Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT03K4CEEAP3A7CYSST0KBX

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Duration:
31.0s
Cost:
$0.001548

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn forced the door of the abandoned underground pub open, the old wood creaking in protest. Stale air hit her like a brick, heavy with the scent of rot. Flashlights bobbed in the darkness, illuminating the chaotic scene inside. The jagged edges of broken furniture lay scattered like forgotten memories amidst the rubble. “Over here, Quinn!” A voice cut through the gloom. She snapped her attention to Davies, who stood amid the wreckage, crouched over a mass of charred remains on the floor. The flickering beam from his torch caught the glint of metal—an ominous fragment of something that had been human not too long ago. “Thanks for bringing the party,” she muttered, stepping closer, her sharp jawline set in determination. A flicker of anger simmered within her. Davies straightened, his brow furrowed. “You’re gonna want to see this.” The remains were unmistakable and yet twisted in ways that didn’t fit. Char marks spiralled into the air, as if the victim had somehow burnt from the inside out. A gnarled hand, too small, too delicate to belong to an adult, lay amongst the scorched debris. “Child?” Quinn whispered, forcing the word out. Her heart thundered in her chest; a hollow ache began to gnaw at her insides. “No,” he replied, shaking his head. “This one is definitely a teenager.” “Older than fifteen, then." She crouched beside the mess, her worn leather watch creaking as she moved. "They burn differently." He glanced at her, skepticism dancing in his eyes. “You’re imagining things. It’s just a trick of the fire.” “Trick?” She shot back, the irony stinging her words. “You think fires have the audacity to trick? This happened under some supernatural influence, and you know it.” “Family issues?” he teased, trying a lighter tone. The corner of his mouth tugged up, but he couldn't mask the unease behind his eyes. “Stop it.” Quinn snapped, her irritation flaring. “I’m not in the mood for jokes. Not after what… was done here.” She gestured toward the remains as if that could suffocate her growing sense of dread. “You think it’s linked?” His gaze flickered around the dimly lit room, taking in the remnants of an overturned bar and the empty frames where bottles might have once sat. “Could be.” Quinn unfurled her notepad, fingers brushing against the edges stained with ink blotches and coffee spills. “But we need to check the scene first. Why is there no ID on this kid? No wallet? Who calls in a hazmat crew for a burnt teenager in a gutted pub?” “Things don’t always add up.” Davies shifted, wiping perspiration from his temple with the back of his glove. “They never do,” she replied curtly. A strange chill washed over her, prickling her skin. Quinn turned her gaze to the far corner of the room, where shattered glass crunched beneath her scuffed boots. Her instincts screamed at her. There was something more; evidence bathed in shadow. “Check the ceiling,” she barked suddenly. “Ceiling?” “Look!” She pointed. “Something's been misused here. How’d that get burnt here without causing further damage to the structure? What else did it burn?” Davies tilted his head. The overhead beams splintered and blackened suggested a fire had raged across more than just the floor. “Maybe it’s just an old pub. Maybe the roof’s not up to scratch,” he mumbled, clearly in denial. “Or maybe someone is trying to mislead us.” Quinn moved, swerving around past him, keeping her eyes peeled—an inherent instinct honed from years tracking down criminals. A dart of panic rushed through her veins as an unusual symbol marked the wall across from the bar. “Quinn, don't—” Davies started, but she’d already crossed the threshold into the shadows. Her flashlight beam caught the outline of an intricate sigil etched into the plaster, glyphs warped and entwined in maddening loops. The same symbol had appeared at the scene only days prior—something she had dismissed as an anomaly. Now, it weaved into an intricate tapestry of mysteries she couldn’t ignore. “This?” She called back, her voice low and taut. “This is their calling card. The clique’s into sorcery and they’ve been covering it up.” “Enough with the conspiracies already! It’s a victim, not a calling card!” Davie’s voice oozed sarcasm laced with worry. Quinn turned, her body tense, teeth clenched. “Don’t underestimate them, Davies. They wield influence we can’t touch in the daylight. They must be trying to soften us. Hide the shadows.” “Sounds like a stretch,” he scoffed, brow furrowed, but Quinn saw the glint of fear in his eyes as he edged closer. “Describe the kid!” She demanded, breaking his resolve. “You know the physicals. Go on, picture it.” He hesitated, then ran fingers nervously through