Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0021MD2S282C4GB5KRCH0

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11.2s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
In the bowels of London, where the Tube's forgotten veins pulsed with a cold, damp heartbeat, Detective Harlow Quinn found herself at another crime scene. The usual cacophony of city life was muffled here, replaced by the drip-drip of water echoing through the abandoned station. The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else - a faint, acrid tang that prickled her nostrils. She recognised it from her years on the force: the smell of violence. The body lay sprawled on the platform, illuminated by the harsh glare of portable lights. A young woman, her life snuffed out in this godforsaken place. Harlow approached, her boots echoing on the grimy tiles. She noted the lack of struggle, the neatness of the wound - a single, precise slash across the throat. This wasn't a robbery gone wrong or a drunken brawl spiralling out of control. This was calculated, precise. Murder. "Evening, Quinn." DC Davies stood nearby, his camera flashing as he documented the scene. "Thought you'd be tucked up in bed by now." Harlow glanced at her watch, a worn leather strap wrapping around her wrist. "It's not even ten, Davies. And I was in the neighbourhood." Davies raised an eyebrow but said nothing. He knew better than to pry into Harlow's personal life. She was a closed book, even to her colleagues. Her partner's disappearance three years ago had seen to that. "Any ID?" Harlow asked, crouching down beside the body. Davies shook his head. "Nothing on her. But we found this." He held out an evidence bag containing a small, brass compass. Its casing had a patina of verdigris, and the face was etched with protective sigils. Harlow recognised it instantly - a Veil Compass, sold in the underground market. Supernatural energy hummed within it, a faint pulse that only she could feel. "Where did you find this?" she asked, taking the bag from Davies. "By the body. Stuck in her pocket." Harlow turned the bag over in her hands, examining the compass. It pointed north, towards the heart of the city. But there was something else, a faint tremor that seemed to pulse from the compass itself. She looked up, her gaze drawn to the tunnel leading deeper into the station. The compass was pointing towards something down there. "Quinn?" Davies' voice pulled her back. "You alright? You've gone pale." Harlow stood, tucking the evidence bag into her pocket. "I'm fine. Just...déjà vu." She walked towards the tunnel, her boots crunching on the gravel. The compass pulsed stronger, its needle twitching towards the darkness. She could feel it now, a faint tug at the edge of her senses - supernatural energy, raw and untamed. She had felt it before, three years ago when her partner disappeared. The same energy had led her to the Veil Market, the same energy that had taken Morris from her. "Quinn, where are you going?" Davies called after her. "The body's this way." Harlow paused, looking back at Davies. "Something's down there, Davies. Something...off." Davies hesitated, then followed her into the tunnel. "Off how?" "I don't know yet. But I intend to find out." The tunnel was dark, the only light coming from Harlow's torch. The compass pulsed stronger, its needle twitching wildly. They were close now, whatever it was. Harlow could feel it, a pressure building in her chest, a tightness in her throat. She had felt this before, too. The night Morris disappeared. The tunnel opened up into a large cavern, the walls lined with ancient graffiti. In the centre, a circle of symbols had been carved into the ground, their edges glowing with a faint, otherworldly light. Harlow recognised them - runes of protection, wards against supernatural intrusion. Someone had been expecting company. "Quinn, what is this place?" Davies asked, his voice echoing in the cavern. Harlow stepped into the circle, her boots crunching on the gravel. She could feel the energy now, pulsing through her veins, setting her heart racing. "It's a trap, Davies. A very well-hidden, very well-laid trap." She knelt down, examining the runes. They were fresh, the edges still sharp. Whoever had carved them was here recently. She looked up, her gaze drawn to the far wall. There, carved into the stone, was a symbol she recognised - a stylised eye, its pupil a swirling vortex. The mark of the Veil Market. "Quinn, look out!" Davies' shout echoed through the cavern. Harlow looked up just as a figure lunged at her from the shadows. She rolled away, her hand reaching for her gun. But the figure was faster, a blade flashing in the torchlight. It slashed across her arm, a line of fire burning through her flesh. Harlow grunted, clutching her arm. Blood seeped through her fingers, dark and slick. She looked up, her gaze meeting the attacker's. It was a woman, her face obscured by a hood. But her eyes - they were a familiar green, framed by round glasses. Eva Kowalski, Aurora's childhood friend. The occult researcher who had moved to London two years ago. "Eva?" Harlow asked, her voice echoing in the cavern. "What are you doing?" Eva said nothing, her blade flashing again. Harlow rolled away, her hand still clutching her