Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0148XHC7VGRQ8EP2G914F

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59.1s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts clicked open one by one. Three distinct sounds that meant Eva was either expecting someone or didn't care anymore about staying alive. I pressed myself against the corridor wall beside her door, breathing in the familiar scent of curry and old books that always clung to this building. My fingers found the small crescent scar on my left wrist, tracing it like a talisman. "Rory." Not a question. Eva's voice carried the same Welsh lilt that used to calm me during Cardiff thunderstorms, but something harder lived beneath it now. Something that hadn't been there when I'd fled to London six months ago. The door swung wider. Eva stood silhouetted against the warm glow of her flat, her auburn curls catching the light from the dozen mismatched lamps scattered across every surface. Books towered in precarious stacks behind her. Scrolls unfurled from coffee tables. Research notes papered the walls like desperate prayers. "You look terrible," she said. "Hello to you too." "When did you last eat?" I stepped inside without invitation. Ptolemy, her tabby cat, wound around my ankles with a purr that vibrated through my boots. At least someone was pleased to see me. "You can't just turn up here like nothing happened." "Can't I?" I moved deeper into the chaos of her flat. The familiar disorder should have comforted me, but tonight it felt like archaeology. Evidence of a life I'd walked away from. "Six months, Rory. Six bloody months without a word." "You told me to leave." "I told you to leave Evan. Not London. Not me." The words hung between us like smoke. I picked up a leather-bound journal from her sofa, its pages filled with her careful handwriting. Notes about protective wards. Binding circles. The supernatural research that had consumed her since university. "Still playing with magic, I see." "Still running from everything, I see." The journal slipped from my fingers. Pages fluttered as it hit the floor, revealing sketches of symbols I didn't recognise. Eva bent to retrieve it, her movements sharp with suppressed anger. "You look different," I said. She did. Thinner. Sharper edges where softness used to live. Her cardigan hung loose on her frame, and dark circles shadowed her green eyes. Six months ago, she'd been studying folklore as a hobby. Now her flat resembled a war room. "People change when their best friends disappear." "You have other friends." "Do I?" She clutched the journal against her chest like armour. "Name one who knows about this. About what I've been researching." I couldn't. Eva's world had always been divided between the academic colleagues who saw her as eccentric and the few who knew about her real interests. I'd been the bridge between those worlds, the one person who accepted both versions of her. "The wards around this building are new," I said. "Someone's been paying attention." "Hard to miss. They're amateur work but enthusiastic. What are you protecting yourself from?" Eva moved to her kitchen, filling the kettle with practiced movements. Her hands shook slightly as she set it on the hob. "Tea?" "Eva." "Earl Grey or chamomile?" "Who are you hiding from?" The kettle whistled. She'd always liked her water just shy of boiling, claiming it preserved the delicate oils in the tea leaves. I remembered that detail with startling clarity, along with dozens of others. How she took her coffee with too much sugar. The way she hummed off-key when she thought no one was listening. The sound she made in the back of her throat when I kissed her neck. "Chamomile it is." She pulled two mismatched mugs from the cupboard. "Might help with that panic attack you're clearly fighting off." My breathing had grown shallow without my noticing. Old habits. I forced air into my lungs, counted to four, held, released. The technique she'd taught me during our second year at Cardiff. "I'm fine." "Of course you are. You're always fine. Even when you're sleeping on Silas's sofa and delivering Chinese food to pay rent." "How do you know about that?" She handed me a steaming mug. Our fingers brushed during the exchange, and I felt the familiar spark that had always existed between us. Chemistry that transcended friendship but had never been simple enough to name. "London's not as big as you think. Especially the parts we frequent." "The supernatural corners, you mean." "Those tend to be small communities." She settled into her armchair, tucking her legs beneath her. "People talk. Share information. Warn each other about dangers." "What kind of dangers?" "The kind that follow you home from Cardiff." The tea turned bitter in my mouth. "Evan doesn't know where I