Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0AF8FGPC9H6SDHAF34KPS

Run Details

Duration:
1m 10s
Cost:
$0.003940
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door to Eva’s Flat grated open, and London slid in with a damp sigh. Ptolemy, the tabby, whipped his tail along the rug and vanished behind a stack of scrolls as if the room itself might swallow him whole. The lamp threw a honeyed glow over shelves crowded with papers, jars, and loose pages that smelled faintly of citrus oil and ink. Rory stood with one hand braced on the edge of a battered desk, coffee cooling in a chipped mug, eyes fixed on a map spread out like a bird with its wings tied shut. The sound of rain against brick turned soft, then hard, against the window. Lucien stepped inside without knocking. He wore a suit that looked as if someone had ironed the night and kept the stars for cufflinks, charcoal and precise. The ivory-handled cane tapped a measured rhythm on the floor, the blade hidden from view by his coat. The air shifted when he entered, a current that pulled at Rory’s hair and made the pages tremble. “Rory,” he said, as if he’d merely paused in a corridor and found himself here, in the midst of a storm he’d somehow invited in. Rory didn’t look up at first. She watched the ripple of heat from the lamp lick the glass of her mug, watched the steam hesitate and then vanish. Her eyes lifted, bright blue as a frozen lake, and for a moment the room held its breath. “Lucien,” she answered, calm as a kept oath. “You could have mailed me a note. Or a message in four languages you pretend to forget you know.” Lucien did not move closer. He stood where the light failed to touch his jawline, letting the shadow do a little work of its own. “You preferred to pretend I didn’t exist,” he said softly, and it wasn’t a question. A small sound—Ptolemy’s cautious meow from the other side of the door—broke the moment. The cat slid between Rory’s ankles and rubbed his flank against Lucien’s boot, tail straight as a blade tip. Lucien looked down, the faintest tilt of a smile touching the corner of his mouth, not an admission so much as a ceasefire offered in a war both of them had learned to perfect over time. Rory stepped back and shifted her weight, the desk creaking as if it might protest. She dropped her gaze to the map again, tracing a line with the tip of a finger that bore a crescent-shaped scar on the wrist—old, familiar, stubborn. “Brick Lane isn’t your usual corridor of secrets, Lucien,” she said, the edge of a grate in her voice. “It’s where people come to forget their real names and order curry with consequences.” “Love,” he replied, as if naming the emotion made it portable, “is what you call a risk you don’t mind taking when you’ve already lost the thing you need most.” His eyes—one amber, one black—held hers with a quiet intensity that could have cracked a globe or kept it intact. He moved forward just enough to place the cane against the wall by the door, as though granting Rory permission to accept the intrusion. Rory’s lips tightened. “What do you want, Lucien? Why now?” He angled his head toward the desk, toward the evidence of a mind that would rather map a route through a nightmare than admit what hurts. “The watchers are tightening their circle,” he said, speaking faster than his usual measured cadence. “The underworld is shifting. Avaros—my father’s realm—started a ripple that’s reached the surface here. If we don’t act, we’ll both be pulled under by currents we can’t name.” The admission landed between them with a dull thunk, like a book dropped onto a wooden floor. Rory’s breath hitched once, but she settled it with a careful exhale, the scar on her wrist catching the lamplight, turning pale silver. “And you expect me to trust you,” she said, dry as parchment. “I expect you to listen,” he answered, his voice lower now, almost intimate. “Not to trust blindly, just to hear me out.” She turned her chair a fraction and faced him more fully, as though the distance between them were a fault line she could measure with her gaze. Her right hand brushed the edge of the map, smooth as river stones, and she spoke with a careful deliberateness that could have cut glass. “The last time we spoke, you vanished on a tide of favors and lies,” Rory said, and her tone didn’t rise so much as it settled into the room’s corners. “You were chasing something louder than you could carry. I was left with the echo.” Lucien’s eyes flickered with a quick flash of something almost ridiculous—resignation, maybe, or remorse—then steadied. He angled his head toward the cat, who had settled onto Rory’s chair, tail curling like a question mark. “Ptolemy approves of nothing I’ve done,” he said, and the cat blinked, as if to signal that approval was not the issue here. “What’s changed?” Rory asked, pushing aside the memory he’d dragged in with his presence. “What makes this moment different from the countless moments before, where you could’ve come in and taken what you needed and left me with the fallout?” Lucien crouched so that he met her eyes at human height, his cane left behind on the wall like a weapon grown