Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0021N7JH2CXY6FS1P2KNV

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Duration:
7.1s
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$0.000793

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock echoed through the flat, a staccato rhythm that jarred Rory from her thoughts. She wasn't expecting anyone. Eva was out of town, and Silas was... well, Silas was Silas. She padded to the door, her bare feet silent on the cold floorboards. Through the peephole, she saw a figure standing in the dimly lit hallway, hands tucked into tailored charcoal suit pockets. Lucien Moreau. Her heart did a little flip, traitorous as ever. She unlatched the three deadbolts, each one a deliberate, measured action. When she opened the door, she found him exactly as he'd been through the peephole, except now she could see the heterochromatic eyes, one amber, one black, studying her with an intensity that made her shiver. His slicked-back platinum hair glinted under the harsh hallway light, and his face, always so carefully composed, was unreadable. "Lucien," she acknowledged, leaning against the doorframe. "What brings you to Eva's flat?" He didn't smile, didn't even twitch. "May I come in, Rory?" She stepped aside, letting him enter. His gaze swept the room, taking in the stacks of books, the research notes, the tabby cat named Ptolemy who stretched lazily on the couch. "Eva's not here," she said, closing the door behind him. "I know." He turned to face her, his voice a low rumble. "I came to see you." Rory raised an eyebrow. "Me? After all this time?" Lucien walked further into the room, his ivory-handled cane tapping a steady rhythm on the wooden floor. "Time has a way of... clarifying things, doesn't it?" She watched him, arms crossed. "Clarifying what, exactly?" He stopped by the bookshelf, his fingers tracing the spines of Eva's books. "That I was an idiot." Rory let out a sharp laugh. "Well, that's a start." Lucien turned to face her, his expression serious. "I was wrong, Rory. About us. About everything." She felt her heart pound in her chest, but she kept her voice steady. "You have a funny way of showing it. Disappearing for months, then turning up on my doorstep." He sighed, running a hand through his hair. The carefully slicked-back style fell into disarray, giving him a rumpled, vulnerable look. "I had things to take care of. Demons to... exorcise, if you will." Rory rolled her eyes. "Always the dramatic one, aren't you?" Lucien smiled, a small, sad smile that tugged at something deep inside her. "Old habits die hard." She walked over to the kitchen counter, putting some distance between them. "Coffee?" she asked, needing something to do with her hands. "Please." As she filled the kettle, she felt his gaze on her, heavy and intent. "So, what changed, Lucien? What made you come back?" He was silent for a moment, then, "I realized that I couldn't keep running. From my past. From you." Rory turned to face him, leaning against the counter. "And what about now? What do you want from me?" Lucien took a step closer, his voice dropping to a low murmur. "A second chance." She stared at him, her heart pounding in her chest. "And what makes you think I'd give you one?" He reached out, tucking a strand of hair behind her ear. His fingers brushed her cheek, and she felt a shiver run down her spine. "Because," he said, his voice barely above a whisper, "I still love you, Rory. And I think you still love me too." She opened her mouth to respond, but the kettle whistled, shrill and piercing, cutting through the tension. Rory turned away, busying herself with the coffee. She felt Lucien's gaze on her, heavy and expectant, but she didn't turn around. Not yet. Not until she was sure she could trust herself to speak. As she poured the coffee, she felt a sense of déjà vu wash over her. This was familiar territory, this dance of words and wills. They'd done it a hundred times before, and yet, it always felt new. Always felt like the first time. She handed him the coffee, their fingers brushing. His hand was warm, his grip firm. She looked up at him, meeting his gaze head-on. "I'll think about it, Lucien. That's all I can promise." He nodded, taking the coffee from her. "That's enough, Rory. For now." She smiled, a small, tentative smile. "Good. Because I'm not making any promises I can't keep." As they sat down, coffee in hand, Rory felt a sense of calm wash over her. This was familiar. This was safe. And maybe, just maybe, it was the start of something new. Something better. Only time would tell.
total_cost0.0007925999999999999

