Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0021G0YQCJTM6RB0BM8DV

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Duration:
59.4s
Cost:
$0.001705
Provider:
DeepInfra

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came at three seventeen AM. Not the tentative tap of a lost neighbour or the cheerful rat-a-tat of a late-night takeaway delivery. Three precise strikes—knuckle on wood—that vibrated through the deadbolts like a summons. Rory’s fingers tightened around the baseball bat propped against her sofa. She peered through the peephole. Platinum hair. Amber eye glinting in the hallway’s sickly yellow light. "Luc." The name left her mouth before she could swallow it. The door didn’t creak when she opened it—Silas kept his building in better shape than that—but the air between them might as well have groaned under the weight of everything unsaid. Lucien Moreau leaned on his ivory-handled cane, impeccable as ever in a charcoal suit that probably cost more than her monthly rent. The faint scent of bergamot and something darker—smoke, maybe, or the metallic whisper of old blood—drifted between them. "You’re bleeding," he said. Rory touched her temple. Her fingers came away sticky. "Delivery bike skidded on Blackfriars. Nothing major." "Mm." His gaze flicked past her shoulder, taking in the flat’s cramped chaos: takeaway containers stacked by the sink, Ptolemy the tabby sprawled across a pile of law textbooks, the faint glow of her laptop screen where she’d been parsing through Yu-Fei’s dodgy payroll spreadsheets. "Charming as ever." "You didn’t come here to critique my housekeeping." "No." He stepped forward. Rory didn’t move aside. They stood close enough that she could count the faint scars along his jawline—old wounds from a life she’d only glimpsed in fragments. "I need your particular set of skills." "Skills." She barked a laugh. "Right. Because last time ended so well for both of us." The corner of his mouth twitched. Not quite a smile. "You still owe me for Marseille." "That was two years ago." "And yet." He produced a familiar silver lighter from his pocket—the one she’d stolen from him the night everything went sideways. It glinted accusingly in his palm. "Interest accrues." Ptolemy chose that moment to wind between Lucien’s legs, purring like a traitor. Rory exhaled through her nose. "Fine. Come in before Mrs. Khatun calls the cops again." The door clicked shut behind them. Lucien made himself at home on her sofa, displacing Ptolemy with a graceful flick of his cane. The cat shot Rory a betrayed look before stalking off to sulk in the bedroom. "You’re not here for a social call," Rory said, perching on the arm of her chair. "Spit it out." He reached inside his jacket. Rory’s muscles coiled—but it was just an envelope, crisp and unmarked. He tossed it onto her coffee table. "Open it." She didn’t move. "What is it?" "Proof your ex isn’t as gone as you’d hoped." The words landed like a gut punch. Evan’s face flashed behind her eyes—the charming smile that had curdled into something vicious behind closed doors. She snatched up the envelope. Inside: surveillance photos. Evan at a café in Mayfair. Evan shaking hands with a man whose face Rory recognised from Interpol alerts. Evan standing outside her building last Tuesday while she’d been at work. Her fingers trembled. She willed them still. "You’ve been watching him." "Watching you," Lucien corrected. "Him by extension." "Why?" "Because, ma chérie, some debts aren’t settled with money." His mismatched eyes held hers. "And some monsters don’t stay buried." The flat’s overhead light buzzed. Downstairs, Silas’s bar music thumped through the floorboards—some mournful jazz number that didn’t match the adrenaline roaring in Rory’s ears. She swallowed. "What do you want me to do?" Lucien smiled. It wasn’t a kind expression. "Exactly what you’re best at." He leaned forward, cane resting between his knees. "Lie. Cheat. Steal." A pause. "Survive." Outside, a siren wailed. Closer than it should’ve been. Rory met his gaze. "And what do you get out of it?" "Besides the pleasure of your company?" His gloved hand brushed her knee—light enough to ignore, heavy enough to scorch. "Let’s call it professional curiosity." The air between them crackled. Two years of silence. Two years of wondering if she’d imagined the way his mouth had tasted that last night in France—smoke and secrets and something dangerously close to regret. Rory stood abruptly. "I need coffee." She turned toward the kitchen. His cane hooked around her ankle. She froze. "Don’t run," Lucien murmured. "Not from this." The siren grew louder. Closer. Rory looked down at him. At the devil she knew. And smiled. "Who said anything about running?"
