Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT055VQG2230QNRD27NZSS2

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Duration:
30.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before Aurora could even register the knock. Lucien Moreau stood there, poised and regal, as if he had stepped straight from the pages of an ancient tale. His presence filled the tiny hallway with an air that crackled with unspoken tension. "Laila," he said, his voice smooth, as if he were addressing a nightlife goddess in a dimly lit bar, rather than a woman in her threadbare flat above a curry house. She shoved a strand of her black hair behind her ear and crossed her arms, an instinctive barrier against the heat rising in her cheeks. "Lucien," she replied, the name slipping from her lips like a forbidden secret. "May I come in?" The question hung in the air between them, sylphlike, tantalising. “Why now?” she asked, though she knew the answer was likely entwined in the pulse of their shared past. He stepped into the cramped flat effortlessly, as if the space could magically expand to accommodate him. She shut the door behind him with a dull thud, the sound reverberating through the fading walls adorned with the chaos of tattered books and scrolls. The stale scent of yesterday’s delivery wafted through the room, but Lucien remained unaffected, the tailored lines of his charcoal suit half-shrouded in shadows that danced beneath the flickering light. He shifted his weight, leaning slightly on his ivory-handled cane; she could almost see the way his amber eye searched hers, cradling unasked questions. “I thought you’d want to hear about the trade,” he said, brushing aside the obvious awkwardness that hummed between them like an electric wire dangerously close to sparking. “The trade?” she repeated, feigning disinterest, fists tightening against her sides. “You mean the one where I’m a delivery girl and you play with the underbelly of London?” “Exactly,” he replied, a wry smile curling at the corner of his mouth, accentuating the complexity of his heterochromatic gaze. She rolled her eyes, the familiar tension between them constructing a wall that felt both impenetrable and dangerously thin. “What do you want, Lucien?” “Nothing more than a conversation,” he said, that wicked smile still teasing his lips. “A glass of wine, perhaps? Or would you prefer tea?” “Wine sounds nice,” she said, her voice betraying her as she began rummaging for two mismatched glasses in the cluttered chaos of her kitchen counter. “Should’ve guessed as much,” he mused, leaning comfortably against the wall, his aura filling the small room with a warmth that fought against her instinct to remember all the ways he once hurt her. “How's the delivery business treating you? Still dodging mobs of desperate diners?” She huffed a laugh, pouring the deep red liquid and splashing a bit on the counter. “It’s not the worst. But let’s not pretend we both haven’t had more tumultuous weeks." Lucien stepped forward, gently reclaiming the glass from her hand before she could lose herself in the unsorted mess of emotions swirling in her mind. “Touché.” They held each other’s gaze for a heartbeat too long, pulling her back to nights spent tangled in sheets, laughter echoing in darkness, forgotten promises heavy between them like smoke. The memory coursed through her veins, leaving an ache behind, and she suddenly focused on a nearly-empty bottle of cheap wine. “Bottoms up,” Lucien said, lifting his glass, breaking the moment, and she followed suit, the clink of glass against glass like the tolling of a bell. “Why now?” she pushed again, the host of all their yesterdays hung palpable in the air around her. “The answer is simple.” He lowered his glass, the crimson liquid glinting in the low light and momentarily drawing her in like a moth to flame. “Someone's taken an interest in your delivery routes. They’re looking for... something. Or someone. I thought you’d want to know.” Her heart caught at the edge of dread, instinctively looking for the door she had closed behind him, noting with a pang how every escape route felt vulnerable under his gaze. “Why would anyone care about me?” Lucien's gaze bored into her, weighing her hesitation. “Unless you still believe those days are behind us.” “I don’t,” she snapped, then softened, glancing away. “But I’m hardly part of anyone’s high-stakes game.” “That’s where you’re mistaken,” he countered, his voice steady. “You're already entangled in a game much larger than you can see from your flat.” The air thickened between them, the lines of their laughter and tension blurring, merging into something more dangerous and enticing. “You presume to know me?” she fired back, unwilling to let him waltz back into her life like a prince rescuing her from a fairytale gone wrong. “You’re the one who left. You don’t get to claim authority now.” “I left because I thought it was what you needed,” he replied, his voice softer now. “And it nearly broke me. What do you think I desire to throw it all away now?” She squeezed her eyes shut for