tired. “Because this time you’re in the way of a plan that serves neither of us if you’re not involved.” He paused, letting the weight of his words settle. “I came to warn you, not persuade you. But I won’t pretend I don’t want you there when the dust clears.” The word “plan” seemed to travel through the room and touch every book spine, every scroll, every line drawn in ink on the map. Rory’s gaze dropped to the desk, to a notebook where she’d sketched routes, contingencies, and the names of players who would rather burn a city than admit a fault. She pressed her fingertips to her temple, then stood and walked to the window, letting the rain wash the street noise into a pale wash across the glass. She didn’t slide the blinds or look down; she stared out as if the city itself might offer a clue. Lucien watched the tremor in her hands—an unguarded thing, as if her own skin remembered a night that hadn’t quite forgiven her. When she finally spoke, her voice was level, almost clinical. “I turned my back on the underworld once to save a life that mattered more than any plan. It didn’t work. The person I saved still has a debt they can’t pay, and that debt might kill me if it isn’t paid with something you don’t want to give.” “Rory,” he said softly, and the name carried its own weather, a storm barreling gently, inexorably. “I didn’t come for apologies. I came because you’ve got the only map that shows every exit, every trap, every person who would be foolish enough to trust a demon’s son with an honest intention.” She whirled, the map cresting in the breeze of her turn, papers fluttering like startled birds. “And you think you can pull me into this without dragging me through the mud you left behind? You think I’ll forget the things you did for a moment of safety? You think I forgot the way you disappeared after you found your father’s shadow in my coffee cup?” The memory seemed to rise up between them, a ghost made of coffee steam and words left unsaid. He did not answer with a denial or a justification. Instead his gaze softened, and for the smallest instant, a line of vulnerability crossed his face—one that made the lines of his forehead look younger, his cheekbones less severe. “I’m asking for a second chance, Rory. Not a rescue, not a confession,” he said, keeping his voice low enough that the cat’s ears twitched, listening for a sound that might ruin the moment. “A second chance to work with you, not against you, to map this together.” Rory crossed her arms, the crescent scar on her wrist catching the lamplight again as she pressed her fingers against it, as if to remind herself that she could still hold herself together even when the world tilted. “A second chance has a price,” she said, and the words felt heavier than they should have. Lucien rose to his full height, the cane’s tip catching a glint of lamplight. “Name it.” Her eyes narrowed on the map, then slid to him. “You come here with a tale of underworld tides, and you expect me to wade through it with you because you’ve decided you need a partner. Fine. You want my help? You do right by me, from this moment forward. No more half-truths, no more disappearances, no more leaving me a footnote in your records.” He didn’t smile, not fully, but his mouth did tighten at the corners, the hint of steel softening the line. “That’s a lot to ask,” he admitted, but the admission felt like a bridge, not a trap. “Not for the things I’ve already given up to get here,” Rory replied. Her voice dropped, a whisper against the hum of the radiator and the city’s distant roar. “I’m not the same person you walked away from. I’ve learned to read the wind and walk into it.” Ptolemy hopped down from the chair and padded along Rory’s leg to Lucien, sniffing him with a cat’s inevitable suspicion before rubbing his face against the cane as though approving a dangerous ally’s right to carry a blade. The soft purr he produced vibrated through the floor. Lucien crouched again to meet the cat’s gaze, then looked up at Rory with an almost shy seriousness. “I won’t pretend this is easy. If we do this, we do it as equals. I’ll tell you what I can, and you’ll decide what you’ll do with it. No promises beyond that.” Rory studied him for a long breath, letting the shadow of the room gather between them and break apart again like light through a prism. She walked back to the desk, picked up the notebook with the map, and tapped a finger against a line drawn in ink. “The plan starts with you giving me a straight answer about your father’s current hold over the watchers here. If there’s a way to cut it, I want to know what your first move is.” Lucien rose slowly, the cane resting casually on a shoulder as if it were a lute rather than a weapon. He spoke with a precise evenness that was both infuriating and reassuring. “He isn’t in control yet. He wants to be. He believes fear will push people into the open. We’ll use that against him—carefully. The first move is reconnaissance. We identify who’s aligned with him, who’s playing both sides, and who’s ready to burn a bridge rather than burn a person.” Her eyes flashed. “And if I decide I don’t want to