Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT00WH3N5NCSK63PHC9QYTC

Run Details

Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.074230
Provider:
Anthropic

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oaks had warned them first. Not with words — Rory wasn't that far gone yet — but with silence. The birdsong that had followed them through Richmond Park cut out like someone had pulled a plug. One moment, magpies bickered in the canopy above. The next, nothing. Just the wet crunch of their footsteps on leaf mulch and the distant hum of something Rory couldn't name. "There." Nyx extended a hand of solid shadow toward a gap between two ancient oaks. Their violet eyes flared brighter. "The boundary." Rory squinted. Between the trees, the air shimmered like heat rising off summer tarmac, except it was November. The distortion wavered, vertical and strange, a curtain made of not-quite-glass. She could see through it — sort of — but the image on the other side refused to hold still. Green shifted to gold, then back. Branches appeared where none should be. "The standing stones should be ahead," she said, pulling up the collar of her jacket. The Heartstone Pendant resting against her sternum had gone warm, a small heartbeat of its own tapping at her ribs. Not urgent. Curious, almost. She pressed her palm against it through the fabric. "They are not ahead." Nyx rippled. The edges of their form dissolved for a moment, then reconstituted, sharper. More present. "They are here. You are standing on one." Rory looked down. The root she'd been bracing her boot against was no root at all. It was grey stone, weathered to the same dull green as the lichen around it, half-swallowed by earth and time. She stepped off it and saw more — rough-hewn slabs that might have been natural rock if they hadn't formed a perfect arc disappearing into the undergrowth on both sides. "Right." She swallowed. "So how do we—" Nyx walked forward and vanished. Not vanished in their usual way, the slow dissolve into whatever shadow was handy. They simply stepped through the shimmer and ceased to exist on this side of it. Rory stared at the space where they'd been. "Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant." She touched the pendant again. Warm. Steady. Not warning her off. She stepped through. The first thing was the smell. Green and alive and impossibly sweet, like someone had crushed a florist's entire stock and mixed it with honey and rain. It filled her lungs so completely that she coughed, overwhelmed, eyes watering. When she blinked them clear, the world had changed. The Fae Grove opened around her like the inside of a cathedral. Towering oaks — the same species as those on the other side, but wrong in scale — stretched upward until their canopy became a vaulted ceiling of interlocking branches and leaves that glowed with their own pale light. Between them, wildflowers carpeted every surface in defiance of season: bluebells alongside summer poppies alongside snowdrops, all blooming at once, all radiating gentle color in a space where the light had no obvious source. There was no sun visible through the canopy. No sky at all. Just a pearlescent luminescence that came from everywhere and nowhere, warm on her skin. The ground beneath her feet was soft moss, dense as memory foam. Her boots left no impression. "Took you long enough," Nyx whispered from somewhere to her left. They had flattened themselves against the trunk of the nearest oak, blending so thoroughly with the bark's shadow that only their eyes gave them away — two violet pinpoints. "You could've warned me it was a 'just walk through it' sort of deal." "Where would be the joy in that." It wasn't a question. Nyx peeled away from the tree and drifted forward, their form slightly translucent here, as if the Grove's light was doing something to the shadows they were made from. Thinning them. Rory followed, one hand instinctively dropping to the Fae-Forged Blade tucked against her hip beneath her jacket. Isolde had pressed it on her two days ago, the moonsilver cold even through its leather sheath, and the half-Fae's exact words had been: *The Grove knows its own steel. Carry it, and the thorns will not mistake you for prey.