his hair, reluctantly piecing some facts together. “Uh, it… it could fit the description of a missing person. One of the teens from Camberwell?” “See?” she pressed, feeling a surge of momentum. “This goes deeper.” “Maybe I’ll reluctantly entertain your theory but… I’ll insist to my last breath that none of this adds up! There’s still the origin of that fire.” “Then we detour,” she declared, arms crossed. “We isolate the source. I want to see the supernatural influences at work; find the rift it came from.” The tension in the air shifted, taut like a drawn bowstring waiting to snap. Quinn picked up an impulse as if the air itself grew dense with invisible energy surrounding them. Davies shrugged defensively. “You know it’s risky. If you go poking around them, they won’t ignore your presence—” “Maybe they already know we’re here.” Quinn glanced around, absorbing every corner of the dim expanse. Something whispered at the edge of her senses, the creeping itch in the back of her mind, leaving little room for doubt. Before Davies could respond, a distant groan echoed through the darkness, its origin unknown. They stood frozen, heartbeats thundering in sync, a collective awareness snapping into focus. “What was that?” he hissed, eyes darting. “Investigation's over.” Quinn shot back, a low growl in her voice. “No. We need to leave,” Davies insisted, but quaking desperation distorted his tone. Quinn’s nerves tingled. Something watchful, pressing, shifted behind dim walls. She shook off the trepidation rising within her, forcing her clammy hands to steady. “No. I’m not leaving until I know who did this! Someone’s playing a game, and I'm dead set on changing the rules.” “Quinn…,” he cautioned, but Quinn’s resolve had solidified. With adrenaline pumping through her veins, she poised herself with rigid intensity. This was merely the beginning. No sign indicated what lay beyond—just another darkened tunnel that could lead to the answers she needed. And she’d be damned if she turned back.
total_cost0.0015482999999999996

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
57.14% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags28
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"His gaze flickered around [around]"
1"she replied curtly [curtly]"
2"she barked suddenly [suddenly]"
3"Quinn glanced around [around]"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.609
leniency1
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.143
82.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1117
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"nervously"
count1
2
adverb"reluctantly"
count2
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"nervously"
2"reluctantly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1117
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"chaotic"
count1
1
word"amidst"
count1
2
word"gloom"
count1
3
word"glint"
count2
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"furrowed"
count2
6
word"thundered"
count1
7
word"dancing"
count1
8
word"sense of"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"intricate"
count2
14
word"etched"
count1
15
word"tapestry"
count1
16
word"resolve"
count2
17
word"tension"
count1
18
word"echoed"
count1
19
word"trepidation"
count1
20
word"pumping"
count1
21
word"intensity"
count1
highlights
0"chaotic"
1"amidst"
2"gloom"
3"glint"
4"flicker"
5"furrowed"
6"thundered"
7"dancing"
8"sense of"
9"flickered"
10"chill"
11"shattered"
12"structure"
13"intricate"
14"etched"
15"tapestry"
16"resolve"
17"tension"
18"echoed"
19"trepidation"
20"pumping"
21"intensity"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"flicker of emotion"
count1
highlights
0"A flicker of anger"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences68
matches
0"t in determination"
1"A flicker of anger"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences68
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen32
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1113
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount754
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity1.72
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Davies8
Quinn13
Davie1
persons
0"Davies"
1"Quinn"
2"Davie"
places(empty)
globalScore0.638
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1113
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs47
mean23.68
std13.25
cv0.56
sampleLengths
053
19
244
322
411
546
622
712
820
919
1027
1124
1235
1330
1450
1518
166
1741
186
191
2024
2121
2218
2345
2413
2550
2624
2719
2830
2922
3016
3131
3211
3326
3426
3531
3618
3738
3827
397
4011
4113
4246
438
4417
4517
468
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs150
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences85
ratio0.082
matches
0"The flickering beam from his torch caught the glint of metal—an ominous fragment of something that had been human not too long ago."
