Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0BBCW98K1XF0M9RZFD2QB

Run Details

Duration:
1m 5s
Cost:
$0.001237
Provider:
AtlasCloud

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air tasted of honey and overripe plums, thick enough to chew. Aurora Carter blinked, her eyes struggling to adjust. One moment, she’d been stepping through the shimmering distortion behind a dumpster in a Soho alley, the Heartstone at her throat pulsing like a second heartbeat. The next, this. The sky was a warm, impossible amber, cloudless, lit by no visible sun. It cast everything in a perpetual, golden hour glow. Beneath her feet, the ground wasn’t earth but a springy, moss-like carpet in shades of burgundy and bronze, and it released a sweet, herbal scent with every step. “Well,” Nyx’s voice was a rustle of dry leaves at her shoulder, a whisper that seemed to come from the long shadows stretching behind them. Their solid form, a humanoid silhouette of living darkness, seemed denser here, the faint violet glow of their eyes more pronounced against the amber wash. “This is not Richmond Park.” “I think we established that when the oak trees started singing,” Rory muttered, her own voice sounding too sharp, too human in the soft air. Ahead, Isolde Varga moved without a sound. Her silver hair was a waterfall of mercury down her back, and her pale lavender eyes scanned the horizon. She left no footprints in the crimson moss. “Dymas,” she said, the single word hanging like a bell’s chime. “The realm of Gluttony. The stories do not do the… saturation… justice.” They stood at the edge of a decline, looking out over a valley that stretched into a hazy, golden distance. It was a landscape of cultivated madness. Vines heavy with grapes the size of apples coiled around trees that seemed to grow both peaches and glossy, purple peppers from the same gnarled branches. In the distance, rows of plants shimmered with leaves of silver and gold. The air buzzed, not with insects, but with a low, harmonious hum, as if the very plants were vibrating in contentment. “It’s beautiful,” Rory admitted, the cool-headed part of her warring with a sudden, primal urge to run down the slope and bury her face in the nearest fruit-laden bush. “It is hungry,” Isolde corrected, her tone flat. “Beauty is its lure. Do not eat anything. Do not drink. Not a single berry, not a drop of dew. The contract is binding.” Rory’s hand went to the Fae-forged blade at her hip, its moonsilver hilt cold and reassuring against her palm. The cold was a shock in the enveloping warmth. “You said the rift would be near the center. Where the indulgence is most concentrated.” “The heart of the feast is where the Prince holds court. We will find our door there, or we will not find it at all.” They began their descent. The path was not a path, but a natural channel between towering, fragrant shrubs. The smells changed every few paces—one moment the sharp zest of citrus, the next the deep, earthy scent of baking bread, then the cloying sweetness of caramelized sugar. It was overwhelming. Rory’s stomach growled, a traitorous sound. “The air itself is a temptation,” Nyx observed, their form flickering at the edges. “It whispers to the mortal form. To memory. Can you hear it?” Rory strained. Beneath the hum, there were now faint echoes—the sizzle of garlic in a wok from Yu-Fei’s kitchen, the buttery scent of her mother’s shortbread, the yeasty promise of the pub below her flat. Her mouth watered. “Ignore it,” Isolde said, but even her ethereal voice held a note of tension. They passed a stream where the water ran the color of rich claret, chuckling over smooth, chocolate-brown stones. Figures moved in the terraced fields beyond. At first, Rory thought they were humans, but their movements were too precise, too rhythmic. As one turned, she saw its eyes were empty wells of darkness, its face a mask of serene, blank dedication as it pruned a vine with bone-white shears. A helbound soul. “Don’t stare,” Nyx whispered, a tendril of shadow briefly obscuring Rory’s view. “Their torment is their focus. You are an interruption.” The valley floor opened into a vast, circular plaza paved with iridescent tiles that shifted from pearl to opal with each step. At its center stood a structure that defied logic—a grand pavilion woven entirely from living, fruiting vegetation. Archways of braided grapevines led into a shadowy interior, and colossal, heart-shaped leaves formed a roof dripping with bunches of dark berries. Around the plaza, silent, focused activity reigned. More helbound souls, their features blurred as if seen through a heat haze, worked with frantic care. One polished already-gleaming copper pots with a cloth that sparked with tiny lights. Another knelt by a fire pit, turning a spit where a creature Rory couldn’t identify—something with iridescent scales and too many wings—roasted, its skin crackling with a sound like parchment and rain. The smells coalesced into a single, potent wave of desire. Rory’s knees felt weak. “The feast hall,” Isolde breathed. “The rift will be inside. A permanent gateway, maintained for the import of… delicacies.” A figure emerged from a vine-arch. He was tall, dressed in robes of deep saffron and cream, his face round and genial. But his eyes were like two chips of black flint, and when he smiled, his teeth were small, sharp, and perfectly even. He moved with a disturbing, fluid grace, his gaze sweeping over them and lingering on Isolde. “Wayward guests,” he said, his voice a smooth, cultured baritone that somehow carried over the plaza’s hum. “The feast is not for some hours yet. The Prince does enjoy punctuality.” Isolde stepped forward, her chin high. “We seek no feast, steward. We are merely travelers, passing through.” The steward’s smile didn’t waver. “All who come to Dymas seek the feast, whether they know it or not. The aroma guides them. The promise sustains them.” His black eyes flicked to Rory. “And you, little mortal. You smell of