* Rory hadn't asked what thorns. She was beginning to think she should have. They moved deeper in. The oaks grew wider, their trunks splitting into shapes that looked almost deliberate — archways, windows, the suggestion of doorways leading somewhere else. Rory stopped at one and peered through. A second clearing lay beyond, smaller, its wildflowers entirely white. In its center stood a stone basin filled with water so still it looked like polished obsidian. "Don't drink it." Nyx's whisper crawled across the back of her neck. She jerked back. "Wasn't planning to." "Good. The last mortal who drank from a Fae spring spent forty years convinced he was a salmon. The Thames authorities were not pleased." She couldn't tell if they were joking. Their voice — that perpetual whisper, wind carried through old hallways — gave nothing away. They pressed on. The path, if it could be called that, wasn't marked in any obvious way, but Rory noticed that the flowers parted where she walked, bending aside as though pushed by an invisible hand. When she glanced behind her, they'd already sprung back. No trail. No trace. As if the Grove swallowed every sign of intrusion the moment it was made. "Time," she said suddenly. "Isolde said time moves differently here. How differently?" Nyx paused. Their head — or the suggestion of one — tilted. "I cannot tell. I exist outside the normal flow. For you..." They trailed off. Their violet eyes dimmed, flared. "We should not linger. An hour here. That should be enough." "An hour by whose clock?" "Precisely the problem." Something rustled overhead. Rory looked up and saw movement in the canopy — a bird, she thought at first, but the shape was wrong. Too angular. It perched on a branch and watched them with eyes like amber coins, and she realized it was a moth. A moth the size of a hawk, with wings of deep emerald velvet and antennae that swayed like metronomes, tracking them. "That's..." "A guardian. One of many. Do not swat it." "I wasn't going to swat a moth the size of a terrier, Nyx." The moth's wings opened and closed. Once. Twice. Then it launched itself soundlessly into the luminescent non-sky and was gone. They reached a clearing larger than the rest. The oaks pulled back here, creating a space perhaps thirty meters across, ringed by standing stones that were nothing like the buried slabs at the boundary. These were tall, pale, and carved with symbols that shifted when Rory looked at them directly — holding still only in her peripheral vision. They formed a circle, and at the circle's center grew a single hawthorn tree, ancient and gnarled, its branches heavy with white blossoms that drifted to the ground like slow snow. Rory stopped walking. The Heartstone Pendant flared hot against her chest. Not painful. Insistent. "This is where she said to come," Rory murmured. She drew the pendant out by its silver chain and held it up. The crimson gemstone pulsed once, twice, three times, each beat brighter than the last, painting her fingers red. "It's reacting to something." Nyx had gone very still. More still than usual, which for a being of living shadow was a particular kind of unnerving. They stared at the hawthorn tree. "There is a tear here." "A tear." "In the Veil. Small. Barely a whisper of one. But the Heartstone knows." Their form flickered. "It was forged in Hel. In Dymas. It recognizes the taste of its own realm bleeding through." Rory turned the pendant in her fingers. The inner glow painted the hawthorn blossoms crimson as they fell. She thought of Dymas — the amber skies, the feasts, Prince Belphegor's sprawling vineyards. She'd never been there. Had only read about it in the Wardens' files that Nyx had stolen. But the pendant remembered. The pendant knew. "Isolde sent us here to find this," she said. "A rift point. In her own Grove." "The Seer exiled from the Courts, harboring a wound in the Barrier within her sanctuary." Nyx's whisper carried something new. Not fear exactly. Wariness. "Either she did not know it was here, which is unlikely for one who sees everything. Or she knew, and let it stay." Rory thought of Isolde's lavender eyes. The way she spoke — never lying, always circling. *The Grove holds what the Grove holds. What you seek is already seeking you.* She'd thought it was typical half-Fae nonsense. She was recalibrating. The blossoms kept falling around them, slow and weightless. The standing stones hummed — she could feel it in her molars, that deep resonance below hearing. The air near the hawthorn's trunk shimmered like the boundary had, but thinner. Threadbare. She could see through it, and what she glimpsed on the other side was a sky the color of warm amber and the distant green of what might have been vineyards stretching across rolling hills. Dymas. The pendant throbbed once in her hand, hard, like a second heart. "Don't touch the tear," Nyx said. "I'm not an idiot." "You walked through an unknown magical barrier sixty seconds after I did it, with zero preparation, because you assumed it was safe." "And it was safe." "This time." She exhaled. The Dymasian sky flickered and steadied on the other side of the rift, achingly beautiful, that amber light spilling through in a thin column