Run: 2026-02-19-01KHSZCACQE12MNTK2X78BVRFG

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Duration:
35.7s
Cost:
$0.018212

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The lock clicked before I could finish twisting the last deadbolt. Three of them, Eva insisted, like the flat was Fort Knox instead of a shoebox above a curry house. My fingers froze mid-air. The door swung open on its own, slow and deliberate, like a theatre curtain revealing the final act. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, one hand still on the knob, the other resting on his ivory-handled cane. The amber eye caught the dim light from the stairwell, glowing faintly. The black one swallowed it whole. His platinum hair was slicked back, not a strand out of place, as if the London drizzle hadn’t dared to touch him. A charcoal suit clung to his frame, tailored to perfection, the kind that whispered money and secrets. "Rory." My name rolled off his tongue, smooth as aged whisky. The French accent curled around the R, making it sound like a caress. I should have slammed the door. Should have. But my body betrayed me, rooted to the spot like one of Eva’s cursed research scrolls. The small crescent scar on my left wrist throbbed, a phantom ache from a past I’d tried to bury. "Eva’s not here." My voice came out steadier than I felt. "She’s at the library. Research." Lucien’s lips quirked, not quite a smile. "I’m not here for Eva." The hallway suddenly felt too narrow, the air too thick. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, slinked between Lucien’s polished shoes, tail flicking like a metronome counting down to disaster. The cat paused, sniffed the air, then darted back inside as if even he knew better than to linger. "You’ve got two seconds to state your business before I call the police." A lie. The police wouldn’t touch Lucien Moreau. No one in London’s underworld would. "One." He stepped forward, and I stepped back, the door still ajar between us. "I need your help." I laughed. It came out sharp, bitter. "You’ve got the wrong girl. I deliver dumplings, not miracles." "Two." His cane tapped against the floorboards, a slow, deliberate rhythm. The ivory handle gleamed, and I knew if I looked close enough, I’d see the thin blade hidden within. "I’m not here to reminisce, *chérie*. I’m here because the city’s about to burn, and you’re the only one who can stop it." The flat smelled of old books and curry spices, the scent clinging to the walls like a second skin. Lucien’s cologne—something dark and expensive, like oud and leather—cut through it, unwelcome. I crossed my arms, the scar on my wrist pressing against my ribs. "Try again. Last I checked, you had an entire network of informants at your beck and call. Why me?" His gaze flicked to the scar, then back to my face. "Because this isn’t about information. It’s about trust." "Trust?" The word tasted like ash. "You lost the right to that word three years ago." Lucien exhaled, slow and controlled. The amber eye darkened, or maybe it was just the light playing tricks. "I didn’t come here to rehash the past. But if you need a reminder—" He reached into his jacket, and my pulse spiked. A knife? A gun? Instead, he pulled out a folded piece of paper, yellowed at the edges. He held it between two fingers, just out of reach. "You left this in my flat the night you walked out. I kept it. Thought you might want it back." I recognised the handwriting before I recognised the paper. My own. A list of pros and cons, scribbled in haste during one of our late-night debates about whether to stay or go. The cons had won. They always did. I didn’t take it. "Burn it." "As you wish." He tucked it back into his pocket. "But that doesn’t change the fact that you’re the only one who can get close to Silas Blackwood without raising suspicion." The name hit like a punch to the gut. Silas. The bar owner. My landlord. The man who’d given me a job and a roof over my head when I fled Cardiff with nothing but a duffel bag and a broken wrist. The man who, according to Lucien, was about to set London’s supernatural underworld on fire. I should have laughed. Should have told Lucien to take his conspiracy theories and shove them up his tailored arse. But the way he said Silas’s name—like it was a curse, like it was a secret—made my skin prickle. "Why me?" I asked again, quieter this time. "Because you’re invisible to him." Lucien’s voice dropped, low and urgent. "A delivery girl. A tenant. A nobody. He doesn’t see you, Rory. Not the way I do." The way he said my name sent a shiver down my spine. Not Rory. Not Laila. *Aurora*. Like he was savouring each syllable. I stepped back, putting more distance between us. The door swung wider, revealing the chaos of Eva’s flat—the books stacked in precarious towers, the scrolls unrolled across the coffee table, the half-empty mug of tea gone cold. "I’m not getting involved in whatever game you’re playing." Lucien didn’t move. Didn’t push. He just stood there, watching me with those mismatched eyes, like he could see straight through the lies I told myself. "It’s not a game. Silas has something. Something dangerous. And if he uses it, the balance of power in this city will shift. Permanently." "Balance of power?" I scoffed. "Since when do you care about balance? Last I checked, you were the one tipping the scales in your favour." A muscle in his jaw twitched. "This isn’t about me. This is about London. About the people who’ll get caught in the crossfire. Including you." I wanted to call him a liar. Wanted to slam the door in his face and pretend this never happened. But the way he looked at me—like he was memorising my face, like he thought this might be the last time—made my chest tighten. Ptolemy chose that moment to wind himself around Lucien’s ankles, purring like a traitor. The cat had always been a terrible judge of character. Lucien crouched, scratching behind the cat’s ears. "Smart animal. Knows a good thing when he sees it." I rolled my eyes. "He also licks his own arse. Doesn’t mean he’s got taste." That earned me a ghost of a smile. "Still quick with the comebacks, I see." "Still quick with the bullshit, I see." He straightened, the smile fading. "I’ll be at The Velvet Hour tonight. Eight o’clock. If you change your mind." "I won’t." "Then I’ll see you at nine." He turned, his cane tapping against the floorboards as he descended the stairs. "Try not to be late, *chérie*. Punctuality is a virtue." The door clicked shut behind him. I stood there, heart hammering, the scent of his cologne lingering like a ghost. The flat felt smaller somehow, the walls pressing in. I reached for the deadbolts, fingers trembling as I twisted each one into place. Three locks. Three lies. Because I knew, even as I turned away from the door, that I’d be at The Velvet Hour tonight. And Lucien Moreau knew it too.
total_cost0.018212

