Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT073E7RANG9V955SCD87RC

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Check that back corner again; I want every inch covered." Detective Harlow Quinn's sharp tone sliced through the chaos, her eyes focused on a splatter of crimson that soaked into the cracked concrete floor of the abandoned Tube station. This was a place the city had forgotten, a relic of the past buried beneath layers of grime and shadows. She stepped lightly, avoiding fragments of shattered glass scattered like stars in the dark abyss of what once buzzed with life. "Already on it, Quinn." DS Davies, a few paces off, angled his torch toward the far wall, illuminating the graffiti that danced across the ancient brickwork—a medley of inscriptions, most barely legible, but some more telling. Harlow strained to focus, squinting against the beams of light bouncing throughout the makeshift crime scene. “It’s a bloody mess in here,” he muttered, glancing at her. “A junkie, maybe? They love this place.” “Maybe, but take a look at the positioning of the body,” Harlow snapped, following the lines of bloodstained pavement. Artifacts lay strewn about—discarded syringes and a half-crushed can of energy drink—yet the body itself was draped unnaturally, sprawled out at an odd angle. “This doesn’t fit a typical overdose.” Her instincts tingled. There was a rhythm to chaos, and as she scanned the surroundings, the patterns leapt out at her like a shadowy specter, haunting and unsettling. Something concealed lurked beneath the surface, sizzling like a fuse ready to ignite. They had a victim, yes, but too many loose ends remained tangled in the mess. "What if it's not an overdose? What if..." A flash of realisation lit in her chest, a flutter of excitement that urged her to lean further into the investigation. "What if someone wanted to make it look like one? Look at the blood spatter. It’s all wrong.” Davies huffed a laugh, shaking his head. “You and your theories again. A messy junkie dying in a Tube station doesn’t scream conspiracy, does it?” At that, Harlow pivoted sharply, narrowing her gaze on him. “Think about it. The body’s too clean. No user’s gonna leave an untouched stash behind if they know they’re about to catch a high—unless that stash is planted.” Davies poked at the ground with the toe of his scuffed boot, the gleam of disinterest in his eyes. “You expect me to believe some mastermind orchestrated this right under our noses? We’re in Camden, love. Two blocks away from the Market, it’s crawling with the undead and the desperate.” “Precisely.” Harlow fought to contain her irritation as she straightened. “This isn’t just about junkies or violence; it’s more than that. We’ve been given a stage to work with. Every element here is a clue, and we’re not seeing the whole picture.” “Everywhere has a story.” Davies huffed, returning to his task of searching for a vital trace. A blast of air whooshed through the station, echoing eerily as Harlow recalled that previous case—the one that had nearly cost her everything, the one which had taken DS Morris from her. Her throat tightened, but now was not the time to falter. The stakes were high. “What do you make of it then, Miss Quinn?” Ignoring the cynical undertone in his question, Harlow crouched beside the body, holding her breath as she carefully inspected the events left scattered, each detail carving themselves into her mind. One boot lay prominent and untouched, yet the other was askew, as though hastily kicked off during a last desperate struggle. Fragments of the tunic also bore traces of deep blue cuffs, the kind that spoke to some level of respectability—a far cry from the chaos sprawled around. “A man’s clothes don’t suit a junkie,” she murmured to herself, yet Davies caught her whisper. “And you’ve arrived at that conclusion because...?” “There are no jeans—no rags. Just the tunic and those trousers; they’re tailored, not shabby.” Harlow’s brow furrowed as she indicated the details with a quick hand. “They don’t belong here. It’s a façade, Davies. Something that doesn’t belong in a junkie’s clutches.” “Okay, so we have a smartly dressed bloke laid out here,” he shrugged, placing the pin in her observations. “What’re you thinking? Someone ditched him after-” “Or someone else disposed of him entirely. Davies, look over there.” She gestured to the edge of the civilised chaos surrounding them, where a faded flyer clung to the wall like a spectre. The crumpled edge hinted at a message once vibrant—a tavern called The Veil, nestled near the Market; an obscure nod to the black underbelly she had only begun to unearth. “Looks like the spirit of Camden's past,” he snorted, rolling his eyes. The floodlight cupping her face turned suddenly, plunging into boiling thoughts that churned in her mind. It was there, in the depths of his scepticism, that she saw her own shadows creeping in—a reminder of swirling whispers from that wretched case buried deep in time. “What’s beyond the Market? What pulls people in?” “They’re just looking for a fix, Quinn. Same as anywhere else.” “Or information.” She turned towards Davies, her resolve hardening. “Everyone senses something different. The Market; it’s more than a gathering of