am." "Doesn't he?" She reached for a manila folder on her side table, withdrew a photograph. Even upside down, I recognised the figure emerging from the Golden Empress restaurant. Me, but taken recently. Someone had been watching. "Where did you get this?" "Someone left it under my door two weeks ago. Along with others." More photographs scattered across the coffee table between us. Me walking to work. Me climbing the stairs to Silas's pub. Me buying groceries from the Tesco Express near Brick Lane. "There's more." A final photograph made my blood turn to ice water. Evan, standing outside this very building. The timestamp showed yesterday's date. "He found you," Eva said quietly. "Which means he found me too." I set down the mug with trembling hands. Tea sloshed across her research notes, bleeding ink across carefully drawn diagrams. "I'm sorry. I didn't think he'd connect us. I thought enough time had passed." "Time doesn't erase obsession, Rory. You should know that by now." "I'll leave. Tonight. Go somewhere else." "Where?" She leaned forward, eyes blazing. "Scotland? Ireland? France? How far do you think you can run before he finds you again?" "As far as it takes." "And what about me? What happens when he decides I know where you've gone?" The question hung in the air like a curse. I'd been so focused on my own escape that I hadn't considered the trail of destruction I might leave behind. Everyone Evan associated with me became a potential target. A source of information to exploit. "I never meant for you to get involved." "I've been involved since we were eighteen and you showed up at my door with a black eye, claiming you'd walked into a cupboard." "That was different." "Was it? Because from where I'm sitting, it looks exactly the same. You, running. Me, picking up the pieces." Her words cut deeper than intended. I stood abruptly, pacing to her window. The street below looked normal enough. Couples walking home from dinner. Late-shift workers heading to or from jobs. Nothing that screamed immediate danger. But Evan had been here yesterday. "The wards won't hold against him," I said. "I know." "He's not entirely human anymore. The things he was experimenting with before I left. The rituals." "I know that too." I turned back to face her. "Then why are you still here? Why haven't you run?" "Because running doesn't work, Rory. It never has." She stood, closing the distance between us. "Because some problems follow you no matter where you go. Because maybe it's time to stop being prey." "You want to fight him?" "I want to end this. For both of us." The flat felt smaller suddenly. Cramped with possibility and terrible choices. Eva stood close enough that I could smell her soap, the lavender oil she dabbed behind her ears. Close enough to remember what it felt like to kiss her in her dorm room while rain pattered against the windows. "You don't understand what he's become." "Then explain it to me." "Eva." "Explain it." Her eyes held mine, unflinching. The same determination that had made her argue with professors twice her age about the historical accuracy of folklore. The stubborn streak that had attracted me to her in the first place. "He's not just abusive anymore," I said finally. "He's something else. Something hungry." "Possessed?" "Worse. Invited." Understanding dawned across her features. The supernatural world had rules, most of which involved consent. Demons couldn't simply take residence in human hosts. They had to be welcomed. Bargained with. Fed. "What did he offer them?" I couldn't meet her eyes. "Me." The silence stretched between us like a chasm. Outside, London hummed with its usual late-night energy. Inside, the weight of my confession pressed against the walls of Eva's small flat. "How long do we have?" she asked finally. "I don't know. The binding takes time to solidify. But once it does..." "Once it does, he'll never stop hunting you." I nodded. "And anyone who helps me becomes fair game." Eva moved to her desk, pulling out a fresh notebook. Her hands had stopped shaking. If anything, she looked calmer now that she understood the scope of the problem. "Right then," she said, uncapping a pen. "Let's get to work." "Eva, you can't—" "Can't what? Can't help my oldest friend? Can't use the skills I've spent years developing?" She looked up at me with fierce green eyes. "Can't finally do something about the bastard who's been terrorising you for years?" "He'll kill you." "He'll try." The certainty in her voice sent ice through my veins. This wasn't the Eva I'd left behind six months ago. This was someone harder. Someone who'd spent half a year preparing for exactly this confrontation. "What aren't you telling me?" I asked. She smiled then, and it was all sharp edges. "That I've been hunting him since the day you left London."
