Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT040CEC3WHMP6QY8KTHMGZ

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Duration:
30.0s
Cost:
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Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Get back!” Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a uniformed officer aside as she stepped into the dimly lit chamber. The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic. She squinted against the flickering light of a single bulb hanging from the ceiling, illuminating the scene before her. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden had become a makeshift crime scene, the remnants of a recent struggle scattered across the cracked tiles. A body lay sprawled near the edge of the platform, limbs twisted at unnatural angles. Blood pooled around the victim, glistening darkly in the harsh light. “Detective Quinn,” a voice called from behind her. It was Davies, her partner for the day, his brow furrowed as he surveyed the scene. “You should see this.” She turned, her sharp jawline set in a grim line. “What have you got?” He gestured towards a series of symbols etched into the wall, their shapes almost hypnotic. “Looks like some sort of ritualistic marking. Could be linked to the occult.” “Or a graffiti artist with too much time on their hands,” she replied, her eyes narrowing. “What’s the victim’s ID?” “Still waiting on forensics. But…” He hesitated, glancing at the body. “It’s not just the markings. The way he’s positioned—like he was trying to escape.” Harlow stepped closer, her worn leather watch creaking as she moved. The victim’s face was pale, eyes wide open in a final expression of terror. “No signs of a struggle,” she muttered, crouching down to examine the area around the body. “No defensive wounds. He didn’t even try to fight back.” “Maybe he was caught off guard,” Davies suggested, his voice low. “Or he knew his attacker.” “Or he was lured here.” Harlow’s mind raced, piecing together the fragments of the scene. “Look at the blood. It’s too fresh for a ritual. This wasn’t planned.” “Could be a warning,” Davies offered, his eyes darting to the symbols again. “A message to someone.” “Or a distraction.” Harlow stood, scanning the platform. “We need to check for any exits. If this was a trap, the killer might still be nearby.” “Right.” Davies nodded, moving to the far end of the platform. Harlow’s gaze lingered on the body, a knot tightening in her stomach. She had seen death before, but this felt different. The victim’s expression haunted her, a silent scream echoing in the stillness. “Quinn!” Davies called, his voice echoing off the tiled walls. “Over here!” She hurried to his side, where he stood peering into a darkened alcove. “What is it?” “Footprints,” he said, pointing to the ground. “Looks like someone was here recently. They lead towards the old service tunnel.” “Let’s follow them.” Harlow’s heart raced as she stepped into the shadows, the air growing colder. The tunnel was narrow, the walls slick with moisture. She could hear the distant sound of water dripping, a rhythmic reminder of the darkness that surrounded them. “Do you think it’s connected?” Davies asked, his voice barely above a whisper. “Everything’s connected,” Harlow replied, her instincts sharpening. “We just need to find the thread.” They moved cautiously, the beam of Harlow’s flashlight cutting through the gloom. The footprints were faint but distinct, leading deeper into the tunnel. She felt a prickling sensation at the back of her neck, an instinctive warning that something was off. “Stop,” she said suddenly, raising a hand. “Listen.” Davies paused, his breath hitching as he strained to hear. A low, rhythmic sound echoed through the tunnel, like a heartbeat. Harlow’s pulse quickened. “What the hell is that?” “Could be machinery,” he suggested, though his voice lacked conviction. “Or something else.” Harlow pressed forward, her senses heightened. The sound grew louder, reverberating off the walls, and she felt a strange pull towards it, as if it were calling to her. They rounded a corner, and the tunnel opened into a larger chamber. The sight before them sent a chill down Harlow’s spine. A circle of candles flickered in the darkness, their flames dancing wildly as if caught in an unseen wind. In the centre of the circle lay an altar, adorned with strange objects—bones, crystals, and a small brass compass, its needle spinning erratically. “Is that…?” Davies began, but Harlow cut him off. “Stay back.” She stepped closer, her eyes fixed on the compass. It was unlike anything she had seen before, etched with protective sigils that seemed to pulse with energy. “This is from the Veil Market.” “Are you sure?” Davies asked, his voice low. “Absolutely.” Harlow’s mind raced. The Veil Market was a hidden supernatural black market, a place where the boundaries between worlds blurred. “Someone’s been here, and they’re not just dabbling in the occult. They’re playing with forces they don’t understand.” “Do you think it’s connected to the murder?” Davies asked, glancing nervously at the altar. “More than likely.” Harlow’s gaze flicked to the candles, their wax pooling on the floor. “But we need to be careful. This isn’t just a crime scene; it’s a warning.” Suddenly, the compass’s needle