Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT04CG8JQFK8ACXE945D848

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26.8s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open, and Aurora stood frozen, her heart racing. Lucien Moreau, impeccably dressed in a tailored charcoal suit, filled the doorway, his slicked-back platinum blond hair glinting under the dim light of the cramped flat. The air thickened with unspoken words, a tension that crackled like static electricity. “Surprise,” he said, a smirk playing on his lips, but his eyes betrayed a flicker of something deeper—an emotion she couldn’t quite place. “Lucien,” she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret. She stepped back instinctively, her mind racing through the memories of their last encounter, the sharp words exchanged, the hurt that lingered like a ghost in the corners of her mind. “May I come in?” He tilted his head slightly, the cane in his hand tapping against the floor, a rhythmic reminder of his presence. “Why are you here?” The question slipped out before she could stop it, laced with a mix of curiosity and caution. “Business,” he replied, his voice smooth, but there was an edge to it, a hint of urgency that made her pulse quicken. “And perhaps a bit of pleasure.” “Pleasure?” She raised an eyebrow, crossing her arms defensively. “You have a funny way of showing it.” “Let me in, Rory.” The use of her nickname sent a shiver down her spine, a reminder of the intimacy they once shared. “I promise I won’t bite.” With a reluctant sigh, she stepped aside, allowing him to enter. The flat was cluttered, as always, with books and scrolls strewn across every surface, a chaotic testament to her obsession with the supernatural. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted past Lucien’s feet, eyeing him with suspicion before retreating to a safe corner. “Nice place you’ve got here,” he remarked, glancing around with a hint of amusement. “Very… lived in.” “Thanks,” she replied, her tone dry. “I’ll take that as a compliment.” He chuckled softly, the sound rich and warm, but it only served to remind her of the distance that had grown between them. She could still recall the way he used to make her laugh, how his presence had felt like a balm to her wounds. But that was before everything had gone wrong. “Are you going to stand there all day?” she asked, trying to mask the flutter of nerves in her stomach. “Or do you have something to say?” “Straight to the point, as always.” He leaned against the wall, his posture relaxed, but she could see the tension in his jaw. “I need your help.” “Help?” The word hung in the air, heavy with implications. “You’ve got a funny way of asking for it.” “Rory, please.” His voice dropped an octave, the playful tone replaced by something more serious. “This is important.” She hesitated, the memories of their last argument flooding back. The way he had walked away, leaving her feeling abandoned and betrayed. But the urgency in his eyes pulled at her, a reminder of the bond they once shared. “What kind of help?” she asked, her curiosity piqued despite herself. “There’s been a disturbance in the supernatural underworld,” he said, his gaze locking onto hers. “Something big is brewing, and I need someone with your… unique skills to help me investigate.” “Why me?” The question slipped out, laced with disbelief. “You have connections, Lucien. You don’t need me.” “Because I trust you.” The sincerity in his voice caught her off guard. “And because I know you’re the only one who can navigate the chaos without losing your head.” “Trust?” She scoffed, crossing her arms tighter. “That’s rich coming from you.” “Rory—” “Don’t.” She held up a hand, cutting him off. “You don’t get to play the trust card after everything that happened.” He stepped closer, the air between them thickening with unspoken tension. “I’m not here to rehash the past. I need you now.” “Why should I help you?” she challenged, her heart pounding in her chest. “You walked away when I needed you most.” “I had my reasons.” His voice softened, and for a moment, she saw the vulnerability beneath his confident facade. “I thought it was for the best.” “Best for who?” she shot back, her anger flaring. “You? Or me?” “Both.” He ran a hand through his hair, frustration evident in his posture. “I thought I was protecting you.” “By leaving?” The bitterness in her voice cut through the air like a knife. “You didn’t protect me, Lucien. You abandoned me.” “I know.” His admission hung heavy between them, a weight they both felt. “And I regret it every day.” The silence stretched, thick and suffocating. Aurora’s heart raced, torn between the anger that had kept her safe and the flicker of longing that still burned for him. She wanted to scream, to push him away, but the truth was, she missed him. “Fine,” she said finally, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside. “I’ll help you. But this doesn’t mean I forgive you.” “Understood.” A flicker of relief crossed his face, but it was quickly masked by a more serious expression. “We need to move quickly. I’ll explain everything on the way.” “On the way where?” she asked, her brow furrowing. “Camden. There’s been a series of strange occurrences at the occult supply shop. I need you to help me figure out what’s going on.” “Camden?” The name sent a shiver down her spine. “That’s not exactly a walk in the park.” “Neither is what’s coming.” He stepped back, his eyes narrowing. “We don’t have time to waste.” Aurora hesitated, glancing around her cluttered flat. The thought of stepping back into the chaos of the supernatural world sent a thrill of fear and excitement coursing through her veins. “Alright,” she said, her voice firm. “But if this goes south, I’m out. No second chances.” “Deal.” He extended his hand, and she took it, the contact sending a jolt of electricity through her. As they stood there, the weight of their past hung in the air, but the promise of the unknown loomed larger. The door swung shut behind them, sealing away the ghosts of their history as they stepped into the night, ready to face whatever darkness awaited them. And just as they reached the stairs, a loud crash echoed from the street below, followed by a guttural growl that sent a chill down her spine. “Rory,” Lucien said, his voice low and urgent. “We need to move. Now.” The thrill of danger ignited her senses, and for the first time in a long while, she felt alive.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.532