total_cost0.048648

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Eva said quietly [quietly]"
1"I said finally [finally]"
2"she asked finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences84
tagDensity0.19
leniency0.381
rawRatio0.188
effectiveRatio0.071
87.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1601
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"carefully"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"carefully"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
68.77% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1601
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"tracing"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"vibrated"
count1
4
word"fluttered"
count1
5
word"potential"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"tracing"
2"lilt"
3"vibrated"
4"fluttered"
5"potential"
6"silence"
7"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences117
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences117
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences185
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1597
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
96.50% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount1028
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity1.07
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Me"
discoveredNames
Eva11
Welsh1
Cardiff2
London2
Golden1
Empress1
Silas1
Tesco1
Express1
Brick1
Lane1
Evan3
Understanding1
Me4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Silas"
2"Evan"
3"Understanding"
4"Me"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Golden"
3"Tesco"
4"Brick"
5"Lane"
globalScore0.965
windowScore1
87.50% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences80
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like archaeology"
1"felt like to kiss her in her dorm room"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1597
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences185
matches
0"remembered that detail"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs99
mean16.13
std14.41
cv0.893
sampleLengths
024
142
21
338
449
55
64
75
829
99
1032
119
125
1310
1438
156
166
1731
185
1941
207
214
2222
2342
249
254
2614
2723
281
294
305
3170
3221
3332
342
3521
366
3736
3812
395
4025
414
428
4313
442
4534
465
4712
4830
492
99.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences117
matches
0"was pleased"
1"been divided"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs188
matches
0"was listening"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences185
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1032
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.031007751937984496
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.009689922480620155
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences185
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences185
mean8.63
std5.42
cv0.628
sampleLengths
07
117
226
316
41
53
622
713
84
925
107
115
128
135
144
155
165
1716
188
199
2011
2113
228
239
245
2510
267
2716
284
292
309
316
326
336
3414
3511
365
372
381
397
4014
4110
427
437
444
4511
4611
472
4824
4916
70.45% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.4648648648648649
totalSentences185
uniqueOpeners86
32.05% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences104
matches
0"At least someone was pleased"
ratio0.01
73.85% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount38
totalSentences104
matches
0"I pressed myself against the"
1"My fingers found the small"
2"I stepped inside without invitation."
3"I moved deeper into the"
4"I picked up a leather-bound"
5"Her cardigan hung loose on"
6"She clutched the journal against"
7"I'd been the bridge between"
8"Her hands shook slightly as"
9"She'd always liked her water"
10"I remembered that detail with"
11"She pulled two mismatched mugs"
12"My breathing had grown shallow"
13"I forced air into my"
14"She handed me a steaming"
15"Our fingers brushed during the"
16"She settled into her armchair,"
17"She reached for a manila"
18"Me, but taken recently."
19"Me walking to work."
ratio0.365
41.73% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences104
matches
0"The deadbolts clicked open one"
1"I pressed myself against the"
2"My fingers found the small"
3"Eva's voice carried the same"
4"Something that hadn't been there"
5"The door swung wider."
6"Eva stood silhouetted against the"
7"Books towered in precarious stacks"
8"Scrolls unfurled from coffee tables."
9"I stepped inside without invitation."
10"Ptolemy, her tabby cat, wound"
11"I moved deeper into the"
12"The familiar disorder should have"
13"Evidence of a life I'd"
14"The words hung between us"
15"I picked up a leather-bound"
16"Notes about protective wards."
17"The supernatural research that had"
18"The journal slipped from my"
19"Pages fluttered as it hit"
ratio0.837
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences104
matches
0"Now her flat resembled a"
1"Even upside down, I recognised"
2"If anything, she looked calmer"
ratio0.029
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences42
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Three distinct sounds that meant Eva was either expecting someone or didn't care anymore about staying alive."
1"Eva's voice carried the same Welsh lilt that used to calm me during Cardiff thunderstorms, but something harder lived beneath it now."
2"Ptolemy, her tabby cat, wound around my ankles with a purr that vibrated through my boots."
3"Eva's world had always been divided between the academic colleagues who saw her as eccentric and the few who knew about her real interests."
4"Chemistry that transcended friendship but had never been simple enough to name."
5"The same determination that had made her argue with professors twice her age about the historical accuracy of folklore."
93.75% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"She leaned, eyes blazing"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences84
tagDensity0.107
leniency0.214
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.7395%