arm. She could feel the blood pulsing from the wound, could feel the energy in the cavern pulsing with it. She was losing too much blood, too fast. She needed to end this, quickly. She lunged at Eva, her good hand grabbing for the blade. Eva twisted away, her eyes widening in surprise. Harlow pressed her advantage, her fist connecting with Eva's jaw. The occult researcher crumpled to the ground, her hood falling back to reveal her curly red hair. Harlow stood over her, panting. Blood dripped from her arm, spattering onto the gravel. She looked down at Eva, her mind racing. What was she doing here? Why was she attacking her? And most importantly, what did she have to do with Morris' disappearance? "Eva, what's going on?" Harlow asked, her voice echoing in the cavern. "Talk to me. What are you involved in?" Eva looked up at her, her green eyes filled with fear. "I'm sorry, Harlow," she said, her voice barely a whisper. "I never meant for any of this to happen." Harlow crouched down, her hand still clutching her arm. "What happened, Eva? Where's Morris?" Eva hesitated, then spoke. "He found something, Harlow. Something he shouldn't have. A rift, leading to another world. The Market - they wanted it. They sent me to...to take care of it." Harlow felt a chill run down her spine. Morris had found a rift, a doorway to another world. And Eva had been sent to close it, to keep it a secret. But something had gone wrong. Morris had disappeared, and now Eva was here, attacking her. "Why are you telling me this, Eva?" Harlow asked, her voice barely above a whisper. "Why now?" Eva looked up at her, her eyes filled with tears. "Because I can't do it anymore, Harlow. I can't keep lying, keep hiding the truth. I want out. I want to make things right." Harlow looked at Eva, her mind racing. She could feel the energy in the cavern pulsing around her, could feel the truth of Eva's words. She had been lied to, manipulated. And now, she had a chance to find out the truth, to make things right. She stood, her hand still clutching her arm. Blood dripped from her fingers, dark and slick. She looked down at Eva, her mind made up. "Alright, Eva," she said, her voice echoing in the cavern. "Let's make things right." As they made their way back to the surface, Harlow couldn't shake the feeling of unease. The compass still pulsed in her pocket, its needle twitching towards the darkness. Whatever was down there, whatever Eva had been sent to take care of, it was still out there. And she intended to find it, no matter the cost.
total_cost0.0009213

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.387
leniency0.774
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.93% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1327
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"quickly"
2"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1327
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"pulsed"
count4
1
word"cacophony"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count6
3
word"calculated"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"etched"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count2
7
word"could feel"
count8
8
word"otherworldly"
count1
9
word"racing"
count3
10
word"echoed"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"down her spine"
count1
highlights
0"pulsed"
1"cacophony"
2"echoing"
3"calculated"
4"eyebrow"
5"etched"
6"pulse"
7"could feel"
8"otherworldly"
9"racing"
10"echoed"
11"familiar"
12"whisper"
13"chill"
14"down her spine"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"The air was thick with"
86.42% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells5
narrationSentences108
matches
0"g in surprise"
1"filled with fear"
2"d with fear"
3"felt a chill"
4"the feeling of unease"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences108
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1332
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1121
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity2.23
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
London2
Tube1
Detective1
Harlow25
Quinn1
Davies8
Veil3
Compass1
Market2
Morris4
Kowalski1
Aurora1
Eva15
Blood3
persons
0"Tube"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Davies"
4"Morris"
5"Kowalski"
6"Aurora"
7"Eva"
8"Blood"
places
0"London"
1"Veil"
globalScore0.385
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences95
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"tremor that seemed to pulse from the compass itself"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1332
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean34.15
std21.09
cv0.617
sampleLengths
080
173
223
324
436
59
663
712
87
958
1011
1113
1272
1313
1411
1510
1610
1751
1851
1913
2035
2155
2255
2360
2413
2549
2646
2744
2820
2930
3014
3132
3246
3317
3434
3546
3625
3714
3857
85.77% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount6
totalSentences108
matches
0"was muffled"
1"was etched"
2"been carved"
3"been sent"
4"been lied"
5"been sent"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs203
matches
0"was pointing"
1"was losing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences128
ratio0.055
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else - a faint, acrid tang that prickled her nostrils."
