Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0021MYKY1YG2GM0T9SEVB

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24.4s
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$0.013874
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain was halfway off when the toe of a boot wedged the door. Aurora didn’t flinch. Her fingers curled around the deadbolt instead, the crescent scar on her wrist pulsing faintly where the metal bit into skin. “You’ve got ten seconds before I call the landlord. He’s ex-military and hates Frenchmen.” “I’m not French.” Lucien stood framed in the gap, rain-slicked charcoal coat clinging to his broad shoulders. One heterochromatic eye caught the dim hall light—amber, molten—with the other, black as engine oil, fixed on her face. “I’m half-Marseille. There’s a difference.” “Tell it to the bouncer at Silas’.” “I already did. He sends his regards. And a warning about your rent.” He didn’t smile, but the corner of his mouth twitched like it remembered how. “Said you were behind again.” Her thumb slipped from the bolt. “Since when do you take messages from bartenders?” “Since they start asking about your sleeping patterns.” He leaned forward slightly, the ivory handle of his cane tapping the floor. “Said you haven’t left the flat in three days. No deliveries. No smoke from the kitchen window. Just the cat meowing at midnight like it’s holding a séance.” Ptolemy had been vocal. Three nights of yowling at the foot of her bed, circling in tight, furious loops. Aurora had thought it was the full moon. Now she wasn’t so sure. “You broke into my flat.” “I *knocked*. Loudly. Three times.” His gaze flicked past her shoulder, into the cluttered mess of Eva’s flat. Scrolls spilled from coffee rings. A half-eaten bowl of noodles had fossilised on the side table. A sigil drawn in crushed charcoal and salt lay half-erased near the sofa. “You’re doing warding work again.” “Don’t you have somewhere to fix? A missing soul to broker? A cursed ring to auction off to some idiot collector?” “I do,” he said, calm as a stopped clock. “And I was on my way. But your name came up.” That stopped her. “Whose mouth?” “A djinn in Soho. Bargaining for freedom. Said he’d trade one favour, no strings, to whoever released him. I asked what he knew. He whispered your name. Then laughed.” Her breath hitched. She caught it, locked it down. “And you came here? Straight from a djinn?” “He mentioned blood. Yours. Drawn. Under a false moon.” Lucien’s voice dropped. “He said you’d forget the cut. But not the voice.” Aurora stepped back. The door swung wide. Rain hissed against the pavement three floors below. The curry house kitchen vent rattled, sending up a greasy plume of cumin and cardamom. Ptolemy hissed from under the bookshelf, fur ridge-lined, tail thrashing. Lucien entered without invitation, closing the door behind him with a quiet *click*. He removed his coat, folded it with care, and laid it over the back of Eva’s armchair—missing half its cushion and piled high with grimoires. Then he leaned his cane against the wall, blade-end down. “You don’t do house calls,” she said, backing toward the kitchenette. “Not for anyone.” “No.” He stepped into the room, movements precise. “I don’t.” “Then why—” “Because the djinn wasn’t the first.” He reached into his inner pocket and pulled out a slip of vellum. Yellowed. Torn at the edges. “This was left at my door an hour ago. Tied with black thread. No scent. No trace of magic. Just this.” She didn’t take it. “Read it aloud.” He did. *"The one with the scar drinks from a cup that isn’t hers. She walks blind where shadows walk upright. Free her, or the debt claims her blood on the fourth night."* Silence. Then—“It’s a trap.” “Probably.” “You shouldn’t have come.” “I know.” He looked at her, really looked. At the shadows under her blue eyes. At the greasy black hair she hadn’t washed in days. At the tremor in her hand when she reached for a glass of water. “But I didn’t trust anyone else to tell you. Not Eva. Not Silas. Not even the damn cat, though he’s smarter than most.” Ptolemy growled. “You look like hell,” Lucien added. “Feel like it too.” “Good.” He moved to the sigil near the couch, crouched. “This is amateur work. Weak binding. You used crushed sage instead of vervain. Salt’s not blessed. The lines waver—like you were shaking when you drew them.” “I was fine.” “You’re not fine. You’re