the briefest of moments, tempted to lean into his words even as they pulled at the seams of her heart. The ghost of his touch lingered on her skin. She could still feel his kiss — electric, dangerous — as though it had happened mere moments ago instead of years. “Then why come back?” she demanded, forcing the words through the clawing bitterness that remained from their past. “I’m here because I want to protect you.” “From what?” “From everything," he said, then took a step closer. “Something is coming. I won’t let you face it alone, Laila.” The intensity of his gaze dared her to reach out, and for a flickering moment, she believed him, felt herself drawn toward him like the tide, helpless against a current. “Please.” His voice lowered, softening, a plea hidden beneath layers of pride. “Don’t push me away again.” His admission sent ripples through her defences. She felt it in the marrow of her bones, the way the past climbed back into her with nerve-wracking urgency. “Just tell me,” she said, swallowing hard against the truth thrumming beneath the surface. “What are you willing to risk to be here?” “I'd risk everything,” he said firmly. “What we had meant something, and it still does. But you must understand, this… this is a different world now. I have enemies, and you’re right in their line of sight.” “Then you shouldn't be here,” she warned, her voice laced with frustration, but also an unsettling thrill as she teetered on the precipice of acceptance. “I know.” Her heart raced as she searched his solid expression for any sign of deceit. Then, suddenly, a crash resounded from the street below, cutting through her thoughts like a knife. “What was that?” “Get down!” He reacted instantly, pulling her by the waist and guiding her to the floor, the movement fluid and instinctual, as if they had done so many times before. Her heart raced, this was instinctual for him, but she struggled against the reminder of all the reasons she shouldn’t let him this close—again. Suddenly, chaos erupted outside; voices yelling, shattering glass, and honking horns swept through the air thick with adrenaline. “They’ve found us,” Lucien murmured, his breath lingering against her skin. Breath mingled like fog within the anguish, terror and longing blending within a space that had grown too small for the unspoken and the unsought. “Stay close,” he commanded, urgency thrusting the boundaries between them further dissipating. She inhaled sharply, feeling the magnetic pull of his proximity. “What now?” “Now we run.”
total_cost0.0013332399999999999

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
84.62% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she pushed again [again]"
1"he said firmly [firmly]"
2"He reacted instantly [instantly]"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.531
leniency1
rawRatio0.115
effectiveRatio0.115
76.19% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1260
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count3
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"gently"
2"suddenly"
3"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
12.70% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1260
totalAiIsms22
found
0
word"unspoken"
count2
1
word"tension"
count3
2
word"pulse"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"electric"
count2
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"palpable"
count1
9
word"glinting"
count1
10
word"pang"
count1
11
word"desire"
count1
12
word"intensity"
count1
13
word"firmly"
count1
14
word"raced"
count2
15
word"reminder"
count1
16
word"magnetic"
count1
highlights
0"unspoken"
1"tension"
2"pulse"
3"weight"
4"electric"
5"familiar"
6"warmth"
7"echoing"
8"palpable"
9"glinting"
10"pang"
11"desire"
12"intensity"
13"firmly"
14"raced"
15"reminder"
16"magnetic"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences54
matches
0"d with frustration"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences54
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences77
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1256
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions9
wordCount947
uniqueNames4
maxNameDensity0.63
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Aurora1
Moreau1
Lucien6
Breath1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Moreau"
2"Lucien"
3"Breath"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1256
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences77
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean25.12
std13.99
cv0.557
sampleLengths
045
131
238
34
410
519
643
754
828
928
1020
1124
1224
1325
1446
1531
1626
1751
1826
1918
2046
2131
2223
2316
2424
2520
2639
2733
2856
2918
308
312
3220
3330
3417
3527
3623
3737
3825
392
4014
4116
423
4354
4418
4511
4625
4712
4812
493
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs171
matches
0"were addressing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences77
ratio0.052
matches
0"He shifted his weight, leaning slightly on his ivory-handled cane; she could almost see the way his amber eye searched hers, cradling unasked questions."