1"She noted the lack of struggle, the neatness of the wound - a single, precise slash across the throat."
2"Harlow recognised it instantly - a Veil Compass, sold in the underground market."
3"She could feel it now, a faint tug at the edge of her senses - supernatural energy, raw and untamed."
4"Harlow recognised them - runes of protection, wards against supernatural intrusion."
5"There, carved into the stone, was a symbol she recognised - a stylised eye, its pupil a swirling vortex."
6"But her eyes - they were a familiar green, framed by round glasses."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount450
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount3
adverbRatio0.006666666666666667
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0044444444444444444
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean10.41
std4.95
cv0.475
sampleLengths
025
120
222
313
415
511
69
719
814
94
101
1114
129
1313
1411
157
1610
179
1810
199
204
2118
2215
2313
2413
2512
267
2711
289
2916
3014
318
326
335
349
354
3611
3710
3820
3912
4019
419
424
436
445
458
462
4710
4811
498
44.79% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.3203125
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
92.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences107
matches
0"She recognised it from her"
1"She noted the lack of"
2"He knew better than to"
3"She was a closed book,"
4"Her partner's disappearance three years"
5"He held out an evidence"
6"Its casing had a patina"
7"she asked, taking the bag"
8"It pointed north, towards the"
9"She looked up, her gaze"
10"She walked towards the tunnel,"
11"She could feel it now,"
12"She had felt it before,"
13"They were close now, whatever"
14"She had felt this before,"
15"She could feel the energy"
16"She knelt down, examining the"
17"They were fresh, the edges"
18"She looked up, her gaze"
19"She rolled away, her hand"
ratio0.318
30.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount92
totalSentences107
matches
0"The usual cacophony of city"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She recognised it from her"
3"The body lay sprawled on"
4"A young woman, her life"
5"Harlow approached, her boots echoing"
6"She noted the lack of"
7"This wasn't a robbery gone"
8"This was calculated, precise."
9"DC Davies stood nearby, his"
10"Harlow glanced at her watch,"
11"Davies raised an eyebrow but"
12"He knew better than to"
13"She was a closed book,"
14"Her partner's disappearance three years"
15"Harlow asked, crouching down beside"
16"Davies shook his head."
17"He held out an evidence"
18"Its casing had a patina"
19"Harlow recognised it instantly -"
ratio0.86
46.73% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences107
matches
0"Whoever had carved them was"
ratio0.009
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else - a faint, acrid tang that prickled her nostrils."
1"She could feel the energy now, pulsing through her veins, setting her heart racing."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount7
matches
0"DC Davies stood, his camera flashing as he documented the scene"
1"Davies asked, his voice echoing in the cavern"
2"Harlow asked, her voice echoing in the cavern"
3"Harlow asked, her voice echoing in the cavern"
4"she said, her voice barely a whisper"
5"Harlow asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
6"she said, her voice echoing in the cavern"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.29
leniency0.581
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.7210%