Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT02TSWNJNJD2J66T5WWQR0

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22.7s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body hung upside down from the ticket barrier like a butchered deer, wrists bound with copper wire that gleamed under the flickering fluorescents. Blood dripped in slow pulses onto the cracked tile, forming a halo of rust around the corpse’s head. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over a snapped police tape, her boots crunching on broken glass and what looked like charred feathers. The air tasted of burnt sage and something metallic—copper, maybe, or fresh-spilt blood. Too much of it pooling near the turnstile. She didn’t crouch. Didn’t flinch. Just stared. "Found him at six a.m. by a pair of urban explorers," said DS Lyle, voice tight. "They thought it was performance art. Took a selfie before calling us." Quinn didn’t answer. Her gaze tracked the arc of blood spray across the tiled wall. Not arterial. Not exactly. Too low viscosity. Too even. This wasn’t from a severed artery. This was *placed*. "Time of death?" "Not sure. No watch. Liver temp’s off. Cold in here, but not *that* cold. Coroner says he’s been dead at least twelve hours, maybe more." "Then why’s the blood still oozing?" Lyle hesitated. "Capillary action from the position. Gravity—" "Gravity?" She finally turned, eyes cutting into him. "You see this?" She pointed at a smear along the gate arm. Thick, dark, but not dripping. More like it had been *brushed* on. "That’s not flow. That’s application. Postmortem." Lyle shifted. "You’re saying someone staged it?" "I’m saying the story doesn’t hold water." She stepped closer to the body. Male, mid-thirties, pale skin, dressed in worn jeans and a black hoodie with the hood up. Face obscured. "Get the hood down." "Thought you’d want photos first." "Now." Lyle gestured to the photographer, who snapped three quick shots. Then, gloved hands tugged the fabric back. The man’s eyes were open. Pupils dilated. Not from death. From something else. And his irises were silver. Not reflective. Not painted. *Silver*. Like liquid mercury had replaced the tissue. Quinn didn’t recoil. But she exhaled through her nose, slow and controlled. She’d seen things like this before. Not in case files. Not in training. Only once. Three years ago, in a storage unit behind Peckham Rye, when Morris—when *her partner*—had vanished. Left behind a puddle of black sludge and a single silver button. "Have you called the Home Office?" she asked. "Standard procedure’s to wait until we confirm identity." "His eyes are *metal*, Lyle." "Could be lenses. Experimental. Some rave drug, maybe." She looked at him. Really looked. His fingers drummed his thigh—twice, pause, twice. *Anxiety tic.* He wasn’t scared of the body. He was scared of *her* reaction. "This isn’t a rave. He’s not a junkie." "Then what is he?" She didn’t answer. Instead, she crouched, ignoring the ache in her knees, and ran a gloved finger along the base of the man’s neck. Skin was cold. But the tissue around the hairline… warmer. Almost humming. And there, beneath the left ear—an irregular scar. Circular. Raised. Like a puncture that had healed wrong. Her breath caught. She knew that mark. Eva Kowalski had shown her a photograph six months ago. After the Brixton library fire. After the *other* body. The one with the same eyes. The same scar. *"They call it the Veil Mark,"* the girl had said, fingers tucking hair behind her left ear. *"Means someone’s crossed through. Or been claimed."* Quinn stood. "Bag his hands. Head to toe. And I want the barrier arm wiped down. Not dusted. *Wiped*. With ethanol. No metal tools." Lyle frowned. "You think it’s evidence of—?" "I think someone’s cleaning up." She turned to the corridor beyond the turnstile. A service door stood ajar, revealing a narrow passage. No signs. No lighting. Just damp concrete and a faint smell of ozone. She pulled her worn leather watch from her left wrist—*ticking too slow*—and checked the time. 6:47 a.m. Moonset at 5:33. And according to Eva, *the Veil Market moves on the full moon*. This station had been operational until last night. Now? Abandoned. Sealed off since the ‘70s. Perfect location for a black market most people didn’t believe existed. And perfect place to dump a body no one