jerked violently, pointing towards the far wall. Harlow’s heart raced as she approached, her instincts screaming at her to be cautious. She pressed her palm against the cold stone, feeling a faint vibration beneath her fingers. “Quinn, what are you doing?” Davies asked, his voice laced with concern. “Something’s here,” she murmured, her mind racing. “A rift, or a portal. We need to—” Before she could finish, the wall shuddered, and a low growl echoed through the chamber. Harlow stumbled back, her heart pounding in her chest. The candles flickered violently, casting eerie shadows that danced across the walls. “Get ready!” she shouted, her instincts kicking into overdrive. “We’re not alone!” The growl intensified, and a figure emerged from the shadows, its form shifting and twisting as if it were made of smoke. Harlow’s breath caught in her throat as she recognised the creature—a Shade, a being of darkness that thrived on fear and chaos. “Run!” she yelled, grabbing Davies by the arm. They sprinted back down the tunnel, the growl echoing behind them, a chilling reminder of the danger that lurked in the darkness. As they burst back into the abandoned Tube station, Harlow’s mind raced. The murder, the symbols, the compass—it was all connected, a web of deceit and danger that threatened to ensnare them both. She could feel the weight of the case pressing down on her, the urgency of the situation igniting a fire within her. “Quinn!” Davies shouted, his voice strained. “What do we do?” “Get to the surface,” she replied, her voice steady despite the chaos. “We need to regroup and figure out our next move. This isn’t over.” They raced towards the exit, the shadows closing in behind them. Harlow’s heart pounded in her chest, adrenaline coursing through her veins. She could feel the darkness nipping at her heels, but she refused to look back. Whatever lay ahead, she would face it head-on. The truth was waiting, and she was determined to uncover it, no matter the cost.
total_cost0.00129698

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said suddenly [suddenly]"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.566
leniency1
rawRatio0.033
effectiveRatio0.033
78.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1179
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
1
adverb"cautiously"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count2
3
adverb"nervously"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
1"cautiously"
2"suddenly"
3"nervously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1179
totalAiIsms39
found
0
word"glistening"
count1
1
word"furrowed"
count1
2
word"etched"
count2
3
word"raced"
count6
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"stomach"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count3
7
word"rhythmic"
count2
8
word"reminder"
count2
9
word"whisper"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count2
12
word"pulse"
count2
13
word"quickened"
count1
14
word"chill"
count1
15
word"flickered"
count2
16
word"dancing"
count1
17
word"absolutely"
count1
18
word"flicked"
count1
19
word"racing"
count1
20
word"pounding"
count1
21
word"chilling"
count1
22
word"could feel"
count2
23
word"weight"
count1
24
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"glistening"
1"furrowed"
2"etched"
3"raced"
4"scanning"
5"stomach"
6"echoing"
7"rhythmic"
8"reminder"
9"whisper"
10"gloom"
11"echoed"
12"pulse"
13"quickened"
14"chill"
15"flickered"
16"dancing"
17"absolutely"
18"flicked"
19"racing"
20"pounding"
21"chilling"
22"could feel"
23"weight"
24"determined"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"heart pounded in chest"
count1
1
label"air was thick with"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"heart pounded in her chest"
1"The air was thick with"
2"sent a chill down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences76
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences76
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences99
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen24
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1174
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
43.26% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount890
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.13
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Quinn1
Tube2
Camden1
Davies13
Harlow19
Veil1
Market1
Suddenly1
Shade1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Camden"
2"Davies"
3"Harlow"
4"Suddenly"
places(empty)
globalScore0.433
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"sigils that seemed to pulse with energy"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1174
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences99
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean27.95
std15.39
cv0.551
sampleLengths
051
149
228
314
428
520
625
751
816
928
1017
1126
1244
1312
1416
1520
1643
1713
1814
1941
208
2129
2210
2332
2464
259
2635
278
2839
2915
3030
3140
3212
3315
3436
3512
3644
3730
3855
3910
4025
4160
96.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"were made"
1"was determined"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs171
matches
0"were calling"
1"was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences99
ratio0.051
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic."
