat watched him from the arm of the sofa, tail flicking. "Ptolemy, I presume?" Rory kicked the door shut. "He doesn’t like strangers." "Neither do you." Lucien’s gaze flicked to the crescent-shaped scar on her wrist before meeting her eyes again. "Yet here I am." She tossed the takeaway bag onto the counter, where it landed with a wet thud. "Spit it out. I’ve got a shift in two hours." "Always so direct." He set his cane against the wall, the blade inside it whispering against the ivory as he adjusted his grip. "I need your help." Rory laughed, sharp and humourless. "You? Need *my* help?" "Believe it or not." He reached into his jacket and pulled out a folded piece of paper, holding it between two fingers. "This was left at my office. No note. Just this." She didn’t take it. "And?" "And it’s addressed to you." Her fingers stilled. The paper was thick, expensive, the kind used for wedding invitations or death threats. The wax seal on the back had been broken—someone had already read it. "You opened my mail?" "Consider it a professional courtesy." Lucien held it out again. "Read it." Rory snatched it from his hand, unfolding it with more force than necessary. The handwriting was familiar—elegant, looping, the kind of script that belonged on a barrister’s letterhead. Her father’s. *Rory,* *If you’re reading this, I’ve either been arrested or I’m dead. Either way, you’re in danger. Evan knows where you are. He’s not alone. Burn this after reading.* —*Dad* The paper trembled in her grip. "This isn’t possible." "Your ex?" Lucien’s voice was low, careful. She crumpled the note in her fist. "Evan doesn’t know my father. They’ve never met." "People lie, *chérie*." Lucien stepped closer, close enough that she could see the faint scar along his jawline, the one he’d never explained. "Especially the ones who hurt us." Rory turned away, pressing her palms against the counter. The Formica was cool under her skin. "I left Cardiff for a reason. I left *him* for a reason." "And yet." Lucien’s voice was soft, almost gentle. "Here he is, in your life again." She whirled around. "What do you want from me?" "Your trust." He held her gaze, unflinching. "For now." Ptolemy chose that moment to leap onto the counter, tail lashing. He butted his head against Rory’s arm, purring loudly, as if to say *this is a terrible idea but I support you anyway*. Rory exhaled sharply. "Fine. But you’re buying the coffee." Lucien’s smile was slow, dangerous. "I’d expect nothing less." The kettle whistled, steam curling into the air between them. Rory pulled two mugs from the cupboard, the chipped edges rough under her fingers. "Black, no sugar. Right?" "Correct." Lucien leaned against the counter, watching her. "You remember." "How could I forget?" She poured the water, the rich scent of coffee filling the small kitchen. "You drank it like it was punishment." "Some things are." His fingers brushed against hers as he took the mug, sending a jolt up her arm. "Like coming here." Rory pulled back, wrapping her hands around her own mug. The heat seeped into her skin. "Why *did* you come here, Lucien? Really?" He took a slow sip, his heterochromatic eyes never leaving hers. "Because I needed to see you." "Bullshit." She set her mug down with a clink. "You could’ve sent a message. A text. A carrier pigeon. You didn’t have to show up at my door." "Perhaps I wanted to." His voice was low, the French accent wrapping around the words like silk. "Perhaps I missed you." Rory’s breath hitched. The air between them was thick, charged. She could smell his cologne—sandalwood and something darker, something that reminded her of the underworld he navigated so easily. "You don’t get to say that." "Why not?" "Because we both know how this ends." She turned away, pressing her palms against the counter again. "With me picking up the pieces and you walking away." Lucien set his mug down. The sound was deliberate, final. "Is that what you think of me?" "It’s what I *know* of you." Rory’s voice was steady, but her hands shook. "You fix things. You broker deals. You don’t stick around for the aftermath." "And you?" He stepped closer, his presence a warmth at her back. "You run. From Cardiff. From Evan. From *me*." She spun around, her chest nearly brushing his. "I don’t run. I *survive*." "Same thing." His gaze dropped to her lips, then back to her eyes. "Isn’t