lost souls. It’s a hub for secrets, channelling the things that ought to remain buried. Why not a murder—with an audience?” His silence pressed in, thick with the weight of her ideas. Harlow studied his features, leaning closer to pry through the fog of his disinterest. “You think someone wanted this to be a viewing? A performance?” he finally ventured. “Exactly. Something’s off.” She rose, glancing at the depths of the station; its foreboding awning seemed to bubble with lurking shadows. “And where there’s smoke, there’ll be fire. We need to follow the trail.” “The trail who?” he scoffed, running fingers through his messy hair. “There’s not a soul around.” Harlow stepped closer, feeling the surge of confidence coursing through her veins. “But the Market will be opening soon—it slides around every full moon. And people who have secrets... they talk.” She turned back towards the body, her senses sharpened by anticipation. The same expectant energy drummed in her chest, and an idea began to weave itself through her fingers. “We need to get ahead of them. I want records of missing persons in Camden—check the notes from The Veil. This is just the beginning.” “Fine,” Davies grumbled, his shoulders slumping as he began gathering their equipment. “But if this is just another wild goose chase…” “Then I’ll owe you a drink at the pub.” She shot back, her eyes glinting with determination, the thrill of the chase igniting within her. Yet, before he could respond, a shuffling sound echoed sharply from a darkened tunnel leading deeper into the forgotten labyrinth. Harlow’s instincts screamed at her, the warning thrumming along her veins. “Did you hear that?” she snapped, a harried need clutching her heart. “What? It’s probably a rat.” Except the thudding footsteps resonated low and deliberate. No rat would make such an ominous sound. “Get your torch ready.” Harlow said, adrenaline flooding her veins as she advanced toward the tunnel, senses honed in on the looming darkness. She could not let the shadows consume her. Not now. The darkness in The Veil Market stirred and the chase was on. She could sense it—the electric thrill of danger, and ahead, something tangible beckoned.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.475
leniency0.95
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1236
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count2
2
adverb"precisely"
count1
3
adverb"carefully"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"sharply"
2"precisely"
3"carefully"
4"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
15.05% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1236
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"shattered"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"echoing"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"furrowed"
count1
5
word"churned"
count1
6
word"depths"
count2
7
word"reminder"
count1
8
word"resolve"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"foreboding"
count1
12
word"anticipation"
count1
13
word"glinting"
count1
14
word"echoed"
count1
15
word"footsteps"
count1
16
word"resonated"
count1
17
word"looming"
count1
18
word"electric"
count1
19
word"tangible"
count1
highlights
0"shattered"
1"scanned"
2"echoing"
3"whisper"
4"furrowed"
5"churned"
6"depths"
7"reminder"
8"resolve"
9"silence"
10"weight"
11"foreboding"
12"anticipation"
13"glinting"
14"echoed"
15"footsteps"
16"resonated"
17"looming"
18"electric"
19"tangible"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences53
matches
0"g with determination"
88.95% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences53
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences73
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1222
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
73.37% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount783
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.53
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Harlow12
Quinn1
Tube1
Davies7
Artifacts1
Morris1
Veil2
Market2
Except1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Davies"
3"Morris"
places(empty)
globalScore0.734
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1222
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences73
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean33.03
std19.24
cv0.582
sampleLengths
080
152
218
349
456
547
625
738
850
942
1016
1147
129
1378
1416
157
1643
1726
1863
1912
2053
2111
2242
2325
2414
2534
2616
2731
2854
2921
3025
3131
3212
335
3416
3533
3625
98.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences53
matches
0"was draped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs152
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount6
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences73
ratio0.164
matches
0"\"Check that back corner again; I want every inch covered.\" Detective Harlow Quinn's sharp tone sliced through the chaos, her eyes focused on a splatter of crimson that soaked into the cracked concrete floor of the abandoned Tube station."
1"\"Already on it, Quinn.\" DS Davies, a few paces off, angled his torch toward the far wall, illuminating the graffiti that danced across the ancient brickwork—a medley of inscriptions, most barely legible, but some more telling."
