Run: 2026-02-19-01KHT0D0K6RG94VRERS96FG6DH

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Duration:
38.8s
Cost:
$0.035085
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The standing stones rose from the grass like weathered sentinels, their bark-covered surfaces betraying their true nature. Ancient oaks, bent and twisted into rough pillars, marking something far older than their gnarled roots suggested. Aurora touched the Heartstone beneath her coat—a habit now, reflexive as breathing—and felt its warmth pulse once before settling into its usual steady heat. "Through the circle, then?" Nyx's voice drifted from the lengthening shadows beneath the trees. Late afternoon sun slanted through Richmond Park's canopy, but here the light seemed uncertain of itself, wavering. "Isolde said to step between the northern and western stones at twilight." Aurora pulled her notebook from her jacket pocket, double-checking the seer's cryptic directions. The Half-Fae hadn't been forthcoming about what they'd find beyond the boundary, only that Aurora needed to see it. Something about understanding the spaces between. Nyx solidified beside her, their form coalescing into something almost human-shaped. The violet glow of their eyes tracked the tree-stones, studying. "Time moves strangely in Fae-touched places. Stay close." Aurora had brought the Shade because Evan's recent appearance at the Golden Empress had rattled her more than she'd admit. Having someone—something—that could slip between shadows felt prudent. That Nyx seemed genuinely curious about the Grove was a bonus. The air between the northern and western stones held a different quality. Thicker. Aurora reached forward and her fingers met resistance, like pushing through honey that gave way with sudden elasticity. Sound changed—the distant traffic from the main road cut off mid-drone, replaced by something she felt more than heard. A low thrum that resonated in her sternum. "Bloody hell," she muttered, and stepped through. The world tilted. Not physically—her feet remained planted on grass—but everything shifted sideways in a way that made her eyes water. Colours brightened until they bordered on painful: the wildflowers carpeting the clearing beyond weren't just purple, they were purple in ways that English lacked words for. Deep violet merged with shades of indigo that seemed to exist independently of the petals themselves, as if the hue originated from somewhere beneath reality's surface. Nyx flowed through beside her and immediately dispersed into smoke, their form losing cohesion. "Interesting," their voice whispered from multiple directions. "The boundary here is... porous." Aurora blinked hard, forcing her vision to adjust. The Grove stretched before them, circular and far larger than the space between the oak-stones should have permitted. Trees ringed the edges—not English oaks but something wilder, their silver bark catching light that came from no visible source. The sky overhead showed twilight, though they'd entered in late afternoon. Stars pricked through violet-tinged darkness, constellations Aurora didn't recognise arranged in geometries that suggested patterns just beyond her comprehension. "We're not entirely on Earth anymore." She said it as fact, not question. The Heartstone had gone from warm to almost hot against her skin. "Nor entirely in the Fae realm," Nyx reformed partially, their edges still misty. "Between. Like the Veil, but... intentional. Crafted." The grass beneath Aurora's boots felt real enough—cool, slightly damp—but each step released tiny motes of luminescence that drifted upward before winking out. She knelt, running her fingers through the blades. They were softer than normal grass, almost downy, and left a faint tingle on her skin that wasn't unpleasant. Just other. "Look." Nyx drifted toward the clearing's centre. A pool of water, perfectly circular, reflected the impossible sky. Aurora approached cautiously, her boots leaving impressions in the moss-covered ground that glowed briefly before fading. The pool's surface was mirror-smooth, undisturbed by wind that didn't exist here. She crouched at its edge and her reflection stared back—but wrong. The Aurora in the water looked slightly older, her hair longer, a scar on her cheek that didn't exist in reality. As she watched, the reflection moved independently, turning its head to glance at something beyond the pool's frame before meeting her gaze again. Aurora jerked back. "Christ." "The Grove shows possibilities." Isolde's voice emerged from everywhere and nowhere, carried on air that tasted of honey and copper. The Half-Fae stepped from behind a silver-barked tree, her bare feet making no impression on the glowing grass. "What might be, what could have been. The water reflects more than faces." "You might have led with that." Aurora stood, willing her pulse to slow. The reflection hadn't been threatening, just profoundly unsettling. Isolde smiled without warmth. "Where would be the lesson?" Nyx swirled closer to the seer, their form rippling with what might have been curiosity or irritation—Aurora couldn't tell. "Why bring her here? The mortal has enough complications without adding Fae riddles to the mix." "The Veil weakens. She will need to understand the spaces between if she hopes to navigate what comes." Isolde moved past them toward a structure Aurora hadn't noticed at the Grove's far edge. It wasn't a building, exactly. More like architecture suggested through negative space—pillars of twisted wood that framed empty air, creating doorways that led nowhere visible. Crystalline formations grew from the ground around it, each one humming a single pure note that overlapped with its neighbours into harmony that hurt to hear. Beautiful and wrong simultaneously. Aurora approached despite