Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0A2AF0ZG55HP6D8EJA9B2

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Duration:
6m 30s
Cost:
$0.247935

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The body shouldn't have been there at all. Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under the yellow tape, her worn leather watch catching on the plastic. Three floors below Camden Market, past the tourist traps and knockoff handbags, past even the storage units where dealers kept their less legal inventory. The abandoned Tube station stretched before her like a throat. "Watch the third rail," DS Patel called out. "Still live, apparently." Quinn's torch beam swept across Victorian tiles, most cracked, some missing entirely. The platform curved away into darkness. She'd worked the Underground for eighteen years. Never seen this station on any map. "Who called it in?" "Anonymous tip. Said there'd be a body at the old Camden Deep station." Patel consulted his notebook. "Except Camden Deep doesn't exist. Not officially." The corpse lay sprawled across the tracks, arms twisted at unnatural angles. Male, mid-thirties, expensive suit. His face... Quinn crouched closer. No visible trauma, but the expression frozen there spoke of absolute terror. "Natural causes?" Patel suggested. "Heart attack, maybe. Exploring where he shouldn't, got scared in the dark?" Quinn pulled on latex gloves. The suit fabric felt wrong under her fingers. Too smooth. Too cold. She checked the label. Savile Row, but no tailor's mark. The stitching was perfect, machine-precise. "Since when does Savile Row use synthetic thread?" "Maybe it's a knock-off?" She lifted the corpse's left hand. No calluses. No dirt under the manicured nails. But the skin... She rubbed her thumb across his palm. Completely smooth. No fingerprints. "Get forensics down here. Full team." "Already on their way." Patel shifted his weight. "There's something else. The platform opposite." Quinn's torch beam found it immediately. Wooden stalls lined the far platform, draped in black cloth. Medieval-looking signs hung above them, symbols that hurt to look at directly. One stall door hung open, revealing shelves of glass bottles filled with things that moved. "Some kind of market," Patel said. "Goth revival, probably. You know Camden." Quinn jumped down onto the tracks, careful of the third rail. The body's position bothered her. Too neat. Too staged. She'd seen enough corpses to know how people fell when they died. This wasn't it. "Help me turn him." Together they rolled the body. No blood pooling. No lividity at all. Quinn checked her watch. If the call came in three hours ago... "He's not been dead long enough." "Maybe the cold down here?" "It's August, Patel." She stood, brushed dust from her knees. "And look at his shoes." Italian leather, polished to mirror brightness. Not a scuff. Not a speck of dirt. The abandoned station's floor was thick with decades of grime, but his soles were clean. "He didn't walk here." "Carried, then?" Quinn studied the platform edge. No drag marks. No disturbance in the dust except their own footprints. She walked the length of the platform, torch beam sweeping. The entrance they'd used showed recent traffic, but everywhere else... "Virgin dust. Nobody's been down here in years." "Except our victim." "Except he wasn't here when he died." Quinn returned to the body. "Look at the positioning. Arms spread like that, legs together. Someone arranged him." "Ritual killing?" She gestured toward the market stalls. "That's what we're supposed to think." A metallic scrape echoed from the tunnel. Both detectives tensed. Patel's hand moved to his radio. "Probably just the forensics team," he said. The sound came again. Closer. Not from the entrance. Quinn's torch found nothing but empty track disappearing into the tunnel. The third rail hummed with electricity. She'd been underground during power failures before. The darkness down here was absolute. Primordial. "We should wait up top," Patel suggested. "In a minute." Something about the market stalls pulled at her. Morris would have called it copper's instinct. Poor Morris. Three years, and she still heard his voice during investigations. She hoisted herself onto the opposite platform. Up close, the stalls looked older than she'd thought. The wood was dark with age, joints held with iron nails forged by hand. The symbols on the signs seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them. "Don't touch anything," Patel called out. "Could be evidence." The open stall drew her forward. The bottles on the shelves were arranged by size, each labeled in spidery handwriting. *Essence of Forgotten Names. Bottled Thursday's Child. London Rain (1888 vintage).