that caught the falling hawthorn blossoms and turned them to gold. She lowered the pendant but didn't tuck it away. Its warmth hummed against her knuckles. "We need to tell the Wardens." "We need to think very carefully about what we tell the Wardens," Nyx countered. "A rift point in a half-Fae's hidden grove. They will burn this place to cinders to close it." "And if it widens on its own? The solstice is five weeks away." The silence that followed was longer than any Nyx had offered. The standing stones hummed their deep note. The moth — or another one — circled the hawthorn once before vanishing into the canopy. Rory stood in a place between worlds and felt the weight of what she'd found settle into her bones. The pendant pulsed against her fist, patient and relentless as a heartbeat counting down.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.31
leniency0.619
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.048
79.63% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1718
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"precisely"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count2
5
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"slightly"
2"suddenly"
3"precisely"
4"very"
5"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
33.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1718
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count2
3
word"wavered"
count1
4
word"perfect"
count1
5
word"absolutely"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count4
7
word"velvet"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count2
9
word"flickered"
count2
10
word"sanctuary"
count1
11
word"could feel"
count1
12
word"resonance"
count1
13
word"throbbed"
count1
14
word"warmth"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"footsteps"
2"shimmered"
3"wavered"
4"perfect"
5"absolutely"
6"whisper"
7"velvet"
8"pulsed"
9"flickered"
10"sanctuary"
11"could feel"
12"resonance"
13"throbbed"
14"warmth"
15"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences137
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences166
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords31
totalWords1729
ratio0.018
matches
0"The Grove knows its own steel. Carry it, and the thorns will not mistake you for prey."
1"The Grove holds what the Grove holds. What you seek is already seeking you."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions54
wordCount1392
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.15
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory16
Richmond1
Park1
November1
Heartstone2
Pendant2
Nyx12
Fae4
Grove6
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Dymas2
Prince1
Belphegor1
Isolde2
Dymasian1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Pendant"
2"Nyx"
3"Grove"
4"Blade"
5"Prince"
6"Belphegor"
7"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Fae-Forged"
globalScore0.925
windowScore0.833
91.18% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not-quite glass"
1"looked like polished obsidian"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1729
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences166
matches
0"noticed that the"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs67
mean25.81
std24.05
cv0.932
sampleLengths
06
161
222
361
448
528
666
77
85
937
103
1111
123
1348
14110
1517
1640
1714
187
1935
2058
2113
2261
233
2412
253
2624
2722
2863
2912
3012
3130
325
333
3467
351
369
3713
3820
3989
403
4111
4244
4328
445
452
4633
4756
4816
4947
97.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences137
matches
0"were made"
1"was made"
2"was gone"
87.48% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs237
matches
0"was doing"
1"was beginning"
2"were joking"
3"was recalibrating"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences14
totalSentences166
ratio0.084
matches
0"Not with words — Rory wasn't that far gone yet — but with silence."
1"She could see through it — sort of — but the image on the other side refused to hold still."
2"She stepped off it and saw more — rough-hewn slabs that might have been natural rock if they hadn't formed a perfect arc disappearing into the undergrowth on both sides."
3"Towering oaks — the same species as those on the other side, but wrong in scale — stretched upward until their canopy became a vaulted ceiling of interlocking branches and leaves that glowed with their own pale light."
4"They had flattened themselves against the trunk of the nearest oak, blending so thoroughly with the bark's shadow that only their eyes gave them away — two violet pinpoints."
5"The oaks grew wider, their trunks splitting into shapes that looked almost deliberate — archways, windows, the suggestion of doorways leading somewhere else."
