Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT03BF72ZFH4JG628AC5YKG

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Duration:
20.4s
Cost:
$0.012050
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Amazon Bedrock

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain rattled like a warning. Rory paused, hand still on the lock, keys dangling from her wrist. The deadbolts were all thrown—she’d checked twice after the last incident—but something in the way the wood groaned against its frame told her the space behind the door wasn’t empty. “Eva?” she called, voice low. No answer. She dropped the keys into her coat pocket and reached behind her back for the knife she kept tucked into her belt. Cold. Always better to assume. “One second,” she said aloud, buying time. Listened. A soft *click*—the fridge shutting. Someone had been inside long enough to help themselves. Rory yanked the door open. Lucien stood at Eva’s kitchen counter, pouring tea from a chipped blue pot. Steam curled around his face, catching in the platinum strands of his hair. He didn’t turn. One gloved hand held the spout steady, the other rested just above the ivory handle of his cane, propped against the edge of the sink. “You always break in through the back now?” Rory said, leaving the knife where it was. For now. He poured a second cup. “The front was locked. Three times.” “Means I didn’t want company.” “Yet here I am.” Finally, he turned. His amber eye caught the light; the black one didn’t. It never did. “You haven’t changed the blend. Earl Grey with a twist of lemon verbena.” Rory stepped inside and kicked the door shut behind her. The flat smelled of old paper, cumin from the curry house below, and the faint metallic tang of ink—Eva’s latest obsession with summoning sigils drawn in iron gall. “You don’t get points for memory,” she said. “Just trespassing.” Lucien pushed the second cup toward her. “Sit.” “I’m not drinking anything you’ve touched.” “I didn’t poison it.” “You might as well have.” Silence stretched, thin and sharp. Ptolemy the tabby wound between Lucien’s legs, purring. Traitor. “It’s been eighteen months,” Lucien said. “Nine hundred and eighty-two days,” Rory said. “Give or take.” His eyebrow lifted. “You kept count.” “I remembered the date you vanished after promising to *protect* me.” “I did protect you.” His voice didn’t rise. It never did. That was the worst part—like calm was something he wore, like the tailored charcoal suits that never wrinkled, no matter the chaos. “I kept you away from everything I knew would come. You were safer not knowing.” “Safer?” Rory barked a laugh. “Three wards collapsed in Soho last week. A child was taken. And you know what? I heard *nothing*. No call. No message. Not even a cursed pigeon with a note tied to its leg. Because you cut me out, Lucien. Not the other way around.” He reached into his coat and placed a folded photograph on the table. A girl, maybe eleven, standing outside a library. Unharmed. Alive. “She came back,” he said. “This morning. Unharmed. Because *I* went into the Veil and brought her through.” Rory stared at the photo. Her fingers twitched. She didn’t touch it. “You think that makes it better?” “I think it makes it necessary.” “You don’t get to decide what’s necessary for me.” She stepped forward, close enough to see the faint scar along his jawline—a wound from a soul-sickle, the kind only demons can wield. *He’d taken that hit for her.* “You don’t get to vanish, then show up like some brooding knight with tea and expect absolution.” “I don’t want absolution.” “Then what?” “The wards are failing,” he said. “Not just in Soho. Across the city. The Veil is thinning. And your name is in the Malphora Codex.” Rory froze. “What?” “Malphora. You’ve heard the name.” “It’s a myth.” “It’s your bloodline.” He tapped the photograph. “They’re taking children with latent power. Testing them. But they’re not the real target. They’re bait. For *you*.” “That’s insane—” “Is it?” He turned his wrist, pushed up his cuff. Etched into his skin—black, pulsing faintly—was a sigil. One Rory recognised. She’d seen it carved into stone beneath St. Dunstan’s, glowing with trapped fire. “They marked me when I went in. To find the girl. They knew I’d come for her. Knew I’d lead them to you.” Rory backed up a step. “You’re carrying a tracker.” “I’m carrying a message.” She looked at his face. At the careful distance in his posture. The way his fingers curled slightly around the rim of his cup, like he was holding himself together. “You came here to warn me,” she said. “I came here to take you somewhere safe.” “And if I say no?” “Then I’ll stand outside your door every night until something with teeth comes for you, and I’ll have to kill it in front of your neighbours.” “You arrogant—” “Look at me, Rory.” His voice dropped, roughened. “I could have let that girl die. I could have walked away from every single one of them. But I didn’t. Because *you* taught me not to.” She blinked. “What?” “You think I don’t remember what you said, in the rain, outside the Black Chapel? *‘Just because you’re half monster doesn’t mean you have to become one*.’” He mimicked her tone, low and steady. “You meant it. Even when I didn’t.” Rory swallowed. That night came back—the smoke, the dying wards, the way his father’s blood had seeped into the cracks of the pavement. The way Lucien had hesitated. The way *she* hadn’t. “You walked away from that,” he said. “Not just from me. From all of it.” “And you?” She stepped forward again, close enough to smell the sandalwood on his skin, the faint ozone of magic clinging to his coat. “You stayed. You played fixer. Broker. Puppetmaster. You lied to me. You let me think I was *nothing* to you.” “You were everything.” His voice cracked. Just once. “And that’s why I left.” Her breath caught. Before she could speak, the lights flickered. Ptolemy hissed, fur standing on end. A low hum vibrated through the floorboards. The books on the shelves trembled. One fell. Then another. Lucien was on his feet in an instant, cane drawn, the blade sliding free with a soft *shink*. “They’re here,” he said. Rory reached for the knife at her back. “No time,” Lucien said. “Window. Now.” But the door exploded inward. Not broken. Not forced. *Unhinged*. As if the wood had decided, all at once, to stop being wood. Figures stepped through. Tall. Cloaked. Faceless beneath hoods that drank the light. One raised a hand. The air turned to ice. Lucien moved, placing himself between Rory and the door. His blade gleamed. “Stay behind me,” he said. Rory stepped to his side instead. “I told you,” she said, drawing her knife. “I don’t take orders from knights.” The leader took a step forward. And the flat filled with wings.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
1"Finally he turned [Finally]"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.391
leniency0.781
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.063
95.61% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.64% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1138
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count1
4
word"vibrated"
count1
5
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"eyebrow"
2"etched"
3"flickered"
4"vibrated"
5"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences100
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences139
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen45
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans12
markdownWords28
totalWords1129
ratio0.025
matches
0"click"
1"protect"
2"nothing"
3"I"
4"He’d taken that hit for her."