her better judgment. The closer she got, the more her chest tightened—not from fear exactly, but from the weight of power that saturated the air. The Heartstone burned against her sternum now, hot enough she had to reach beneath her jacket and pull it outside her shirt. The crimson gemstone pulsed in rhythm with the crystals' song. "Bloody hell," she repeated, watching the pendant's internal light flare brighter with each pulse. "It's resonating." "Heartstone was forged in Hel, but the magic that binds it is older. Fae-old." Isolde gestured to the structure. "This place exists in the overlap between realms. Your pendant recognises the harmonics." Nyx solidified fully now, their humanoid form more defined than Aurora had seen before. They stepped through one of the empty doorways and vanished—but their voice still whispered from nearby. "Space folds here. Each door leads to a different part of the Grove. Or perhaps different versions of it." Aurora walked around the structure's perimeter. Six doorways, each empty yet distinct. Through the first she glimpsed the pool, though from an angle that should have been impossible given where she stood. The second showed only darkness that moved subtly, as if breathing. The third... she squinted. Trees, but wrong. Too tall, their branches reaching toward ground-level in defiance of gravity. "The Grove exists in the margins," Isolde said, appearing beside her without having crossed the intervening space. "Where Earth touches Fae touches the spaces beyond. It is useful for those who need to understand that boundaries are more fluid than most believe." "And you think I need to understand that why?" Aurora faced the seer directly. "The Veil keeps Hel separate from Earth. That's not fluid, that's survival." "The Veil is not a wall, girl. It is a membrane." Isolde's pale lavender eyes caught the sourceless light. "Permeable under the right—or wrong—circumstances. You carry pieces of three realms now. The Heartstone from Hel. The Fae blade at your hip. And Earth-born blood in your veins. You exist in the overlap whether you accept it or not." The words settled heavy in Aurora's gut because they rang true in a way she couldn't dismiss. The warmth from the Heartstone had become familiar, almost comforting. The Fae-Forged Blade's constant chill against her thigh served as a reminder of debts and alliances she barely understood. And underneath it all, she was still just Rory from Cardiff, who'd wanted nothing more complicated than escaping her past. "Fantastic," she muttered. "So what, I'm a walking Veil tear waiting to happen?" "Or a bridge." Nyx emerged from a different doorway than they'd entered, their form rippling with something that might have been amusement. "Depends on perspective."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx reformed partially [partially]"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.531
leniency1
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.059
85.01% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1334
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"cautiously"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"perfectly"
2"cautiously"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
21.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1334
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"sentinels"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count3
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"wavering"
count1
4
word"resonated"
count1
5
word"tinged"
count1
6
word"navigate"
count1
7
word"structure"
count3
8
word"crystalline"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"familiar"
count1
12
word"comforting"
count1
13
word"chill"
count1
14
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"sentinels"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"wavering"
4"resonated"
5"tinged"
6"navigate"
7"structure"
8"crystalline"
9"weight"
10"pulsed"
11"familiar"
12"comforting"
13"chill"
14"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1300
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
56.31% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions56
wordCount1014
uniqueNames18
maxNameDensity1.87
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone4
Late1
Richmond1
Park1
Half-Fae2
Aurora19
Shade1
Evan1
Golden1
Empress1
Nyx9
Grove3
English2
Isolde6
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Rory1
Cardiff1
persons
0"Heartstone"
1"Half-Fae"
2"Aurora"
3"Evan"
4"Empress"
5"Nyx"
6"Grove"
7"English"
8"Isolde"
9"Blade"
10"Rory"
places
0"Late"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Golden"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.563
windowScore0.667
0.75% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences67
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"seemed uncertain of itself, wavering"
1"seemed genuinely curious about the Grove was a bonus"
2"indigo that seemed to exist independently of the petals themselves, as if the hue originated from somewhere beneath reality's surface"
3"as if breathing"
46.15% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.538
wordCount1300
matches
0"not English oaks but something wilder, their silver bark catching light"
1"not from fear exactly, but from the weight of power"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean38.24
std22.44
cv0.587
sampleLengths
058
131
250
329
439
558
67
73
870
926
1076
1125
1220
1352
147
1593
164
1751
1821
199
2035
2133
2255
2360
2416
2532
2649
2761
2842
2926
3058
3166
3213
3325
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs183
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences96
ratio0.115
matches
0"Aurora touched the Heartstone beneath her coat—a habit now, reflexive as breathing—and felt its warmth pulse once before settling into its usual steady heat."