burn that bridge at all?” He let a thin smile show, then reined it in. “Then we don’t burn it. We seal it, we guard it, and we walk away from the edge together.” The cat settled into Rory’s chair and watched, unblinking, as if the animal could sense every inch of the tension between them and knew what to do with it. Rory’s shoulders lowered a fraction; her breath, which had become a string pulled tight in her chest, found a slower rhythm. When she spoke again, her voice was almost gentle. “All right, Lucien. We talk. We listen. We map. And we decide what to do with the information afterward, not before.” Lucien moved as if relieved, a slow, almost mechanical ease returning to his posture. “We talk,” he repeated, and the words hung between them like a vow, something that could be broken but would someday be remembered for what it might have been. The cat shifted and settled into Rory’s lap, tail curling protectively about her wrist. The lamp hummed, the curry house below gave a low chorus of clatter and steam, and the map on the desk caught the light in angry, patient lines. The air between Rory and Lucien changed with the soft click of the cane against the wall and the way Rory’s fingers found the lines she’d drawn earlier, tracing a path that might lead to a doorway rather than a trap. “Will you stay then?” Rory asked, not looking up from the map, the weight of distrust still in her mouth but tempered by an openness she’d thought she’d buried long ago. Lucien stood, shadowed for a moment in the pool of lamp light, and then stepped forward into the glow. He held out the cane with a deliberate, almost ceremonial ease, offering it back to the wall as though it were a token of peace. “Only if you’ll walk with me,” he said, the gravity of his tone softened by a note of almost shy sincerity. Rory met his gaze, the blue of her eyes bright again, a spark that hadn’t existed since the day she’d learned to read the street’s weather as if it were a childhood language she’d forgotten how to speak but remembered in a single glance. “We walk it together,” she said, and the words came without hesitation, heavy with promise, slippery with risk. The flat grew quieter as they stood there, two people who had once reached for something together and then learned to survive apart. The rain pressed at the glass, and the cat patted Rory’s hand with the rhythm of a small drum, as if signaling that the moment was real and that the moment deserved a next. Lucien glanced at the cat, then back to Rory. “We start with tonight’s data, then we decide. There’s a street corner near here where the watchers like to congregate. We go quiet, we listen, we learn who’s listening back.” Rory’s mouth settled into a firm, almost practiced line. “We go quiet, then we go loud only when we have to.” Ptolemy stretched and yawned, a long, patient moment that punctured the tension with a thread of ordinary life. Rory reached down and stroked the cat’s back, a soft, almost reluctant care, and for a heartbeat she looked older than her twenty-five years, older than the city’s noise, older than the scars that never quite stopped itching. Lucien looked at the desk, at the map, at the ink-streaks that had become a language only those who carried it could understand. He looked back at Rory, and in his eyes there was something not easily named—a mixture of longing, resolve, and the stubborn gravity of someone who had spent too long mapping shadows to pretend they didn’t cast light. “Tonight we start with what you already have,” he said, as if laying down an anchor in a current that could pull them apart or pull them closer. “We’ll cross-check every name, every key, every place. And if we find a path that doesn’t demand sacrifice, we take it. If not, we fight for something worth keeping.” Rory stood straighter, shoulders easing with a grounding stubbornness. “Then you stay,” she told him, the words firm but not unkind. “You stay long enough to be honest, long enough to carry your share of the weight, long enough to let me see you when you wake up in the morning and you’re still here.” He nodded once, a single, quiet assent that carried more weight than a dozen loud promises, and in that nod the old distance dissolved a fraction, replaced by a careful now. The cat settled again, content to share a seat between rival loyalties, between two people who had learned to survive separately and now might learn to survive together. The lamp’s glow softened, the room filling with the ordinary sound of a city that never slept properly, of rain falling and books sighing under their own weight. They moved toward the desk, the map, the notes—two silhouettes becoming a single, cautious outline. They spoke little, letting the facts do the talking and letting the tension do the listening. Then Rory’s hand reached out and did something she hadn’t done in a long time: she touched Lucien’s sleeve, trailing warmth up the fabric, a small, almost shy acknowledgment that if this was a second chance, she intended to use it to see him clearly, not to pretend he was someone he wasn’t. Lucien’s breath caught just enough for her to notice, and he let it go, the