Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT07N99EBTD9RMNW1XRN6B5

Run Details

Duration:
53.5s
Cost:
$0.050810
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The transition felt less like stepping through a door and more like falling through a heavy, velvet curtain. The damp chill of the London night vanished, replaced instantly by a suffocating, perfumed heat. Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking into ground that felt too soft, too yielding, like overripe peach flesh beneath a carpet of moss. She gasped, lungs seizing at the sudden intake of air. It didn't smell of ozone or exhaust; it smelled of roasted pheasant, caramelized honey, and the copper tang of old blood. Nyx hissed, a sound like steam escaping a cracked pipe. Aurora scrambled for balance, her hand flying to the small crescent scar on her wrist—a nervous tic she hadn't managed to shake since childhood. With her other hand, she gripped the hilt of the leaf-shaped dagger at her belt. The Fae metal remained icy against her hip, a stark contrast to the oppressive warmth radiating from the crimson stone around her neck. The Heartstone was pulsing, a frantic, rhythmic heat against her sternum. Shielding her eyes, she looked up. There was no sun. The sky was a vaulted ceiling of churning liquid amber, casting the world in a sepia tone that made depth perception a treacherous game. Light didn't strike from above; it permeated everything, a thick, golden haze that eliminated deep shadows. Nyx recoiled, their humanoid outline fracturing at the edges. Without shadows to anchor themselves, the Shade looked fragile, like ink bleeding into wet paper. Their violet eyes burned with a frantic intensity as they tried to condense their form into something solid. "Too bright," the Shadow rasped, the voice barely carrying over the low, thrumming hum of the landscape. "There is nowhere to hide here." Isolde drifted past them, her silver hair floating as if suspended in water. She didn't look at the sky. Her pale lavender eyes were fixed on the tree line ahead. She took a step, then another, the hem of her dress skimming the strange, iridescent grass. Where Aurora’s boots left deep, muddy divots, the Seer passed without bending a single blade. "The golden cage," Isolde murmured, her voice sounding like wind through dry chimes. "Where the hunger is the lock and the key." Aurora wiped sweat from her brow, her black hair sticking to her neck. She forced herself to scan the perimeter, locking down the panic rising in her throat. She needed to think like a courier, not a victim. Assess the route. Identify the hazards. "Where are we, exactly?" she asked, though the sinking feeling in her gut suggested she already knew. Nyx coalesced into a sharper silhouette, favoring the left side of Aurora to use her body as a meager shield against the ambient glow. "Dymas. The Prince’s garden. Do not touch the vines." They stood at the edge of a sprawling vineyard that defied logic. The grapevines were thick as pythons, twisting around trellis work made of polished bone. The leaves were a deep, bruised purple, pulsing with slow, rhythmic veins. Heavy clusters of fruit hung low, glistening with a sheen that looked more like oil than dew. Aurora stepped forward, the heat of the pendant urging her onward. "We need to move. If the Veil steered us here, there’s a reason." She led the way into the rows. The air grew heavier, cloying and sweet. It was silent, but not empty. The silence felt expectant, like a held breath before a scream. To her left, a cluster of grapes burst spontaneously. Red juice splattered across the bone trellis. It didn't drip; it oozed, thick and dark. "Disturbing," Aurora muttered, stepping wide to avoid a trailing vine that seemed to lean toward her body heat. "Efficiency," Nyx whispered, floating just above the track to avoid the sticky soil. "Belphegor does not believe in waste. The soil feeds the vine, the vine feeds the soul, the soul feeds the soil. A perfect circle of digestion." Isolde paused by a tree laden with apples the color of gold bullion. She tilted her head, listening to a sound Aurora couldn't hear. "The roots struggle. They scream for water, but they are given only wine." Aurora stopped. A low vibration traveled through the soles of her boots. Ahead, the vineyard gave way to a clearing dominated by a structure that looked like a gazebo, but grown rather than built—woven from living wood and flowering brambles. In the center sat a table, long enough to seat twenty, groaning under the weight of a feast that looked as if it had been laid out moments ago. Whole roasted boars, towers of shellfish, mounds of glistening pastries, and decanters of ruby wine that caught the amber light and fractured it into rainbows. "Is that..." Aurora started, her stomach giving a traitorous growl. The sudden sharpness of her own hunger caught her off guard. She hadn't eaten since her shift at the Golden Empress six hours ago. The smell of glazed pork hit her like a physical blow, dismantling her defenses. "Is anyone else starving?" Nyx drifted wide, their form elongating as they circled the perimeter of the clearing. "It is the