Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0456AWMQH4EZ8ZJF4DVV5

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42.9s
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$0.039438

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"You look like hell." Lucien stood in my doorway, platinum hair disheveled, one amber eye and one black eye scanning my face with clinical precision. His usual charcoal suit hung wrinkled, the ivory-handled cane gripped white-knuckled in his left hand. I should have slammed the door. Should have told him to sod off back to whatever supernatural mess he'd crawled out of. Instead, I found myself stepping aside, watching him limp past me into Eva's cramped flat. "Lovely to see you too, Rory." His accent carried that familiar French lilt, though exhaustion roughened the edges. "May I?" He was already settling onto Eva's threadbare sofa, careful not to disturb the towers of books and scrolls that claimed every surface. Ptolemy emerged from behind a stack of grimoires, tail high, weaving between Lucien's legs like they were old friends. "Traitor," I muttered at the cat. "Three months." Lucien's mismatched eyes tracked my movement as I closed the door. "You've been in London three months without a word." "Funny. Last time we spoke, words weren't exactly welcome." His jaw tightened. The memory hung between us like smoke, thick and suffocating. That hotel room in Cardiff. His hands in my hair. The way he'd pulled back when his phone rang, choosing duty over desire for the hundredth time. "Business called," he said quietly. "Business always calls." I crossed my arms, staying near the door. Safe distance. "What do you want, Luc?" "Someone's hunting half-breeds in London." He set his cane against the sofa arm, the blade hidden inside catching the light from Eva's desk lamp. "Three dead in Southwark. Two more missing in Camden." "And?" "And you're living above a supernatural information hub, working for one of the city's most connected fixers, pretending to be just another delivery girl." Heat flashed through me. "I am just a delivery girl." "Please." He leaned back, and for a moment looked every one of his thirty-two years. "Yu-Fei Cheung doesn't hire humans for her inner circle without good reason. Neither does Silas." "You've been watching me." "I've been protecting you." The words hit like a slap. I stepped forward before I could stop myself, close enough to see the exhaustion carved into the sharp planes of his face. Close enough to catch his scent, cedar and something darker underneath. "I don't need protecting. Especially not from someone who-" "Who what?" His voice dropped low, dangerous. "Who cared enough to leave before things got complicated?" "Complicated?" The laugh that escaped me tasted bitter. "Is that what you call three years of dancing around each other? Three years of almosts and maybe-laters?" "Three years of keeping you alive." "Bullshit." But my voice shook, betraying the certainty I wanted to project. Lucien stood, movement fluid despite his exhaustion. Two steps brought him close enough that I had to tilt my head back to meet his eyes. The heterochromatic gaze that had haunted my dreams for months. "The night you left Cardiff," he said softly, "there were seven contracts out on anyone connected to the Ellis investigation. Seven different supernatural factions who wanted you dead for what you uncovered." My mouth went dry. "Eva never said-" "Eva doesn't know. She thinks your ex-boyfriend was the only threat." His hand rose, fingers hovering just shy of my cheek. "I made sure those contracts disappeared. Along with any record of your involvement." "Why?" The question hung between us, smaller than a whisper but loud enough to crack something in his carefully constructed mask. "You know why." I did. Had known since that first night in Cardiff when he'd shown up at my door bleeding and desperate, asking for help with a case that would change everything. The way he looked at me like I was dangerous and precious in equal measure. The way he'd taught me to see past the veil between worlds. The way he'd kissed me like drowning, then walked away like it meant nothing. "That doesn't give you the right to make decisions for me." "Doesn't it?" He stepped closer, close enough that I could feel the heat radiating from his skin. "When those decisions kept you breathing?" "I can take care of myself." "Can you?" His thumb traced the air just above my jawline, not quite touching. "Tell me what you see when you look at me, Rory." The challenge in his voice made my pulse spike. I lifted my chin, meeting his gaze head-on, and let my other sight slip free. The human glamour fell away like shed skin. Shadows writhed beneath his pale skin, moving with purpose and hunger. His canines had sharpened to points, and when he smiled, it held too many teeth. The amber eye burned like molten gold while the black one seemed to swallow light entirely. Beautiful. Terrible. Dangerous in ways that made my body respond despite every rational thought. "Demon," I whispered. "Half-demon." His smile turned rueful. "And you're looking at me like you want to run. Or kiss me. Possibly both." "Both sounds accurate." The admission slipped out before I could stop it. Lucien's expression shifted, hunger replacing exhaustion. His hand finally made contact, fingers cupping my face with reverent care. "I missed you," he said, and the raw honesty in it undid something inside my chest. "You left." "I had to." "And now?" "Now someone's hunting half-breeds, and you're neck-deep in London's supernatural politics whether you admit it or not." His thumb traced the small scar on my cheek, legacy of a case we'd worked together. "I can't protect you from a distance anymore." "So you're what, moving in?" "If you'll have me." The words carried weight beyond their simple meaning. Three years of unfinished business compressed into five syllables. I should have said no. Should have remembered the pain of watching him walk away, choosing his responsibilities over whatever this thing between us might become. Should have protected the careful life I'd built in London, delivering takeaway and pretending I didn't dream in demon-sight. Instead, I rose on my toes and kissed him. He went rigid for a heartbeat, then his free arm came around my waist, pulling me against him with desperate hunger. He tasted like whiskey and regret, like three years of wanting and staying away. When his tongue traced my lower lip, I opened for him without hesitation. The kiss deepened, grew rough. His hand tangled in my hair, tilting my head back to give him better access. I could feel his heartbeat through his shirt, rapid and strong. Could feel the supernatural heat of him seeping through my clothes. When we finally broke apart, both breathing hard, his forehead rested against mine. "This changes things," he said. "Everything changes." I traced the line of his jaw, marveling at finally being allowed to touch. "Question is whether we're brave enough to let it." A crash echoed from the street below, followed by inhuman howling. Lucien's head snapped up, every predatory instinct suddenly focused on the window. "They found me."
total_cost0.039438

