Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT00RWNZ7N2B0313TWBFDJK

Run Details

Duration:
28.9s
Cost:
$0.022995
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"There's no way it's what it seems." Detective Harlow Quinn stated flatly, standing inches away from a beige hued wall streaked haphazardly with an indistinct red splatter that had congealed hours ago. She surveyed the scene, her eyes scanning with the meticulous gaze resembling that of a hawk eyeing its next quarry. Beside her, an eager, young officer prattled off details from his notebook that lacked the nuance necessary to challenge her trained eye. "Reports say it's a robbery gone wrong," the officer said, a quiver of defense in his voice acknowledging her scepticism. "The market was empty at the time. No witnesses." Harlow squatted, eyeing the splatter, tracing the pattern with the finger of her imagination. "No witnesses," she murmured. "Conveniently hushed for sinister plots rather than chaotic robberies." Her worn leather watch glinted as she stood, squaring her shoulders with a bearing honed by eighteen years on the force. "And the manager? Who found the mess?" "The curator, Ms. Archer, came in for inventory rounds this morning." The young officer remained at attention, unyielding despite her scrutiny. "Let me guess." A smirk tugged her lips tight. "She's seeking purification rituals now." The officer's baffled expression confirmed her hypothesis. But then, at the Veil Market, entrenched in secrecy and supernatural transactions, such legends never failed to walk a tightrope between myth and law. Eva Kowalski appeared just then, ducking behind upturned tables topped with trinkets and jars previously considered rare by unseen eyes. The curly redhead’s cheek freckles, stark against her porcelain complexion, bore a fleeting semblance of constellations. A tug of nostalgia for childhood escapades swept over Harlow. "It's good to see you're still keen on the arcane, Detective." "Occult expertise is always welcome, Eva," Harlow teased, eyes flicking to the familiar leather satchel that hung stubbornly like an adamantium shield over Eva's shoulder. "Especially when it's not on payroll." "Spare me the formalities," Eva chuckled, a twinkle in her green eyes. "I’m here for the compelling stories." Sidestepping aisle detritus, normally robust market displays in disarray, Eva and Harlow navigated pools of shadow knitted by the intricate latticework of ceiling beams. Distant echoes bounced off the encompassing Tube station walls, cocooning the market in spectral silence that seemed to muffle any ordinary utterance calling it contrived. "Bone token secured, I trust?" Harlow looked towards Eva. The jingled response sounded from Eva's satchel as proof. "Bartering it felt dirtier this time." They paused near an erratic circle traced into the dusting on the floor, fragments of feathers scattered throughout its circumference like careless punctuation. It was as if some unseen force had tried but failed to make an esoteric statement. Harlow frowned. "Look at this..." Officer Davies approached again, interrupting their silent deduction. "The circle—it matches accounts of demon summons. Unreliable claims, but once had our hands tied in Bristol." Eva knelt, tucking hair behind her left ear, examining clues unseen by others. "Wrong markings for demons, right for half-baked attempts," she said, flourishing irreverence. "Amateurs with a death wish." While Harlow's first rule dictated not to hear anything was actual madness, reality checked her bias. "Which means different motive, different assailant. What were they hiding here?" The needle on a Veil Compass, clasping a verdigris patina under the kiss of doom-laden shadows, seized Harlow's attention as a figure approached. It was a Shade artisan, cloaked in ley threads that refused straightforward light. "It's never simple, is it, Detective?" his whisper was barely more than a sigh, speaking truer than silence. The compass’s presence here under enigmatic circumstances was a riddle craving resolution. Harlow looked at Eva, who had paused mid-theory. Her frown mirrored conspiratorial understanding, the latent tension stepping right alongside curiosity. "No," Harlow agreed. "Simple is only skin-deep at the Veil, I'm afraid." Her gaze hardened with decision. The Shade smirked, presenting an unpretentious façade wrapped around the knowledge of the ancient. "Detective, is it clarity you quail for—or closure?" "Both," she said briskly. "What was traded for the compass?" "An owl's feather and the last glimpse of sunlight." His answers twisted with peculiar allegories that dissuaded the conventional, layers of perchance piling assumptions on the mundane, gifting them gravitas not otherwise obtained. Eva fished through her satchel, pulling worn tomes from among books singing mysteries of yore. "Ruth Archer wouldn’t risk this unless forced." Too neatly aligned with multiverse cycles not to originate Pandora's ilk, Harlow mused, taking cues from Eva's deciphered understanding to dig deeper. "What if unsought solutions sought her?" The young officer gawked as if witnessing conversational arcane unknowns was an otherworldly privilege. Harlow marched on, untangling the warp and weft chance had seeded, pulling on threads until simplicity surrendered to her. "Rearrange the narrative," she instructed everyone within earshot. "It's not an ordinary job gone awry. Profane secrets swarm in places like these." "I'd like to bet my morning shift on it," Davies conjectured gamely. Harlow relinquished judgment, consulting her watch—not for time—but every marked occasion when making sense of chaos was, ironically, genuinely necessary. "Shadows frequent here. Watch your footing." Eva, slipping into the role they both craved to decrypt further, nodded. "One stride at a time into the dark, then." As they left behind the red splattered canvas, a reminder of unfinished plots tugged Harlow's attention ever forward. It was a tapestry unwound, the next chapter of discovery already whispering tangible chords yet unsung.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
28.57% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stated flatly [flatly]"
1"she said briskly [briskly]"
2"Davies conjectured gamely [gamely]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.486