air. It metabolizes your energy faster than you can replenish it. It wants you empty." Aurora approached the table. The craftsmanship of the platters was exquisite—gold and porcelain. But there were no chairs. The table was waist-high. A standing feast. She reached toward a silver tray of figs. A cool hand clamped around her wrist. Aurora jumped, her other hand instantly drawing the moonsilver blade. The metal hissed as it sliced the humid air, leaving a faint trail of pale luminescence. Isolde stood beside her, her grip surprisingly strong for someone who looked like she might blow away in a stiff breeze. The Seer didn't look at Aurora; she looked at the fig. "To eat the fruit of the dead land is to plant its seed in your belly," Isolde said softly. "The seed grows. It commands. You become the garden." Aurora lowered the dagger, her heart hammering against her ribs. She looked closer at the fig. The skin of the fruit was shifting minute by minute. A tiny tear in the purple flesh healed itself before her eyes. "It’s alive," Aurora whispered, revulsion replacing the hunger. "Regenerating," Nyx corrected, drifting back toward them. The Shade seemed to shrink away from the table, the violet light in their eyes dimming. "Infinite consumption requires infinite supply. This food... it does not die." Aurora holstered the blade but kept her hand on it. "Okay. No snacking. We find the rift point, we seal it or whatever we need to do, and we get out." She walked past the table, forcing herself not to look at the glazed meats. The path continued on the other side of the clearing, leading toward a distant ridge where the amber sky darkened to the color of dried blood. As they walked, the environment became more aggressive. The flowers lining the path were massive, their petals fleshy and wet. Some of them slowly tracked their movement, swiveling on thick green stalks. The landscape was beautiful in the way a tiger is beautiful—vibrant, mesmerizing, and evolved solely to kill. "Wait." Aurora held up a hand. The humming sound had changed. It was no longer a background drone. It was a melody. Faint, discordant music drifted through the humid air. Flutes made of bone and drums that sounded like wet leather being struck. "A procession," Nyx warned, their body dissolving into a puddle of smoke that slid along the ground, trying to find purchase in the divots of Aurora's footprints. "Guardians of the grove. Maybe chefs. In Dymas, the difference is negligible." Aurora crouched low behind a cluster of oversized ferns. She peeked through the fronds. Down in the valley below, a line of figures moved. They were bulbous, towering things, their skin the color of uncooked dough. They possessed too many joints in their arms and wore aprons stained with things Aurora didn't want to identify. They carried crates on their backs, and from the crates, faint, mewling sounds emerged. "Souls," Isolde whispered, her voice devoid of fear, stating it as a simple fact. "Ingredients." Aurora felt the blood drain from her face. "They're farming people?" "They are farming desire," Isolde corrected, her pale eyes wide and unblinking. "The soul is merely the husk." One of the dough-skinned giants stopped. It rotated its head a full hundred and eighty degrees. It didn't have eyes, just three vertical slits where a face should be. It sniffed the air, its nostrils flaring. The Heartstone pendant burned so hot Aurora had to grit her teeth to keep from crying out. It was reacting to the proximity of the hell-spawn, pulsing a frantic rhythm. "It smells us," Aurora hissed. "It smells the Half-Fae," Nyx whispered from the ground, reforming into a solid shape crouched beside her. "She reeks of wild magic. It does not belong here. It tastes bitter to them." Isolde stood up. Aurora grabbed for her, but her fingers passed through the sheer fabric of the Seer’s dress. "Isolde, get down!" Isolde didn't crouch. She stood amidst the ferns, a beacon of silver and lavender against the rotting amber world. "To hide from the glutton is to season oneself with fear. Salt makes the meat sweeter." The giant in the valley let out a roar that sounded like grinding rocks. It pointed a massive, multi-jointed finger toward their hiding spot. The other creatures dropped their crates, the mewling sounds intensifying, and began to lope up the hill with terrifying speed. Aurora drew the Fae blade, the moonsilver flaring with a harsh, cold light that cut through the amber haze. "Okay," she said, her voice steady despite the trembling in her legs. "Diplomacy is out. Nyx?" The Shade stood, expanding, drawing in the scant darkness from beneath the ferns until they towered over Aurora, a jagged rift in the world. "I am not fond of this place," Nyx said, the voice now a gale force wind. "I would like to leave." "Then let's carve a path," Aurora said. She stepped out from the cover, the blade leading the way. The air of Dymas thickened, sensing the foreign magic, reacting like an immune system attacking a virus. The amber sky seemed to lower, pressing down with the weight of an ocean. The first giant crested the ridge, drool sloughing from its facial slits. Aurora didn't wait. She lunged.