6"Their voice — that perpetual whisper, wind carried through old hallways — gave nothing away."
7"Their head — or the suggestion of one — tilted."
8"Rory looked up and saw movement in the canopy — a bird, she thought at first, but the shape was wrong."
9"These were tall, pale, and carved with symbols that shifted when Rory looked at them directly — holding still only in her peripheral vision."
10"She thought of Dymas — the amber skies, the feasts, Prince Belphegor's sprawling vineyards."
11"The way she spoke — never lying, always circling."
12"The standing stones hummed — she could feel it in her molars, that deep resonance below hearing."
13"The moth — or another one — circled the hawthorn once before vanishing into the canopy."
84.07% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1227
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay beyond, smaller, its"
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.05134474327628362
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.012224938875305624
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences166
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences166
mean10.42
std8.27
cv0.794
sampleLengths
06
114
217
38
43
519
615
75
82
92
1016
1111
1220
136
146
1515
1620
172
182
199
206
2112
222
238
243
2513
2620
2730
283
294
305
3114
3215
338
343
355
361
371
384
393
406
4121
4212
439
4412
4538
4634
478
484
4914
54.22% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3614457831325301
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences112
matches
0"Just the wet crunch of"
1"Just a pearlescent luminescence that"
2"Then it launched itself soundlessly"
3"More still than usual, which"
ratio0.036
91.43% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences112
matches
0"Their violet eyes flared brighter."
1"She could see through it"
2"she said, pulling up the"
3"She pressed her palm against"
4"It was grey stone, weathered"
5"She stepped off it and"
6"They simply stepped through the"
7"She touched the pendant again."
8"She stepped through."
9"It filled her lungs so"
10"Her boots left no impression."
11"They had flattened themselves against"
12"It wasn't a question."
13"She was beginning to think"
14"They moved deeper in."
15"She jerked back."
16"She couldn't tell if they"
17"Their voice — that perpetual"
18"They pressed on."
19"she said suddenly"
ratio0.321
67.14% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount88
totalSentences112
matches
0"The oaks had warned them"
1"The birdsong that had followed"
2"The next, nothing."
3"Nyx extended a hand of"
4"Their violet eyes flared brighter."
5"The distortion wavered, vertical and"
6"She could see through it"
7"Branches appeared where none should"
8"she said, pulling up the"
9"The Heartstone Pendant resting against"
10"She pressed her palm against"
11"The edges of their form"
12"Rory looked down."
13"The root she'd been bracing"
14"It was grey stone, weathered"
15"She stepped off it and"
16"Nyx walked forward and vanished."
17"They simply stepped through the"
18"Rory stared at the space"
19"She touched the pendant again."
ratio0.786
44.64% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences112
matches
0"As if the Grove swallowed"
ratio0.009
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences52
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"She stepped off it and saw more — rough-hewn slabs that might have been natural rock if they hadn't formed a perfect arc disappearing into the undergrowth on bo…"
1"Nyx peeled away from the tree and drifted forward, their form slightly translucent here, as if the Grove's light was doing something to the shadows they were ma…"
2"The oaks grew wider, their trunks splitting into shapes that looked almost deliberate — archways, windows, the suggestion of doorways leading somewhere else."
3"The path, if it could be called that, wasn't marked in any obvious way, but Rory noticed that the flowers parted where she walked, bending aside as though pushe…"
4"A moth the size of a hawk, with wings of deep emerald velvet and antennae that swayed like metronomes, tracking them."
5"These were tall, pale, and carved with symbols that shifted when Rory looked at them directly — holding still only in her peripheral vision."
6"They formed a circle, and at the circle's center grew a single hawthorn tree, ancient and gnarled, its branches heavy with white blossoms that drifted to the gr…"
7"The Dymasian sky flickered and steadied on the other side of the rift, achingly beautiful, that amber light spilling through in a thin column that caught the fa…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.095
84.8911%