moment between them turning into something more solid, something that could be built rather than broken. The room hummed with the quiet of decided actions, the careful, practical kind of romance that makes room for danger and for the possibility that the danger might finally mean something honest—something inevitable. “Then we begin,” Rory said, stepping away from the window and toward the desk, toward the plan, toward the future that might finally include both of them, or at least a future they could agree on. Lucien moved to stand beside her, not close enough to crowd but close enough to feel the pull of choice. He slid his gaze toward the map, toward the inked lines that could lead to danger or freedom, and toward Rory, who waited with the calm of a storm that chose its moment. They didn’t rush. They drew breath. They listened to the room—the cat’s soft purr, the rain’s slow grid against the glass, the clock’s patient tick—as if a true partnership could be measured in stillness as well as in action. And for the first time in a long, jagged while, the room felt almost bright with possibility—two people who once stood on the edge now standing at the brink together, not as rescue and rescuee, but as two equal halves attempting to become a whole again, one careful step at a time.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags25
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said softly [softly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.08
effectiveRatio0.08
90.10% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3029
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"inexorably"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"gently"
2"inexorably"
3"slowly"
4"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.08% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3029
totalAiIsms26
found
0
word"measured"
count3
1
word"perfect"
count1
2
word"weight"
count6
3
word"tracing"
count2
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"intensity"
count1
6
word"echo"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"glint"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count1
10
word"vibrated"
count1
11
word"aligned"
count1
12
word"tension"
count3
13
word"mechanical"
count1
14
word"resolve"
count1
15
word"warmth"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"perfect"
2"weight"
3"tracing"
4"familiar"
5"intensity"
6"echo"
7"flickered"
8"glint"
9"whisper"
10"vibrated"
11"aligned"
12"tension"
13"mechanical"
14"resolve"
15"warmth"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"the weight of his words"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences110
matches(empty)
90.91% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences110
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences135
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3005
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions30
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount2203
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.5
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva1
Flat1
London1
Rory33
Lucien19
Ptolemy4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Flat"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
4"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
globalScore0.751
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences102
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"as if naming the emotion made it portable, His eyes—one amber, one black—held hers with a quiet intensity that could have cracked a globe or kept it intact"
1"as though granting Rory permission to accept the intrusion"
2"quite forgiven her"
3"felt like a bridge, not a trap"
4"as though approving a dangerous ally’s right to carry a blade"
5"as if signaling that the moment was real and that the moment deserved a next"
6"as if laying down an anchor in a current that could pull them apart or pull them closer"
66.89% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.331
wordCount3005
matches
0"not fully, but his mouth did tighten at the corners, the hint of steel soft"
1"not looking up from the map, the weight of distrust still in her mouth but tempered by an openness she’d thought she’d buried long ago"
2"not close enough to crowd but close enough to feel the pull of choice"
3"not as rescue and rescuee, but as two equal halves attempting to become a whole again, one"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences135
matches
0"signal that approval"
1"signaling that the"
69.53% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean55.65
std21.89
cv0.393
sampleLengths
0110
163
225
373
440
569
675
774
810
969
1052
1122
1252
1345
1457
1540
1672
17101
1881
1951
2065
2157
2248
2355
2416
2565
2637
2748
2847
2951
3083
3182
3216
3329
3480
3543
3683
3731
3865
3962
4057
4139
4221
4356
4461
4557
4655
4759
48112
4964
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences110
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs376
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences135
ratio0.096
matches
0"A small sound—Ptolemy’s cautious meow from the other side of the door—broke the moment."