1"Having someone—something—that could slip between shadows felt prudent."
2"Sound changed—the distant traffic from the main road cut off mid-drone, replaced by something she felt more than heard."
3"Not physically—her feet remained planted on grass—but everything shifted sideways in a way that made her eyes water."
4"Trees ringed the edges—not English oaks but something wilder, their silver bark catching light that came from no visible source."
5"The grass beneath Aurora's boots felt real enough—cool, slightly damp—but each step released tiny motes of luminescence that drifted upward before winking out."
6"She crouched at its edge and her reflection stared back—but wrong."
7"Nyx swirled closer to the seer, their form rippling with what might have been curiosity or irritation—Aurora couldn't tell."
8"More like architecture suggested through negative space—pillars of twisted wood that framed empty air, creating doorways that led nowhere visible."
9"The closer she got, the more her chest tightened—not from fear exactly, but from the weight of power that saturated the air."
10"They stepped through one of the empty doorways and vanished—but their voice still whispered from nearby."
98.73% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount965
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.04145077720207254
lyAdverbCount16
lyAdverbRatio0.016580310880829015
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean13.54
std7.56
cv0.558
sampleLengths
017
117
224
314
417
525
619
76
811
910
108
1120
128
1311
1412
151
1618
1719
188
197
203
2118
2226
2326
2414
257
265
278
2818
2920
3011
3119
3213
3312
3413
357
3623
378
3819
392
407
4110
4216
4312
4411
4521
4623
473
481
4920
77.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.5104166666666666
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners49
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences76
matches
0"More like architecture suggested through"
1"Too tall, their branches reaching"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount9
totalSentences76
matches
0"she muttered, and stepped through"
1"their voice whispered from multiple"
2"She said it as fact,"
3"She knelt, running her fingers"
4"They were softer than normal"
5"She crouched at its edge"
6"It wasn't a building, exactly."
7"she repeated, watching the pendant's"
8"They stepped through one of"
ratio0.118
45.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences76
matches
0"The standing stones rose from"
1"Aurora touched the Heartstone beneath"
2"Nyx's voice drifted from the"
3"Aurora pulled her notebook from"
4"The Half-Fae hadn't been forthcoming"
5"Something about understanding the spaces"
6"Nyx solidified beside her, their"
7"The violet glow of their"
8"Aurora had brought the Shade"
9"That Nyx seemed genuinely curious"
10"The air between the northern"
11"Aurora reached forward and her"
12"Sound changed—the distant traffic from"
13"A low thrum that resonated"
14"she muttered, and stepped through"
15"The world tilted."
16"Colours brightened until they bordered"
17"Nyx flowed through beside her"
18"their voice whispered from multiple"
19"Aurora blinked hard, forcing her"
ratio0.829
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences76
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Not physically—her feet remained planted on grass—but everything shifted sideways in a way that made her eyes water."
1"Deep violet merged with shades of indigo that seemed to exist independently of the petals themselves, as if the hue originated from somewhere beneath reality's …"
2"Trees ringed the edges—not English oaks but something wilder, their silver bark catching light that came from no visible source."
3"The grass beneath Aurora's boots felt real enough—cool, slightly damp—but each step released tiny motes of luminescence that drifted upward before winking out."
4"They were softer than normal grass, almost downy, and left a faint tingle on her skin that wasn't unpleasant."
5"Aurora approached cautiously, her boots leaving impressions in the moss-covered ground that glowed briefly before fading."
6"The pool's surface was mirror-smooth, undisturbed by wind that didn't exist here."
7"More like architecture suggested through negative space—pillars of twisted wood that framed empty air, creating doorways that led nowhere visible."
8"Crystalline formations grew from the ground around it, each one humming a single pure note that overlapped with its neighbours into harmony that hurt to hear."
9"And underneath it all, she was still just Rory from Cardiff, who'd wanted nothing more complicated than escaping her past."
66.18% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Nyx reformed partially, their edges still misty"
1"Nyx emerged, their form rippling with something that might have been amusement"
25.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"their voice whispered (whisper)"
2"she repeated (repeat)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences32
tagDensity0.188
leniency0.375
rawRatio0.667
effectiveRatio0.25
73.6813%