Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0021JA8R1BB4A9TF0HQ0X

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23.1s
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$0.012752
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain rattled like a warning. Aurora didn’t answer the first knock. Or the second. But the third came harder, a flat palm against wood, and Ptolemy bolted from the kitchen, fur on end, tail a furious question mark. She crossed the flat in three strides, bare feet silent on the threadbare rug. The deadbolts clicked back one by one—three turns, three sharp metallic bites in the quiet. She didn’t look through the peephole. She already knew. The door opened. Lucien stood in the dim corridor, his charcoal suit unbroken by a crease, one hand resting on the ivory head of his cane. Behind him, the scent of rain-slicked bricks and something darker, like crushed cloves and old parchment, slipped into the flat. His face was calm. Polished. But the black of his left eye swallowed the light entirely, while the amber one flickered, catching the hall lamp like fire in a cellar. “Aurora,” he said. Not *Rory*. Never *Rory*. She didn’t step back. Didn’t let him in. Her fingers curled around the doorframe, the crescent scar on her wrist pressing into the splintered wood. “It’s been nine months.” “Nine months, seventeen days,” he corrected. His voice was smooth, French-accented, the kind that made students lean closer in lecture halls and criminals hand over secrets. “I didn’t come for arithmetic.” “Then why are you *here*?” Her voice didn’t shake. It never did when he was around. Not even the last time—when he’d walked away with her blood on his cuff and a lie in his teeth. *I can’t protect you and honour both*, he’d said. *You chose one*. His gaze dropped to her wrist. Then back up. “You’re in danger.” She laughed. Short. Sharp. “That your line now? You show up out of nowhere, smelling like midnight and bad decisions, and expect me to believe you’ve developed a conscience?” “I expect you to believe the corpse in Bow,” he said, “with its throat flayed open in a sigil only Avaros blood can read.” Her breath stilled. “You think it’s him.” “The ex. Evan. He’s not just human, Rory. Not anymore.” Behind her, the kettle screamed. A shrill, ordinary sound in a flat full of old books and half-dead houseplants. Ptolemy hissed again, then darted under the sofa. Aurora didn’t move. “He was abusive. Petty. But not *demonic*.” “He made a bargain.” Lucien’s fingers tightened on the cane. “Six months after you left. A soul for power. A human body with demon-touched hands. You know what he wanted it for.” “To find me.” “To own you.” Her lips parted. No sound came. “I’ve been tracking him since Cardiff,” Lucien said. “He’s been circling London. Last week, he killed a seer in Croydon who tried to ward against him. The night before, he stood outside Silas’ bar. Watched your flat.” A cold trickle ran down her spine. “You didn’t tell me,” she said. “All this time—you could have *warned* me.” “I couldn’t reach you. You severed the blood tie.” She flinched. That night in the rain, when she’d sliced her palm and spat the words that broke the ward linking them. A bond she hadn’t even known existed until he’d explained it, bleeding in the alley behind the Golden Empress. *You were under my protection*, he’d said. *Now you’re not*. “I didn’t want your protection,” she said. “I wanted you to *ask*.” His jaw tightened. One muscle jumped beneath the pale skin. “The terms were clear. My house. My rules. You refused.” “And you walked.” “You left first.” A beat. The kettle’s scream died into a low whistle. The flat hummed with silence. She looked at him—really looked. The sharp line of his jaw, the faint silver at his temples, the way his coat hung just slightly heavier on one side. The blade under the cane. The weight of choices. “You’re hurt,” she said. His breath caught. Just once. She stepped back. “Come in.” He hesitated. Then crossed the threshold. The air shifted. Old magic. Old hunger. She shut the door. Turned the deadbolts. All three. “You can’t stay long,” she said. “I’m not staying at all.” He moved to the window, parted the curtain with the tip of his cane. Rain streaked the glass. “I came to give you this.” He unbuttoned his coat, reached inside. Pulled out a small, flat box wrapped in dark leather. She didn’t take it. “What is it?” “A key. To the vault beneath my townhouse. If he comes for you—go there. It’s warded. No demon, half or full, can breach it without an invitation.” “And if I don’t want to run?” “Then you’ll die.” She met his gaze. “You don’t know what I want.” “No,” he said. “I don’t. Not anymore.” The silence between them was thick. Charged. Like the moment before thunder breaks. “You kissed me,” she said. “The night you told me about the bond. You kissed me and then you said you couldn’t have me.” His throat worked. “I was trying to let you go.” “Felt like a brand.” “I know.” “You could have fought for me.” “And drag you deeper into this world? Into *my* world?” He gestured to the cane, to his eyes. “You’re human, Aurora. Fragile. You don’t belong in the filth I swim in.” “I belonged in the flat where you left me bleeding.” “That wasn’t me. That was the contract—” “Don’t.” She stepped forward. “Don’t give me excuses dressed as honour. You chose. You left. And now you show up with a key and a corpse and expect me to cower in your vault like some damsel in a cursed fairytale?” His hand closed around the cane. White-knuckled. “I came to keep you alive,” he said. “No,” she said. “You came to ease your guilt.” The words hung. Sharp. Final. He stared at her. The amber eye burned. The black one absorbed. Then, slowly, he placed the leather box on the table. Next to a half-empty cup of tea, cold now. Next to a book on Welsh folklore with her bookmark still in it—page 117. “I underestimated him,” Lucien said. “Evan. He’s not just strong. He’s learning. He’s hunting others like you. Humans with latent trace bloodlines—Irish, Welsh. Old blood.” Her father’s name clicked like a lock. *Brendan Carter. Barrister. From Limerick. Grandfather a village healer, so the stories went.