1"In the centre of the circle lay an altar, adorned with strange objects—bones, crystals, and a small brass compass, its needle spinning erratically."
2"“But we need to be careful. This isn’t just a crime scene; it’s a warning.”"
3"Harlow’s breath caught in her throat as she recognised the creature—a Shade, a being of darkness that thrived on fear and chaos."
4"The murder, the symbols, the compass—it was all connected, a web of deceit and danger that threatened to ensnare them both."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount895
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.02011173184357542
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.012290502793296089
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences99
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences99
mean11.86
std5.21
cv0.439
sampleLengths
018
114
219
323
415
511
68
716
84
910
104
1115
1213
1316
144
1511
1614
1711
1814
1916
2010
2111
225
2315
2413
2513
264
278
2818
2911
3012
319
3212
3310
342
3513
363
377
3813
3916
409
4118
4213
437
447
4512
4611
4718
487
491
73.74% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.45454545454545453
totalSentences99
uniqueOpeners45
43.86% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"Suddenly, the compass’s needle jerked"
ratio0.013
77.89% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences76
matches
0"She squinted against the flickering"
1"It was Davies, her partner"
2"She turned, her sharp jawline"
3"He gestured towards a series"
4"she replied, her eyes narrowing"
5"He hesitated, glancing at the"
6"she muttered, crouching down to"
7"She had seen death before,"
8"She hurried to his side,"
9"he said, pointing to the"
10"She could hear the distant"
11"They moved cautiously, the beam"
12"She felt a prickling sensation"
13"she said suddenly, raising a"
14"he suggested, though his voice"
15"They rounded a corner, and"
16"She stepped closer, her eyes"
17"It was unlike anything she"
18"She pressed her palm against"
19"she murmured, her mind racing"
ratio0.355
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences76
matches
0"Harlow Quinn barked, shoving a"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She squinted against the flickering"
3"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
4"A body lay sprawled near"
5"Blood pooled around the victim,"
6"a voice called from behind"
7"It was Davies, her partner"
8"She turned, her sharp jawline"
9"He gestured towards a series"
10"she replied, her eyes narrowing"
11"He hesitated, glancing at the"
12"Harlow stepped closer, her worn"
13"The victim’s face was pale,"
14"she muttered, crouching down to"
15"Davies suggested, his voice low"
16"Harlow’s mind raced, piecing together"
17"Davies offered, his eyes darting"
18"Harlow stood, scanning the platform"
19"Davies nodded, moving to the"
ratio0.947
65.79% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"Before she could finish, the"
ratio0.013
73.17% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"She could hear the distant sound of water dripping, a rhythmic reminder of the darkness that surrounded them."
1"The sound grew louder, reverberating off the walls, and she felt a strange pull towards it, as if it were calling to her."
2"The candles flickered violently, casting eerie shadows that danced across the walls."
3"Harlow’s breath caught in her throat as she recognised the creature—a Shade, a being of darkness that thrived on fear and chaos."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount14
matches
0"she replied, her eyes narrowing"
1"Davies suggested, his voice low"
2"Davies offered, his eyes darting to the symbols again"
3"Davies called, his voice echoing off the tiled walls"
4"Harlow’s heart raced, the air growing colder"
5"Davies asked, his voice barely above a whisper"
6"Harlow replied, her instincts sharpening"
7"he suggested, though his voice lacked conviction"
8"Harlow pressed, her senses heightened"
9"Davies asked, his voice low"
10"Harlow’s gaze flicked, their wax pooling on the floor"
11"she murmured, her mind racing"
12"Davies shouted, his voice strained"
13"she replied, her voice steady despite the chaos"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags20
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"Harlow Quinn barked (bark)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"Davies suggested (suggest)"
3"he suggested (suggest)"
4"Harlow pressed (press)"
5"she murmured (murmur)"
6"she shouted (shout)"
7"she yelled (yell)"
8"Davies shouted (shout)"
dialogueSentences53
tagDensity0.377
leniency0.755
rawRatio0.45
effectiveRatio0.34
73.9734%