Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT052NXQGHJGCW1R1EQCYDB

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The flickering bulbs cast harsh shadows on the crumbling walls of the abandoned Tube station beneath Camden. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped onto the damp platform, the echo of her footsteps swallowed by the eerie stillness. Ahead, a cacophony of voices broke the quiet—a small crowd of officers clustered under the canopy of an overhead lamp, their faces obscured but their postures rigid and attentive. The Veil Market, a notorious hub for the supernatural underworld, stood deserted, now a crime scene festering with questions. "Quinn!" called Detective Davies, her voice cutting through the murmur. A brisk nod slipped through her precise movements as she approached, the sharp angle of her jaw framing her keen brown eyes. "Hell of a place for it, right under their noses." "A convenient veil," Harlow remarked dryly, eyeing the perimeter tape that demarcated a scene awash with books of the arcane and broken vials. "What's the word?" Davies gestured towards the floor, a tangle of symbols sketched in a circle, overlapping in chaotic abandon. "Possibly a botched ritual, if you ask me. Someone got spooked or lost control." "Too clean for that," Harlow muttered, scanning the symbols. A crooked smile tugged at her lips—none of this adhered to typical practice. Amateurs, likely. Cosplayers in over their heads and now in the dirt. But such a constellation of symbols—why here, and who was bold enough to enact it in a place so public? "There's something off," Davies pressed. "Occult business usually sticks to the shadows. This...this was meant to be seen." Harlow stepped back, eyes narrowing towards the ark platform's edges. Her military precision birthed comparisons instinctively—a discipline that kept her safe amidst chaos. "Everyone assumes the strange is confined to hushed whispers. This is loud." An officer approached with a file in hand—a collage of barely discernible snapshots under Camden's dim gloom. Quinn thumbed through them, the fragments beginning to stitch into a picture less chaotic but unnervingly composed. "Foot traffic," she murmured, gesturing with the file towards Davies. "No shortcuts here. Someone led this." "Look," Davies nodded, eyes glinting as she pointed towards the sap of the corridor. Several pairs of trainers. All new, all converging upon that one spot. Purposeful arrival and an even more deliberate escape. Several of the officers threw wary glances at the platform, squirming against the shadows from the approaching Tube. There was a charge in the air—an unresolved tension whispering secrets of its unknown beginnings. Harlow turned her focus to their uneasy expressions. Their feelings mirrored ghosts—a supernatural shadow hanging over metaphysical remnants. Davies sensed it too, nodding steadily. "Unseen by eyes, branding the memory." "Nice theory, though far from the truth," replied Harlow, pinching the bridge of her nose as she pieced the puzzle. "No ghosts required. They're pulling strings, leaving signatures behind." The remnants were too perfect, too clean, consistent with an intentional design. Harlow felt the chill encroach as if scraped against her bones. Their precision was like the gears in a clock, not a lone spectre but rather a disruption of life—the horror calling out for its resolution. "Lipstick's an unusual shade for spreadsheets," Harlow muttered as she motioned for Davies to accompany her. The answer lay hidden amidst the shadows they sought to bypass—a truth Davis felt but couldn't detail. They stepped towards the remaining officers, their steps deliberate, words lightly drifting like breath in the dark. "Inform the boys we'll need the archives on this one. Full records. Among them, finally onto something." No one replied—these were foot soldiers beneath the sentence of command. Davies stood stalwart with Harlow, enduring the dust blending with shadows under the haunting lamplight. She reassured the scene passed—a quick reminder of its current life. "Veil Market's backdoor business never figured so openly on the streets of Camden." That was evident without question—a ritual to stir the ardent, sap the novitiates, and lash the whisper of wind against the demons endemic to human fate. A chance—a distraction—or worse, a harbinger. Davies shrugged her coat against the sharp air prickling them awake. Their conversation waned into contemplative asides—a weary troop of guards caught unfurling beneath, something far less precise rekindled. "Lunacy's forever clouding their craft," Davies shared through twilight contemplation. Their focus had transitioned, eyeing the symbols snatched away by shadows. The gaps presented a story like arching steps across time though, their wicked light uninhibited and resolute. Harlow gazed at her watch—it ticked towards future consternation, hints mistaken for assumptions, remorseless missteps without her practiced authority. Another day unfurling a tired denouement, edging the border of chaos as liberty lay defeated beneath the forms surveyed over broken particles. The complexity emerged from abstraction—a history wished hidden. Beneath Camden's pulsations, Harlow extracted Hayes' evidence: foul intrusion, debased memory, and a brittle reality enduring through cosmic dislocation. Their future caught in the necromancy of congruence, Harlow pressed onward, riding the swaying tide of truth she knew time alone would unravel.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Harlow remarked dryly [dryly]"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.526
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
94.03% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount837
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
4.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount837
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"echo"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"cacophony"
count1
3
word"chaotic"
count2
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"amidst"
count2
6
word"gloom"
count1
7
word"glinting"