* The things inside pressed against the glass, leaving oily smears. A ledger lay open on the counter. Recent entries, but the dates were wrong. Tomorrow. Next week. Next month. "Quinn?" She turned. Patel stood at the platform edge, but his face had changed. Sharper angles. Older eyes. "Find something interesting?" Not Patel's voice. Deeper. Accent she couldn't place. Her hand found her radio. Dead static. "Metropolitan Police. Identify yourself." The thing wearing Patel's face smiled. Too many teeth. "You're trespassing, Detective. The Market's closed to your kind." Movement in her peripheral vision. The corpse on the tracks sat up, head rotating a full 180 degrees to watch her. The expensive suit rippled like water. "Customers only, I'm afraid." Not-Patel stepped onto the tracks. The third rail sparked under his feet, but he didn't flinch. "Though we do offer a one-time visitor's pass. Steep price, mind you." Quinn backed toward the stalls. The bottles rattled on their shelves, contents agitated. The ledger's pages flipped of their own accord, showing more impossible dates. Purchases yet to be made. Deaths yet to occur. "What did you do with DS Patel?" "Patel?" The thing cocked its head. "Oh, your colleague. He never made it past the ticket barrier. Funny thing about anonymous tips. Sometimes they're very specific about who should respond." The corpse stood now, brushing dust from its suit with boneless fingers. Its face was still frozen in that rictus of terror, but the eyes tracked her movement. "Detective Harlow Quinn." Not-Patel consulted a pocket watch. Gold. Familiar. "Eighteen years of service. Lost a partner three years ago. Still blames herself." "Don't." "He found something he shouldn't have. Like you." The thing's smile widened. "The Metropolitan Police really should update their missing persons protocols. Some people aren't meant to be found." Quinn's fingers found the compass in the open stall. Small. Brass. The needle spun wildly, then locked onto Not-Patel. The protective sigils on its face flared with heat. "Theft is a serious crime, Detective." She gripped the compass tighter. The heat spread up her arm, but she didn't let go. "So is impersonating a police officer." "Are we officers here?" Not-Patel glanced at the shambling corpse. "I thought we were customers." The market stalls began to shake. Dust rained from the ceiling. The bottles sang in their shelves, a crystalline harmony that made her teeth ache. More figures emerged from the tunnels. All wrong. All wearing faces that didn't quite fit. "Last chance, Detective. Leave now. Forget what you've seen. Write your report about drug dealers and urban explorers. Live your life." Quinn thought of Morris. The case file still open on her desk. The questions no one wanted her asking. "I'll take my chances." "Pity." Not-Patel checked his watch again. "The Market does so hate to lose potential customers. But I suppose that's what we have receipts for." He reached for the ledger. Quinn moved first, compass extended like a weapon. The needle blazed white-hot, and Not-Patel screamed with Patel's voice. The sound echoed through the tunnels, multiplying, becoming a chorus. She ran. Vaulted the platform edge, hit the tracks hard. The third rail sparked sympathy with the compass, creating a corridor of electricity. The shambling corpse reached for her, but the lightning sent it reeling. The entrance. There. Fifty meters. Forty. Something massive moved in the tunnel behind her. The market stalls collapsed, spilling their impossible contents. Glass shattered. Things that should not exist scattered across the platform, seeking shadows. Twenty meters. Her radio crackled to life. "Quinn? Where are you? We've been looking for twenty minutes." Real Patel. Worried. Ten meters. The darkness surged forward, bringing the smell of old copper and forgotten names. The compass burned through her glove, but she held on. The entrance rushed toward her, bright with afternoon sun. She burst onto the street, nearly colliding with Patel and three uniformed officers. The compass clattered from nerveless fingers, rolling into a storm drain. "Jesus, Quinn. You look like you've seen a ghost." She glanced back at the entrance. Solid brick wall. No door. No stairs. A faded ghost sign advertised cigarettes from a company defunct since the fifties. "The body," she managed. "The tip about the body." "What body?" Patel frowned. "The call was about suspicious activity. Kids breaking into the old Camden Deep entrance." He gestured at the brick wall. "Been sealed since the Blitz, apparently." Quinn stared at her hand. The glove was intact. No burns. But her palm tingled with phantom heat, and when she closed her eyes, she could still see the needle pointing toward things that wore human faces. "Right," she said. "Must have misheard." But in her jacket pocket, her fingers found something that hadn't been there before. A receipt. Camden Occult Supplies. Dated tomorrow. The purchase was listed simply as: *One Police Detective, Gently Used.*
total_cost0.247935

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags21
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1540
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
3
adverb"gently"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"very"
2"really"
3"gently"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found
0"Patel"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
70.78% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1540
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"perfect"
count1
1
word"synthetic"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"echoed"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"crystalline"
count1
6
word"potential"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
highlights
0"perfect"
1"synthetic"
2"weight"
3"echoed"
4"familiar"
5"crystalline"
6"potential"
7"shattered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences181
matches(empty)
95.50% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount4
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences181
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences221
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans2
markdownWords16
totalWords1528
ratio0.01
matches
0"Essence of Forgotten Names. Bottled Thursday's Child. London Rain (1888 vintage)."