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
51.85% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"He leaned back [back]"
2"he said softly [softly]"
3"His hand rose fingers hovering just [just]"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.37
leniency0.741
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.148
87.23% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1175
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"carefully"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
27.66% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1175
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count1
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"desire"
count1
4
word"dancing"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count1
6
word"constructed"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count3
8
word"traced"
count4
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"familiar"
2"lilt"
3"desire"
4"dancing"
5"whisper"
6"constructed"
7"could feel"
8"traced"
9"pulse"
10"weight"
11"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences75
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences75
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences109
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1164
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount827
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity0.73
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Eva3
French1
Lucien6
Cardiff2
Safe1
Heat1
London1
Should3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Heat"
3"Should"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
62.28% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences57
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"not quite touching"
1"tasted like whiskey and regret, like thre"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1164
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean19.08
std14.7
cv0.77
sampleLengths
04
136
237
320
441
56
622
79
840
95
1018
1133
121
1324
1410
1530
164
174
1839
199
2016
2126
226
2312
2435
2532
267
2734
281
2920
303
3157
3214
3311
3423
356
3625
3724
3850
3914
403
4120
423
4327
4416
452
463
472
4841
495
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"being allowed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs152
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences109
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount832
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.037259615384615384
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009615384615384616
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences109
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences109
mean10.68
std6.83
cv0.64
sampleLengths
04
121
215
36
416
515
618
72
822
919
106
1113
129
139
143
1510
165
175
1817
195
2011
212
225
2324
249
251
2624
274
286
2915
3015
314
324
336
3422
3511
369
377
389
398
4018
416
4212
437
4418
4510
4632
474
483
4921
72.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.48623853211009177
totalSentences109
uniqueOpeners53
96.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences69
matches
0"Instead, I found myself stepping"
1"Instead, I rose on my"
ratio0.029
46.09% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences69
matches
0"His usual charcoal suit hung"
1"I should have slammed the"
2"His accent carried that familiar"
3"He was already settling onto"
4"I muttered at the cat"
5"His jaw tightened."
6"His hands in my hair."
7"he said quietly"
8"I crossed my arms, staying"
9"He set his cane against"
10"He leaned back, and for"
11"I stepped forward before I"
12"His voice dropped low, dangerous"
13"he said softly"
14"My mouth went dry."
15"His hand rose, fingers hovering"
16"He stepped closer, close enough"
17"His thumb traced the air"
18"I lifted my chin, meeting"
19"His canines had sharpened to"
ratio0.435
61.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount55
totalSentences69
matches
0"Lucien stood in my doorway,"
1"His usual charcoal suit hung"
2"I should have slammed the"
3"His accent carried that familiar"
4"He was already settling onto"
5"Ptolemy emerged from behind a"
6"I muttered at the cat"
7"Lucien's mismatched eyes tracked my"
8"His jaw tightened."
9"The memory hung between us"
10"That hotel room in Cardiff."
11"His hands in my hair."
12"The way he'd pulled back"
13"he said quietly"
14"I crossed my arms, staying"
15"He set his cane against"
16"Heat flashed through me."
17"He leaned back, and for"
18"The words hit like a"
19"I stepped forward before I"
ratio0.797
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Had known since that first night in Cardiff when he'd shown up at my door bleeding and desperate, asking for help with a case that would change everything."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"His voice dropped, dangerous"
1"His thumb traced, not quite touching"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences54
tagDensity0.111
leniency0.222
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.074
86.0321%