1"She dropped her gaze to the map again, tracing a line with the tip of a finger that bore a crescent-shaped scar on the wrist—old, familiar, stubborn."
2"“Love,” he replied, as if naming the emotion made it portable, “is what you call a risk you don’t mind taking when you’ve already lost the thing you need most.” His eyes—one amber, one black—held hers with a quiet intensity that could have cracked a globe or kept it intact."
3"Lucien’s eyes flickered with a quick flash of something almost ridiculous—resignation, maybe, or remorse—then steadied."
4"She didn’t slide the blinds or look down; she stared out as if the city itself might offer a clue."
5"Lucien watched the tremor in her hands—an unguarded thing, as if her own skin remembered a night that hadn’t quite forgiven her."
6"Instead his gaze softened, and for the smallest instant, a line of vulnerability crossed his face—one that made the lines of his forehead look younger, his cheekbones less severe."
7"Rory’s shoulders lowered a fraction; her breath, which had become a string pulled tight in her chest, found a slower rhythm."
8"He looked back at Rory, and in his eyes there was something not easily named—a mixture of longing, resolve, and the stubborn gravity of someone who had spent too long mapping shadows to pretend they didn’t cast light."
9"They moved toward the desk, the map, the notes—two silhouettes becoming a single, cautious outline."
10"The room hummed with the quiet of decided actions, the careful, practical kind of romance that makes room for danger and for the possibility that the danger might finally mean something honest—something inevitable."
11"They listened to the room—the cat’s soft purr, the rain’s slow grid against the glass, the clock’s patient tick—as if a true partnership could be measured in stillness as well as in action."
12"And for the first time in a long, jagged while, the room felt almost bright with possibility—two people who once stood on the edge now standing at the brink together, not as rescue and rescuee, but as two equal halves attempting to become a whole again, one careful step at a time."
99.56% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2222
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount90
adverbRatio0.0405040504050405
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.008550855085508551
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences135
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences135
mean22.26
std11.31
cv0.508
sampleLengths
015
125
223
334
413
55
622
718
818
925
106
1122
1218
138
1419
155
1620
1715
1814
1919
2036
2115
2227
2319
2414
2550
2624
273
287
2926
3015
3128
3217
3323
3412
3513
369
3727
3825
3930
4015
4115
4219
4323
4414
4526
4623
4728
4821
4924
39.63% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats14
diversityRatio0.2074074074074074
totalSentences135
uniqueOpeners28
61.16% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences109
matches
0"Instead his gaze softened, and"
1"Then Rory’s hand reached out"
ratio0.018
40.18% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount49
totalSentences109
matches
0"He wore a suit that"
1"he said, as if he’d"
2"She watched the ripple of"
3"Her eyes lifted, bright blue"
4"she answered, calm as a"
5"He stood where the light"
6"he said softly, and it"
7"She dropped her gaze to"
8"she said, the edge of"
9"he replied, as if naming"
10"He moved forward just enough"
11"He angled his head toward"
12"he said, speaking faster than"
13"she said, dry as parchment"
14"he answered, his voice lower"
15"She turned her chair a"
16"Her right hand brushed the"
17"He angled his head toward"
18"he said, and the cat"
19"He paused, letting the weight"
ratio0.45
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount104
totalSentences109
matches
0"The door to Eva’s Flat"
1"Ptolemy, the tabby, whipped his"
2"The lamp threw a honeyed"
3"Rory stood with one hand"
4"The sound of rain against"
5"Lucien stepped inside without knocking."
6"He wore a suit that"
7"The ivory-handled cane tapped a"
8"The air shifted when he"
9"he said, as if he’d"
10"Rory didn’t look up at"
11"She watched the ripple of"
12"Her eyes lifted, bright blue"
13"she answered, calm as a"
14"Lucien did not move closer."