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
85.71% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The word tasted like [like]"
1"I asked again [again]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.114
95.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1201
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Blackwood"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1201
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"throbbed"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"reminder"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"down my spine"
count1
5
word"velvet"
count2
highlights
0"throbbed"
1"flicked"
2"reminder"
3"pulse"
4"down my spine"
5"velvet"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences88
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences88
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords3
totalWords1192
ratio0.003
matches
0"chérie"
1"Aurora"
2"chérie"
75.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"Three of them, Eva insisted, like the flat was Fort Knox instead of a shoebox above a curry house."
74.59% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount862
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.51
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva4
Fort1
Knox1
Moreau3
London3
French1
Lucien13
Cardiff1
Silas2
Rory1
Laila1
Velvet1
Hour1
Three3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
5"Laila"
places
0"Fort"
1"Knox"
2"London"
3"Cardiff"
4"Velvet"
globalScore0.746
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"not quite a smile"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1192
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences111
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean29.8
std19.86
cv0.666
sampleLengths
052
176
224
343
416
512
647
727
818
917
1053
1163
1219
1316
1488
1539
166
1731
1857
1939
208
2128
2223
2346
2450
2525
2625
2744
2824
2917
3015
3115
327
3319
342
3529
3643
374
3819
396
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs159
matches
0"was savouring"
1"was memorising"
39.90% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences111
ratio0.036
matches
0"Lucien’s cologne—something dark and expensive, like oud and leather—cut through it, unwelcome."
1"But the way he said Silas’s name—like it was a curse, like it was a secret—made my skin prickle."
2"The door swung wider, revealing the chaos of Eva’s flat—the books stacked in precarious towers, the scrolls unrolled across the coffee table, the half-empty mug of tea gone cold."
3"But the way he looked at me—like he was memorising my face, like he thought this might be the last time—made my chest tighten."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount871
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.03673938002296211
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002296211251435132
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean10.74
std6.8
cv0.633
sampleLengths
011
119
24
318
419
512
66
722
817
911
1013
116
122
1316
1419
1511
165
177
185
1910
2018
2119
2215
236
246
2514
264
272
285
2910
3011
3119
3223
3319
3412
3513
3619
3711
388
396
4010
415
4213
4323
442
452
4613
4710
4820
499
54.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.36936936936936937
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners41
45.66% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Instead, he pulled out a"
ratio0.014
77.53% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences73
matches
0"My fingers froze mid-air."
1"His platinum hair was slicked"
2"My name rolled off his"
3"I should have slammed the"
4"My voice came out steadier"
5"He stepped forward, and I"
6"It came out sharp, bitter."
7"His cane tapped against the"
8"I crossed my arms, the"
9"His gaze flicked to the"
10"He reached into his jacket,"
11"He held it between two"
12"I recognised the handwriting before"
13"They always did."
14"I didn’t take it."
15"He tucked it back into"
16"I should have laughed."
17"I asked again, quieter this"
18"I stepped back, putting more"
19"He just stood there, watching"
ratio0.356
35.34% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences73
matches
0"The lock clicked before I"
1"My fingers froze mid-air."
2"The door swung open on"
3"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
4"The amber eye caught the"
5"The black one swallowed it"
6"His platinum hair was slicked"
7"A charcoal suit clung to"
8"My name rolled off his"
9"The French accent curled around"
10"I should have slammed the"
11"The small crescent scar on"
12"My voice came out steadier"
13"Lucien’s lips quirked, not quite"
14"The hallway suddenly felt too"
15"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, slinked"
16"The cat paused, sniffed the"
17"The police wouldn’t touch Lucien"
18"He stepped forward, and I"
19"It came out sharp, bitter."
ratio0.849
68.49% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences73
matches
0"Because I knew, even as"
ratio0.014
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"A charcoal suit clung to his frame, tailored to perfection, the kind that whispered money and secrets."
1"The man who’d given me a job and a roof over my head when I fled Cardiff with nothing but a duffel bag and a broken wrist."
2"The man who, according to Lucien, was about to set London’s supernatural underworld on fire."
3"I stood there, heart hammering, the scent of his cologne lingering like a ghost."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.029
leniency0.057
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.5593%