count1
8
word"tension"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count1
13
word"unravel"
count1
highlights
0"echo"
1"footsteps"
2"cacophony"
3"chaotic"
4"scanning"
5"amidst"
6"gloom"
7"glinting"
8"tension"
9"perfect"
10"chill"
11"reminder"
12"whisper"
13"unravel"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences50
matches
0"felt the chill"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences50
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences60
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords820
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
60.58% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions36
wordCount671
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity1.79
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
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Camden3
Harlow12
Quinn2
Veil1
Market1
Detective2
Davies10
Several2
Davis1
persons
0"Camden"
1"Harlow"
2"Quinn"
3"Detective"
4"Davies"
5"Davis"
places(empty)
globalScore0.606
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences44
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
78.05% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords1.22
wordCount820
matches
0"not a lone spectre but rather a disruption of life"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
74.31% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs21
mean39.05
std16.01
cv0.41
sampleLengths
083
142
226
331
454
518
635
734
816
934
1041
1122
1229
1348
1433
1534
1650
1761
1821
1958
2050
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences50
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs111
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences16
totalSentences60
ratio0.267
matches
0"Ahead, a cacophony of voices broke the quiet—a small crowd of officers clustered under the canopy of an overhead lamp, their faces obscured but their postures rigid and attentive."
1"A crooked smile tugged at her lips—none of this adhered to typical practice."
2"But such a constellation of symbols—why here, and who was bold enough to enact it in a place so public?"
3"Her military precision birthed comparisons instinctively—a discipline that kept her safe amidst chaos."
4"An officer approached with a file in hand—a collage of barely discernible snapshots under Camden's dim gloom."
5"There was a charge in the air—an unresolved tension whispering secrets of its unknown beginnings."
6"Their feelings mirrored ghosts—a supernatural shadow hanging over metaphysical remnants."
7"Their precision was like the gears in a clock, not a lone spectre but rather a disruption of life—the horror calling out for its resolution."
8"The answer lay hidden amidst the shadows they sought to bypass—a truth Davis felt but couldn't detail."
9"No one replied—these were foot soldiers beneath the sentence of command."
10"She reassured the scene passed—a quick reminder of its current life."
11"That was evident without question—a ritual to stir the ardent, sap the novitiates, and lash the whisper of wind against the demons endemic to human fate."
12"A chance—a distraction—or worse, a harbinger."
13"Their conversation waned into contemplative asides—a weary troop of guards caught unfurling beneath, something far less precise rekindled."
14"Harlow gazed at her watch—it ticked towards future consternation, hints mistaken for assumptions, remorseless missteps without her practiced authority."
15"The complexity emerged from abstraction—a history wished hidden."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount665
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02857142857142857
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.010526315789473684
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences60
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences60
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std5.93
cv0.434
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336
346
3520
369
3712
3811
3925
4016
4117
4217
4317
4411
4515
4611
4713
4826
496
100.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.6166666666666667
totalSentences60
uniqueOpeners37
69.44% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences48
matches
0"All new, all converging upon"
ratio0.021
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences48
matches
0"Her military precision birthed comparisons"
1"she murmured, gesturing with the"
2"Their feelings mirrored ghosts—a supernatural"
3"Their precision was like the"
4"They stepped towards the remaining"
5"She reassured the scene passed—a"
6"Their conversation waned into contemplative"
7"Their focus had transitioned, eyeing"
8"Their future caught in the"
ratio0.188
53.75% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount39
totalSentences48
matches
0"The flickering bulbs cast harsh"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn stepped onto"
2"The Veil Market, a notorious"
3"A brisk nod slipped through"
4"Harlow remarked dryly, eyeing the"
5"Davies gestured towards the floor,"
6"Harlow muttered, scanning the symbols"
7"A crooked smile tugged at"
8"Cosplayers in over their heads"
9"Harlow stepped back, eyes narrowing"
10"Her military precision birthed comparisons"
11"An officer approached with a"
12"Quinn thumbed through them, the"
13"she murmured, gesturing with the"
14"Davies nodded, eyes glinting as"
15"Several pairs of trainers."
16"Several of the officers threw"
17"Harlow turned her focus to"
18"Their feelings mirrored ghosts—a supernatural"
19"Davies sensed it too, nodding"
ratio0.813
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences48
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Her military precision birthed comparisons instinctively—a discipline that kept her safe amidst chaos."
75.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"called Detective Davies, her voice cutting through the murmur"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"Harlow muttered (mutter)"
1"Davies pressed (press)"
2"she murmured (murmur)"
3"Harlow muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.316
leniency0.632
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.421
80.3195%