it?" Rory’s pulse pounded in her throat. She could feel the heat of him, the way his body seemed to pull hers in. "What are you doing?" "Testing a theory." His hand lifted, fingers brushing against the scar on her wrist. "Seeing if some things are still the same." Her breath came faster. "And?" Lucien’s thumb traced the crescent shape, slow, deliberate. "And I think you’re lying to yourself." Rory jerked her hand away. "Don’t." "Don’t what?" His voice was a murmur, a challenge. "Don’t touch you? Don’t tell you the truth? Don’t remind you that you *felt* something the last time we were together?" She swallowed hard. The memory of his mouth on hers, his hands in her hair, the way he’d whispered her name like a prayer—it all came rushing back. "That was a mistake." "Was it?" He caught her chin, tilting her face up. His amber eye burned; the black one was endless. "Or was it the only honest thing you’ve done in years?" Rory’s lips parted. She should push him away. She should slap him. She should— The doorbell rang. They both froze. Lucien’s hand dropped. "Expecting someone?" Rory shook her head, her heart hammering. "No." The bell rang again, followed by a sharp knock. "Rory? It’s Eva. Open up." Rory’s stomach twisted. Eva. Of course. The one person who knew *exactly* how much Lucien had hurt her. Lucien stepped back, smoothing his jacket. His expression was unreadable. "This should be interesting." Rory shot him a glare before moving to the door. She took a deep breath, steeling herself, then pulled it open. Eva stood on the threshold, her dark curls wild, her eyes wide. She took one look at Rory, then over her shoulder at Lucien, and her expression darkened. "What the *hell* is he doing here?" Lucien inclined his head, polite as ever. "Eva. Always a pleasure." Eva’s hands clenched into fists. "Get out." Rory stepped between them. "Eva—" "No." Eva’s voice was ice. "He doesn’t get to waltz back in here like nothing happened." Lucien sighed, reaching for his cane. "I’ll leave you two to—" "Don’t." Rory’s voice was sharp. She turned to Eva, her jaw set. "He’s here because of Evan." Eva’s anger faltered. "What?" Rory held up the crumpled note. "My father sent this. Evan knows where I am. He’s coming." Eva’s face paled. She looked at Lucien, then back at Rory. "And you *trust* him?" Rory hesitated. The weight of Lucien’s gaze was heavy on her back. "I don’t have a choice." Eva’s eyes narrowed. "There’s always a choice." Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor. "She’s right. There is." He looked at Rory, his expression unreadable. "But some choices are harder than others." Rory’s chest tightened. The air in the flat was thick with tension, with history, with things left unsaid. She looked at Eva, then at Lucien, and knew—whatever happened next, there was no going back. The doorbell rang again. This time, no one moved to answer it.
total_cost0.021146

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Rory stepped back [back]"
1"She turned away [away]"
dialogueSentences92
tagDensity0.217
leniency0.435
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.043
89.71% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1458
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
45.13% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1458
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"trembled"
count1
3
word"silk"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"navigated"
count1
6
word"aftermath"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"could feel"
count1
10
word"traced"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"unreadable"
count2
13
word"weight"
count1
14
word"tension"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"familiar"
2"trembled"
3"silk"
4"charged"
5"navigated"
6"aftermath"
7"warmth"
8"pulse"
9"could feel"
10"traced"
11"stomach"
12"unreadable"
13"weight"
14"tension"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"clenched into fists"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences118
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences184
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans16
markdownWords52
totalWords1449
ratio0.036
matches
0"chérie"
1"my"
2"Rory,"
3"If you’re reading this, I’ve either been arrested or I’m dead. Either way, you’re in danger. Evan knows where you are. He’s not alone. Burn this after reading."