should see. She unzipped her coat just enough to reach inside, fingers brushing the small, cool weight in her inner pocket. The *Veil Compass*. Brass casing. Verdigris patina. Needle that didn’t point north. Hers was hidden. But she *felt* it now. A faint pull in her ribs, tugging toward that dark passage. She hadn’t believed Eva at first. Not until the compass needle spun wildly during the Brixton case. Until it led her to a graffiti-covered wall that *wasn’t there* five hours later. And now it was stirring again. "Quinn?" Lyle’s voice broke through. "You going in there?" "Just checking the perimeter." "The rest of the team’s on the way." "Then they can start here." She stepped past him, into the tunnel. Darkness swallowed her. The air changed within three paces. Drier. Charged. Like before a storm. Her teeth tingled. Ten feet in, the wall to her left shimmered. Not a trick of the light. A *wrinkle*, like cloth pulled taut over a frame. She stopped. Reached out. Her fingers didn’t meet brick. They met resistance—soft, gelatinous, like pushing through cold honey. She withdrew. Looked down. Her glove was gone. Not torn. Not left behind. *Gone*. As if it had never existed. She didn’t flinch. Didn’t call for help. Just pulled the Veil Compass from her coat. Opened the lid. The needle spun—once, twice—then pointed straight ahead, quivering. Not at the wall. At the *shimmer*. She unclipped her torch. Clicked it on. The beam didn’t cut through. It *bent*, curving around the anomaly like water around stone. Then a voice, close behind her. "Don’t step through." She turned. Eva Kowalski stood in the tunnel, satchel slung over one shoulder, curly red hair half-hidden under a scarf. Her breath fogged in the cold. "You weren’t supposed to come alone." Quinn didn’t lower the torch. "You knew about this?" Eva nodded. "I tried to call. Six times." "I was in meetings." "They moved the Market early. Moon was full at 5:12 a.m. They’re already packing up." "Who are *they*?" "Traders. Runners. The ones who don’t want the Metropolitan Police crawling through their doorways." Eva stepped forward. "That man back there? His name was Elias Vorne. He wasn’t a tourist. He was a gatekeeper." "And the silver eyes?" "Consequence. When a Veil rift collapses on someone mid-crossing, it steals the light in their gaze. Leaves behind a reflection of the other side." Quinn stared at her. "That’s impossible." Eva didn’t blink. "You’re standing in a tunnel that leads to a floating market inside a dead subway line. And your glove is gone. What part of this is still impossible?" Silence. Then, from the shimmer, a sound. A click. Like a latch turning. Both women froze. The air *cracked*. Not loud. But deep. Like a bone snapping in your skull. The Veil Compass jerked in Quinn’s hand, needle spinning wild. And the wall *opened*. A sliver of light—amber, flickering—spilled into the tunnel. Inside, voices. Hushed. Urgent. And the unmistakable clink of a brass bell, rung three times. Eva grabbed Quinn’s arm. "We need to go. *Now*." Quinn didn’t move. She was staring at the sliver of light. Because for half a second—just before the gap began to seal—it had reflected. And in that reflection, she’d seen herself. But older. Wearing a different coat. Standing over a body that looked like hers. And holding a knife.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.227
leniency0.455
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
96.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1271
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.46% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1271
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"standard"
count1
1
word"perfect"
count2
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"charged"
count1
4
word"shimmered"
count1
5
word"silence"
count1
highlights
0"standard"
1"perfect"
2"weight"
3"charged"
4"shimmered"
5"silence"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences165
matches
0"was scared"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences165
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences199
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen28
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans25
markdownWords49
totalWords1255
ratio0.039
matches
0"placed"
1"that"
2"brushed"
3"Silver"
4"her partner"
5"metal"
6"Anxiety tic."