* “He’s not just after me,” she said. “He’s after *leverage*,” Lucien said. “To force you back. To make you *his*.” She picked up the key. The leather was warm. Too warm. Pulse-like. Outside, thunder cracked. Rain lashed the window. Then—a sound. A soft *thud* against the front door. Like something heavy dropped. Both froze. Lucien moved first. In a flash, he was beside her, cane raised, blade half-drawn. Another thud. Then a whisper, sliding under the door like smoke. “*Rory…*” Her blood froze. It was Evan’s voice. But deeper. Wrong. Guttural, like stone grinding on bone. The doorknob rattled. Not knocked. *Rattled*. As if something on the other side wasn’t quite human enough to turn it. Lucien’s free hand found hers. Cold. Hard. Possessive. The key burned in her palm.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.362
leniency0.724
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.48% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slightly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
66.61% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1198
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"down her spine"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"down her spine"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"charged"
5"pulse"
6"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences135
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences172
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans17
markdownWords43
totalWords1183
ratio0.036
matches
0"Rory"
1"Rory"
2"here"
3"I can’t protect you and honour both"
4"You chose one"
5"demonic"
6"warned"
7"You were under my protection"
8"Now you’re not"
9"ask"
10"my"
11"Brendan Carter. Barrister. From Limerick. Grandfather a village healer, so the stories went."
12"leverage"
13"his"
14"thud"
15"Rory…"
16"Rattled"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions19
wordCount738
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Ptolemy2
French-accented1
Golden1
Empress1
Rain2
Pulled1
Welsh1
Carter1
Limerick1
Lucien7
Evan1
persons
0"Ptolemy"
1"Rain"
2"Carter"
3"Lucien"
4"Evan"
places
0"Limerick"
globalScore1
windowScore1
91.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite human enough to turn it"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1183
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences172
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean14.43
std13.86
cv0.961
sampleLengths
06
133
238
33
473
57
629
731
848
912
1029
1124
127
1310
1427
1510
1632
173
183
196
2037
217
2213
239
2451
2512
2620
273
283
2915
3037
314
325
335
346
357
369
376
3845
397
4027
417
423
4310
447
4513
4624
4710
484
492
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences135
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs133
matches(empty)
59.80% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences172
ratio0.029
matches
0"The deadbolts clicked back one by one—three turns, three sharp metallic bites in the quiet."
1"Not even the last time—when he’d walked away with her blood on his cuff and a lie in his teeth."
2"She looked at him—really looked."
3"Next to a book on Welsh folklore with her bookmark still in it—page 117."
4"Then—a sound."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount749
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.036048064085447265
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0053404539385847796
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences172
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences172
mean6.88
std6.58
cv0.957
sampleLengths
06
16
23
324
414
515
66
73
83
923
1020
114
121
1325
143
152
162
174
184
1917
204
216
2220
235
249
257
2620
279
283
296
303
313
322
331
341
3525
3624
373
384
3910
405
4114
428
433
447
4510
4622
473
483
493
55.04% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.37209302325581395
totalSentences172
uniqueOpeners64
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences88
matches
0"Then back up."
1"Then crossed the threshold."
2"Then, slowly, he placed the"
3"Then a whisper, sliding under"
ratio0.045
70.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences88
matches
0"She crossed the flat in"
1"She didn’t look through the"
2"She already knew."
3"His face was calm."
4"She didn’t step back."
5"Her fingers curled around the"
6"His voice was smooth, French-accented,"
7"Her voice didn’t shake"
8"It never did when he"
9"*I can’t protect you and"
10"*You chose one*."
11"His gaze dropped to her"
12"Her breath stilled."
13"Her lips parted."
14"*You were under my protection*,"
15"His jaw tightened."
16"She looked at him—really looked."
17"His breath caught."
18"She stepped back."
19"She shut the door."
ratio0.375
96.36% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences88
matches
0"The chain rattled like a"
1"Aurora didn’t answer the first"
2"She crossed the flat in"
3"The deadbolts clicked back one"
4"She didn’t look through the"
5"She already knew."
6"The door opened."
7"Lucien stood in the dim"
8"His face was calm."
9"She didn’t step back."
10"Her fingers curled around the"
11"His voice was smooth, French-accented,"
12"Her voice didn’t shake"
13"It never did when he"
14"*I can’t protect you and"
15"*You chose one*."
16"His gaze dropped to her"
17"Her breath stilled."
18"A shrill, ordinary sound in"
19"Ptolemy hissed again, then darted"
ratio0.727
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences88
matches
0"*Now you’re not*."
1"As if something on the"
ratio0.023
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences19
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"His voice was smooth, French-accented, the kind that made students lean closer in lecture halls and criminals hand over secrets."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he corrected (correct)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.259
leniency0.517
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.034
94.2385%