5"you"
6"you"
7"‘Just because you’re half monster doesn’t mean you have to become one"
8"she"
9"nothing"
10"shink"
11"Unhinged"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
42.80% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions31
wordCount653
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity2.14
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Listened1
Eva2
Lucien8
Rory14
Etched1
St1
One4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Rory"
3"One"
places
0"St"
globalScore0.428
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences39
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1129
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences139
matches
0"taken that hit"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs77
mean14.66
std14.52
cv0.99
sampleLengths
06
142
27
327
48
514
65
754
818
911
105
1133
1238
1310
148
156
164
175
1814
196
2010
216
2211
2348
2450
2523
2618
2712
286
296
3055
314
322
3325
342
351
365
373
3825
392
4057
419
424
4330
448
458
465
4726
482
4935
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs139
matches
0"was holding"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences139
ratio0.058
matches
0"The deadbolts were all thrown—she’d checked twice after the last incident—but something in the way the wood groaned against its frame told her the space behind the door wasn’t empty."
1"A soft *click*—the fridge shutting."
2"His amber eye caught the light; the black one didn’t."
3"The flat smelled of old paper, cumin from the curry house below, and the faint metallic tang of ink—Eva’s latest obsession with summoning sigils drawn in iron gall."
4"That was the worst part—like calm was something he wore, like the tailored charcoal suits that never wrinkled, no matter the chaos."
5"“You don’t get to decide what’s necessary for me.” She stepped forward, close enough to see the faint scar along his jawline—a wound from a soul-sickle, the kind only demons can wield."
6"Etched into his skin—black, pulsing faintly—was a sigil."
7"That night came back—the smoke, the dying wards, the way his father’s blood had seeped into the cracks of the pavement."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount661
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.03328290468986384
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.006051437216338881
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences139
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences139
mean8.12
std7.77
cv0.957
sampleLengths
06
112
230
35
42
522
61
74
87
91
105
119
125
1313
1413
153
1625
1716
182
195
206
215
227
2310
243
2513
2610
2728
288
292
307
311
326
334
345
355
368
371
386
397
403
413
423
4311
448
453
4622
4715
485
4945
61.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4028776978417266
totalSentences139
uniqueOpeners56
92.59% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"Always better to assume."
1"Finally, he turned"
ratio0.028
75.56% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences72
matches
0"she called, voice low"
1"She dropped the keys into"
2"she said aloud, buying time"
3"He didn’t turn."
4"He poured a second cup."
5"His amber eye caught the"
6"It never did."
7"His eyebrow lifted."
8"His voice didn’t rise"
9"It never did."
10"He reached into his coat"
11"Her fingers twitched."
12"She didn’t touch it."
13"She stepped forward, close enough"
14"*He’d taken that hit for"
15"He tapped the photograph"
16"He turned his wrist, pushed"
17"She’d seen it carved into"
18"She looked at his face."
19"His voice dropped, roughened"
ratio0.361
43.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences72
matches
0"The chain rattled like a"
1"Rory paused, hand still on"
2"The deadbolts were all thrown—she’d"
3"she called, voice low"
4"She dropped the keys into"
5"she said aloud, buying time"
6"A soft *click*—the fridge shutting."
7"Someone had been inside long"
8"Rory yanked the door open."
9"Lucien stood at Eva’s kitchen"
10"Steam curled around his face,"
11"He didn’t turn."
12"Rory said, leaving the knife"
13"He poured a second cup."
14"His amber eye caught the"
15"It never did."
16"Rory stepped inside and kicked"
17"The flat smelled of old"
18"Lucien pushed the second cup"
19"Silence stretched, thin and sharp."
ratio0.833
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"Before she could speak, the"
1"As if the wood had"
ratio0.028
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she called, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory barked (bark)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.234
leniency0.469
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.031
89.4973%