7"her"
8"other"
9"\"They call it the Veil Mark,\""
10"\"Means someone’s crossed through. Or been claimed.\""
11"Wiped"
12"ticking too slow"
13"the Veil Market moves on the full moon"
14"Veil Compass"
15"felt"
16"wasn’t there"
17"wrinkle"
18"Gone"
19"shimmer"
20"bent"
21"they"
22"cracked"
23"opened"
24"Now"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions48
wordCount918
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity0.98
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn9
Lyle6
Thick1
Male1
Peckham1
Rye1
Morris1
Kowalski2
Brixton2
Eva8
Veil4
Market1
Perfect1
Darkness1
Compass3
Like5
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Lyle"
3"Morris"
4"Kowalski"
5"Eva"
6"Market"
7"Darkness"
8"Compass"
9"Like"
places
0"Brixton"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
73.08% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like charred feathers"
1"looked like hers"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1255
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences199
matches
0"knew that mark"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean13.07
std12.35
cv0.944
sampleLengths
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27
328
433
53
625
76
88
938
107
1135
125
131
1417
1513
165
1712
1854
198
208
215
228
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248
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3611
3731
3819
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406
419
424
438
4412
453
4615
4724
482
492
96.76% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences165
matches
0"was *placed"
1"been *brushed"
2"was hidden"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs161
matches
0"was staring"
13.64% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences199
ratio0.045
matches
0"The air tasted of burnt sage and something metallic—copper, maybe, or fresh-spilt blood."
1"Three years ago, in a storage unit behind Peckham Rye, when Morris—when *her partner*—had vanished."
2"His fingers drummed his thigh—twice, pause, twice."
3"And there, beneath the left ear—an irregular scar."
4"She pulled her worn leather watch from her left wrist—*ticking too slow*—and checked the time."
5"They met resistance—soft, gelatinous, like pushing through cold honey."
6"The needle spun—once, twice—then pointed straight ahead, quivering."
7"A sliver of light—amber, flickering—spilled into the tunnel."
8"Because for half a second—just before the gap began to seal—it had reflected."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount621
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount20
adverbRatio0.0322061191626409
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.008051529790660225
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences199
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences199
mean6.31
std5.24
cv0.831
sampleLengths
024
118
221
313
48
53
62
72
816
912
103
1112
122
132
143
152
166
173
183
1925
206
212
226
238
2412
255
267
276
282
295
3013
3116
322
334
345
351
3610
377
385
392
403
413
425
432
442
451
467
473
489
496
70.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.45226130653266333
totalSentences199
uniqueOpeners90
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences119
matches
0"Too much of it pooling"
1"Too low viscosity."
2"More like it had been"
3"Then, gloved hands tugged the"
4"Instead, she crouched, ignoring the"
5"Just damp concrete and a"
6"Just pulled the Veil Compass"
7"Then a voice, close behind"
8"Then, from the shimmer, a"
ratio0.076
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences119
matches
0"She didn’t crouch."
1"Her gaze tracked the arc"
2"She finally turned, eyes cutting"
3"She pointed at a smear"
4"She stepped closer to the"
5"She’d seen things like this"
6"She looked at him."
7"His fingers drummed his thigh—twice,"
8"He was scared of *her*"
9"She didn’t answer."
10"Her breath caught."
11"She knew that mark."
12"She turned to the corridor"
13"She pulled her worn leather"
14"She unzipped her coat just"
15"Hers was hidden."
16"She hadn’t believed Eva at"
17"She stepped past him, into"
18"Her teeth tingled."
19"Her fingers didn’t meet brick."
ratio0.227
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences119
matches
0"The body hung upside down"
1"Blood dripped in slow pulses"
2"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over"
3"The air tasted of burnt"
4"She didn’t crouch."
5"Quinn didn’t answer."
6"Her gaze tracked the arc"
7"This wasn’t from a severed"
8"This was *placed*."
9"She finally turned, eyes cutting"
10"She pointed at a smear"
11"She stepped closer to the"
12"Lyle gestured to the photographer,"
13"The man’s eyes were open."
14"Quinn didn’t recoil."
15"She’d seen things like this"
16"She looked at him."
17"His fingers drummed his thigh—twice,"
18"*Anxiety tic.* He wasn’t scared"
19"He was scared of *her*"
ratio0.555
84.03% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences119
matches
0"As if it had never"
1"Because for half a second—just"
ratio0.017
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The body hung upside down from the ticket barrier like a butchered deer, wrists bound with copper wire that gleamed under the flickering fluorescents."
1"Until it led her to a graffiti-covered wall that *wasn’t there* five hours later."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"said DS Lyle, voice tight"
1"the girl had, fingers tucking hair behind her left ear"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"the girl had (have)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.068
leniency0.136
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.045
90.1556%