being targeted. And you’re not fighting back.” He straightened. “Why?” She turned her wrist, hid the scar under her sleeve. “I’ve been busy.” “With what? Avoiding sleep? You’re scared to dream.” She flinched. That was answer enough. Lucien crossed to the kitchen, opened the fridge. Empty. A single bottle of flat lemonade and a mouldy lime. He slammed it shut. “You used to fight,” he said quietly. “Even when you didn’t believe in any of this, you fought. That day in Covent Garden, goblins had you cornered, and you threw a *baguette* at the alpha’s throat. Broke his nose.” “It was stale.” “You didn’t know that.” “I *always* knew.” Her voice cracked. “I knew everything I shouldn’t. That’s how Evan found out—how he got close. I told him too much. Thought he *cared*.” The name hung like smoke. Lucien didn’t react. But his fingers flexed, as if testing the weight of a blade beneath his palm. “Evan’s gone,” he said at last. “Exiled. Bound. Can’t cross British soil without burning to ash. You know that.” “Do I?” Her laugh was raw. “People like him don’t stay gone. They slither. They wait. And they send messengers.” “Like this?” He nodded at the vellum. “Like worse.” She reached into her pocket and pulled out a photograph. Grainy. Night-shot. Her, walking home from the restaurant three nights ago. But behind her—just beyond the streetlamp’s halo—*something* followed. Tall. Hunched. Human-shaped but not. Its hand stretched, inches from her shoulder. Lucien studied it. Then folded it slowly. “This wasn’t taken by a camera.” “No. It was drawn. In my notebook. This morning. I didn’t remember drawing it.” “You’re being *marked*,” he said. “Tracked through dreams. They’re weaving something into your sleep—some kind of tether. That’s why the cat’s unsettled. Animals feel these things.” “And you?” “I feel *you*.” He said it flat. No flourish. No apology. “Even when you vanished. Even when you stopped answering. I felt it when something reached for you.” She turned away, gripped the sink. Cold. Chipped at the edge. “You didn’t used to say things like that.” “I didn’t used to care.” “Bullshit.” Her voice was ice. “You cared the moment you saw me deliver the wrong order to your office. *Black tea, no sugar*. You knew I’d read the file on your desk. You knew I’d seen the name *Aurora Carter* circled in red. You used me.” “I used you to *keep you alive*.” His voice sharpened. “You think I didn’t know you were running from Evan? From the things he made you see? I pulled strings, Rory. Called in favours from people who make shadows bleed. So you could disappear. So you could *breathe*.” “And then?” “And then you vanished. No note. No sign. Just a half-finished cup of tea and a delivery scooter left on Brick Lane.” “So you moved on.” Her knuckles whitened. “Just like that.” “No.” He stepped close. Close enough she caught the faint scent of bergamot and something darker beneath—smoke from another realm. “I looked for you. For months. Not because you owed me. But because I’d rather face a pack of hellhounds than spend another night wondering if you were dead in a ditch.” Silence. Then—“You should’ve said that before.” “I’m saying it now.” Outside, thunder cracked. Not natural. Too low. Too rhythmic. Like something testing the sky. Ptolemy yowled. The lights flickered. And in the sudden dim, a sound came from the bedroom. A slow, wet *drip*. Like something bleeding onto the floor.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"He stepped close [close]"
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.316
leniency0.632
rawRatio0.083
effectiveRatio0.053
88.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1320
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.48% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1320
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"flicked"
count1
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"unsettled"
count1
4
word"rhythmic"
count1
5
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"silence"
2"weight"
3"unsettled"
4"rhythmic"
5"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords50
totalWords1305
ratio0.038
matches
0"knocked"
1"click"
2"\"The one with the scar drinks from a cup that isn’t hers. She walks blind where shadows walk upright. Free her, or the debt claims her blood on the fourth night.\""
3"baguette"
4"always"
5"cared"
6"something"
7"marked"
8"you"
9"Black tea, no sugar"