city smoke and human fear. And… something else. A borrowed trinket.” His gaze dipped to the pulsing Heartstone. Rory forced her hand away from it. “We’re leaving. We just took a wrong turn.” “There are no wrong turns here,” the steward chuckled, a sound like fat bubbling in a pan. “Only choices. You may wait, and partake when the horn sounds. Or you may leave the way you came.” He gestured vaguely back toward the valley. “The wild groves are… less hospitable to uninvited flesh.” He didn’t move to stop them, but his presence was a blockade. The helbound souls had paused in their tasks, their blank faces now turned toward the group. The silence was sudden and absolute, broken only by the pop of grease in the fire pit. Nyx’s form seemed to drain the warm light from the air around them, coalescing into a more solid, protective darkness beside Rory. “We require a moment to confer,” they hissed, the wind-whisper voice slicing the thick air. The steward gave an elaborate, mocking bow. “By all means. The first course is still in the ovens.” He turned and glided back into the pavilion, the living vines parting for him without a sound. The moment he was gone, the frantic activity resumed, louder now, more intense. “He knows,” Rory said, her voice low. “He suspects,” Isolde corrected. “He is bound by the laws of hospitality, even here. He cannot directly harm uninvited guests until they break a rule. But he will watch. He will herd.” “The rift is in there,” Nyx stated, their violet gaze fixed on the dark archway. “I can feel the draft from between realms. It is a tear in the Veil, stitched open by gluttonous intent.” Rory looked from the ominous pavilion to the sprawling, deceptive beauty of the valley. “So our choices are: walk into the lion’s den, or get lost in a sentient forest that probably wants to eat us.” “The groves are not sentient,” Isolde said. “They are merely… persuasive. The den, however, contains the lion. And his teeth are very real.” Rory’s fingers brushed the cold moonsilver of her dagger. The Heartstone throbbed against her chest, a steady, warm pulse pointing insistently toward the pavilion. A compass. A beacon. “We don’t eat, we don’t drink, we don’t accept any gifts,” she said, more to herself than the others. “We get in, find the rift, and get out. Before the horn sounds for dinner.” Isolde nodded, a faint, grim smile touching her lips. “A sound plan. Simplicity is often the best spice.” They moved toward the vine-arch, the sweet, heavy air parting before them like a curtain. The humming of the realm seemed to focus here, deepening into a chorus of whispers—promises of satiation, of forgetfulness, of pleasure so deep it felt like pain. The shadows within the pavilion entrance were deep and velvety, smelling of damp earth, aged wine, and something metallic beneath it all. Rory took a final breath of the honeyed air and crossed the threshold, the cold of the Fae blade at her side her only anchor in the overwhelming warmth of Gluttony.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags20
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.513
leniency1
rawRatio0.05
effectiveRatio0.05
90.18% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1527
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"perfectly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1527
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"whisper"
count2
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"shimmered"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"echoes"
count1
6
word"tension"
count1
7
word"rhythmic"
count1
8
word"structure"
count1
9
word"gleaming"
count1
10
word"desire"
count1
11
word"flicked"
count1
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"throbbed"
count1
14
word"pulse"
count1
15
word"beacon"
count1
highlights
0"whisper"
1"scanned"
2"shimmered"
3"warmth"
4"stomach"
5"echoes"
6"tension"
7"rhythmic"
8"structure"
9"gleaming"
10"desire"
11"flicked"
12"silence"
13"throbbed"
14"pulse"
15"beacon"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences84
matches(empty)
74.83% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences84
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences102
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1510
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount1103
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.45
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Soho1
Heartstone3
Ahead1
Isolde9
Varga1
Rory16
Fae-forged1
Yu-Fei1
Nyx5
Fae2
Gluttony1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Varga"
4"Rory"
5"Nyx"
places
0"Soho"
1"Fae-forged"
2"Yu-Fei"
3"Fae"
globalScore0.775
windowScore0.667
5.07% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"whisper that seemed to come from the long shadows stretching behind them"
1"seemed denser here, the faint violet glow of their eyes more pronounced against the amber wash"
2"trees that seemed to grow both peaches and glossy, purple peppers from the same gnarled branches"
3"felt like pain"
67.55% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.325
wordCount1510
matches
0"not with insects, but with a low, harmonious hum, as if the very plants were vibra"
1"not a path, but a natural channel between towering, fragrant shrubs"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
98.70% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs39
mean38.72
std19.18
cv0.495
sampleLengths
049
150
255
325
457
587
629
732
843
925
1055
1126
1238
1314
1471
1521
1661
1783
1819
1960
2030
2117
2258
2315
2452
2545
2637
2735
2813
297
3032
3135
3236
3323
3428
3534
3618
3764
3831
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences84
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs164
matches
0"were vibrating"
2.80% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences102
ratio0.049
matches
0"The smells changed every few paces—one moment the sharp zest of citrus, the next the deep, earthy scent of baking bread, then the cloying sweetness of caramelized sugar."