created_at"2026-02-19T03:44:45.757Z" 2/19/2026, 3:44:45 AM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.649
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount758
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
40.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount758
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"vibrated"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"trembled"
count1
7
word"roaring"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"vibrated"
1"glinting"
2"weight"
3"whisper"
4"flicked"
5"familiar"
6"trembled"
7"roaring"
8"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences68
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences92
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords740
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
45.83% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount576
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.08
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Silas2
Moreau1
Rory12
Ptolemy3
Yu-Fei1
Lucien6
Mayfair1
Interpol1
Tuesday1
France1
Evan4
persons
0"Silas"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Ptolemy"
4"Lucien"
5"Evan"
places
0"Yu-Fei"
1"Mayfair"
2"Interpol"
3"France"
globalScore0.458
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences31
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount740
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"chose that moment"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean14.8
std11.78
cv0.796
sampleLengths
036
111
25
311
411
531
640
74
816
948
108
1138
1216
1316
145
1529
1613
1715
186
1932
2019
2123
222
236
249
2524
265
2734
287
294
307
311
3220
3325
349
357
3619
379
3812
3924
4035
416
425
436
442
457
465
4710
482
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs97
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences92
ratio0.109
matches
0"Three precise strikes—knuckle on wood—that vibrated through the deadbolts like a summons."
1"The door didn’t creak when she opened it—Silas kept his building in better shape than that—but the air between them might as well have groaned under the weight of everything unsaid."
2"The faint scent of bergamot and something darker—smoke, maybe, or the metallic whisper of old blood—drifted between them."
3"They stood close enough that she could count the faint scars along his jawline—old wounds from a life she’d only glimpsed in fragments."
4"\"And yet.\" He produced a familiar silver lighter from his pocket—the one she’d stolen from him the night everything went sideways."
5"Rory’s muscles coiled—but it was just an envelope, crisp and unmarked."
6"Evan’s face flashed behind her eyes—the charming smile that had curdled into something vicious behind closed doors."
7"Downstairs, Silas’s bar music thumped through the floorboards—some mournful jazz number that didn’t match the adrenaline roaring in Rory’s ears."
8"\"Besides the pleasure of your company?\" His gloved hand brushed her knee—light enough to ignore, heavy enough to scorch."
9"Two years of wondering if she’d imagined the way his mouth had tasted that last night in France—smoke and secrets and something dangerously close to regret."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount594
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"cheerful rat-a-tat"
1"vicious behind closed doors."
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.037037037037037035
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.011784511784511785
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences92
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences92
mean8.04
std7.19
cv0.894
sampleLengths
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117
212
311
45
52
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831
922
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124
135
147
1545
163
178
184
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217
225
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254
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275
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296
302
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325
3310
346
3517
3615
3716
383
395
4011
417
422
433
443
459
467
4717
485
493
85.51% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.532608695652174
totalSentences92
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
82.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences58
matches
0"She peered through the peephole."
1"Her fingers came away sticky."
2"His gaze flicked past her"
3"He stepped forward"
4"They stood close enough that"
5"She barked a laugh"
6"He produced a familiar silver"
7"It glinted accusingly in his"
8"He reached inside his jacket."
9"He tossed it onto her"
10"She didn’t move."
11"She snatched up the envelope."
12"Her fingers trembled."
13"She willed them still."
14"His mismatched eyes held hers"
15"It wasn’t a kind expression."
16"He leaned forward, cane resting"
17"His gloved hand brushed her"
18"She turned toward the kitchen."
19"His cane hooked around her"
ratio0.345
37.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount49
totalSentences58
matches
0"The knock came at three"
1"Rory’s fingers tightened around the"
2"She peered through the peephole."
3"Amber eye glinting in the"
4"The name left her mouth"
5"The door didn’t creak when"
6"Lucien Moreau leaned on his"
7"The faint scent of bergamot"
8"Rory touched her temple."
9"Her fingers came away sticky."
10"His gaze flicked past her"
11"He stepped forward"
12"Rory didn’t move aside."
13"They stood close enough that"
14"She barked a laugh"
15"The corner of his mouth"
16"He produced a familiar silver"
17"It glinted accusingly in his"
18"Ptolemy chose that moment to"
19"Rory exhaled through her nose."
ratio0.845
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"Evan’s face flashed behind her eyes—the charming smile that had curdled into something vicious behind closed doors."
1"Downstairs, Silas’s bar music thumped through the floorboards—some mournful jazz number that didn’t match the adrenaline roaring in Rory’s ears."
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He leaned, cane resting between his knees"
68.92% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"She barked (bark)"
1"Lucien corrected (correct)"
2"Lucien murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences37
tagDensity0.135
leniency0.27
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.162
79.5151%