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.185
leniency0.37
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
73.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount768
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count2
1
adverb"lazily"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"lazily"
2"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
2.34% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount768
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"measured"
count1
2
word"intensity"
count1
3
word"unreadable"
count1
4
word"eyebrow"
count1
5
word"tracing"
count1
6
word"pounding"
count1
7
word"down her spine"
count1
8
word"whisper"
count1
9
word"tension"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count2
11
word"familiar"
count2
12
word"dance"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"measured"
2"intensity"
3"unreadable"
4"eyebrow"
5"tracing"
6"pounding"
7"down her spine"
8"whisper"
9"tension"
10"sense of"
11"familiar"
12"dance"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences58
matches
0"felt a shiver"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences58
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences79
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords764
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
90.07% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions20
wordCount584
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Silas3
Moreau1
Ptolemy1
Eva2
Lucien6
persons
0"Rory"
1"Silas"
2"Moreau"
3"Eva"
4"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore0.901
windowScore1
96.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like the first time"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount764
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences79
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs30
mean25.47
std17.36
cv0.682
sampleLengths
075
166
213
311
441
517
69
726
88
918
1010
1116
1231
1334
1410
1517
1622
171
1823
1919
2019
2115
2219
2347
2452
2544
2634
2712
2816
2939
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs109
matches
0"wasn't expecting"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences79
ratio0
matches(empty)
99.29% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount588
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.04081632653061224
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.011904761904761904
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences79
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences79
mean9.67
std5.85
cv0.605
sampleLengths
015
14
28
34
413
520
62
79
811
936
1019
117
126
136
145
156
1625
1710
1812
195
204
215
2217
239
245
253
2613
275
286
294
308
318
3214
3317
348
3513
3613
374
386
3913
404
4112
4210
431
4414
459
4619
479
4810
4912
67.93% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.43037974683544306
totalSentences79
uniqueOpeners34
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences55
matches
0"Always felt like the first"
1"Only time would tell."
ratio0.036
1.82% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences55
matches
0"She wasn't expecting anyone."
1"She padded to the door,"
2"Her heart did a little"
3"She unlatched the three deadbolts,"
4"His slicked-back platinum hair glinted"
5"she acknowledged, leaning against the"
6"He didn't smile, didn't even"
7"She stepped aside, letting him"
8"His gaze swept the room,"
9"she said, closing the door"
10"He turned to face her,"
11"She watched him, arms crossed."
12"He stopped by the bookshelf,"
13"She felt her heart pound"
14"He sighed, running a hand"
15"She walked over to the"
16"she asked, needing something to"
17"He was silent for a"
18"She stared at him, her"
19"He reached out, tucking a"
ratio0.545
50.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount45
totalSentences55
matches
0"The knock echoed through the"
1"She wasn't expecting anyone."
2"Eva was out of town,"
3"She padded to the door,"
4"Her heart did a little"
5"She unlatched the three deadbolts,"
6"His slicked-back platinum hair glinted"
7"she acknowledged, leaning against the"
8"He didn't smile, didn't even"
9"She stepped aside, letting him"
10"His gaze swept the room,"
11"she said, closing the door"
12"He turned to face her,"
13"Rory raised an eyebrow."
14"Lucien walked further into the"
15"She watched him, arms crossed."
16"He stopped by the bookshelf,"
17"Rory let out a sharp"
18"Lucien turned to face her,"
19"She felt her heart pound"
ratio0.818
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The knock echoed through the flat, a staccato rhythm that jarred Rory from her thoughts."
1"When she opened the door, she found him exactly as he'd been through the peephole, except now she could see the heterochromatic eyes, one amber, one black, stud…"
2"Lucien smiled, a small, sad smile that tugged at something deep inside her."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"He turned, his voice a low rumble"
1"he said, his voice barely above a whisper,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she acknowledged (acknowledge)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.148
leniency0.296
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.074
81.5539%