1"Her heart thundered in her chest; a hollow ache began to gnaw at her insides."
2"There was something more; evidence bathed in shadow."
3"“Or maybe someone is trying to mislead us.” Quinn moved, swerving around past him, keeping her eyes peeled—an inherent instinct honed from years tracking down criminals."
4"The same symbol had appeared at the scene only days prior—something she had dismissed as an anomaly."
5"“We isolate the source. I want to see the supernatural influences at work; find the rift it came from.”"
6"No sign indicated what lay beyond—just another darkened tunnel that could lead to the answers she needed."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount758
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.0316622691292876
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.013192612137203167
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean13.09
std6.83
cv0.521
sampleLengths
016
113
210
314
49
521
623
715
87
95
106
1112
1217
1317
147
1515
166
176
1817
193
209
2110
229
2318
248
2516
267
2728
2830
2918
3032
3118
326
339
3419
355
368
376
381
393
4021
414
4217
4318
4426
4519
4613
4721
4817
4912
89.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5411764705882353
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners46
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences67
matches(empty)
ratio0
70.75% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences67
matches
0"She snapped her attention to"
1"she muttered, stepping closer, her"
2"Her heart thundered in her"
3"he replied, shaking his head"
4"She crouched beside the mess,"
5"He glanced at her, skepticism"
6"She shot back, the irony"
7"he teased, trying a lighter"
8"She gestured toward the remains"
9"His gaze flickered around the"
10"she replied curtly"
11"Her instincts screamed at her."
12"she barked suddenly"
13"he mumbled, clearly in denial"
14"Her flashlight beam caught the"
15"She called back, her voice"
16"he scoffed, brow furrowed, but"
17"She demanded, breaking his resolve"
18"He hesitated, then ran fingers"
19"she pressed, feeling a surge"
ratio0.373
12.24% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences67
matches
0"Quinn forced the door of"
1"Flashlights bobbed in the darkness,"
2"The jagged edges of broken"
3"A voice cut through the"
4"She snapped her attention to"
5"The flickering beam from his"
6"she muttered, stepping closer, her"
7"A flicker of anger simmered"
8"Davies straightened, his brow furrowed."
9"The remains were unmistakable and"
10"Char marks spiralled into the"
11"A gnarled hand, too small,"
12"Quinn whispered, forcing the word"
13"Her heart thundered in her"
14"he replied, shaking his head"
15"She crouched beside the mess,"
16"He glanced at her, skepticism"
17"She shot back, the irony"
18"he teased, trying a lighter"
19"The corner of his mouth"
ratio0.896
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences67
matches
0"Now, it weaved into an"
1"Before Davies could respond, a"
ratio0.03
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The flickering beam from his torch caught the glint of metal—an ominous fragment of something that had been human not too long ago."
1"Quinn picked up an impulse as if the air itself grew dense with invisible energy surrounding them."
35.71% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags28
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"She shot back, the irony stinging her words"
1"Quinn snapped, her irritation flaring"
2"She called back, her voice low and taut"
3"he hissed, eyes darting"
4"he cautioned, but Quinn’s resolve had solidified"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount12
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Quinn whispered (whisper)"
2"he teased (tease)"
3"Quinn snapped (snap)"
4"she barked suddenly (bark)"
5"he mumbled (mumble)"
6"She called back (call back)"
7"She demanded (demand)"
8"she pressed (press)"
9"she declared (declare)"
10"he hissed (hiss)"
11"Davies insisted (insist)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.304
leniency0.609
rawRatio0.857
effectiveRatio0.522
76.1623%