10"Aurora Carter"
11"keep you alive"
12"breathe"
13"drip"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions24
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.05% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount604
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.16
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
One1
Ptolemy4
Eva2
Scrolls1
Aurora3
Yellowed1
Grainy1
Close1
You1
Lucien7
persons
0"Ptolemy"
1"Eva"
2"Scrolls"
3"Aurora"
4"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0.921
windowScore1
87.50% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences40
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if testing the weight of a blade beneath his palm"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1305
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences145
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean17.4
std15.97
cv0.918
sampleLengths
014
138
241
37
432
514
649
732
85
952
1021
1120
125
1329
1417
1522
163
174
1833
1948
2014
2110
222
2345
247
252
2631
271
283
291
304
3162
322
336
344
3536
363
3714
3813
398
402
414
4223
4339
443
454
4627
475
4818
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs119
matches(empty)
24.63% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences145
ratio0.041
matches
0"One heterochromatic eye caught the dim hall light—amber, molten—with the other, black as engine oil, fixed on her face."
1"He removed his coat, folded it with care, and laid it over the back of Eva’s armchair—missing half its cushion and piled high with grimoires."
2"Then—“It’s a trap.”"
3"But behind her—just beyond the streetlamp’s halo—*something* followed."
4"Close enough she caught the faint scent of bergamot and something darker beneath—smoke from another realm."
5"Then—“You should’ve said that before.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount718
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount21
adverbRatio0.02924791086350975
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.002785515320334262
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean9
std8.17
cv0.908
sampleLengths
014
13
221
314
417
519
65
77
827
95
106
118
1221
1328
144
1515
168
175
185
1918
205
2111
2213
235
2421
259
2611
273
282
2929
303
316
328
3312
3410
353
364
378
3815
3910
4013
4125
4210
4311
443
458
462
472
4819
491
63.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4206896551724138
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners61
90.09% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences74
matches
0"Then he leaned his cane"
1"Then folded it slowly."
ratio0.027
52.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount31
totalSentences74
matches
0"Her fingers curled around the"
1"He didn’t smile, but the"
2"Her thumb slipped from the"
3"He leaned forward slightly, the"
4"His gaze flicked past her"
5"he said, calm as a"
6"Her breath hitched."
7"She caught it, locked it"
8"He removed his coat, folded"
9"she said, backing toward the"
10"He stepped into the room,"
11"He reached into his inner"
12"She didn’t take it."
13"He looked at her, really"
14"He moved to the sigil"
15"She turned her wrist, hid"
16"He slammed it shut."
17"he said quietly"
18"Her voice cracked"
19"he said at last"
ratio0.419
81.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences74
matches
0"The chain was halfway off"
1"Aurora didn’t flinch."
2"Her fingers curled around the"
3"Lucien stood framed in the"
4"He didn’t smile, but the"
5"Her thumb slipped from the"
6"He leaned forward slightly, the"
7"Ptolemy had been vocal."
8"Aurora had thought it was"
9"His gaze flicked past her"
10"Scrolls spilled from coffee rings."
11"A half-eaten bowl of noodles"
12"A sigil drawn in crushed"
13"he said, calm as a"
14"That stopped her."
15"Her breath hitched."
16"She caught it, locked it"
17"Lucien’s voice dropped"
18"Aurora stepped back."
19"The door swung wide."
ratio0.757
67.57% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences74
matches
0"Now she wasn’t so sure."
ratio0.014
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences18
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Three nights of yowling at the foot of her bed, circling in tight, furious loops."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Lucien added (add)"
dialogueSentences76
tagDensity0.092
leniency0.184
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.026
90.7078%