15"He stood where the light"
16"he said softly, and it"
17"A small sound—Ptolemy’s cautious meow"
18"The cat slid between Rory’s"
19"Lucien looked down, the faintest"
ratio0.954
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences109
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences73
technicalSentenceCount23
matches
0"She dropped her gaze to the map again, tracing a line with the tip of a finger that bore a crescent-shaped scar on the wrist—old, familiar, stubborn."
1"He moved forward just enough to place the cane against the wall by the door, as though granting Rory permission to accept the intrusion."
2"Rory’s breath hitched once, but she settled it with a careful exhale, the scar on her wrist catching the lamplight, turning pale silver."
3"She turned her chair a fraction and faced him more fully, as though the distance between them were a fault line she could measure with her gaze."
4"Her right hand brushed the edge of the map, smooth as river stones, and she spoke with a careful deliberateness that could have cut glass."
5"He angled his head toward the cat, who had settled onto Rory’s chair, tail curling like a question mark."
6"Lucien watched the tremor in her hands—an unguarded thing, as if her own skin remembered a night that hadn’t quite forgiven her."
7"Rory crossed her arms, the crescent scar on her wrist catching the lamplight again as she pressed her fingers against it, as if to remind herself that she could…"
8"Ptolemy hopped down from the chair and padded along Rory’s leg to Lucien, sniffing him with a cat’s inevitable suspicion before rubbing his face against the can…"
9"He spoke with a precise evenness that was both infuriating and reassuring."
10"Rory’s shoulders lowered a fraction; her breath, which had become a string pulled tight in her chest, found a slower rhythm."
11"Lucien moved as if relieved, a slow, almost mechanical ease returning to his posture."
12"He held out the cane with a deliberate, almost ceremonial ease, offering it back to the wall as though it were a token of peace."
13"Rory met his gaze, the blue of her eyes bright again, a spark that hadn’t existed since the day she’d learned to read the street’s weather as if it were a child…"
14"The flat grew quieter as they stood there, two people who had once reached for something together and then learned to survive apart."
15"The rain pressed at the glass, and the cat patted Rory’s hand with the rhythm of a small drum, as if signaling that the moment was real and that the moment dese…"
16"Ptolemy stretched and yawned, a long, patient moment that punctured the tension with a thread of ordinary life."
17"He looked back at Rory, and in his eyes there was something not easily named—a mixture of longing, resolve, and the stubborn gravity of someone who had spent to…"
18"He nodded once, a single, quiet assent that carried more weight than a dozen loud promises, and in that nod the old distance dissolved a fraction, replaced by a…"
19"The cat settled again, content to share a seat between rival loyalties, between two people who had learned to survive separately and now might learn to survive …"
20"Lucien’s breath caught just enough for her to notice, and he let it go, the moment between them turning into something more solid, something that could be built…"
21"The room hummed with the quiet of decided actions, the careful, practical kind of romance that makes room for danger and for the possibility that the danger mig…"
22"They listened to the room—the cat’s soft purr, the rain’s slow grid against the glass, the clock’s patient tick—as if a true partnership could be measured in st…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags25
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"he said, as if he’d merely paused in a corridor and found himself here, in the midst of a storm he’d somehow invited in"
1"she said, the edge of a grate in her voice"
2"he replied, as if naming the emotion made it portable,"
3"he answered, his voice lower now, almost intimate"
4"he said, and the cat blinked, as if to signal that approval was not the issue here"
5"he said softly, and the name carried its own weather, a storm barreling gently, inexorably"
6"she said, and the words felt heavier than they should have"
7"he admitted, but the admission felt like a bridge, not a trap"
8"he repeated, and the words hung between them like a vow, something that could be broken but would someday be remembered for what it might have been"
9"she said, and the words came without hesitation, heavy with promise, slippery with risk"
10"he said, as if laying down an anchor in a current that could pull them apart or pull them closer"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"he admitted (admit)"
1"he repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.46
leniency0.92
rawRatio0.087
effectiveRatio0.08
68.2791%