created_at"2026-02-19T03:48:54.194Z" 2/19/2026, 3:48:54 AM
model"google/gemini-3-pro-preview-20251117"
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tokens_completion3465
native_tokens_prompt1783
native_tokens_completion3937
native_tokens_completion_images0
native_tokens_reasoning1628
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num_input_audio_prompt(null)
num_media_completion0
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio0.056
effectiveRatio0.053
94.28% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1747
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.17% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1747
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"chill"
count1
2
word"stark"
count1
3
word"oppressive"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count2
6
word"churning"
count1
7
word"treacherous"
count1
8
word"intensity"
count1
9
word"glistening"
count2
10
word"silence"
count1
11
word"perfect"
count1
12
word"structure"
count1
13
word"weight"
count2
14
word"fractured"
count1
15
word"stomach"
count1
16
word"porcelain"
count1
17
word"desire"
count1
18
word"amidst"
count1
19
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"chill"
2"stark"
3"oppressive"
4"warmth"
5"rhythmic"
6"churning"
7"treacherous"
8"intensity"
9"glistening"
10"silence"
11"perfect"
12"structure"
13"weight"
14"fractured"
15"stomach"
16"porcelain"
17"desire"
18"amidst"
19"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences125
matches(empty)
74.29% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences125
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"tried to"
2"seemed to"
3"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences145
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1738
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions62
wordCount1474
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.9
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
London1
Fae2
Heartstone2
Shade3
Shadow1
Isolde9
Aurora28
Seer3
Nyx9
Golden1
Empress1
One1
Dymas1
persons
0"Shade"
1"Shadow"
2"Isolde"
3"Aurora"
4"Seer"
5"Nyx"
6"Dymas"
places
0"London"
1"Golden"
globalScore0.55
windowScore0.5
32.08% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences106
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"vine that seemed to lean toward her body heat"
1"looked like a gazebo, but grown rather th"
2"looked like she might blow away in a stif"
3"sounded like wet leather being struck"
4"sounded like grinding rocks"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1738
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences145
matches
0"drums that sounded"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean28.97
std16.45
cv0.568
sampleLengths
055
131
210
373
46
544
642
723
861
922
1044
1117
1233
1355
1424
1531
1624
1718
1839
1937
2069
2125
2252
2332
2425
258
267
2726
2832
2928
3038
318
3234
3331
3440
3532
3617
376
3816
3921
4039
4114
4255
4315
4411
4518
4636
4730
485
4932
96.84% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences125
matches
0"were fixed"
1"been laid"
2"being struck"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs259
matches
0"was pulsing"
1"was shifting"
2"was reacting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount4
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences145
ratio0.055
matches
0"It didn't smell of ozone or exhaust; it smelled of roasted pheasant, caramelized honey, and the copper tang of old blood."
1"Aurora scrambled for balance, her hand flying to the small crescent scar on her wrist—a nervous tic she hadn't managed to shake since childhood."
