Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT03B23D6CTN1VVNW09ZJG8

Run Details

Model:
GPT-4.1
Duration:
42.4s
Cost:
$0.020440
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Glass shattered behind me. Eva, somewhere in the flat, cursed at Ptolemy. I ducked to swerve a stack of books teetering on the hall tiles, my knuckles ghosting the bone-shaped scar peeking from my sleeve. Breath came tight. The rapid pounding didn't belong on the street—no, that beat belonged to the front door. Not the landlord. Not the post. That was a knock you answered or regretted. I shoved books off the deadbolts, flicked one, then two, then three aside. The door stuttered on the worn hinge and I squared my shoulders, ready for more things to break. Lucien Moreau filled the frame, suit pressed to dangerous perfection. Amber and black eyes snagged mine, appraising as always. His cane’s ivory handle reflected the dim flat light, the look on his face unmistakable. Too late to shut the door. Too many miles since Marseille, too much unsaid since Brick Lane last saw him. "Busy night, Malphora?" He stepped inside without waiting, close enough for the clean, expensive musk of his cologne to eclipse the flat's normal parade of old curry and cat. "Should've called ahead if you fancied a takeaway," I muttered, clicking the last bolt closed behind him. "Eva's gone all casserole, you know how she gets with visitors." His pressure warped the cramped room, making books and scrolls sprout new edges. Ptolemy slinked between his feet, grandly indifferent. "To call ahead, one needs an invitation," Lucien said. Lips curled—almost amused, but somehow even that had an edge. "That was never your style. Besides, I had to see you." Not “needed a chat.” Not “had business.” See you. He never wasted syllables. My skin prickled, memories slinking round the room like cats behind radiators. I forced a light tone. "Did you come for tea, or work?" He unclipped a cufflink, rolling it between pale demon fingers. "Does it matter? Both taste better when shared." A kettle shrieked—Eva’s usual peace offering, always the right side of boiling. I stalked to the kitchenette, hands busy on mugs to hide the tremor in my wrist. "What’s the real reason, Lucien? Your informants go on strike? You run out of more interesting company tonight?" He settled against the kitchen door, silhouette just wrong enough in the yellow light that I could sense the demon underneath. Amber eye lazy. Black one—hungry. "The latter, certainly. The former, regrettably not." Steam ghosted my face. "So you pop round to reminisce?" A pause. He took in the flat, the fossilised curry stains at the corners, the ancient book on Norse banishment rituals Eva had used as a coaster. "My business is about unfinished things, Aurora. You left a debt unpaid." "Which one?" I passed a chipped mug across, my fingers brushing his. Heat shot through my palm, annoyance and something sharper tangled. "You’ll have to narrow it down. I’ve stacked a fair few since we last spoke." He pulled the mug away, laughing low and quiet. "Let’s begin with Cardiff. Move forward." His cane clicked twice on the linoleum. I held my own spine straight, daring him to press further. Lucien excelled at silences. He let them work like garrotes. "You didn’t come here for the money," I said. "Or chats about old Welsh debts." He sipped his tea. "No. But what I need from you, you won’t offer if I lead bluntly." I flinched. The flat's walls pressed in—the curry-house below offered muffled comfort, but even Brick Lane couldn’t keep the past out. "Stop playing around," I snapped. "Spit it." Lucien watched me, his unreadable demon eye fixed. "You overestimate my patience, but underestimate my hope. There was a time you’d have handed me what I wanted, before you ran." He let the cup hang, steam spiralling. His hands, always so careful, curled round bone china with an intimacy I remembered. "Last I checked, you’re the one who left." He angled his head. "Geography, yes. But you set the terms." My voice rasped. "You set them. Every time we tried, you carved escape routes while we talked. Left before I could." Lucien stepped in, the world narrowing to inches. Shadows tucked beneath the hollows of his keen cheekbones. "You confuse caution with cowardice." "I know the difference. One prevents scars." I didn’t mean the wrist, but his gaze flicked there anyway. He moved the cane, tracing old lines in memory. "You didn’t answer my last letter." "Wasn’t much of a question." I snorted, teeth grazing mug rim. "Your ‘apologies’ arrive wrapped in riddles. Never an answer. Not even the courtesy of an insult." "You mistake me for a better man." He didn’t smile. Eva ghosted in at the threshold. "If you two are going to trade wounds, mind doing it somewhere that isn’t next to my dissertation notes?" Neither of us turned. Something fragile held in the space between Lucien and me. Eva stood silent a moment, then flung a black notebook on the table and ducked out. The flat filled with newly unshared air. Lucien’s gaze sharpened. "If you want honesty, here’s mine. I need your help. There’s a name only you can get." "Then you’ll owe." My pulse beat fast, but my voice steadied. Leverage. Habit. He inched closer, voice rough velvet. "I’ll owe. Anything." "You sure of that? This from the man who never admits weakness?" His nod was small, but it landed with the weight of confessions unsaid. We stood close. Too close. My heart drummed wild, caught between the raw bruise of resentment and something else. He reached to touch my cheek, stopped short, letting his fingers fall to his pocket. Impeccable lines, perfect restraint, always too much control. I shoved down the want to break it. "Name first," I said. He flicked a card onto the table, his own elegant script looping the name I’d spent months trying to avoid. My breath caught. "You’re playing with fire." He leaned in, voice nearly a whisper. "We always did, you and I." Ptolemy sprang on the table, claws catching Lucien’s cuff, startling us both. I jerked away from Lucien’s breath, every nerve lit up—then realised too late he’d blocked the door with his body, his cane now horizontal, trapping me in place. He smiled, but not kindly. "Tell me yes. Or tell me where to start burning things down." I stared him down, chest tight, the room spinning with old ghosts and new danger. A crash. Eva shrieked from the hallway. "Rory! Someone’s downstairs!" Thudding feet on the restaurant stairs, something heavier than a man—Lucien and I locked eyes, every promise and threat hanging unfinished. I darted for the knife block as Lucien wheeled, cane at the ready. The front door slammed open.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.25