4"Dad"
5"chérie"
6"him"
7"this is a terrible idea but I support you anyway"
8"did"
9"know"
10"me"
11"survive"
12"felt"
13"exactly"
14"hell"
15"trust"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions65
wordCount1005
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.69
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Golden1
Empress1
Moreau1
French2
Rory27
Ptolemy2
Formica1
Lucien21
Eva9
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Rory"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Eva"
places
0"Golden"
globalScore0.157
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences73
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1449
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences184
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs80
mean18.11
std11
cv0.607
sampleLengths
012
139
249
38
423
530
648
79
822
925
1027
119
1232
135
145
1534
1612
1730
1829
191
209
217
2215
2329
2428
2515
269
279
2834
299
309
3128
3210
3324
3422
3523
3617
3728
3821
3935
402
4127
4217
4327
4420
4513
4615
4726
4822
495
96.34% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences118
matches
0"being drawn"
1"been broken"
2"been arrested"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs191
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences184
ratio0.054
matches
0"The amber eye caught the dim hallway light; the black one swallowed it whole."
1"The flat was exactly as he’d imagined—cramped, cluttered, every surface buried under scrolls and half-empty mugs of tea."
2"The wax seal on the back had been broken—someone had already read it."
3"The handwriting was familiar—elegant, looping, the kind of script that belonged on a barrister’s letterhead."
4"—*Dad*"
5"She could smell his cologne—sandalwood and something darker, something that reminded her of the underworld he navigated so easily."
6"The memory of his mouth on hers, his hands in her hair, the way he’d whispered her name like a prayer—it all came rushing back."
7"His amber eye burned; the black one was endless."
8"She should—"
9"She looked at Eva, then at Lucien, and knew—whatever happened next, there was no going back."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1014
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.03648915187376726
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.005917159763313609
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences184
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences184
mean7.88
std5.5
cv0.698
sampleLengths
012
127
211
31
417
514
614
74
83
95
1012
1111
129
1317
144
1514
1618
1713
183
195
204
2118
224
2315
2410
2523
264
275
284
2922
3010
314
321
335
343
3514
3613
374
3810
392
4013
4115
422
431
4411
455
465
473
484
491
53.99% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.3532608695652174
totalSentences184
uniqueOpeners65
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
ratio0
79.46% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences111
matches
0"His voice was smooth, the"
1"She didn’t move."
2"She tossed the takeaway bag"
3"He set his cane against"
4"He reached into his jacket"
5"She didn’t take it."
6"Her fingers stilled."
7"He’s not alone."
8"She crumpled the note in"
9"She whirled around."
10"He held her gaze, unflinching"
11"He butted his head against"
12"She poured the water, the"
13"His fingers brushed against hers"
14"He took a slow sip,"
15"She set her mug down"
16"His voice was low, the"
17"She could smell his cologne—sandalwood"
18"She turned away, pressing her"
19"He stepped closer, his presence"
ratio0.351
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount108
totalSentences111
matches
0"The deadbolt scraped back with"
1"Rory stood in the doorway,"
2"The scent of soy sauce"
3"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
4"The amber eye caught the"
5"His voice was smooth, the"
6"She didn’t move."
7"A faint smile played at"
8"Rory stepped back, letting the"
9"The flat smelled of old"
10"Lucien stepped inside, his tailored"
11"The flat was exactly as"
12"A tabby cat watched him"
13"Rory kicked the door shut."
14"Lucien’s gaze flicked to the"
15"She tossed the takeaway bag"
16"He set his cane against"
17"Rory laughed, sharp and humourless."
18"He reached into his jacket"
19"She didn’t take it."
ratio0.973
90.09% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences111
matches
0"*If you’re reading this, I’ve"
1"Either way, you’re in danger."
ratio0.018
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The handwriting was familiar—elegant, looping, the kind of script that belonged on a barrister’s letterhead."
1"She could smell his cologne—sandalwood and something darker, something that reminded her of the underworld he navigated so easily."
50.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"He stepped, his presence a warmth at her back"
1"His hand lifted, fingers brushing against the scar on her wrist"
2"He looked, his expression unreadable"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
78.9867%