2"Light didn't strike from above; it permeated everything, a thick, golden haze that eliminated deep shadows."
3"It didn't drip; it oozed, thick and dark."
4"Ahead, the vineyard gave way to a clearing dominated by a structure that looked like a gazebo, but grown rather than built—woven from living wood and flowering brambles."
5"The craftsmanship of the platters was exquisite—gold and porcelain."
6"The Seer didn't look at Aurora; she looked at the fig."
7"The landscape was beautiful in the way a tiger is beautiful—vibrant, mesmerizing, and evolved solely to kill."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1482
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"left deep, muddy divots,"
1"deep, bruised purple, pulsing"
adverbCount29
adverbRatio0.019568151147098516
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.005398110661268556
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences145
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences145
mean11.99
std6.12
cv0.51
sampleLengths
018
115
222
310
421
510
624
715
823
911
106
114
1224
1316
149
1515
1618
1717
186
1913
206
2111
2216
2315
2413
259
2613
2715
2810
293
303
3117
3224
339
3412
3514
3612
3717
3811
3913
407
417
426
4311
449
457
468
4718
4813
4926
44.14% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.3310344827586207
totalSentences145
uniqueOpeners48
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences121
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences121
matches
0"She gasped, lungs seizing at"
1"It didn't smell of ozone"
2"Their violet eyes burned with"
3"She didn't look at the"
4"Her pale lavender eyes were"
5"She took a step, then"
6"She forced herself to scan"
7"She needed to think like"
8"she asked, though the sinking"
9"They stood at the edge"
10"She led the way into"
11"It was silent, but not"
12"It didn't drip; it oozed,"
13"She tilted her head, listening"
14"She hadn't eaten since her"
15"She reached toward a silver"
16"She looked closer at the"
17"She walked past the table,"
18"It was no longer a"
19"It was a melody."
ratio0.264
34.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount103
totalSentences121
matches
0"The transition felt less like"
1"The damp chill of the"
2"Aurora stumbled, her boots sinking"
3"She gasped, lungs seizing at"
4"It didn't smell of ozone"
5"Nyx hissed, a sound like"
6"Aurora scrambled for balance, her"
7"The Fae metal remained icy"
8"The Heartstone was pulsing, a"
9"The sky was a vaulted"
10"Light didn't strike from above;"
11"Nyx recoiled, their humanoid outline"
12"Their violet eyes burned with"
13"the Shadow rasped, the voice"
14"Isolde drifted past them, her"
15"She didn't look at the"
16"Her pale lavender eyes were"
17"She took a step, then"
18"Isolde murmured, her voice sounding"
19"Aurora wiped sweat from her"
ratio0.851
41.32% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences121
matches
0"To her left, a cluster"
ratio0.008
84.15% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The sky was a vaulted ceiling of churning liquid amber, casting the world in a sepia tone that made depth perception a treacherous game."
1"Light didn't strike from above; it permeated everything, a thick, golden haze that eliminated deep shadows."
2"Isolde drifted past them, her silver hair floating as if suspended in water."
3"Ahead, the vineyard gave way to a clearing dominated by a structure that looked like a gazebo, but grown rather than built—woven from living wood and flowering …"
4"Whole roasted boars, towers of shellfish, mounds of glistening pastries, and decanters of ruby wine that caught the amber light and fractured it into rainbows."
5"Isolde stood beside her, her grip surprisingly strong for someone who looked like she might blow away in a stiff breeze."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Isolde murmured, her voice sounding like wind through dry chimes"
1"Aurora started, her stomach giving a traitorous growl"
2"Aurora whispered, revulsion replacing the hunger"
3"Isolde corrected, her pale eyes wide and unblinking"
4"she said, her voice steady despite the trembling in her legs"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1"Aurora muttered (mutter)"
2"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
3"Aurora whispered (whisper)"
4"Nyx corrected (correct)"
5"Nyx warned (warn)"
6"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
7"Isolde corrected (correct)"
8"Aurora hissed (hiss)"
9"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences38
tagDensity0.395
leniency0.789
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.526
72.4547%