1"She could still feel his kiss — electric, dangerous — as though it had happened mere moments ago instead of years."
2"Her heart raced, this was instinctual for him, but she struggled against the reminder of all the reasons she shouldn’t let him this close—again."
3"Suddenly, chaos erupted outside; voices yelling, shattering glass, and honking horns swept through the air thick with adrenaline."
96.32% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount950
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount42
adverbRatio0.04421052631578947
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.018947368421052633
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences77
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences77
mean16.31
std8.52
cv0.523
sampleLengths
011
120
214
331
425
513
64
710
819
917
1026
1130
1224
1328
1411
1517
1620
1719
185
1914
2010
2125
2234
2312
2416
2515
2625
271
2830
2921
3026
3118
3226
3320
3431
3514
369
378
388
399
4015
4120
4227
4312
4416
4517
4626
479
4821
4918
79.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.4935064935064935
totalSentences77
uniqueOpeners38
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences54
matches
0"Then, suddenly, a crash resounded"
1"Suddenly, chaos erupted outside; voices"
ratio0.037
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences54
matches
0"His presence filled the tiny"
1"he said, his voice smooth,"
2"She shoved a strand of"
3"she replied, the name slipping"
4"she asked, though she knew"
5"He stepped into the cramped"
6"She shut the door behind"
7"He shifted his weight, leaning"
8"he said, brushing aside the"
9"she repeated, feigning disinterest, fists"
10"he replied, a wry smile"
11"She rolled her eyes, the"
12"he said, that wicked smile"
13"she said, her voice betraying"
14"he mused, leaning comfortably against"
15"She huffed a laugh, pouring"
16"They held each other’s gaze"
17"she pushed again, the host"
18"He lowered his glass, the"
19"Her heart caught at the"
ratio0.722
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences54
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Lucien Moreau stood there, poised"
2"His presence filled the tiny"
3"he said, his voice smooth,"
4"She shoved a strand of"
5"she replied, the name slipping"
6"The question hung in the"
7"she asked, though she knew"
8"He stepped into the cramped"
9"She shut the door behind"
10"The stale scent of yesterday’s"
11"He shifted his weight, leaning"
12"he said, brushing aside the"
13"she repeated, feigning disinterest, fists"
14"he replied, a wry smile"
15"She rolled her eyes, the"
16"he said, that wicked smile"
17"she said, her voice betraying"
18"he mused, leaning comfortably against"
19"She huffed a laugh, pouring"
ratio0.963
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences54
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"He stepped into the cramped flat effortlessly, as if the space could magically expand to accommodate him."
1"The stale scent of yesterday’s delivery wafted through the room, but Lucien remained unaffected, the tailored lines of his charcoal suit half-shrouded in shadow…"
2"He shifted his weight, leaning slightly on his ivory-handled cane; she could almost see the way his amber eye searched hers, cradling unasked questions."
3"She rolled her eyes, the familiar tension between them constructing a wall that felt both impenetrable and dangerously thin."
4"She could still feel his kiss — electric, dangerous — as though it had happened mere moments ago instead of years."
5"Breath mingled like fog within the anguish, terror and longing blending within a space that had grown too small for the unspoken and the unsought."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags26
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she replied, the name slipping from her lips like a forbidden secret"
1"he said, that wicked smile still teasing his lips"
2"he countered, his voice steady"
3"he replied, his voice softer now"
4"Lucien murmured, his breath lingering against her skin"
5"he commanded, urgency thrusting the boundaries between them further dissipating"
47.96% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she repeated (repeat)"
1"she snapped (snap)"
2"she demanded (demand)"
3"she warned (warn)"
4"Lucien murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences49
tagDensity0.347
leniency0.694
rawRatio0.294
effectiveRatio0.204
73.5683%