leniency0.971
rawRatio0.176
effectiveRatio0.171
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount903
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount903
totalAiIsms24
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"sinister"
count1
3
word"chaotic"
count1
4
word"stark"
count1
5
word"porcelain"
count1
6
word"fleeting"
count1
7
word"familiar"
count1
8
word"navigated"
count1
9
word"intricate"
count1
10
word"echoes"
count1
11
word"spectral"
count1
12
word"silence"
count2
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"whisper"
count1
15
word"enigmatic"
count1
16
word"tension"
count1
17
word"aligned"
count1
18
word"otherworldly"
count1
19
word"sense of"
count1
20
word"reminder"
count1
21
word"tapestry"
count1
22
word"tangible"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"tracing"
2"sinister"
3"chaotic"
4"stark"
5"porcelain"
6"fleeting"
7"familiar"
8"navigated"
9"intricate"
10"echoes"
11"spectral"
12"silence"
13"traced"
14"whisper"
15"enigmatic"
16"tension"
17"aligned"
18"otherworldly"
19"sense of"
20"reminder"
21"tapestry"
22"tangible"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences48
matches(empty)
53.57% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences48
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences66
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen33
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords895
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
35.15% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions39
wordCount653
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity2.3
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow15
Quinn1
Veil2
Market1
Kowalski1
Eva11
Sidestepping1
Tube1
Davies2
Compass1
Shade2
Pandora1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Market"
3"Kowalski"
4"Eva"
5"Davies"
6"Compass"
7"Shade"
8"Pandora"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.351
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"silence that seemed to muffle any ordinary utterance calling it contrived"
1"It was as if some unseen force had tried but failed to make an esoteric statement"
2"as if witnessing conversational arcane unknowns was an otherworldly privilege"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount895
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences66
matches(empty)
98.75% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs31
mean28.87
std14.31
cv0.496
sampleLengths
074
129
255
321
414
531
657
731
818
949
109
1115
1244
1325
1430
1527
1636
1730
1820
1917
2022
2110
2233
2322
2428
2533
2622
2712
2826
2921
3034
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs135
matches(empty)
99.57% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences66
ratio0.015
matches
0"Harlow relinquished judgment, consulting her watch—not for time—but every marked occasion when making sense of chaos was, ironically, genuinely necessary."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount657
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.0380517503805175
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.0197869101978691
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences66
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences66
mean13.56
std7.33
cv0.54
sampleLengths
032
120
222
320
49
514
64
730
87
921
109
115
127
1324
1420
1516
1610
1711
1825
196
2012
216
2224
2325
249
259
266
2723
2816
292
303
318
3217
3313
3412
355
3616
3711
3823
3913
4018
4112
428
4312
443
4514
4614
478
484
496
98.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.6212121212121212
totalSentences66
uniqueOpeners41
74.07% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences45
matches
0"Too neatly aligned with multiverse"
ratio0.022
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences45
matches
0"She surveyed the scene, her"
1"Her worn leather watch glinted"
2"They paused near an erratic"
3"It was as if some"
4"she said, flourishing irreverence"
5"It was a Shade artisan,"
6"his whisper was barely more"
7"Her frown mirrored conspiratorial understanding,"
8"Her gaze hardened with decision"
9"she said briskly"
10"His answers twisted with peculiar"
11"she instructed everyone within earshot"
12"It was a tapestry unwound,"
ratio0.289
37.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount38
totalSentences45
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stated flatly,"
1"She surveyed the scene, her"
2"the officer said, a quiver"
3"Harlow squatted, eyeing the splatter,"
4"Her worn leather watch glinted"
5"The young officer remained at"
6"A smirk tugged her lips"
7"The officer's baffled expression confirmed"
8"Eva Kowalski appeared just then,"
9"The curly redhead’s cheek freckles,"
10"A tug of nostalgia for"
11"Harlow teased, eyes flicking to"
12"Eva chuckled, a twinkle in"
13"Harlow looked towards Eva"
14"The jingled response sounded from"
15"They paused near an erratic"
16"It was as if some"
17"Officer Davies approached again, interrupting"
18"Eva knelt, tucking hair behind"
19"she said, flourishing irreverence"
ratio0.844
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences45
matches
0"While Harlow's first rule dictated"
ratio0.022
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She surveyed the scene, her eyes scanning with the meticulous gaze resembling that of a hawk eyeing its next quarry."
1"Beside her, an eager, young officer prattled off details from his notebook that lacked the nuance necessary to challenge her trained eye."
2"Distant echoes bounced off the encompassing Tube station walls, cocooning the market in spectral silence that seemed to muffle any ordinary utterance calling it…"
3"The young officer gawked as if witnessing conversational arcane unknowns was an otherworldly privilege."
95.59% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"the officer said, a quiver of defense in his voice acknowledging her scepticism"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Detective Harlow Quinn stated flatly (state)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Harlow teased (tease)"
3"Eva chuckled (chuckle)"
4"a sigh speaking (speak)"
5"Harlow agreed (agree)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.257
leniency0.514
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.343
78.4833%