leniency1
rawRatio0.061
effectiveRatio0.061
77.15% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
3
adverb"quickly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"softly"
3"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"racing"
count2
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count2
3
word"tension"
count3
4
word"flicker"
count3
5
word"encounter"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count3
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"eyebrow"
count1
10
word"down her spine"
count3
11
word"chaotic"
count1
12
word"testament"
count1
13
word"stomach"
count1
14
word"navigate"
count1
15
word"pounding"
count1
16
word"facade"
count1
17
word"weight"
count2
18
word"silence"
count1
19
word"raced"
count1
20
word"furrowing"
count1
21
word"loomed"
count1
22
word"echoed"
count1
23
word"chill"
count1
highlights
0"racing"
1"glinting"
2"unspoken"
3"tension"
4"flicker"
5"encounter"
6"rhythmic"
7"reminder"
8"pulse"
9"eyebrow"
10"down her spine"
11"chaotic"
12"testament"
13"stomach"
14"navigate"
15"pounding"
16"facade"
17"weight"
18"silence"
19"raced"
20"furrowing"
21"loomed"
22"echoed"
23"chill"
0.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches5
maxInWindow4
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count2
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count3
highlights
0"hung in the air"
1"sent a shiver down"
2"sent a chill down"
65.48% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells4
narrationSentences56
matches
0"d with disbelief"
1"the flicker of longing"
2"A flicker of relief"
3"a thrill of fear"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences56
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1092
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount769
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.39
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Aurora3
Moreau1
Eva1
Lucien3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Moreau"
2"Eva"
3"Lucien"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
55.66% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences53
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite place"
1"felt like a balm to her wounds"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1092
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
93.76% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean24.27
std11.6
cv0.478
sampleLengths
050
123
243
324
421
528
617
728
852
917
1012
1154
1227
1327
1419
1518
1639
1711
1831
1917
2030
2112
221
2321
2422
2521
2626
2712
2819
2922
3019
3143
3221
3329
349
3524
3617
3716
3830
3916
4018
4147
4227
4313
4419
99.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences56
matches
0"was cluttered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs136
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences85
ratio0.012
matches
0"“Surprise,” he said, a smirk playing on his lips, but his eyes betrayed a flicker of something deeper—an emotion she couldn’t quite place."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount771
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount28
adverbRatio0.03631647211413749
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.010376134889753566
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.85
std6.82
cv0.531
sampleLengths
011
126
213
323
412
531
624
721
822
96
109
118
1223
135
1411
1523
1618
1714
183
196
206
2123
2223
238
2420
257
2623
274
2810
299
3015
313
3210
3312
3417
3511
3615
3716
389
398
4013
4117
427
435
441
459
4612
4711
4811
4913
85.88% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5294117647058824
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
5.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount30
totalSentences56
matches
0"he said, a smirk playing"
1"she breathed, the name slipping"
2"She stepped back instinctively, her"
3"He tilted his head slightly,"
4"he replied, his voice smooth,"
5"She raised an eyebrow, crossing"
6"he remarked, glancing around with"
7"she replied, her tone dry"
8"He chuckled softly, the sound"
9"She could still recall the"
10"she asked, trying to mask"
11"He leaned against the wall,"
12"His voice dropped an octave,"
13"She hesitated, the memories of"
14"she asked, her curiosity piqued"
15"he said, his gaze locking"
16"She scoffed, crossing her arms"
17"She held up a hand,"
18"He stepped closer, the air"
19"she challenged, her heart pounding"
ratio0.536
4.64% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences56
matches
0"The door swung open, and"
1"Lucien Moreau, impeccably dressed in"
2"The air thickened with unspoken"
3"he said, a smirk playing"
4"she breathed, the name slipping"
5"She stepped back instinctively, her"
6"He tilted his head slightly,"
7"The question slipped out before"
8"he replied, his voice smooth,"
9"She raised an eyebrow, crossing"
10"The use of her nickname"
11"The flat was cluttered, as"
12"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted"
13"he remarked, glancing around with"
14"she replied, her tone dry"
15"He chuckled softly, the sound"
16"She could still recall the"
17"she asked, trying to mask"
18"He leaned against the wall,"
19"The word hung in the"
ratio0.911
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences56
matches(empty)
ratio0
71.43% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"She stepped back instinctively, her mind racing through the memories of their last encounter, the sharp words exchanged, the hurt that lingered like a ghost in …"
1"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, darted past Lucien’s feet, eyeing him with suspicion before retreating to a safe corner."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"she breathed, the name slipping from her lips like a secret"
1"her nickname sent, a reminder of the intimacy they once shared"
2"she replied, her tone dry"
3"she asked, trying to mask the flutter of nerves in her stomach"
4"he said, his gaze locking onto hers"
5"she challenged, her heart pounding in her chest"
6"she shot back, her anger flaring"
7"she said finally, her voice steady despite the turmoil inside"
8"she asked, her brow furrowing"
9"He stepped back, his eyes narrowing"
10"she said, her voice firm"
11"Lucien said, his voice low and urgent"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she breathed (breathe)"
1"she challenged (challenge)"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.194
leniency0.387
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.065
71.9570%