1"One Police Detective, Gently Used."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
57.41% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount1134
uniqueNames25
maxNameDensity1.85
worstName"Patel"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Patel"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn15
Camden2
Market1
Tube1
Patel21
Victorian1
Underground1
Row1
Italian1
Morris3
Forgotten1
Names1
Thursday1
Child1
Rain1
Deeper1
Gold1
Not-Patel6
Worried1
Occult1
Supplies1
Police1
Detective2
Gently1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Patel"
3"Morris"
4"Thursday"
5"Not-Patel"
places(empty)
globalScore0.574
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences87
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"quite fit"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1528
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences221
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs82
mean18.63
std12.63
cv0.678
sampleLengths
08
150
211
332
44
524
633
716
832
98
104
1128
126
1314
1443
1512
1635
174
1824
196
205
2115
2229
234
242
2537
268
273
2825
292
3012
3116
327
339
3431
357
3630
3745
389
3941
4019
411
4217
4311
447
454
4618
4727
4832
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences181
matches
0"were arranged"
1"was listed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs198
matches
0"wasn't looking"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences221
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1144
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.027097902097902096
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.008741258741258742
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences221
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences221
mean6.91
std4.69
cv0.678
sampleLengths
08
116
224
310
48
53
612
76
87
97
104
1117
127
1312
144
152
163
1712
184
1912
205
218
222
232
244
256
265
278
284
296
302
316
323
337
342
352
366
378
386
396
4010
4112
4215
436
446
4511
465
472
482
4912
73.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats22
diversityRatio0.497737556561086
totalSentences221
uniqueOpeners110
49.38% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences135
matches
0"Too many teeth."
1"All wearing faces that didn't"
ratio0.015
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences135
matches
0"She'd worked the Underground for"
1"She checked the label."
2"She lifted the corpse's left"
3"She rubbed her thumb across"
4"She'd seen enough corpses to"
5"She stood, brushed dust from"
6"She walked the length of"
7"She gestured toward the market"
8"She'd been underground during power"
9"She hoisted herself onto the"
10"Her hand found her radio."
11"Its face was still frozen"
12"She gripped the compass tighter."
13"He reached for the ledger."
14"Her radio crackled to life."
15"She burst onto the street,"
16"She glanced back at the"
17"He gestured at the brick"
ratio0.133
82.22% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount102
totalSentences135
matches
0"The body shouldn't have been"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn ducked under"
2"The abandoned Tube station stretched"
3"DS Patel called out"
4"Quinn's torch beam swept across"
5"The platform curved away into"
6"She'd worked the Underground for"
7"Patel consulted his notebook"
8"The corpse lay sprawled across"
9"Quinn crouched closer."
10"Quinn pulled on latex gloves."
11"The suit fabric felt wrong"
12"She checked the label."
13"Savile Row, but no tailor's"
14"The stitching was perfect, machine-precise."
15"She lifted the corpse's left"
16"She rubbed her thumb across"
17"Patel shifted his weight"
18"Quinn's torch beam found it"
19"Medieval-looking signs hung above them,"
ratio0.756
37.04% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences135
matches
0"If the call came in"
ratio0.007
90.59% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences41
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The bottles sang in their shelves, a crystalline harmony that made her teeth ache."
1"But her palm tingled with phantom heat, and when she closed her eyes, she could still see the needle pointing toward things that wore human faces."
2"But in her jacket pocket, her fingers found something that hadn't been there before."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags21
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Patel suggested (suggest)"
1"Patel suggested (suggest)"
dialogueSentences63
tagDensity0.079
leniency0.159
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.063
90.7646%