leniency0.5
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1119
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.38% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1119
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"pounding"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count3
3
word"unreadable"
count1
4
word"tracing"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"velvet"
count1
7
word"weight"
count1
8
word"perfect"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"pounding"
2"flicked"
3"unreadable"
4"tracing"
5"pulse"
6"velvet"
7"weight"
8"perfect"
9"whisper"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences87
filterMatches
0"See"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences116
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1110
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
78.57% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount770
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.43
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Ptolemy3
Moreau1
Marseille1
Brick2
Lane2
Lips1
See1
Eva6
Norse1
Heat1
Lucien11
Leverage1
persons
0"Ptolemy"
1"Moreau"
2"Lips"
3"Eva"
4"Heat"
5"Lucien"
places
0"Marseille"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore0.786
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences55
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1110
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean19.14
std9.94
cv0.52
sampleLengths
053
114
231
334
420
53
626
728
820
930
1025
1112
1218
1328
1418
1526
167
1710
1827
1912
2037
2115
2228
2315
2418
2521
267
2730
2821
298
3011
3121
3222
3318
3415
3527
3610
3725
3837
3920
4013
419
4212
4332
4431
454
4620
477
4813
4912
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs141
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences116
ratio0.06
matches
0"The rapid pounding didn't belong on the street—no, that beat belonged to the front door."
1"Lips curled—almost amused, but somehow even that had an edge."
2"A kettle shrieked—Eva’s usual peace offering, always the right side of boiling."
3"Black one—hungry."
4"The flat's walls pressed in—the curry-house below offered muffled comfort, but even Brick Lane couldn’t keep the past out."
5"I jerked away from Lucien’s breath, every nerve lit up—then realised too late he’d blocked the door with his body, his cane now horizontal, trapping me in place."
6"Thudding feet on the restaurant stairs, something heavier than a man—Lucien and I locked eyes, every promise and threat hanging unfinished."
94.56% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount779
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.04621309370988447
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005134788189987163
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences116
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences116
mean9.57
std5.97
cv0.624
sampleLengths
04
18
223
33
415
53
63
78
813
918
1010
119
1215
136
1414
153
1626
1717
1811
1913
207
219
2210
2311
249
254
2612
275
287
2910
308
3112
3216
3318
3421
353
362
377
384
396
402
4125
4212
4312
4410
4515
469
476
487
4911
70.11% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.43103448275862066
totalSentences116
uniqueOpeners50
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"Too late to shut the"
1"Too many miles since Marseille,"
ratio0.026
4.21% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences76
matches
0"I ducked to swerve a"
1"I shoved books off the"
2"His cane’s ivory handle reflected"
3"He stepped inside without waiting,"
4"I muttered, clicking the last"
5"His pressure warped the cramped"
6"He never wasted syllables."
7"My skin prickled, memories slinking"
8"I forced a light tone."
9"He unclipped a cufflink, rolling"
10"I stalked to the kitchenette,"
11"He settled against the kitchen"
12"He took in the flat,"
13"I passed a chipped mug"
14"He pulled the mug away,"
15"His cane clicked twice on"
16"I held my own spine"
17"He let them work like"
18"He sipped his tea."
19"He let the cup hang,"
ratio0.539
6.05% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount69
totalSentences76
matches
0"Glass shattered behind me."
1"Eva, somewhere in the flat,"
2"I ducked to swerve a"
3"Breath came tight."
4"The rapid pounding didn't belong"
5"That was a knock you"
6"I shoved books off the"
7"The door stuttered on the"
8"Lucien Moreau filled the frame,"
9"Amber and black eyes snagged"
10"His cane’s ivory handle reflected"
11"He stepped inside without waiting,"
12"I muttered, clicking the last"
13"His pressure warped the cramped"
14"Ptolemy slinked between his feet,"
15"Lips curled—almost amused, but somehow"
16"He never wasted syllables."
17"My skin prickled, memories slinking"
18"I forced a light tone."
19"He unclipped a cufflink, rolling"
ratio0.908
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.77% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"I ducked to swerve a stack of books teetering on the hall tiles, my knuckles ghosting the bone-shaped scar peeking from my sleeve."
1"Ptolemy sprang on the table, claws catching Lucien’s cuff, startling us both."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"I passed, my fingers brushing his"
1"I didn’t, but his gaze flicked there anyway"
2"I snorted, teeth grazing mug rim"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"I snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.125
leniency0.25
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.1
79.4796%