1"Beneath the hum, there were now faint echoes—the sizzle of garlic in a wok from Yu-Fei’s kitchen, the buttery scent of her mother’s shortbread, the yeasty promise of the pub below her flat."
2"At its center stood a structure that defied logic—a grand pavilion woven entirely from living, fruiting vegetation."
3"Another knelt by a fire pit, turning a spit where a creature Rory couldn’t identify—something with iridescent scales and too many wings—roasted, its skin crackling with a sound like parchment and rain."
4"The humming of the realm seemed to focus here, deepening into a chorus of whispers—promises of satiation, of forgetfulness, of pleasure so deep it felt like pain."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1120
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"colossal, heart-shaped leaves"
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.027678571428571427
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.00625
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences102
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences102
mean14.8
std8.1
cv0.547
sampleLengths
012
18
226
33
413
59
628
725
825
95
1025
117
1219
138
1411
1512
1620
177
1826
1913
2021
2129
228
2324
2419
259
2615
2725
284
2914
3028
313
326
3314
3412
352
3633
373
3814
3918
407
4115
4228
433
4412
459
4622
4717
4822
497
57.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4019607843137255
totalSentences102
uniqueOpeners41
42.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"More helbound souls, their features"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences78
matches
0"It cast everything in a"
1"Their solid form, a humanoid"
2"Her silver hair was a"
3"She left no footprints in"
4"she said, the single word"
5"They stood at the edge"
6"It was a landscape of"
7"They began their descent."
8"It was overwhelming."
9"Her mouth watered."
10"They passed a stream where"
11"He was tall, dressed in"
12"He moved with a disturbing,"
13"he said, his voice a"
14"His black eyes flicked to"
15"His gaze dipped to the"
16"He gestured vaguely back toward"
17"He didn’t move to stop"
18"they hissed, the wind-whisper voice"
19"He turned and glided back"
ratio0.282
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences78
matches
0"The air tasted of honey"
1"Aurora Carter blinked, her eyes"
2"The next, this."
3"The sky was a warm,"
4"It cast everything in a"
5"Nyx’s voice was a rustle"
6"Their solid form, a humanoid"
7"Rory muttered, her own voice"
8"Her silver hair was a"
9"She left no footprints in"
10"she said, the single word"
11"They stood at the edge"
12"It was a landscape of"
13"Vines heavy with grapes the"
14"The air buzzed, not with"
15"Rory admitted, the cool-headed part"
16"Isolde corrected, her tone flat"
17"Rory’s hand went to the"
18"The cold was a shock"
19"They began their descent."
ratio0.846
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
11.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"One moment, she’d been stepping through the shimmering distortion behind a dumpster in a Soho alley, the Heartstone at her throat pulsing like a second heartbea…"
1"They stood at the edge of a decline, looking out over a valley that stretched into a hazy, golden distance."
2"Vines heavy with grapes the size of apples coiled around trees that seemed to grow both peaches and glossy, purple peppers from the same gnarled branches."
3"The air buzzed, not with insects, but with a low, harmonious hum, as if the very plants were vibrating in contentment."
4"At its center stood a structure that defied logic—a grand pavilion woven entirely from living, fruiting vegetation."
5"One polished already-gleaming copper pots with a cloth that sparked with tiny lights."
6"Another knelt by a fire pit, turning a spit where a creature Rory couldn’t identify—something with iridescent scales and too many wings—roasted, its skin crackl…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags20
uselessAdditionCount8
matches
0"she said, the single word hanging like a bell’s chime"
1"Isolde corrected, her tone flat"
2"Nyx observed, their form flickering at the edges"
3"Nyx whispered, a tendril of shadow briefly obscuring Rory’s view"
4"the steward chuckled, a sound like fat bubbling in a pan"
5"He turned, the living vines parting for him without a sound"
6"Rory said, her voice low"
7"she said, more to herself than the others"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags16
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Rory admitted (admit)"
2"Isolde corrected (correct)"
3"Nyx observed (observe)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
5"Isolde breathed (breathe)"
6"the steward chuckled (chuckle)"
7"they hissed (hiss)"
8"Isolde corrected (correct)"
9"Nyx stated (state)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.41
leniency0.821
rawRatio0.625
effectiveRatio0.513
69.6329%