2"Artifacts lay strewn about—discarded syringes and a half-crushed can of energy drink—yet the body itself was draped unnaturally, sprawled out at an odd angle."
3"“This isn’t just about junkies or violence; it’s more than that. We’ve been given a stage to work with. Every element here is a clue, and we’re not seeing the whole picture.”"
4"A blast of air whooshed through the station, echoing eerily as Harlow recalled that previous case—the one that had nearly cost her everything, the one which had taken DS Morris from her."
5"Fragments of the tunic also bore traces of deep blue cuffs, the kind that spoke to some level of respectability—a far cry from the chaos sprawled around."
6"“There are no jeans—no rags. Just the tunic and those trousers; they’re tailored, not shabby.” Harlow’s brow furrowed as she indicated the details with a quick hand."
7"The crumpled edge hinted at a message once vibrant—a tavern called The Veil, nestled near the Market; an obscure nod to the black underbelly she had only begun to unearth."
8"It was there, in the depths of his scepticism, that she saw her own shadows creeping in—a reminder of swirling whispers from that wretched case buried deep in time."
9"“Everyone senses something different. The Market; it’s more than a gathering of lost souls. It’s a hub for secrets, channelling the things that ought to remain buried. Why not a murder—with an audience?”"
10"“Exactly. Something’s off.” She rose, glancing at the depths of the station; its foreboding awning seemed to bubble with lurking shadows."
11"She could sense it—the electric thrill of danger, and ahead, something tangible beckoned."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount792
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.030303030303030304
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.016414141414141416
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences73
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences73
mean16.74
std8.89
cv0.531
sampleLengths
039
120
221
336
416
511
67
719
824
96
103
1125
1213
1315
1429
1518
167
1718
1810
1928
2019
2131
2210
2332
2416
2532
2611
274
289
2930
3021
3127
3216
337
3427
3516
3619
377
3833
3930
4012
4116
4229
438
4411
459
4633
4711
4814
4914
92.24% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.5616438356164384
totalSentences73
uniqueOpeners41
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences52
matches(empty)
ratio0
66.15% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount20
totalSentences52
matches
0"She stepped lightly, avoiding fragments"
1"he muttered, glancing at her"
2"Her instincts tingled."
3"They had a victim, yes,"
4"Her throat tightened, but now"
5"she murmured to herself, yet"
6"he shrugged, placing the pin"
7"She gestured to the edge"
8"he snorted, rolling his eyes"
9"It was there, in the"
10"She turned towards Davies, her"
11"His silence pressed in, thick"
12"he finally ventured"
13"She rose, glancing at the"
14"he scoffed, running fingers through"
15"She turned back towards the"
16"She shot back, her eyes"
17"she snapped, a harried need"
18"She could not let the"
19"She could sense it—the electric"
ratio0.385
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount44
totalSentences52
matches
0"Detective Harlow Quinn's sharp tone"
1"This was a place the"
2"She stepped lightly, avoiding fragments"
3"DS Davies, a few paces"
4"Harlow strained to focus, squinting"
5"he muttered, glancing at her"
6"Harlow snapped, following the lines"
7"Artifacts lay strewn about—discarded syringes"
8"Her instincts tingled."
9"Something concealed lurked beneath the"
10"They had a victim, yes,"
11"A flash of realisation lit"
12"Davies huffed a laugh, shaking"
13"Davies poked at the ground"
14"Harlow fought to contain her"
15"Davies huffed, returning to his"
16"A blast of air whooshed"
17"Her throat tightened, but now"
18"The stakes were high."
19"she murmured to herself, yet"
ratio0.846
96.15% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences52
matches
0"Yet, before he could respond,"
ratio0.019
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"One boot lay prominent and untouched, yet the other was askew, as though hastily kicked off during a last desperate struggle."
1"Fragments of the tunic also bore traces of deep blue cuffs, the kind that spoke to some level of respectability—a far cry from the chaos sprawled around."
2"The floodlight cupping her face turned suddenly, plunging into boiling thoughts that churned in her mind."
72.37% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She turned, her resolve hardening"
1"Davies grumbled, his shoulders slumping as he began gathering their equipment"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"he muttered (mutter)"
1"Harlow snapped (snap)"
2"she murmured (murmur)"
3"Davies grumbled (grumble)"
4"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.15
leniency0.3
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.25
80.0339%